Rhymes - 23. Hands

I have always liked the way you use words in your other poems. It continues here. This has a wonderful, breathless quality to it that you convey deftly and effectively. You have kissed someone unforgettably, here. Lucky guy.

On 02/08/2016 10:17 AM, Parker Owens said:

I have always liked the way you use words in your other poems. It continues here. This has a wonderful, breathless quality to it that you convey deftly and effectively. You have kissed someone unforgettably, here. Lucky guy.

thank you. i'm really glad you enjoyed it. it's nice that you read it in a positive light. the kiss came at great personal cost.

This touched me. You let someone kiss you, but I'm not sure you wanted it completely. It hurt you somehow, is what I'm feeling.
It is beautifully written.
tim

Wow!!! This is hot. I mean, yeah some what harsh but hot. I can see someone kissing you, you are not sure but enjoy that bliss and you never wanna let that feeling go.

The words you used, that feeling you put it through and the emotions you contained. Its just wow...

I Loved it. Nice poem...

On 02/08/2016 01:40 PM, Mikiesboy said:

This touched me. You let someone kiss you, but I'm not sure you wanted it completely. It hurt you somehow, is what I'm feeling.

It is beautifully written.

tim

thank you for allowing my work to touch you. it still amazes me that my work could express so much, not only the content of the words but the apprehension and conflict i feel in between the lines. thank you for the review.

On 02/08/2016 06:24 PM, Emi GS said:

Wow!!! This is hot. I mean, yeah some what harsh but hot. I can see someone kissing you, you are not sure but enjoy that bliss and you never wanna let that feeling go.

 

The words you used, that feeling you put it through and the emotions you contained. Its just wow...

 

I Loved it. Nice poem...

thank you for the review i'm glad you enjoyed my work.

This is a heartbreaking question. It remind me of the theological one on whether or not the Creator created us to fail; born to be cast into hell by His design right at the start.

That is a cruel question, and so is the one you beautifully relay here.

Thanks for sharing this amazing poem.

On 02/11/2016 05:21 AM, AC Benus said:

This is a heartbreaking question. It remind me of the theological one on whether or not the Creator created us to fail; born to be cast into hell by His design right at the start.

 

That is a cruel question, and so is the one you beautifully relay here.

 

Thanks for sharing this amazing poem.

Thank you for the review. All these questions with no answers that our lives constantly present us with. I guess writing poetry helps me find the strength to stop seeking answers I won't find.

Wonderful. I've been shook up like this... I know the onslaught of emotions such an encounter can have. I hope it ended well for you, but the first word indicates there was nothing past ... this... powerful, evocative, and beautiful... there is no pretense here, only raw emotion... this is poetry... cheers... Gary...