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Treading Water - 4. Chapter 4 White Water Rafting

The trick is to stay afloat as you navigate the treacherous waters.

Treading Water

 

 

Chapter 4

 

 

Craig attempted to sort through his emotions as he headed toward the old white farmhouse, and his Jeep. As soon as he’d left the magical glade, he felt a loss. Not exactly bereft, but it had been a long time since he’d experienced such a connection. He wasn’t lying when he told… no… reassured Jared he hadn’t forgotten his feelings for the man. Because of Harlan, and the wonderful life they’d begun to share, Craig had said farewell to his unrequited love for the supposedly straight man, but fate had intervened, and Harlan was gone forever. Over the past year, he’d learned to accept it; still, it was a lonely place he’d been residing in. Something deep inside him, something he’d kept at bay, was finally feeling a resurgence, and telling him there was a cure for that isolated existence in the woods behind him.

Glancing back, the solitary figure of a man was discernible in the distance, watching him. Craig smiled. No, that wasn’t loneliness back there… the potentially perfect answer for it was intent on his progress, and he let the reality of that sink in. Jared was in love with him. He’d made that clear, and Craig’s previously guarded heart had responded to it. Was it telling him he was ready to move forward? Turning around and walking backwards, he waved heartily, and received the same in return. He could do this. When he got to his car, he took an item he needed out of the glove-box.

 

Instead of pulling into his mother’s garage, Craig parked in the driveway. There was a good chance his stay would be abbreviated, if Carly became unbearable, but he was determined to see his plan through. Prepared for possible fireworks, he headed for the front entrance. Opening the door and stepping inside, he looked to the right, straight into the kitchen. There sat his sister and his mother, both staring at him with different expressions. While his mother looked at him with simple curiosity, Carly’s tear-streaked face couldn’t hide the calculated examination of her brother.

“You went to him, didn’t you, after I told you not to?”

“Hello to you too, Carly.” Craig intended to keep his cool, no matter what his sister threw at him. “If you mean Jared, then yes. We had a good talk. And you don’t get to tell me anything.”

“Did you fuck him?”

“Carly Larkin! Don’t be so crass. It’s disgusting,” her mother admonished, looking sympathetically at her son.

“Let her say what she wants, Mom. I really don’t give a shit.” He said it calmly and quietly as he met his twin’s glare. “Not that it’s any of your business, Carly, but we just talked.” The kiss he’d left Jared with was theirs alone.

“Right, like I believe that. You couldn’t wait to get to him. And you think I’m disgusting, Mother? After what I saw today, it’s your son who’s disgusting, running after the man his sister was married to.”

“Why must you say such a thing, Carly? You haven’t heard a word I’ve said. Your brother kissed a single man. Yes, you were married to him, but you have been parted for over a year now. There are just the three of us, and Bailey, so for the sake of our family, I’m asking you one more time to please let it go.”

“God, Mother! Let it go? It’s so like you to take his side. You’ve done it our whole lives. Craig is your little darling, and he can do no wrong. I will never accept that my own brother is fucking my husband… yes, I know he’s my ex-husband. It’s not right!”

Ignoring her, Craig turned to their supremely frustrated mother and gave her a commiserating look. He could think of no other way to do this. “Do you happen to know where the yearbooks from high school are, Mom?”

Carly looked at him in disbelief, and he could see her rage rise. Nobody ignores Carly. “What the fuck… do you really think now is the time to take a trip down memory lane? Do you think this is funny, Craig? You think you can just move in on Jared with no regard for my feelings? Trust me…it’s not going to happen, brother dear.” The sneer on her face was exactly what he wanted.

He walked past her and leaned against the kitchen counter, forcing her to turn. “Oh, really, sister dear? Do tell. What would stop us from doing what we want? You have no control over Jared, and certainly none over me.” He knew the lack of concern he presented would escalate her anger, and he was right.

“Oh, you think so, smartass? If you insist on seeing Jared, or if he keeps seeing you, he won’t be having any more visits with his daughter. I have full custody, so don’t tell me I have no control over my husband.” Craig wanted to laugh at her smug expression, but his mother’s reaction took all of his attention.

“Good Lord, child. What has happened to you? I do not favor your brother, but he has lost his fiancé, and yet you would deny him even the slightest chance at finding happiness again? If you do such a thing to a good man and a good father like Jared, you will not be welcome in this house any longer. You would be depriving my granddaughter of her daddy. That is something I will not overlook.” Marian Fletcher looked shaken by what her daughter had just threatened, but Craig also saw a fury there. It was clear his mother had reached her breaking point.

“Why am I not surprised you would be like this? Jared is not the goody-two-shoes you all think he is. That’s fine with me, though.” She wasn’t fooling Craig. He could see the impact his mother’s threat had on Carly. “Bailey and I will find somewhere else to live. I don’t need your charity.” She sneered at her twin. “Of course, I’ll have to go after Jared for spousal and child support. I’m sure Mr. Perfect didn’t tell you he’s in arrears to the tune of ten grand?”

Craig enjoyed the look on her face when he responded. “Don’t worry, Mom. She won’t be doing any such thing to Jared. And I believe he’s in arrears for only $9,900.” He pulled out the cheque he’d written once he’d gotten into his jeep, and threw it down in front of the smug-looking bitch he now detested in a way he never imagined he would. “All paid up, and I don’t need a receipt. The documentation is on there. So, Mom, where are those yearbooks?”

“I’ll get them, dear.” Her eyes had a slight twinkle as she rose from the table and went into the living room. Craig heard her open a cabinet door.

“You’re paying his fucking bills now? Isn’t that just so sweet. I’m not cashing that. It’s up to him to pay me what he owes.” She was livid as she looked at the cheque with disdain.

“No problem. Do what you want, but that is legal payment. Mom witnessed me giving it to you, and she is aware of what it’s for. If you don’t cash it, it’s your loss. You can’t hang this over Jared’s head too,” he goaded her.

Carly was beyond furious. “I don’t need to hang anything over his head. I promise you, if you even talk to him again, you will be responsible for him not seeing his daughter.” The fiery gleam in her eye told him just how much she meant what she said, and he’d had enough.

His daughter?” He watched his sister closely, and saw the slightest widening of her pale eyes.

“Yes, and I mean it, Craig.” He got what he was looking for in that brief moment before his mother came back with the yearbooks he’d requested.

“Thanks, Mom.” Unhurriedly, he walked over and sat down across from his sister, opening up the book for their senior year. He knew exactly what he was looking for, and stopped on the spread titled ‘Rally Days.’ Looking across the table at his twin, he saw her eyes were glued to one spot on the page. “Here it is. This car rally sure was a big deal for the seniors every year. Do you recall this guy, Carly?” He pointed to a reddish-haired guy standing in front of a black Honda Civic.

“No,” she stammered at the same time her mother leaned over to look at the very clear picture of a smiling, brown-eyed guy holding a trophy. Her heard Marian Fletcher’s sharp intake of breath.

“No? Carly, that’s Ronnie Chilton. Remember? You complained he wouldn’t leave you alone. He had a huge crush on you that year, but you didn’t want to be seen with a pothead? You don’t remember him?”

“Oh, yeah, I didn’t recognize him at first,” she lied, badly. “But I don’t see the point of this. I told you what would happen if you keep seeing Jared, so it’s on your head. I can’t even look at you anymore,” she said as she rose to leave.

“Sit. Unless you want me to post what I know on Facebook, I suggest you park it. And I mean it, Carly. See, you’re not in control here now… I am, and you have really, and I mean really, pissed me off. You played with my life, and you played with Jared’s, and if you aren’t careful, I’m going to play with yours just as badly. I swear I will destroy your reputation so completely you’ll have to leave town.”

While Carly stood uncertainly with her mouth open, their mother asked what was going on. Craig felt bad for putting her through this, but he felt he had no choice. Jared was trusting him. The thought of the blue-eyed man, and the damage Carly had done to him, gave him the strength he needed. “I’m sorry, Mom… this isn’t how I wanted things to go, but there are things you really should know about.”

He watched his sister slowly sink back into her chair. “I don’t know what you’re up to, Craig, but I don’t take threats lightly,” she said with a more subdued tone. He’d rattled her, for sure.

“I don’t either. It’s up to you how we play this.” He looked pointedly at the open book in front of him, and when he looked back up at her, she blanched.

Craig came close to full-out laughter at her attempt to take some control back. “I suggest we talk in my room. There’s nothing to be gained by bickering in front of Mom. It’s not fair of you to do that. Can’t you see you’re upsetting her?”

“Bickering? Really?” Craig shook his head at his twin’s audacity. “This is happening here and now, Carly. No more dirty little secrets in this house.” Looking at his mother, he saw she was still focused on the picture. Once again, he felt a little guilty at the way his mother was having Carly’s dirty laundry revealed to her, but he dove in anyway, trusting that she would want to know. “Three nights in a row, after the Sadie Hawkins dance, you snuck out of the house as soon as Mom went to bed. Who were you with, Carly?”

“I don’t know what you’re talking about, I didn’t….”

“Stop, Carly. When we were in high school, mine was the bedroom at the front of the house, remember? I saw you, so don’t deny it.”

“Okay, fine. I was with Jared. Are you happy now?”

“Yeah, that’s what you told me back then when I asked you. I remember how you bragged about it when I mentioned I saw you sneaking out. It’s funny, though, because the car you got into was a black Honda Civic, and I found out today Jared never went out with you… ever. He only went to the dance with you as friends.”

“He’s a goddamn liar.” Her retort was edged with panic, but he felt no sympathy… none at all.

“A liar? Seriously? You know what, Carly? I’m sick of this so I’m just going to say what went down. You tricked Jared. He told you he was gay, and that he had a crush on me, and you went after him anyway. When he asked if you thought I would go out with him, you told him no, because I was in a very serious relationship. You fucking lied, Carly! You’re the goddamn liar!

“No, I didn’t. Are you forgetting about Harlan?” Craig had expected her to fight back, but that was feeble.

“Do you think I don’t know when I met Harlan? It was six weeks later… six fucking weeks, and you knew I was in love with Jared. You knew I went to all his games for almost three years. You took away our chance… you had no fucking right, Carly. And you told me he came after you... that he asked you out… another fucking lie!” He was seething, and his anger was impossible to keep a lid on.

“So what? Just because you were in love with him? Why should you get him, and not me? You think you’re so much better than me,” she screamed.

He froze. It became crystal clear in an instant. “Oh my God. I was wrong. You didn’t go after him because you were snubbed by Monica and those girls. Maybe they were a small part, but you went after him to hurt me… to take something from me. That was your goal, wasn’t it? You heartless, evil, fucking bitch.”

“I don’t know what you’re talking about. We were in love, and he married me, not you!”

“So it was sheer jealousy,” he muttered, both stunned and relieved. He had never seen his sister so starkly exposed before, and it didn’t hurt as much as he would have expected. He’d felt her resentment for as long as he could remember, so this wasn’t as mind-boggling as it should have been. Maybe it would hit him later, but for now, he wasn’t done yet. “Was it jealousy that made you tell him I tried to commit suicide and that I was in intensive therapy? Was it jealousy that had you telling him he had to stay away from me because he might ‘trigger’ me to spiral downward?” He heard his mother’s groan of dismay, but there was no softening this for her.

In typical Carly fashion, she glossed over her despicable lies like they were nothing. “Whatever. I was just trying to protect you. You’re the one who’s jealous, and now you’re trying to steal him.” Jared’s earlier words came to mind in that moment. His sister really was a piece of work.

“I can’t steal what you never had, Carly. If anything, you stole him, and he’s been miserable ever since. The only reason he ever stuck around was for Bailey, and that poor man has no idea he was duped. He hasn’t a clue that he’s not Bailey’s father.” Saying it out loud brought momentary despair for Craig.

“How dare you! Of course he’s her father. How can you say that?” She looked at her mother for support, but her mother was still too stunned to say anything. “You’re the heartless one, to be spouting such horrible lies.”

Craig laughed at her ridiculousness. “Look at the picture, Carly. Bailey is the dead spitting image of Ronnie Chilton. The hair, the eyes, the smile, the chin… they’re identical. He looks different now. The word is he’s a crackhead, and I believe it. I saw him a few months ago sitting on the street. I gave him ten dollars, but he was too high, or too far gone to recognize me.”

“No, you’re wrong. You’re just trying to make me look bad in front of Mom.”

“Mom, was Carly on the pill in high school?”

“What? No, she couldn’t be because of… problems.” His mother was much more engaged now that the shock of the picture had worn off.

“You got Jared drunk at that dance. You borrowed my flask, remember?” He shot his mother an apologetic look. “You wouldn’t take no for an answer. But he said no, didn’t he, sister dear?”

“That’s not true,” she protested, but he ignored her lie, pinning her with a cold glare.

“You told Jared you were on the pill, and he didn’t need to wear a condom, but he was smart enough to wear one anyway. He insisted, so there went your plan. When you asked him to have sex again, he said ‘no way’ which meant you had to come up with something else. Enter, Ronnie. All you had to do was call him, and he came running. Three nights in a row, sister dear, and it did the trick, didn’t it. What did you do? Dump Ronnie like a piece of garbage when you were done with him?”

“Mom, don’t believe him. It’s not true… he’s making all this up,” she pleaded, her voice trembling.

“Carly, how do you explain that picture? It looks so much like our Bailey.”

“No, Mom, it’s just a coincidence. He has no proof of any of this. He’s doing this to justify betraying me.”

Craig shook his head, and he couldn’t help but feel genuine sadness. “No proof? Come on, Carly. When I tell Jared this, I’m sure he’s going to want a DNA test done. That will be the proof.”

He was actually astonished when his sister fell to pieces. It wasn’t pretty, and he didn’t know whether it was because she was beaten or maybe felt some remorse. Any money would be on the former.

When she could finally speak, after the wailing died down, she pleaded. “Please, Craig. You can’t tell him this. You can’t tell anyone. I never want Bailey to know what a mess her… her father is. She’s your niece… you can’t do that to her.”

“Carly, I never started this. Neither did Jared. You played with both of us, and you took something away from him and me that you had no right to,” he said softly as he studied her, watching involuntary shudders go through her body. “I might be willing to make a deal, though, if you’re interested?”

“What kind of deal?” The hope in her voice let Craig know the ugliness he’d just navigated through had served its purpose.

“I want you to draw up a new custody agreement that’s fair. Jared should get custody every other weekend, from Friday evening till Sunday evening, and all the holidays should be split down the middle. At least two full weeks in the summer, and he should be able to take her out for an hour or two, here and there, but that’s something you two can iron out. I’ll pay half the legal costs, but you have to do this right away. He’s an awesome dad, Carly, and he worships that little girl. You know that.”

Her crying had stopped as she listened. Her resigned sigh made Craig’s hammering heart leap. “And you won’t tell him?”

“I won’t tell him,” he lied. He had no doubts it wouldn’t change how Jared felt about his daughter.

“You won’t tell anyone?”

“No, but Carly, whatever happens between me and Jared, you have to accept.” He saw a flash in her eyes, but then it was gone and her shoulders slumped.

“Fine. I’ll stay out of both of your lives. You two do what you want. Just don’t expect me to like it,” she said with some of the fire that was Carly. “I suppose you’re going to go tell him now?”

“That’s none of your business.” He was drawing a line in the sand, and his tone carried a warning.

She sighed again. “Okay. You’re right, Craig. It isn’t.” Bailey let herself be heard at that exact moment, and Carly looked relieved to be able to head up the stairs. Craig was just as pleased she was gone from his sight. It would take him a long time to forget what his twin had done.

Looking at his mother, he felt a sharp stab of regret. “Are you okay? I’m sorry I had to do this to you.”

“Yes, I’m fine, dear. I must say I was shocked at first, and that’s hard to do where Carly is concerned, but I always knew something wasn’t right. I saw no love there, other than for Bailey. I’m glad I know now. You did good, son, so don’t you be worrying, or feeling bad about anything. Maybe this will turn out to be exactly what my daughter needs. I can only hope. Now, my advice to you is to go tell that man he’s finally going to get a fair shake. And Craig?”

“Yeah?”

“Don’t look so somber. From what I saw today, you might have just saved that man. Give him a kiss for me, will you?”

Craig laughed, relieving some of the built up tension. “Whatever you say, Mom.”

He headed for the door, but his mom called him back. “Just wait one minute.” In typical mother fashion, she transferred a bunch of food from the fridge to a cooler bag. “There’s fried chicken, potato salad, and some other stuff in there. Feed the man. He’s too damn skinny, and he loves my chicken.”

Craig laughed again, and he felt his face flush as he pictured ‘the man’ without his shirt. “He’s not that skinny.”

“I didn’t say he didn’t look damn good,” she teased, and then she snickered. It was good to see.

Craig picked up his pace as he headed to his car. The man did look damn good… that was for damn sure.

Thank you to my Editor, Timothy M. and all the readers who have shown their support for this story. Any comments can be made in the COTT forum:
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On 02/16/2016 12:39 PM, pzetts3 said:

I am glad that Craig recognized he had to deal with Carly instead of reason with her black hole for a soul. I would have preferred the hitman or mall santa/frozen icicle to the heart route but she is his sister. I do agree with one of the other reviewers that there needs to be some ammunition still in the chamber because she is only wounded. Badly but most wounded animals become more dangerous. I hope I am wrong there and as you say, she hasn't much choice and her only weapons left are her awful personality and her awful parenting skills. I am glad for the family the secrets are out and I applaud Craig for doing what he thought was best for him, Jared, and Bailey and only what was best for them. However I only have two issues with this chapter, one is nothing really, just that it is hard to fathom that Jared really thought he slept with a woman once using a condom and she got pregnant and never questioned it further or asked for a paternity test back then. Of course that would lead me to believe either he is pretty simple minded or he is so good inside he doesn't see the world as it is or can be and trusts people because he is so trustworthy. I am betting on the latter, he seems to be pure in character. My second issue though is more of a moral dilemma. Maybe Ronnie was disposable to Carly when she used him and threw him away, and maybe he is a crackhead or a lost cause at this point (maybe or maybe not in part because of the way he was treated) - but the fact is he is te girls father and that is the flip side of yours and other reviewers point of Jared being her daddy because he loves her and has raised her. While I agree wholeheartedly that Jared is her father because of the situation and because of his love for her, and while I recognize that (at least in the US) legally she is his daughter as well if he and Carly were married when she gave birth and his name is on the birth certificate. So yes, it sure feels like legally what they are all doing is okay and that not having Bailey know about Ronnie or vice versa is what is in the best interest of all involved. The problem I have is that morally is this okay. Skip legally for a minute and if you assume that Carly had no right to manipulate Jared and Craig to keep them apart and she had no right to use Ronnie to get pregnant and then toss him aside - then I think that you have to ask do they all have the right to conspire and keep this information from both Bailey and Ronnie? Carly didn't do anything illegal either but she isn't moral and I would hate to think that Jared and Craig aren't at least going to wrestle with the moral dilemma that Ronnie has a right to know. I mean who is to say he wouldn't sign a piece of paper and give up all rights with payment if he is as bad as portrayed. And maybe is has no rights depending upon the law, but who is to say that these four people that know the truth aren't holding on to the only information that might help him? I'm not criticizing - remember, I am the one that would have used the money to hire a hit. And I know the story isn't over yet so I am keeping up faith it will all be unfurled in due time. However I have a weak spot for fathers and their rights or lack thereof when it comes to children. It is hard to reconcile a woman's right to their body and the decisions that grants her with the rights of the father some times and leaves us with the dilemmas like in your story.

I recognize it is at heart a love story however, and I cannot wait until the next chapter Gary.

Hey, pzetts! You give the most incredibly thoughtful reviews. I wish I could address it all, but I can't because I don't want to give anything away. Just keep having faith in me :) . I will address why Jared went ahead and took responsibility for Carly's pregnancy. First, he had NO idea she was like she turned out to be. As he says earlier, he knew from health class that this could happen... and it does quite often. Also, he went to his grandfather for advice, which he always did, and his grandpa told him what to do... and it made his Grandpa very happy. And it is true that at that time, Jared didn't see the worst in people... as exhibited when he says to Craig at the pond... it had to have been an accident... why would Carly want to trap a gay guy... he couldn't wrap his head around it, at all. He didn't see himself as the biggest 'catch' in the school. So yeah, it's the being pure part you mention that played the biggest role.As far as Ronnie Chilton, I can't really say anything here... just remember the story isn't over... there are six more chapters to date... some of your issue is addressed in the next chapter... and you have to be patient until the last chapter, because, well.... because :) . Once the story is complete, I think you will be satisfied... at least I hope so... thank you so much for this, my good friend... a lot of thought went into this, and I so appreciate that. Cheers... Gary...

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On 02/16/2016 12:49 PM, skinnydragon said:

The "reveal" chapter, huh? Well, revealed to almost everyone.

 

I'll let the others continue their Carly bash and Carly worry and moral dilemmas, after all, dragons don't usually worry about such stuff.

 

We seek entertainment in irony and karma. Now, how many times has a mother lost a son-in-law she loved only for him to become the son-in-law she loves?

 

Thanks for a great chapter Gary!

LOL... thanks, skinny. Jared gets the next reveal. To be honest I am quite relieved we now know the lengths Carly went to and why. Now we can move on to more of the story. And you make a good point which I won't comment on. Thanks for the support and the wonderful review... cheers... Gary...

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On 02/16/2016 02:41 PM, Drew Espinosa said:

Carly's a piece of work, no truer words have ever been spoken :thumbdown: okay...maybe I'm being dramatic :P

I'll take a leaf out of Skinny's book, and keep my Carly bashin' to a minimum :)

 

What I loved about this chapter, was how Craig finally decided to fight fire with fire. The way he tried to handle his twin before was simply not working. So taking Carly down a notch or two by making a threat here and a deal there was his last option

 

And... poor Ronnie :( If things were different, he could have known he was gonna be a father. Ultimately, I think he would have changed his ways, gave up drugs, in the face of fatherhood. Alas, he never found a reason to stop taking drugs and has hit rock bottom from what Craig said.

 

 

One final thing... one of my favorite things when it comes to your stories is how thematic they are, especially with titles :) With COTT, each chapter's title involved something with card games, SAD's chapters involved song titles, and TW the water. It's pretty amazing!

 

Gary, thank you for this awesome chapter! :hug:

Yeah, I agree. Enough of that witch! I too, loved how Craig kept his cool enough to get the job done. He really did control the entire situation... something the evil one is used to doing. With Ronnie, we'll never know how it could have turned out. We do know he was a pothead before this, but whether having Carly as his girlfriend would have made a difference?... not sure. It sure as hell didn't help his situation. And I'm glad you appreciate the themes of the titles... I like to tie everything together... Thanks for a wonderful review, little buddy... Cheers... Gary...

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On 02/16/2016 09:34 PM, R J Drew said:

Carly, Carly, Carly. My dear that girl is a hot mess. :no: Talk about a shrew. Kudos to Craig for standing up to her. I'm surprised she didn't break a leg when she fell from her high pedestal. :gikkle: I love Craig's mom. It makes me wonder...how did that wonderful woman give birth to such a sour child?

Fantastic chapter. Will wait patiently for the next. ;)

Hmmm. I could have her break her leg in the next chapter, but that's already written :) . I love how hated Carly is. And I also love that all has been revealed. As a father, one of the things I've learned is how different each kid is. Fortunately mine are all perfect :) . I think Carly is one of those kids that came out with a chip on her shoulder. Her resentment for her brother grew no matter what her mom did. Maybe if their father hadn't died it would have been different. I do believe that now Marian knows the extent of what her daughter has done, she will do her best to get her turned around... although it may be too late. I remember my aunt being powerless to do anything about the sibling rivalry she faced with two of her daughters. Thank you so much for liking the chapter, and reviewing... cheers, my friend... Gary...

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On 02/16/2016 10:19 PM, Timothy M. said:

I see someone else is finally noticing and mentioning the wonderful thematic titles and chapter notes (Hi Drew ;) ). They are one of my favorite things about your stories, Gary. :worship:

Carly might have represented the treacherous waters at first, but Craig came well-prepared for his white water rafting trip. In the end, he and Jared are the ones to come out on top, and Carly is left floundering and trying to stay afloat.

She definitely needs therapy, although I bet she will refuse, because she prefers to wallow in her own stagnant pond of misery where she is the victim and everyone is out to duck her. Yeah, she may be more self-deluded than actively evil, but it amounts to the same as to the way her actions impact everyone around her. :no:

Thanks, Tim! Very well put about what transpired in this chapter. I like the image of Carly floundering. Her boat was capsized.lol. I very much like that my themes are appreciated... sometimes it is difficult to find the right title for each chapter, so I love when it clicks. As far as Carly, if she doesn't start seeing things in a better way, her life will always be hell, and she will never have love. Honestly, I don't much care about her. It is her daughter and family I am concerned about, and it looks promising now that she has been exposed... thanks for another awesome review, my friend... cheers... Gary...

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I think Craig handled this amazingly well, considering.. Carly.. I'm so conflicted with my feelings about this woman. So hateful and devious. She steamrolled over so many lives, and for what? She ruined Jared's life knowingly, as she did her brother's. All to hide her transgressions? She probably ruined Ronnie too.. We will never know if having a baby could have changed his life.
Hopefully this deal will allow her to see past her hate and jealousy, to understand that her brother is not out to get her. Maybe she will get help before she looses it all. When she got a glimpse of what could happen if Craig did do as he said, she kind of deflated. So maybe somewhere deep, deep down there's an ounce of remorse. But how goes forward will determine if she's even worth a thought.. I can't even imagine how hurt Jared is going to be when Craig tells him. Silver lining, Craig will not allow him to fall apart.

 

Great chapter, Gary. I am anxiously awaiting the next...

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On 02/16/2016 11:33 PM, flamingo136 said:

Craig's response to his twins deceit reminded me of the term carpet-bombing that was used during the Vietnam War; unlike the surgical strikes commonly using during the Gulf War and later. He calmly and methodically neutralized his opponent.....but he should be aware that unless the snakes head is removed, it is still a threat....Even the detached head has been known to be of danger........Enough of that....lol

I am so excited to read this chapter....Craig finally taking charge of his life ....and moving forward after Harlan's death....the gutting of Carly was just icing on the cake.....Now go feed your man....he is too thin, but DAMN...........:)Mike

LOL... I don't think Craig minds the way Jared looks, but I also think he will enjoy trying to fatten him up. I loved the carpet-bombing... it is accurate here, in what he did. Will Carly still be a threat? Possibly, but it's pretty hard to snipe at people when you are completely exposed :) . I'm glad you got that Craig did this after a very tough year... It has given him focus that isn't on Harlan... thank you for the great review, Mike... so glad you are enjoying this story... cheers, buddy... Gary...

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On 02/17/2016 01:30 AM, Bucket1 said:

No sympathy, only horror... if that's your goal then my goodness you got there in spades. Carly is definitely a piece of work :)

I'm not sure I breathed while reading that chapter.

I wonder if she will cash the cheque, hmmmm...

Yeah, I didn't want anything sugar-coated. Carly is a great character study, but she was unpleasant to write. I loved your second line, but I'm glad your breathing now... I consider that a fine compliment. Yeah, she'll cash the cheque... she's evil, not stupid :) . Thanks for the awesome review, buddy... cheers... Gary...

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On 02/17/2016 05:01 AM, Defiance19 said:

I think Craig handled this amazingly well, considering.. Carly.. I'm so conflicted with my feelings about this woman. So hateful and devious. She steamrolled over so many lives, and for what? She ruined Jared's life knowingly, as she did her brother's. All to hide her transgressions? She probably ruined Ronnie too.. We will never know if having a baby could have changed his life.

Hopefully this deal will allow her to see past her hate and jealousy, to understand that her brother is not out to get her. Maybe she will get help before she looses it all. When she got a glimpse of what could happen if Craig did do as he said, she kind of deflated. So maybe somewhere deep, deep down there's an ounce of remorse. But how goes forward will determine if she's even worth a thought.. I can't even imagine how hurt Jared is going to be when Craig tells him. Silver lining, Craig will not allow him to fall apart.

 

Great chapter, Gary. I am anxiously awaiting the next...

Thanks, Def! I'm pretty proud of Craig. He hasn't been the strongest person after losing Harlan, but he sure showed strength here. Of course, he had blue eyes to keep him on track :) . Ronnie's story is a sad one, and you're right... we'll never know what his life might have been like. Regarding Carly, sometimes people get trapped by their own actions. Maybe she can build a life for herself now that she doesn't have this to fixate on. And yeah, thank God Jared has Craig to lean on. Thanks for another awesome review, my friend... cheers... Gary...

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I must say I'm disappointed (but not surprised) by Carly's treachery. I should have seen that one coming. Marrying Jared was obviously a bonus, but preventing Craig from being happy, was the actual prize. Honestly, is her jealousy of her brother blinding her judgement? And their mom? She's the one I feel sorrier for. She won't know how to justify her dauther's actions, even though she is not responsible for any of them. If I was Craig, I wouldn't let my guards down now that we know what a snake.... excuse me, Carly is capable of.

 

I guess it was an exhausting chapter to write. Sibling quarrels are never easy. But hang in there my friend. As long as there's love, there's hope. Take care.

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On 02/18/2016 12:10 PM, bignick said:

I must say I'm disappointed (but not surprised) by Carly's treachery. I should have seen that one coming. Marrying Jared was obviously a bonus, but preventing Craig from being happy, was the actual prize. Honestly, is her jealousy of her brother blinding her judgement? And their mom? She's the one I feel sorrier for. She won't know how to justify her dauther's actions, even though she is not responsible for any of them. If I was Craig, I wouldn't let my guards down now that we know what a snake.... excuse me, Carly is capable of.

 

I guess it was an exhausting chapter to write. Sibling quarrels are never easy. But hang in there my friend. As long as there's love, there's hope. Take care.

Hey, Nick! Yeah, it's nice to get the secrets out in the open. Everyone is aware of what Carly is capable, and that takes away much of her power. I would never trust her, but she did have her wings clipped pretty good by Craig. And you're right.... where there's love, there is hope... Thank you for another great review, my friend... cheers... Gary...

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On 02/19/2016 03:35 AM, dughlas said:

I fear she caved too easily. Carly is devious and spiteful. I do not trust her. This may have been possible in the earlier shorter story but since the characters continued to demand your attention I think something wicked this way comes ...

Great read.

Hey, dugh! I think Carly has had the wind knocked out of her sails, and while it would be her character to fight back at some point, she cares too much for appearances. I don't think she care so much about losing Jared as she does about how it looks to others. In other words, she has been exposed to her family, and will be very careful it goes no further. Whether she can control her nature remains to be seen, I think you are right not to trust her... Craig has handcuffed her for now, but are they inescapable? Thank you for finding the time to support and review... maybe we're headed in a more pleasant direction for a while. Glad you are able to be along for the ride, my dear friend, and I hope life is good... cheers... Gary...

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On 02/22/2016 02:48 AM, joann414 said:

Carly is now the victim of her own evilness. Go Craig! I'm glad their mother was a witness to the truth.

Now I'm ready for a beautiful love story between Craig and Jared. :read:

Having his mom watch as he leveled his sister was very hard on Craig, but he knew the secrets had to be exposed. Mom is a pretty tough woman. Craig is now on his way to the anxious man... and the next phase begins... Thank you so much for taking on this story, and I hope you like where it goes... next chapter is tomorrow... cheers, joann... Gary...

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On 02/22/2016 03:36 AM, aditus said:

I would think Carly's character is totally exaggerated if I wouldn't know people like her, not in what she did, but how she thinks. It's scary. I'm so ready for Craig and Jared to get closer again.

There is an ugly kind of jealousy that is very destructive, and often irrational... especially in families. I've both seen it, and experienced it to varying degrees. I think a lot of us have. I too, am ready for a new phase of the story... I've grown to really care about Craig and Jared... they deserve a chance... Thanks, Adi, for the review and the support... cheers... Gary...

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Reading this and the previous chapters kinda made me reminisce myself in my late teens :( . Carly needs to understand that just because her sibling happened to be blessed with better looks, they didn't make him the loved twin. He was "liked" more because of his attitude but I am sure their mom loved them equally. In my late teens, I battled with serious depression, so much that it strongly affected my studies. My sister around the same time successfully completed her bachelor degree with honors and was able to land a good job. Until the past year when she got married, I used to think that she achieved all that because she's straight and didn't have deal with being gay like I was. I used to have strong feelings of jealousy towards everything she had. My relatives and parents' comparison between us further fueled them. Only the last year, I got to realize that despite of being born into the same family, you don't necessarily need to have the same destiny as your siblings. Different people need to work in different intensities to achieve their dreams. The path may not be easy for everyone . Only then, I was able to acknowledge that my sister achieved things not because she's lucky or straight but because of her hard work and persuasion. It is only after that I was actually able to be happy for her and feel proud of her achievements. That made me understand that I may not have a path as straightforward as hers and only after that was I able battle depression and make decisions about my life. So, I think that unless Carly stops feeling scornful about her twin, she will not be able to ... :unsure:
Also, I am kinda doubtful about the ages of the characters. Since it has been said that Bailey was conceived when they were in high school and Bailey is about 2 years old, that would generally put them about 21??? :unsure2:
Sorry for the lengthy review Gary :blushing: this and the past couple chapters made me remember what I was like before and that kinda made me feel bad :( . But the story is great :2thumbs: and I can't wait to read more :hug:

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On 03/09/2016 08:42 AM, Victor Gutte said:

Reading this and the previous chapters kinda made me reminisce myself in my late teens :( . Carly needs to understand that just because her sibling happened to be blessed with better looks, they didn't make him the loved twin. He was "liked" more because of his attitude but I am sure their mom loved them equally. In my late teens, I battled with serious depression, so much that it strongly affected my studies. My sister around the same time successfully completed her bachelor degree with honors and was able to land a good job. Until the past year when she got married, I used to think that she achieved all that because she's straight and didn't have deal with being gay like I was. I used to have strong feelings of jealousy towards everything she had. My relatives and parents' comparison between us further fueled them. Only the last year, I got to realize that despite of being born into the same family, you don't necessarily need to have the same destiny as your siblings. Different people need to work in different intensities to achieve their dreams. The path may not be easy for everyone . Only then, I was able to acknowledge that my sister achieved things not because she's lucky or straight but because of her hard work and persuasion. It is only after that I was actually able to be happy for her and feel proud of her achievements. That made me understand that I may not have a path as straightforward as hers and only after that was I able battle depression and make decisions about my life. So, I think that unless Carly stops feeling scornful about her twin, she will not be able to ... :unsure:

Also, I am kinda doubtful about the ages of the characters. Since it has been said that Bailey was conceived when they were in high school and Bailey is about 2 years old, that would generally put them about 21??? :unsure2:

Sorry for the lengthy review Gary :blushing: this and the past couple chapters made me remember what I was like before and that kinda made me feel bad :( . But the story is great :2thumbs: and I can't wait to read more :hug:

Thank you, Victor, for opening up like you have. I'm sorry for the battle you had, but I'm proud of your maturity. To recognize what was going on shows how genuine you are. It's not easy to admit our shortcomings in a public forum, but that is part of our growth. Many aspects of this story, believe it or not, are based in truth. Carly is not as far-fetched as she might first appear, and I'm glad you see that through your own experience. Human beings are flawed... some learn and some don't. All of these characters are finding their strengths and weaknesses. As far as their ages... they are 22 now... Bailey was conceived at 19, born after 20, and just turned 2years old. Don't apologize for the lengthy review... I love it! Thanks again and cheers, buddy... Gary...

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On 03/15/2016 09:43 AM, WolfM said:

I love how Craig started out appearing weak in the first chapter and now his strength is coming out full force. It's great the way he figured his sister out and put her in her place and the mother is wonderful. This is a truly wonderful story!!!

Thank you so much. It's a great observation you made about Craig. He has someone to fight for and it makes moving past the memory of Harlan easier. Thanks for another awesome review. Cheers... Gary....

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A Tit for Tat, I say. Carley deserve this for being devious and for being a b*tch.

 

I turned out to be a big fan of Craig's for his intelligence and courage. And felt sad for Marian, that she has go with all this and know about how cruel her daughter turned out.

 

I was waiting for some shitty law(God know I hate laws :gikkle: ) related blathering, but you were too clever to do that. And I am now so anxious about where you are taking us!!!???

 

I liked it a lot Gary, You are awesome... :)

 

~Emi.

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On 03/20/2016 10:11 PM, Emi GS said:

A Tit for Tat, I say. Carley deserve this for being devious and for being a b*tch.

 

I turned out to be a big fan of Craig's for his intelligence and courage. And felt sad for Marian, that she has go with all this and know about how cruel her daughter turned out.

 

I was waiting for some shitty law(God know I hate laws :gikkle: ) related blathering, but you were too clever to do that. And I am now so anxious about where you are taking us!!!???

 

I liked it a lot Gary, You are awesome... :)

 

~Emi.

Thank you, Emi! This chapter was kind of fun to write. I thought Craig was masterful at dealing with his sister, and it was too bad his mom had to hear all this, but she needed to. I'm glad you think I'm awesome lol. Cheers... Gary....

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Wow! White Water Rafting! I had not seen this chapter title when I made the comment about the "raft of their love" but I was just picking up on your magical titles and following the theme. Happened quite by accident to hit the nail pretty squarely on the head. Glad I didn't hit my thumb!
Great chapter again as all Carly's scheming shenanigans are unraveled by Craig. So it's an extreme jealousy-sibling rivalry-control thing all rolled up into a mess of who Carly is. She surely is a work! Is she redeemable? Seems that might not be possible with her. Some people are like that and remain locked up in their petty scheming bitchy ways and unable to get free.
It scares me a little how poor little Bailey is an innocent pawn and victim in all of this. Craig appreciates Jared's feelings for her and senses those are too deep-rooted to cut, which may be the saving grace in all this. I was afraid how Carly might sense this too and do something wicked to Bailey in order to get back at Jared, but I'm hoping she loves Bailey too much to do that. Craig is applying some of Carly's own medicine to bring her into line, and maybe that's the only thing she will ever understand, but it really is a bummer when people have to use manipulation to control each other's lives. In the end that kills all chances of reconciliation, forgiveness, love to come; except I'm a great believer that the miracle of love can bring redemption in even the hardest and bleakest of soils.
I can't wait to see how the story unfolds. Well done, Gary, for a very intriguing story. It is indeed turbulent water that is being negotiated. Just hope this raft doesn't capsize, but I'm trusting you have it reach calmer waters.

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On 04/14/2016 10:51 AM, Jaro_423 said:

Wow! White Water Rafting! I had not seen this chapter title when I made the comment about the "raft of their love" but I was just picking up on your magical titles and following the theme. Happened quite by accident to hit the nail pretty squarely on the head. Glad I didn't hit my thumb!

Great chapter again as all Carly's scheming shenanigans are unraveled by Craig. So it's an extreme jealousy-sibling rivalry-control thing all rolled up into a mess of who Carly is. She surely is a work! Is she redeemable? Seems that might not be possible with her. Some people are like that and remain locked up in their petty scheming bitchy ways and unable to get free.

It scares me a little how poor little Bailey is an innocent pawn and victim in all of this. Craig appreciates Jared's feelings for her and senses those are too deep-rooted to cut, which may be the saving grace in all this. I was afraid how Carly might sense this too and do something wicked to Bailey in order to get back at Jared, but I'm hoping she loves Bailey too much to do that. Craig is applying some of Carly's own medicine to bring her into line, and maybe that's the only thing she will ever understand, but it really is a bummer when people have to use manipulation to control each other's lives. In the end that kills all chances of reconciliation, forgiveness, love to come; except I'm a great believer that the miracle of love can bring redemption in even the hardest and bleakest of soils.

I can't wait to see how the story unfolds. Well done, Gary, for a very intriguing story. It is indeed turbulent water that is being negotiated. Just hope this raft doesn't capsize, but I'm trusting you have it reach calmer waters.

Hey, Jaro... I'm really enjoying these insights into the chapters. I would say what happened was ugly but necessary. Craig has found something to fight for, and while he hated doing it this way, for his mom's sake, she had the right to know just how low her daughter had sunk. I'm not sure if Carly is redeemable, but I think she can learn, and she can be handcuffed to a point. The one thing I don't doubt is that Carly loves her daughter. Overall, I thought Craig did a great job. Now he has to tell Jared how it all went. Just don't worry about Bailey... I could never let anything bad happen to that sweet little girl... cheer, my friend... Gary...

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