Slash Work

[Young Sage]

Thanks? (BTW, 200th post! Whoo!)

[broseph]

You're welcome?

 

Not awful is a good thing, and I guess the follow-up to my previous post is that the rhythm seemed a bit off at times, like a song that's in two different time signatures. I realize that's a fairly nebulous statement, not to mention (mostly) a matter of taste. To me, though, it could be fairly abrupt at times, which if that's what you're going for, then that's awesome, but I found myself thrown for a loop as to what the hell had happened. That being said, I have the same problem in my own writing. I'll immerse myself in the world of the story, where I'm omniscient, and my narratives can tend to leave people scratching their heads and going "Huh?"

 

 

So yeah, if this were a song, I'd tell you to watch your tempo, but as this is a story, I have no idea what to say other than to babble on and on about music and the shortfalls of my own writing.

 

Yeesh. I hope I made sense. Anyway, congratulations on post 200. Obviously, a lot of people agree with me about the "categorically-not-awful" bit if you have that many comments.

[Young Sage]

Strange...I didn't think the plot progression was all that abrupt (but then again, that's just me talking, and I am the author). Was it when I...I mean, Nick started rambling about something and suddenly we're back to the plot at hand? I try to present multiple problems for my characters to solve and to have them solve the problems in random order (in other words, the first problem introduced may not be the first problem solved), as I feel that is being more true to real life. "Categorically not-awful" sounds like "it's...okay...ish" to me, like you couldn't BEAR to use a positive word to describe the story. I've used that trick before myself. Bah, I know what you're getting at.

 

EDIT: I just watched "Sherlock Holmes" again, so this entire entry is being read in the voice and mannerism of Robert Downy Jr.'s character in my head.

Edited August 29, 2010 by Young Sage

[Young Sage]

Wow, it's been FOREVER since someone posted something here. Well, I'm here to fix that (but not really)! In response to the new GA.Stories thing and all my reviews doomed to be deleted, I've compiled all the Slash Work reviews into one nifty little file attached below. It's in rtf Wordpad, so if you can't open it, congratulations! You don't exist.

allreviews2.rtf