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Yes, search engines are handy though I often use Bing. They have pretty pictures, lol. Readers can be experts too, lol. I had our resident Daddy Q ding me on the speed of my court procedures during Escaping the Pain. I knew I was bending those, but it was still really cool that he'd take the time to point out the flaw so I could fix it if I didn't know better. Sometimes details you don't even think about can trip you up. I once read a story set at the coast in 'Newport, Washington'. The thing is? The author meant Newport, OR. Newport WA is in the desert, not the coast! I was actually so bothered by that I couldn't even finish the story. I've seen readers get irate over their hometowns, it happened just last week in a comment of a story I read. Writing what you know is the easiest way to prevent that, but where is the fun in going the safe route all the time? The editing/beta reader program on GA can actually help authors with that. I know that sat8997 has a list of helpers that detail what they 'know' so to speak, and that helps in pairing up stories/authors with a team to smooth their stories. Posting a topic in the Writer's Corner asking for advice is often helpful too. Mark has fans who offered help, if I recall his blog post correctly and I've often done the same thing here and there when the writers needed information with things like firearms or medical knowledge. I like to learn though; so my advice will always be 3 simple words when someone asks me a question I don't know: Look it up! Often I'm searching along with them, with my insatiable curiosity piqued. LOL

Abuse stories are fairly common. You will really need to make your characters stand out and involve the reader. Use the character's senses. Is pain sharp or dull? Does it throb? Is the tear falling down his face hot? Does he wipe them away with the back of his hand roughly? Swipe them away with a gentle fingertip? How does the cold feel on his skin? Are his hands wet from falling in the snow/ice? At one point in the 2nd bit, where Jeremy is apologizing to Jacob you slip into first person. Some of your other phrasing is a bit awkward, so I would advise you to get a beta reader. A person who can tell you if your story is working or reading properly is invaluable. Your story has possibilities. Make a few adjustments; get some help to polish your writing itself, and it could be really good.

Thanks for reading and reviewing! A lot has happened, but I just keep adding more to the mix, lol. A new chapter will be out soon. Thanks again Aditus!

Don't try to confuse the newbies with your specious allegations! You should know better, Mr. law type man! Welcome Caffled! I hope you find what you are looking for here on GA.

It will last for quite a bit. I have 11 chapters loaded into GA Stories, set to post every other day. I've been writing a new chapter every 2-3 days, so I should have it finished with no gaps in posting. Thanks for starting the topic hun, I'm glad you like it so far!

I'm so glad you have enjoyed it! Yes, you only have so many likes a day. I have close to 900 likes though, so you don't have to use them all on me. Comments are great too!

You always find the key, or the answer, or the button (in this case) as soon as you ask someone. That way they can point at your red face and laugh. Or at least I do, lol!

I've plans working for a plot on Benny's story. I've a lot more research to do first. I'm a big fan of romance and I do like instant connection type stories, though I can't always make it easy on my characters. Okay, so I rarely make it easy on my characters, lol! Thanks for the review; I'm glad you liked it!

One never knows, right? You might get some answers in the next chapters, I try not to give out too many spoilers. I'm glad you are intrigued though, it means you will read more! The next chapter just has to be edited and I'll be posting. Thanks for the review Labrador!

Lioness, darling. I am queen of the jungle, after all.

Welcome to everyone new! I hope you find the home you look for here at GA. If you have questions, please feel free to pm me anytime!

Try clicking on the story and using the button called 'add chapter'. Facepalm much?

Isn't it though??? So much about to happen! I sent off the latest chapter to my beta; so in a few day's maybe you'll get that relief!! LOL. I'm glad you liked the way the story has been going, thanks for the review!

No, oh ewwww, gross. Now, his chest a few hours after he's showered and he's not stinky but he has that natural smell, yeah. Dirty unders...no way in a million years. Do you like Valentines Day?

I follow a blog that lodged the protest for this. *shakes head* When are people going to open their eyes and see the reality that it doesn't matter who you love?

Same here, it's part of who I am on the site, combined with Admin, Hosted Author, and general mothering type nag. LOL It won't all fit

Car accident. I got trapped in the car for an hour and I had a huge head laceration, a concussion, and a shattered leg. I was so scared and couldn't move. I just kept repeating I could wiggle my toes to the firefighter they had in the car with me, hoping that meant I wasn't paralyzed. It took over a year to learn to walk without aids from the leg injury, but I felt thankful most of the time. The drunk that hit us died. What is the scariest thing you ever did that you LOVED? (like adrenaline rush activities)

Ewww... no. I don't 'do' younger people. I like experienced men. (I wouldn't do taller than me women either, Yang and Trevor, so you're out of luck!) Do you believe in astrology?

I hope you had a great day!

Nephy's advice is all very good, though for the first 24 hours of an actual injury you should use ice to reduce inflammation, not heat. Then I alternate heat and ice. I have back issues as well, and the best thing I can suggest for overall health is to add a 10 minute (minimum) yoga stretch exercise when you get out of bed every day. It helps with overall muscle warm up, and while it is not much, every little bit of work on your flexibilty and muscle tone helps throughout the rest of the day too.

So fae have funky crests instead of hair as babies now? Interesting! LOL. Great little prompt, I enjoyed it.

When in doubt, worship at the throne of google! It knows all. LOL

I'm having a hard time with the comment Will made about Scott being hot. It seems so out of character for anyone to do that, much less in a cemetary to a family member of the person who just buried his partner. No one who listens and behaves the way Will did at the coffee shop is that big of a tool. Other than that, this was an emotional chapter. Poor Scott, fighting with his partner right before he dies. So sad.

I can't get the picture of the plot slug out of my head and my nose is like permanently wrinkled. But I liked the article and the imagination in which you shared your thoughts.

Woah. Really? You think we're collaborating to steer the blog in such a way to deliberately insult Dom and/or belittle members? I talked to Lugh in chat yesterday and that's about it. Every response I made about my opinions as to the story and the way members react is consistent with the way I respond ALL THE TIME. I don't believe in sugarcoating things. If I feel something about a story I've read, I comment on it. If I think members are trashing a person or a story unfairly, I say so. I don't recall smacking any knuckles, simply asking people to respond to the story and discuss the points the review highlighted or that they liked/disliked about the story rather than simply nitpick the review or blast the person for daring to dislike PARTS of Dom's story. How in the hell is that a bad thing? I'd also like to know how 'the site' is expressing a fine line of utter contempt toward one of its "best and most popular author". By allowing someone to post a blog review stating that they thought parts of the story were lacking or overdone? By me agreeing with them as a reader? By Lugh withholding the name of the review author because of reactions from fans, which we all know can be pretty vehement in their responses? After all, look at the comment I quoted from yours.