Kia Zi Shiru

low resistence

door lock

death trap

challenged creature

core ability

Patio heater

Bad grammar that even makes me want to hit people. I'm dutch so when I'm able to correct the stories of American or British people, I quit, When the writers mother tongue isn't English (or American) then I sometimes stick with the story if there aren't too many errors. Having too much crazy names or when the main charactergroup has almost similar names. The writer might know who is who, but sometimes I still need to look back into the beginning chapters to understand who was who again.... Same goes for personality's that are the same..... too much explaining, and especially when it is written between parenthesis. You need to write a story, that includes details.... Ohyeah, and Author notes between the lines that comment on something a character does...... EEEEEW!!!!!

fur coat

funny cat

our cat used to do that, luckaly she never got out of the house, but even half a year after she went to a new owner we sometimes still find socks behind closets....

i found it a while back and loved it

hi people, a fluffy happy story from my hand. the first chapter is now online, the second and third one will be put online in the next couple of days. summary: When you fall in love with the prettiest guy you know you don't expect him to be part of a vampirism group... well at least I wasn't... Please tell me what you think about it! greetings, Draigen

hi people, Chapter 1 is now up, the second one will be put up in the next days somewhere. Please tell me what you think about it. Summary: What would you do if you found out that the love of your life, that suddenly left you a few years ago, has fallen off a building? This is what Jules did. greetings

Hi people, The first chapter is now online, and I will post the next chapters on a daily base until May 9th. summary: Vic moves to a new place, a new school, new friends. It is all quiet and well, until his crush also falls in love with him. What happens after he never could have expected. Any comments and such can be posted in this topic. Greetings Draigen.

For my first story I do have an outline, since the main char has been telling me his story for quite some time now. I have written the outline until the fist of 3 mayor events, which happens at chapter 18. I started the outline after reading about it in a link a friend of mine send me. It has about 25 to 40 words per chapter and just tells me what will happen in what chapter. I was afraid I would too much 'dump' everything on the reader if I didn't do it this way. I also have about 7 pages of written stuff that I have written down for later chapters, a lot of those things are already rewritten a lot of times and can be just "put in" the story when I'm at the part it should be. For the second and the third story I have no outline, just a general idea where the story might go. Small bits and pieces are already in my head but not written down yet. I like reading the outline whenever i start to write the story, it gets me in the mood. but also it gives me an idea to what is gonna happen next so I can make some of my characters act upon it.

my first stories I wrote in Dutch and were mostly 3rd person (2 very large stories both spread out over a total of 30 to 40 years... it is the story of 2 generations, the main chars for the first are strong by-chars for the second gen story) I never finished the story and it has been over 70.000 words total, I should look it up but I think it might even be close to 100.000 words.... they are both sci-fi stories. my third dutch story was a try on a first person story, it changed character every chapter but only switched between 6 chars or so.... it was a dark romance novel with a vampire in it. but never completed one of the story's. now I write in first person. I have 3 stories going on. The first still switches chars because at some point the reader does need information but the main char is 'out of it' but it is only limited to 4 chars. It has a lot of flashbacks, mainly of the main chars past. And they are needed because of the need to 'feel' the emotions. Also most things that happen only unfold to the reader when another char finds things out, the main char hides a lot of things from the reader. I personally think the is working out pretty well right now. The second story that I'm writing now is just from one point of view, it does deal a lot with flashbacks and it keeps switching between past and present. This story also deals a lot with emotions. Both these stories are Angst and romance themed, I love writing this. The third story is a happy happy good feel story with 50/50 sex scenes and regular story. I needed something new and this is what came out. It is a slice of life story, partly autobiographical, though I'm a girl and this is about two guys. It is written from one person only and has no flashbacks since it is not needed for understanding the story or the chars themselves. so I don't really see a common theme between my old stuff and my new stuff....

though the posts in this thread are a bit old.... I would like to mention Fictionpress to everybody here. I always post my story's up there and as I've been writing for the past couple of months people put me or my story on their fav lists and other people read it too. That way I've also found some great writers. so maybe an idea?

coffee coffee, when pointing to a cup of coffee...... and pik..... kip means chicken in dutch which I meant to say.... but pik is dutch for penis..... must have been hilarious for my parents.....

LOL, I love that one! I didn't really get "the talk". my mum caught me looking at naked lady's at the age of 10..... a week later half naked guys..... not long after that I got a subscription to a teen magazine and asked my mum some questions that she answered and she gave me a 80th book that had everything in it about sex, puberty, abortion marriage, being gay and well.... everything..... I read it prob over a 100 times.... just for fun mostly.... I sorta gave my sister "the talk" because well.... she does use Internet and I just needed to know if she was doing safe and everything.... No problems there..... Though I have to confess something..... the only two tests I failed in biology when I was 14 were about sex ED.... I just wasn't interested enough in it to really care about knowing anything about it.... I never cared if someone was gay or straight or bi or anything..... So I didn't care to think about things that way until a couple of years later....

hmmmm... second post, my irrational fears.... you're really getting the best out of me I guess I'm afraid of deep water, I love showers or simply taking a bath, but anything larger and especially when I can't see the bottom.... I can get creeped out of my mind. I saw What lies beneath when I was 12 years old and it left it's marks....... Even if I know nothing can happen, I have a over-creative mind, my reason just can't win sometimes.... And I'm afraid of people near me dying..... My b/f snores but sometimes his breathing stops or something.... and it creeps me out so damn bad that I can barely sleep for the night.....

evening all, some greetings from Holland. I'm a 20 year old dutch writer and I write gay romance and angst story's. I've been hanging around Fictionpress for a while by now and also AdultFanFiction for a bit of time. Why am I here? I love reading and I love writing. on FP there are very few jewels left that I haven't found so I needed a new place to read stuff. Also I would like some help on improving my writing. A friend of mine helped me out a lot and I rewrote all the stuff I had written and put online until then. (7 chapters of a minimum of 1000 words per chapter) Now my writing has gotten better but still not as good as I would like it to be. So I hope people can help me out too. okay that was the serious part I am a real forum slut and I love the looks of this. I think I will enjoy myself here for quite a while *huggles* Draigen