First Poem Submission

[DarkShadow]

It's not the best thing in words... but it's kind of what popped out.

 

It's dark... it's cranky, and well... heheh not the most jovial piece of literature.

https://www.gayauthors.org/eficiton/viewstory.php?sid=218

 

If you have comments, place them here.

[Camy]

I like it.

[DarkShadow]

I like it.

 

Thank you Camy. I'm glad to know it wasn't a total waste of time.

 

Take care!

[DarkShadow]

*mocks you* DS, are you okay???

 

LOL You're funny

 

Birds

P.S.

i really liked it

 

Thanks... just something I slapped together and stuck out there. It's supposed to depict the breaking point where someone finally makes the decision to end their life.

 

Me... I have every intention of living a long long life and become a burden to the state!

 

WOO HOO! Aim high!