[Dark] The One I Want

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Title: Chapter 1: Dinner with Gran Reviewer: adamo

God. That was amazing, so incredibly f**king sweet. Can't wait for the next chapter, this story is absolutely brilliant.

 

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it. There's so much angst and drama in places that a little sweetness goes a long way.

Date: 11/08/2010 01:48 AM

 

Title: Chapter 15: Dance with Me Reviewer: jevans

"I love that when I say your ears are sensitive like a Ferengi, that you know what I mean."HAHA I LAUGHED OUT LOUD AT THIS AND PROBABLY WOKE UP THE NEIGHBORS BUT I DON'T CARE EVEN BECAUSE I ACTUALLY KNOW WHAT HE MEANS TOO! You're the kind of writer that has the inconceivable ability to write very few

words for the characters that speak them yet lace those words with so much sass that makes me fall in love with every single character you write. If that makes any sense at all...

 

Author's Response: Thank you. I've always thought that character dialogue is one of my strengths, and it's nice to hear that I may be right (doesn't everyone like to be right? lol) I actually said something very similar to a guy I was involved with and he laughed, too, saying that he'd been called a Ferengi before (he's a taurus and just obsessed with money) but that he liked my reason better. Guess it's just one of those things that stuck with me and it fit so nicely here. Rick gets so few occasions to be sassy.

Date: 11/08/2010 01:35 AM

 

Title: Chapter 14: The Letter Reviewer: Cesky

I noticed that this chapter has an "end" not a "tbc", this is NOT the end of the story, please!!Author's Response: Ooops! No, not an end. I shall go fix!

Date: 11/06/2010 11:34 PM

 

Title: Chapter 13: Goodbye Reviewer: adamo

Oh God, what a mess. Poor Ben. And Rick. I have been reading this from the start and it just keeps on getting better and better. You are an extremely talented writer.

Please, please post the next chapter soon!

 

Author's Response: That's good to hear. I worried that the story would just peter out towards the end. My goal is to make the ending as strong as the beginning. Guess we'll see!

Date: 11/06/2010 08:56 PM

 

Title: Chapter 11: Knowing is Half the Battle Reviewer: iguanacoosbay

Oh, Gawd, please hurry up and write more of this story. I am making myself not read chapter 12 until you have posted more, because I do not want to reach the end, and not have another chapter to read. I love these two characters, because I can identify with each. Please post more soon!!All the best to you.....

 

Author's Response: I'm glad you can identify with the characters. There's a little bit of me in each, but they both speak so strongly to me about what they want to say

and do. Sometimes, Rick makes me want to smack him because, in Ben's words, 'no one's like that in real life,' but that's the way it goes. Ben whines a lot. lol.

Date: 11/03/2010 11:30 PM

 

Title: Chapter 10: In the Dark Reviewer: Nephylim

Gods that was intense. Oh poor, poor Ben, and poor RIck too. Sounds like Ben is suffering from Post Traumatic Stress and he really needs to talk to someone. With Will still on the loose he really needs friends around himAuthor's Response: OMG, you got it. No one's picked up on that so fast before.

Date: 11/01/2010 11:10 AM

 

Title: Chapter 9: Talk About Politics & Religion Reviewer: Nephylim

wow that was a bit of a rollercoaster wasn't it. I love Rick and Ben is so goddamned cute.

Date: 10/31/2010 11:52 AM [Respond]

 

Title: Chapter 9: Talk About Politics & Religion Reviewer: minmar72

I think I'm in love with Rick. He's all kinds of awesome! I love the way this story is developing. Well done!

Date: 10/31/2010 04:25 AM [Respond]

 

Title: Chapter 8: Confessions Reviewer: Nephylim

Bloody hell, that was a roller coaster. Rick is awesome. He has a lot to put up with and he so handled that perfectly. i love it love it love it.

Date: 10/30/2010 12:36 PM [Respond]

 

Title: Chapter 7: Klingon Love Poetry Reviewer: Nephylim

Oh heck, that was an awesome chapter. You dragged me along with the story and I loved every word. God you're good hun

Date: 10/30/2010 12:24 PM [Respond]

 

Title: Chapter 1: Dinner with Gran Reviewer: Ricky

OMG too funny. They moved rather fast. But for some, such is life. Sounds like a delightful story. Can't wait until I have the time to read on. Well done

Ricky

 

Author's Response: Thanks!

Date: 10/27/2010 12:19 PM

 

Title: Chapter 6: Jimmy, Will, & Bob Reviewer: Nephylim

You bastard.... that was awesome

 

Author's Response: *snickers evilly*

Date: 10/24/2010 05:47 PM

 

Title: Chapter 6: Jimmy, Will, & Bob Reviewer: Drewd

You don't pull any punches, do you Dark? That is some intense writing. Had me rivited to the screen. And in the end I can't help but wonder just what Rick is really thinking. What a hell of a first week. Great job, Dark.

 

Author's Response: Rick is wondering just what he's thinking, too. I'm glad you liked it. That's one of my favorite chapters. I just think James' story is so tragic.

Date: 10/23/2010 09:18 PM

 

Title: Chapter 1: Dinner with Gran Reviewer: zianasue

i loved the story line. ben reminds me a another character from another story. he is also sporadicly talkive. sterling from the with/without series by j.l.langley

 

Author's Response: Interesting. I've never heard of that series; I'll have to check it out. And, yes, Ben's so self-contained most of the time, but when under stress his mouth just cuts loose.

Date: 10/23/2010 10:15 AM

 

Title: Chapter 5: It's not About the Boat Reviewer: minmar72

Oh my... Loving this story so far. It is so well-paced, really well written/edited and the characters come alive in a wonderful way. Doesn't hurt that I've totally fallen for them, eh? On of the better stories I've read in a long, long while. Well done!Can't wait for the next chapter, this cliffhanger you left us with made my breath hitch. Not nice!

 

Author's Response: I know, I'm evil. Can't help it really. lol. Not this time, anyway. I think there's only one other real cliffhanger, though, and not for awhile, so you're safe. For now. XD If you've fallen for the characters, then I've done my job. Thank you so much.

Date: 10/20/2010 02:24 AM

 

Title: Chapter 5: It's not About the Boat Reviewer: Nephylim

That was a loverly chapter. The lovemaking was wonderfully erotic without being too explicit. I loved it. And the dialogue with Shelley was sweet. The revelations were tense and shocking in a gentle sort of way and the ending !!!! OMG. Waiting for the next one with bated breath

 

Author's Response: I've tried really hard to make the characters real, perhaps even more so for the minor chars we only see some of the time. I find the sex troublesome to write, but only because both men are so used to being the one in charge! lol. They amuse me. Shocking and gentle? that's new. I like it. Ah, and we've only begun the revelations.

Date: 10/20/2010 01:48 AM

 

Title: Chapter 4: Superman vs. Batman Reviewer: Wyndham

Very good. Most enjoyable in fact.

Date: 10/19/2010 03:06 PM

 

Title: Chapter 3: Does this Count as a Date? Reviewer: Wyndham

No need to worry. This chapter was riveting. I especially like the breakfast scenes. Just lovely

 

Author's Response: Thanks! Those scenes were amusing to write.

Date: 10/19/2010 11:46 AM

 

Title: Chapter 1: Dinner with Gran Reviewer: Drewd

Excellent opening four chapters! It's clean, fast-paced writing and I've utterly fallen for the characters. Love Ben and Rick and their yin and yang. Such emotions and so very well doled out slowly. More please.

 

Author's Response: More is on the way, never fear. I totally love that you picked up on the yin/yang of the two men. They're not quite complete opposites, but I tried my best.

Date: 10/18/2010 09:18 PM

 

Title: Chapter 1: Dinner with Gran Reviewer: Wyndham

Ooer! :)What a delight. Thank you.

Date: 10/18/2010 02:33 PM

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Title: Chapter 4: Superman vs. Batman Reviewer: Nephylim

That was a proper firecracker. It's lovely to see Rick being so protective and the scene in the office was priceless. However, that's not the part that touched me the post, it was when Rick telephoned Genny. That was just such a caring thing to do.

 

Author's Response: That's one of my favorite scenes, too! We must both be odd ducks. XD Rick, as you pointed out, is a very caring individual. That's how he expresses his feelings, by doing things for other people. It's one of the "Love Languages."

Date: 10/18/2010 12:23 PM

 

Title: Chapter 2: Happy Birthday, Rick! Reviewer: Dark

Hope that's uncomfortable and frustrating in a good way! XD The ending went through many changes, so I'm happy to know you enjoyed it.

Date: 10/17/2010 12:49 PM

 

Title: Chapter 2: Happy Birthday, Rick! Reviewer: Nephylim

Awww.. nice. The whole chapter was funny, tender, uncomfortable in places, frustrating in others but I loved it. And the ending.... I am not smiling, Definitely not.Author's Response: Oops! I reviewed myself instead of responding here. lol.

Date: 10/17/2010 07:30 AM

 

Title: Chapter 1: Dinner with Gran Reviewer: karenmm

I am looking foward to twhen t is continued

Date: 10/13/2010 03:15 PM

 

Title: Chapter 1: Dinner with Gran Reviewer: Louis

Hilarious. I really didn't know what I was in for. Both characters are larger than life which to me is a great start. Gran is an excellent representation, (note i didn't say imitation) of a gran, she's like fine art, but then so is Rick. Ben, I'm not too sure about him, save to say that I am ready fro the next chapter in order to make up my mind. Thanx, this piece really lightened up my day.Louis

 

Author's Response: Bad jokes aside, I'm glad you found it amusing. I love Gran, wish I had one! lol. Ben gets himself into these situations, and then it's really more about how the folks around him react. Rick's character is a lot more straight-forward. Wish I could say the following chapters are as light.

Date: 10/11/2010 10:34 AM

 

Whew! That's that for this one. Thank goodness I'm on holiday and have the time to spend getting things updated. Give the dust a day or two to settle and I'll get the last chapter up.

 

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The last chapter has been uploaded to the new stories site. Keep an eye out for it as it pops out of the review queue! I'll post an announcement when I see it, or you can post here to let me know.

 

Hope you enjoy!

[Acedias]

I've been waiting for this one ... how long's it gonna stay in the review que?! Argh!

The last chapter has been uploaded to the new stories site. Keep an eye out for it as it pops out of the review queue! I'll post an announcement when I see it, or you can post here to let me know.

 

Hope you enjoy!

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I've been waiting for this one ... how long's it gonna stay in the review que?! Argh!

 

 

I believe the last chapter number 21 is available in GA.Stories

To find it go to top of this page click GA.Stories find Title in Browse box (left hand sidebar) click it

Move to centre of page ensure Peer Review and Mod Review(if avalable) is ticked (checked) click update (If you have done this once you do not have to repeat.)

navigate back to this page and click "Dark"

click Stories

Click The ONE I WANT and move down page to chapter 21

click chapter 21

Enjoy

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I've been waiting for this one ... how long's it gonna stay in the review que?! Argh!

 

 

Oi, my bad. The story has been released and can be read by clicking on this link: The One I Want

[hayven]

I just read the story and loved it! All the characters are quirky and interesting, and definitely captivated my attention. My favourite is Rick though - I'm definitely harbouring a crush on him now Such an awesome combination of brain, brawn and personality!

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I just read the story and loved it! All the characters are quirky and interesting, and definitely captivated my attention. My favourite is Rick though - I'm definitely harbouring a crush on him now Such an awesome combination of brain, brawn and personality!

 

Hey there! Only just now realized there was a dangling reply here. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Now, if I could just find a Rick for myself, it'd be all good! LOL