Carl Accolla

Completely agree, really enjoying your unique style @Tony S.

And the Romans did a lot .....

Two years, eleven chapters, and a whole committee supervising the smut 😂 Congrats Ben! You’re on my follow list now, so I’ll be checking out some of your stories.

You beat me to it, but I was asleep. Loved it!

Honestly, same. After what they did, Noah owes none of them.

100% agree!

Well, fuck me. The AI’s gone and written a book(ish). I started reading this expecting it to be shite, but somehow ended up genuinely invested in two old cowboys looking back on their life together. Did anyone else actually care about them by the end, or have I just read AI’s happy-ending version of Brokeback Mountain and gone soft?

Yup, you can only have so many scenes of one finger, two fingers, three fingers… ohhh. I’m just finishing a chapter in my own book that contains the first sex scene, and I tried it three different ways: Keep it as it was. Turn it into a full-on sex scene. Add a little more detail. Honestly, the extra detail ruined it for me, so I’m sticking with option one. The comments will tell me.

What a great story!

Hmm, Tim and Guy.

The name recycling is the obvious mistake, but I think the bigger problem is that everything feels over-described and under-lived (typical AI). It keeps reaching for dramatic phrases instead of letting the scene breathe. It’s not that any one line is unforgivable, although “sky the color of a bruised plum” is trying very, very hard. It’s that the whole thing has that AI habit of stacking mood on mood until nothing feels natural anymore.

This was chaotic and emotional. A great finale!

Quiet, natural, and really earned. You can feel them becoming a unit.

Neil’s growing confidence and the naked-bum commission. Loved it!

Diana exposed, Caleb free, and now Park. What a chapter!