My Love My Heart

[FrenchCanadian]

When we're apart, my world falls apart,

My love my heart, I know we are

I saved a place for you in my heart

don't let the distance tear us apart.

 

Through the mistakes my heart ached,

was only an heartache, don't fake an headache.

I know we'll ace the obstacles in our pace,

I'm lost in space and can't resurface.

I know I can't quit, my heart won't let it,

can you believe it, please don't quit.

 

I'm not facetious, don't be malicious,

I feel flirtatious but i'm conscious.

don't be humorless, cause it's priceless,

It's not darkness, so don't be faceless.

 

When we're apart, my world falls apart

My love my heart, In love we are.

 

SLR

[Ieshwar]

Wow, that was great! I'm no expert so I don't know much what to say except that I really liked it!

 

Take care,

Ieshwar

[FrenchCanadian]

Thx Ieshwar, glad that you liked it,, it was the first thing that I wrote that I've post online. and the first review is a good one, yay. It might be obvious,, but I did wrote it for someone.

[AFriendlyFace]

It was great, and very emotionally compelling! It really gets at the feelings that a young lover feels when separated from his beloved. It makes it all the more moving to know that it's written about a specific person.

 

Excellent job!

-Kevin

[FrenchCanadian]

Thanks Kevin, your comments are highly appreciated. and I agree, when you write with someone in mind it almost always makes something very emotionally compelling