I’ll start with the most obvious part - the cats. They were adorable! Add to that the nod to the HP world. That was brilliant. I really like how Lumos and Nox live up to their name. At one point, Lumos is basking in the sunlight, almost shining. And Nox is the lost one, hidden in the shadows. And then, there’s Minnie, of course, a key part of the ending.
What struck me though is how the story is brimming with hope. Yes, Evan and Maison have their own problems, whether it’s the lost kitten or being outed. But you know somehow everything will be fine. It’s in your characterisation, the bond built between them and your writing style. It’s buoyant and empathetic even in difficult moments. Someone said that each word in a short story should move towards one single mood. It’s something I aspire to and you have done brilliantly here.
I also want to tip my hat to those fine poetic lines which just cut through you. The narration is judiciously restrained and light and then, you come across sentences like this:
“It’s okay,” I said. I wasn’t sure what I meant… okay that he was crying, okay that he was staying here, okay right this second because he was safe. Maybe all those things.
It just hits you because it feels so real. And the contrast makes it even more effective.
We had some great stories in the SA contest but this was my favourite. So thank you for sharing this gem!