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I Started Thinking - 1. I Started Thinking

This is just some of my thoughts, that I have wrote out in poetry.

I started thinking

I started thinking about the way my life has turned out

This wasn’t the life I wanted, is what I want to shout

I have lived the life I was handed and never said a word

What was the point anyway, when my voice would not be heard

 

I started thinking

I started thinking about the way my life has turned out

Maybe I have fooled myself into believing there is something better out there,

I wonder if all my dreaming is why there is no one for me.

I wonder if it is why, everyone leaves me be?

 

I started thinking

I started thinking about the way my life has turned out,

I never wanted to be a single mother, however that is what I am

Although my child brings me joy, I still wish the pain would end.

 

I started thinking

I started thinking about the way my life has turned out

The pain I’m speaking of is not a physical one you see,

No, the one I am speaking of is carried in my heart

Watching my child grow without a father and knowing what I know

 

I started thinking

I started thinking about the way my life turned out.

Thank you Headstall for giving me the encouragement to try.. :*)
I hope everyone enjoys.. 
 
   As Always Have a sweet day.....
Copyright © 2017 lmoline; All Rights Reserved.
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Valkyrie
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You've written a very relatable poem.  I like the use of repetition of the first two lines.  This has an almost lyrical quality to it. I could see this being sung as a song.  Nice job, Imoline.  Congrats on your first posting! :D  

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1 hour ago, Valkyrie said:

You've written a very relatable poem.  I like the use of repetition of the first two lines.  This has an almost lyrical quality to it. I could see this being sung as a song.  Nice job, Imoline.  Congrats on your first posting! :D  

Thank you for your thoughts and kind words Val. I never thought about the poem sounding more like a song. :music:

As always have a sweet day..  Lmoline:thankyou: 

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Well, Imoline, your voice will be heard now :) . You tell a story here, and it rings with honesty as much as it rings with resignation. You are living a life thrust upon you, but you have every right to question what could or might have been. I hope getting these words out helps you... poetry helps me sort through different aspects  of my life so much. As I already told you, I love the repeating of those first two lines, and I agree with Val that it gives it a lyrical quality. Your voice, my friend shows power and great promise... well done... cheers... Gary....

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A question that I have asked myself sometimes but always came with the answer that perhaps God has something better planned n I 'll believe so for u n ur kid too. 

It was a very touching poem. It has a question n theme. I love how u went about it without being dramatic. I liked the rhythm that u maintained through out the poem ...N the repeating lines had a emphatic emphasis on the unfairness!

Wonderful!!!

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52 minutes ago, Headstall said:

Well, Imoline, your voice will be heard now :) . You tell a story here, and it rings with honesty as much as it rings with resignation. You are living a life thrust upon you, but you have every right to question what could or might have been. I hope getting these words out helps you... poetry helps me sort through different aspects  of my life so much. As I already told you, I love the repeating of those first two lines, and I agree with Val that it gives it a lyrical quality. Your voice, my friend shows power and great promise... well done... cheers... Gary....

 

16 minutes ago, Aviana said:

A question that I have asked myself sometimes but always came with the answer that perhaps God has something better planned n I 'll believe so for u n ur kid too. 

It was a very touching poem. It has a question n theme. I love how u went about it without being dramatic. I liked the rhythm that u maintained through out the poem ...N the repeating lines had a emphatic emphasis on the unfairness!

Wonderful!!!

Thank you both, for reading the poem. I'll tell you a secret I haven't written in so long I almost forgot how.lol :gikkle:

This poem is a very heartfelt and cathartic release for me and I am grateful that you can understand the emotions in it. I am hopefull that with next poem I post it will do the same. Again Gary, thanks for the encouragement and advice.  

 Have a sweet day ...lmoline:thankyou:

 

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Nice job.  We all live the life we are handed and sometimes it is not such a good draw.  I wish I knew the secret to turning lemons into lemonade even when the lemons are rotten...

I only know I can only do my best and expect no more of anyone else.  

It is my hope that your child is inspired by your example and has a fair chance to grab the brass ring!

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12 minutes ago, Daddydavek said:

Nice job.  We all live the life we are handed and sometimes it is not such a good draw.  I wish I knew the secret to turning lemons into lemonade even when the lemons are rotten...

I only know I can only do my best and expect no more of anyone else.  

It is my hope that your child is inspired by your example and has a fair chance to grab the brass ring!

Thanks Daddydavek,  I wish I had that answer for you, and me both. I know that I may never give my son all that he wants but at least he'll know I gave him what he needs.:heart:

I try on a daily basis to lead by example and he seems to understand.. 

 

As always, Have a sweet day....lmoline and :thankyou:

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It takes bravery to share your personal thoughts with others. In your poem, I see a strong woman who does not give up. Just by getting up every day to face life head on, you are teaching your son to be resilient. 

 

'I Started Thinking,' is a poem that many, including myself can relate to. Thanks for sharing Imoline. :heart:

 

Psst...Gary is one hell of cheerleader!;)

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On 7/17/2017 at 2:37 AM, R J Drew said:

It takes bravery to share your personal thoughts with others. In your poem, I see a strong woman who does not give up. Just by getting up every day to face life head on, you are teaching your son to be resilient. 

 

'I Started Thinking,' is a poem that many, including myself can relate to. Thanks for sharing Imoline. :heart:

 

Psst...Gary is one hell of cheerleader!;)

Thank you RJ, I appreciate your words of encouragement. I had been doing a lot of thinking about whether or not to post my poems here and I am glad that it has been well received.

Yeah, I will agree that Gary is just plain awesome... :2thumbs:

 

As always, Have a sweet day... Lmoline and :thankyou: again.

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LitLover

I really enjoyed this.  It was very heartfelt and I could feel the emotion coming through each line.  I agree with Gary:  I like how you repeated the first two lines.  It really worked here.  

 

(And Gary is a great cheerleader, isn't he?)

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On 7/19/2017 at 9:05 AM, LitLover said:

I really enjoyed this.  It was very heartfelt and I could feel the emotion coming through each line.  I agree with Gary:  I like how you repeated the first two lines.  It really worked here.  

 

(And Gary is a great cheerleader, isn't he?)

Thank you Lit lover, I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem. Sorry that it has taken me this long to get back to you, but just know that I do appreciate your support.

As always, Have a sweet day.. Lmoline and :thankyou:

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BDANR

Thank you for sharing your life with us through poetry. It sounds as though it's been a struggle. I really liked your style and use of repetition. Your voice will be greatly appreciated here :).

 

Hope to read more of your work soon,

- Bryant

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21 minutes ago, BDANR said:

Thank you for sharing your life with us through poetry. It sounds as though it's been a struggle. I really liked your style and use of repetition. Your voice will be greatly appreciated here :).

 

Hope to read more of your work soon,

- Bryant

Thank you Bryant, for reading my poem. I am grateful for the support. 

I am currently reading a few different stories at the moment but you are next on my reading list. 😁

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Cynus

I love it, darling. I often have similar thoughts, and it's what ends up becoming my art, just as you've done here. Welcome to the world of the creators, and thank you for sharing your spirit with us.

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9 minutes ago, Cynus said:

I love it, darling. I often have similar thoughts, and it's what ends up becoming my art, just as you've done here. Welcome to the world of the creators, and thank you for sharing your spirit with us.

I thank you, Cyrus, for your kind words. I also thank you for letting us share in your art. From one artist to another you are appreciated.

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Marty

I love it!

I also like the repetition of the first two lines. I think it makes it all that more intense.

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