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I knew I wanted to link all the stories together. I knew there was a bad guy masterminding all of this. I did not know who it was or the details of these stories though. It just sort of... flowed. I rarely outline anything but it has worked rather well in this series. Takes a lot of going back to check all the details though, that is what is slowing down these chapters posting. It takes a long time to make sure I have all the details right. Thanks for always reading and commenting hun. It means a lot to me!!

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I think you might be missing the point on the purpose of this blog. It is not to toot the horn of authors or stories on the site. We started this to get the writing and reading community MOVING. No matter your feelings for this review, it did exactly that, garnering the most comments to date.

Seriously? C'mon... people misspell my character's names all the time. Then again, they're often quite unusual. No one was questioning the validity of Rory's behavior to some extent, but when you face reading about a teenager acting out again and again...it can get tedious even when the story is otherwise excellent. No one has said it wasn't a good story. Story arc issue aside, Dom appears to be a great writer and consider his fans have their own name, he's well liked. That doesn't mean his story can't have flaws in the minds of some readers. If you think otherwise, actually state your case.

Dav didn't end up waking me up; a nasty yowl followed by a roar did that instead. I sat upright on the sofa, my heart instantly racing. My head swam from the sudden movement and I clutched at my head. "Ow." "Everybody needs to shut the fuck up. Keep him over there Velaku; I mean it. Ahsran, take your mate over to that corner before I kick his ass. He just woke his twin up, and I fucking swear that if any one of you gives him a migraine by stressing him out I will rip your god damn head off

Remember please, this is a review. They pointed out what they thought was well done and what they didn't like and why. This is their opinion. You might agree with part of it, some of it, or none of it. I don't think they were bashing Dom or the story, but giving their honest thoughts. That's what they were asked to do. Please don't bash the reviewer for stating their personal feelings on a story as you state yours.

Well...I'm not the reviewer, but I have to agree with them. Dom's an acknowledged storyteller but, to be honest, this is the only story of his I ever read. While it was well written, the plot was a tad tedious to anyone who isn't stuck in the throes of teenage angst and likes to be. I wanted the characters to grow the hell up and the story to move along, and that is NEVER the mindset I want when reading. As a reader, I want read a story that is flowing so well that my eyes can't move fast enough to read to find out what is happening. I want to feel sad that the story is over and wish there was more to read. While I read Desert Dropping start to finish, I wasn't sad at all to hit the end.

Some of the prompt stories, while generally under 1.5k at most, are very vivid and well told stories. I can't really judge poetry since I don't get it but I'm sure those who do enjoy those submissions as well. If you do write, check out the past prompts if these two aren't something you are interested in. Sometimes one will grab you, and you'll be writing before you know it. Thanks Lugh, Comicfan, and Joekeol for their work on this blog page.

From the age of 2 to 9 my dad and uncle, who are identical twins, raised my sister and me. It's not the same thing as having 2 dads who are in a relationship but in some ways it is similar. I went to them without question over many things and even with all the wrong choices my dad made, we are really close today. My uncle is a tad annoying, but that's more his personality keeping me from wanting to be around him than anything to do with the way he was when I was a kid. I don't think not having the traditional household growing up is really that big of a deal anymore.

I'm glad you enjoyed it! New chapter will be out very soon!

Sounds like the town my hubby grew up in. I'm sorry you're dealing with this. When you can't trust your own mind to be sending you the right signals it can be frustrating. Do you talk with other bipolar sufferers to see about what works for them or not? I don't know if it could help but if it does, anything is better than nothing, right?

Tags are limited to 6 maximum in GA Stories anyway. I agree with having a good description as well, though that is also limited by the software.

All good points to add guys, thanks. I was trying to highlight just a few of the most common punctuation issues so I didn't touch on the same person speaking yet changing the subject or needing a new paragraph. Thanks Nephy. Bill, I never use those correctly as I usually just write up with I think is wrong and add a suggestion when I edit. When speaking I have always said, 'in an example' so IE just flowed naturally for me to mean that, lol. Obviously I'm always learning new things (some of my early stories, yikes!), so thanks for sharing one today. Speech tags are definitely an aspect of writing that can quickly approach overkill. I used to use them quite a bit, but Renee once pointed out to me that actions speaker louder than words. Instead of using a tag such as 'yelled angrily', I can put an exclamation point on the dialogue and then add in a visual cue that lets the readers know who is yelling and also gives an idea of the scene. Visualizations are one of the things I try to focus on in my writing, so that resonated with me specifically though I'm still occasionally guilty of going tag happy. Some examples below, or as Bill just taught me, e.g.: 'No way!' His hands clenched in fists as he glared over the table. I don't have to describe his speech because hands in fists and glares are cues his exclamation is angry, not excited, which could be highlighted with something like, 'No way!' He hugged me, then picked up keys to his new car.

Do what makes them moan. Then do it again. And again. And again. You get the picture Do you like giving blow jobs or do it just to make your partner happy and/or get them yourself?

The coast. Washington and Oregon don't have 'beaches' that others not from around here expect but I love being out there. Almost always cool and damp feeling, the smells and sand and dunes are a lot of fun and there are some awesome views. Plus the small beach towns are so kitchy, they're cute. Do you like kid's cartoon movies?

As I've said to others who have shared their stories of abuse; it takes a lot of courage to go back there and think of those times, much less write about them and share for others to see. You made the journey of the emotions quite clear in the story and for me, they ring true. When it happens the ultimate questions you are plagued with are most assuredly 'why' and 'how could you do that to me'. A parent is supposed to love and protect their children and when they don't. . .it's tragic. I'm glad you got some answers because holding on to that is painful. Thanks for sharing your story.

Ahh, I'd want to be aquatic when I want to. I don't want to just breathe underwater though, cause as just a normal person with gills, I'd still be shark bait. So I'd like to be able to turn into something that lived underwater that wouldn't have to be afraid of sharks so much. Like an orca!

This is going too fast! No I don't pee in the pool! Eww, germs! Honestly, when reading I'm completely brainless and sucked into the story so I'm 'peaceful' then. It is my favorite way to bliss out. But if you mean sometime/place I'm in the moment but usually completely happy to be there and doing that, I'd have to say taking photographs. I love exploring nature and using my skills to find something beautiful that I can not only leave for someone else to find but take with me in a way so I can share it with others. Taking pictures is a way of sharing my creative and 'softer' side. What is the strangest food you have tried, thinking you wouldn't like it, but then did?

Well I recently was told that I was sadistic and my story was as well. This was Bonds Unbroken, which admittedly, is rather dark in places. I mean... one guy plans to eat another guy and does take a bite out of him. That is pretty messed up, even if they are partially animals. It was my mind that came up with my insane villian in that story and I meant for him to be considered absolutely reprehensible and sadistic- so in a way, the flame was actually a compliment, lol. I made sure he had no redeeming qualities so that another main character would be able to have this absolute need to kill him in reaction to his misdeeds. Fear is strong, but hate can be stronger. Anyway, that worked because the story was short. If more of the story had featured the villian other than the single scene he actually appeared in, I don't think it would have worked that way. Length of the story, and how much 'face time' your villian gets definitely impacts the portrayal you have to make of them. The more we see them in the story, the more we need to see OF them, ie. their personality, motivations, goals. . . Also, you don't have to have an absolute 'villian' in your story. The technical term is antagonist. You don't even have to have just one. If you think about it, the antagonist is the character that allows your main character (protagonist) to struggle, oppose, or work around them. Without some sort of issue, problem, or conflict, most stories would fall relatively flat. You can play with that to some extent and the antagonist can run the gamut from a bully that your MC wins over at the end to a murdering jaguar who takes a bite of you so he can tell you how tasty you are and how he plans to eat you up one bite at a time (and not in a sexy voice). One way I've explored this, other than being a sadist, was to go a completely opposite route. I had a story with 2 main characters and one of their best friends. There was no villian but there was a struggle. In the story, the protagonists were the antagonists. They both had to face the roadblocks and misconceptions they put in their own heads as to why the other character wouldn't be interested in them before they could come together. It was relatively simple and obviously a very short story, but it was just another way of playing with the 'rules' of plot and character building. Exploring how you write different characters and plots will help you grow as an author. Stretch the imagination and come up with different antagonists in the same story of different levels of 'villian-ness', write a story without a villian and still give it a conflict, try creating a villian we love to hate and one we hate to hate but have to because of their actions anyway. The great thing about writing fiction is that its all imagination. The only limits are to what you can make up and make others believe!

It's called 'Bigrig' and you can find it and the sequel 'A Timeless Place' on Literotica by the author, Windstormy. Here's a link to his profile.

Whew! One week down. . . many many to go. Great first week, hopefully members will get active and start suggesting content, writing prompts, reviewing stories and more! Staff can only do so much to really promote what this site is all about, the authors and the writing. Big thanks to Lugh and everyone else who worked to create the content to make this happen!

I need to work on that anthology! Lazy me waiting til the last minute. I'm glad you'll have an entry. Can't wait to read it!

Loved this when I read it, totally hilarious!!

Nice to meet you Velefried, thanks for joining! I hope you are enjoying the stories you have been reading.

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