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Poetry Prompt 7 - 2 Responses

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northie

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On the way to read a partiular poem here on GA, I got side-tracked and read another instead. It was a piece of blank verse and as I read it, I thought I'd like to give it a go. As a rank amateur writer of verses, it was a bit presumptious, perhaps, for me to think that - I have given it my best go but I realise that may not be good enough ... All comments are welcomed. As ever, I thank Parker Owens for his patient assistance. However, all deficiencies are mine, and nobody else's.

 

 

 


This response follows on from my Last Post Wins ballad.

 

I know about your plots, your wicked lies,
Your heartless, knavish tricks against a man,
A knight so brave and fair, who risked my wrath
To save your wretched, worthless life. So hear
Me when I say that you do not deserve
Such love, so generously given – I
Do now command it be your lifelong quest
To worship, serve and treasure him for all
His time. Go, leave me now to seek your knight
And truly sing to him your songs of love.

 

This is the second response.

 

How long have we been friends? Some three decades?
The passing years have not increased the depth
Of this, our longtime bond; of each, we know
So little, yet somehow we thrive and still
we travel far to meet, then play and talk
Of music, striking, hitting things, both how,
And where and when; and this is how it goes,
I know, because your life elsewise does not
Connect with mine: no talk of art or sport,
Or gardens, food, or books and such – just this.

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I feel more drawn to the second one. I think that's because it's more emotionally connected to you as subject matter, or at least it comes across to me as a reader as a more subjective poem.

 

Blank Verse is a great form; it's a storytelling form with unlimited potential. I'd encourage to you explore it more. It's wonderful 'roll up the sleeves' practice to get a living sense of metre.

 

Thanks for taking the Poetry Prompt challenge. I like them both!

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Liked these both! The first was delightful fun, and the second connected with me, as it did with AC. Well done!

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Thank you both for your kind words. Parker knows how unsure I've been about my first attempts at a prompt ...

 

Oh well - next up, number 1 perhaps? ;)

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They were good. As everybody else, I too connected with the second poem more. And the first one made me smile. Thanks for writing and sharing those beautiful poems with us... :)

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I always enjoy reading your LPW poems and writings.  :)  The second poem is very good and relatable.  Having a good friend for so long that transcends distance and shares a similar passion is a powerful thing.  We should all be so lucky.  :)

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Thanks for your kind reviews, both. Val, next up in my LPW writing will hopefully be Drewcula oh, and your ninjas :gikkle:

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Liked 2 best, though both are good... have fun doing the prompts.. which reminds me..i'm not done them all yet myself... 

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