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JamesSavik

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  1. JamesSavik

    Randy Randy

    You ain't seen nothing yet. 😜
  2. Phillip quickly earned a sterling reputation with the boys as cool and trustworthy. They talked to him about boy stuff they would never tell an adult. Trustworthy doesn’t mean the same thing to kids as it does to adults. He wasn’t one of the kids but was a lot closer than any of the adults. He got questions ranging from why does my little sister bug me all the time to if I jerk off every day does that make me a sex maniac and everything in between. These weren’t really difficult questions b
  3. Friday afternoon about three, things were slow and Phillip was busy with his Friday checklist. There was a list of tasks that had to be accomplished every day and the Friday list was a pain because it prepared the building for the weekends which were always busy. Philip wasn’t on weekends thankfully, but would often show up anyway just to swim and have a little fun hanging out when he wasn’t working. He stopped by the quiet 2nd floor restroom he often used to take a leak in peace. Phillip w
  4. Mikie and His Big Honking Boner Funny thing about boys that age— wearing those tiny Speedo swim suits, an inconvenient boner could be a serious social faux pas. The boys varied so much in development that a boner could be anything from literally no big deal to a full on hard on that might escape the suit. It was on one of those occasions he met his first close friend in town. Thursday during practice Phillip was working the pool area, he noticed Mikie Hendrix, one of the older kids at
  5. JamesSavik

    Prologue

    The Summer Job The summer he turned sixteen and moved into the new house, Phillip Wright got a summer job at the YMCA. He was assigned to sweep, mop and do a lot of the work that would otherwise tie up the staff during their busiest season. Phillip was unaware that his father had pulled strings to get him the job. Phil Senior was an associate in a big firm involved in a huge international case that had been going on for years and showed no sign of a fast resolutio
  6. Phillip Wright is starting over in a new town after a horrific tragedy with a new home and life. Can he pick up the pieces?
  7. JamesSavik

    Sub-plots

    I am very much in favor of subplots. They fill out and add life to a story. I call them “threads”. Artistically woven together, they make a stronger, more complex story. Some of the stories I’m cooking up are a central plot complimented (or complicated?) by several subplots or threads.
  8. I’m offline except for my iPhone due to ice storm wiping out the local power grid. Stuck here in the dark I have tried to read stories but can’t. An ad pops up and you can’t dismiss it. I was concerned as some of the ad companies are slimy and play games to keep their clients in your face. Thought you might want to look into it. I do hope all is well or, at least better than it is here. -JS
  9. Phillip is 16 and new in town with his first job: working for the Y. With no friends and his Dad stuck in London (or was that Hong Kong or Singapore?), he resolves to make a few. One of the new fiends older brother Andy is known to be a real asshole and, he wants to have a talk to Phillip.
  10. Horrible writing advice... Heroes wear white. They ride on high white horses and have shiny plot armor. They are, of course, interesting because who wants to read about a bum, right? Heroes should be flawless role models because seeing them overcome their petty human experience is just plain boring. Villains wear black. Their horses don't really like them. They don't get shiny plot armor because the writers guild demands it! They aren't very interesting because they're just plain old evil and no one really cares how they got that way. Furthermore, they always have henchmen or perhaps lackeys and are linked to shadowy nefarious plots. Dynamic characters are passé. They confuse the reader, so we shouldn't use them despite, real people having to learn and grow. It confuses the reader when heroes make mistakes and do things that aren't heroic and might be considered dastardly, cowardly or just plain wrong. It's even worse when a villain does something to show virtue and integrity. This whole line of writing should be saved for litany fiction since nobody really reads that stuff. Role Reversals- Everybody hates it in a story when the hero and the villain reverse roles. It's too complicated for the modern reader that has a 15-second attention span before they change the channel. Besides, the guy in the black hat saving the girl would be just plain un-American. So remember: always write what's expected. You can't go wrong pandering to your audiences' shallowness and stupidity. Throw in some populist political ideology for good measure to prove you're woke and, you can't go wrong. After all, it's worked so well for Kathleen Kennedy's Star Wars and the new Doctor Who. For Terrible Writing Advice, check out my buds channel:
  11. I was part of a collaboration back in the day- probably ~2006 or so? I don't remember exactly. It's hosted at Awesomedude and turned out to be a neat little mystery story. We started out with a roadmap that provided: General setting Brief character sketches A few basic ground rules A first chapter to set the tone The work came out pretty good but, your roadmap and ground rules need to be tight and someone needs to basically be the trail boss. If you are writing any genre, you don't want to throw your co-authors too many curves. Some authors may be touchy about stuff like bad language, sketchy situations, drug use, underage drinking or abuse. Work this out upfront, or you end up wasting time squabbling over it. Anyway, a link to it ;>> https://awesomedude.com/collision/
  12. The Blight Before Christmas Twas the blight before Christmas and all through the land, Everyone was sneezing and coughing by damn, A Chinese virus has arisen in our winter of discontent, That kills grannies and grams and makes us insolent. Our solons so wise want to write us a check, To make us all right, To help us through this accursed blight, Just as soon as they pay off every other soul on the planet, We'll get our lump of coal, god dammit. They shovel the cash to Egypt, to Paki
  13. When it comes to science and technology, never say never. Never is a very long time and, we don't know everything. Last one to Proxima Centauri is a Tribble turd.
  14. If you knew Mary Sue Then you'd know why I feel blue With Mary, my Mary Sue Oh well, I loathe you, gal Yes, I loathe Mary Sue! Mary Sue, Mary Sue I'm so fucking sick of you Oh, Mary, F-ing Mary Sue Oh well, I loathe you Yes, I loathe you Mary Sue Mary Sue, Mary Sue Annoying, bitchy, perfect Mary Sue Oh, Mary, f-ing Mary Sue I'm so f-ing sick of you Die horribly perfect Mary Sue!
  15. Not just WW1. The Germans needed a big win on the Eastern Front and unveiled their new Panther tanks. The Soviets rolled out a lot of new toys too. The Germans waited too long and the Soviets were dug in too deep.
  16. Starry Starry Night Starry Starry Night So cold and clear and bright and bold Tell me the secrets I long to know Shine away the darkness in my soul Wash away my fear in your radiant glow Starry Starry Night Take me from this frightful place Hold me in your timeless grace Wrap me in your radiant embrace Show me God's own face Starry Starry Night Please show me that I am wrong Believing love is only pain Remind me that I am yet strong Keep me sane despite the pai
  17. JamesSavik

    Chapter 34

    This is an incredibly difficult decision for the victim and his friends. Many times, the victim is emotionally paralyzed. Friends might only suspect something is going on and the victim will minimize it. I fell. I walked into a cabinet. What seems like it would be an easy answer from a distance is a lot more complicated the closer you get.
  18. Thanks- it's NOT the easiest thing to write. Keeping all the characters straight is... a challenge. 🤪 < help me!
  19. i. The bus ride to Arrowhead Lodge was quiet. Almost everyone either napped or talked quietly. Alan handed the bus driver a tape of his first show so Led Zeppelin played at a modest volume all the way. I had hoped that Matthew would catch Chip Daniel's eye but, Chip was enjoying Danny’s company. Matthew was sitting with Rich chatting quietly. Aaron and Rocky were sitting a row in front of Philip and Robbie MacDonald. Jacob Porter and Tommy Holloway were napping. Steven, JJ,
  20. I find myself watching Perry Mason now and then. Of course its dated but, it does a good job with its 5 act structure and presentation of a great murder mystery: character, motive, method, opportunity. You can change those elements and move them around but, they have to be there or the whole structure collapses. Some of the best ones are quite old
  21. This young musician is well worth a listen...
  22. I cringe when movies are made of the sci-fi classics. Unless they are done well, they turn out like Verhoeven's rape of Heinlein's classic Starship Troopers. (If I ever catch that prick in a dark alley.) He took a great source, excellent cast and made a joke out of it. What did he come up with? Doogie Himmler. If a studio and a producer does one of these classics, they must respect the source. Verhoeven DID NOT even read the book and it showed. Dune has been done twice already: first by Lynch in 1984 and again in 2000 as a Sci-fi channel miniseries (before they went completely to crap). Neither were perfect but, the Lynch adaptation has become a cult classic despite its wanderings from the novel. I hope the new one is good. Heck, I want it to be great. Good sci-fi that makes money encourages studios making crap to take a chance and try to do better. So far, I like what I see. I want them to focus on the story. It's good enough. Don't make the mistake Disney made with the Star Wars franchise and Witch Kennedy made and try to make it a vehicle for something else. That failed miserably and ruined what was a multi-billion dollar franchise.
  23. Starry, starry night Paint your palette blue and gray Look out on a summer's day With eyes that know the darkness in my soul Shadows on the hills Sketch the trees and the daffodils Catch the breeze and the winter chills In colors on the snowy linen land Now I understand what you tried to say to me And how you suffered for your sanity And how you tried to set them free They would not listen, they did not know how Perhaps they'll listen now
  24. I've recently discovered something interesting. I'm shocked that I've never run across them before. I really enjoy prog rock and I'm shocked that I missed them until now. The link isn't unpacking right: it Marillion and the album is Brave. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ov2-jWtU-tg
  25. I put my recipe for Shrimp Creole in my blog.
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