Out There

[nicks_a_writer]

I need some feed back on what you all think about my story

 

later ~ nick

[Centaur]

Hi Nick!

 

I liked your first chapter of "Out There"! It was a great start!

 

I enjoyed the character development of Chris and Brady. They're both likeable characters, and I'm already intrigued to learn more about Brady.

 

I laughed at the detention section, remembering ruefully a detention or two in my high school days. I also like the relationship between Tyler and Chris. They seem to be cool as brothers.

 

So... Keep going! I like where you ended things, and it leaves me interested in reading chapter 2!

 

Nice job! I'll be on the look out for your next chapter!

 

Centaur

[AFriendlyFace]

Chapter 3

 

Hey Nick!

 

I really enjoyed this chapter a few highlights/comments:

 

On Saturday Brent had done a total one eighty from the night before. He was nice to Brady. There was one point when it was just the two of them sitting on my bedroom floor playing a video game and talking like they had been friends for years, all the while me and Ally just sat on my bed, relaxing and watching Brent royally kick Brady

[Boy In Doubt]

I read the first chapter the other night and I couldn't stop! I really loved the way you portrayed the characters and the writing style is very reader-friendly, which I gotta say is a plus.

Oh, Chris's thoughts crack me up, by the way. Hehe! I can totally relate. I mean, the way he thinks...man, he's so real.

 

Great story, dude. Keep it up 'cause we'll be waiting for more chapters.