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There are a ton of mm pure erotica stories for sale out there, including ones with incest. It's not exactly a 'taboo'. Now, paypal has been clamping down on many things they consider immoral, including incest, so you might want to consider that aspect of the story and how vital it is.

Interesting beginning. You certainly lay the groundwork for an elaborate fantasy. Even better, you left me with a lot of questions about what is going on, which would make me want to keep reading. That's always essential in a good fantasy story. I sort of picked up on the lesions and then the 'creatures' having a similar sort of skin, so I wasn't super shocked about the creature turning into a boy. The whole 'virus' thing was unclear for Shay though. Was it something he picked up on the new planet? Has he always had it? If so, why does it let him change the creature to a human, if the virus performed the changes it was always meant to to his DNA? How did an 'earth' virus have anything to do with whatever is going on at the new planet? See, lots of questions, lol. I would advise getting a beta and/or editor though. The chapter is pretty clean of mistakes, but there were some awkward phrases and your flow could have used a little help. Having a team is essential, imo, to help your writing really evolve.

I don't typically say I'm an editor. I'm still relearning too many grammar rules to make that my official title. I do beta read and I will point out any mistakes I know. If I have suggestions for rewording or changing a scene I write them up in comments. If I think something is awkward or should be changed, I say something. Then I let the author decide. If someone consistently breaks common sense rules that I remind them of, I tend to stop editing and tell them to go through and fix it themselves and then get back to me. I don't get upset, but I won't waste the time I could be using for other projects if the person I'm helping isn't 100% on board with how I do things. I've listened and learned things from writers at times too though, so it's a two way street. I'm always open to discuss a comment, rule, or question I have. Using a team is invaluable. They can help you figure out your plot and where your writing is going, if you let them, and they make it just that much better. Even if you don't take half the suggestions an editor makes, at least you're thinking about the story!

Hmm... what is Ellis? What could he be in a world that has had Carthera and humans side by side, but never together before? A world of mostly science, but sometimes magic too. I guess you'll just have to wait to find out, LOL! Thanks for the review Pat, good to see you on GA

That you re-read this story is a huge compliment! I only do that with stories I really love too. Dav and Ellis are two of my favorite characters too.

LOL! Thanks. The story goes where it goes. I'm back in the flow now though, so hopefully it stays just as good without the breaks. Thanks for the review M!

Show me where? And thanks hun! I am really glad you enjoy this story. It's been a crazy thing in my head, pushing me to write every day on it almost. Thanks for reading!!

I gasped, jerking up as my eyes shot open. My hand was clenched in Dav's shirt, and I was still in his arms. Dav's hand rested on my cheek, easing the slight sting from where he'd been hitting me. I vaguely recalled him calling my name. "What?" I looked around and brought one hand up to my mouth to soothe the burning pain. I pulled my fingers away and stared at the red stain. It hadn't been a nightmare. The smell was awful, and I could barely stand the taste in my mouth. "I'm sorry, I know yo

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I bet Ryker's going to give Seral hell when he does get back though. Maybe poor Seral?

Their meeting is featured in the story 'Figuring It Out' that I did for the last anthology. I do plan to continue their story for the next anthols as well.

I grew up with a stepmother who made hurtful, yet seemingly innocous, comments into an art form. I'm very aware of those little things that get said that are casual at first glance, but can really sting. I'll be the first to admit to not having a filter, but I try never to insult a person based on their appearance or anything like that. I can't say as I've not hurt people's feelings unmeaning to, though. Thinking before you speak is never bad advice.

Thanks Bandage! I'm glad you liked it!!

That was cute, and I really liked the way you did the 'It Wasn't Me'. The monologue style really worked for this too.

Sorry, but in all relationships trust is vital. From what you say, there's not much trust between the two of you. Not to mention, yeah, your partner can and will annoy you at times, but it seems like you spend more time upset, irritated, or frustrated with this guy than not. You have to decide if the relationship is worth taking the time to work through your problems. I'd suggest speaking to him face to face, with honesty, about how you feel. If you can work it out, more power to you, if not *shrugs*. A relationship should take some work, but you shouldn't feel like you have to manage it constantly.

Thank you Bill! I wanted to keep it simple. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

Hmm... Ramiro is VERY cocky. I can see that bugging someone. I think his wish to just see his friends happy sort of makes up for that a little, though. There will be more coming next anthology; I think I like working with these guys. Thanks for the review MJ!

I didn't want the story to just be the main characters, so I threaded a few others into the plot. Ramiro is a main character, but sort of a supporting character as well. I'm going to have to give him a story soon, lol!

Well, it matters, but not in a bad way. You just find a way to make things work when you love someone. Thanks for reading unlikelyu!

Me too! I always wanted to come back to these guys. They're at a time in their lives where they have a lot going on. Thanks for the review Comic!

Thanks Carringtonrj; I'm glad you liked it. I just wanted something simple and fun.

Thanks Frostina! I didn't want to leave it too sappy. Plus, I love that movie; it's hilarious!

I'm glad you enjoyed it Bandage! I really tried to keep that twist hidden, lol. Sorry Lugh

I'm glad they go over well! Thanks for reading my anthology Bandage!

Great ideas for future prompt stories and I enjoyed your featured response, Renee.