Rebelghost85
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I hope he can clear things up with his brother later. He didn't mean to but that was a great break of trust. Interesting development with a familiar and a new vampire. His skills seem interesting. Finally, there were a bunch of typos and small to large grammar mistakes here. I would suggest getting an editor in the forums. The plot is too good to be messed up by small things like grammar.
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I hope Elyran gets over this guilt. It's good that he didn't find taking a life easy but it was in self defense, protecting his true love. It was also a bit shocking to see how powerful Elyran's wild magic is. Hopefully he learns how to control it and refine it in the future. Great chapter and I can't wait to see what happens next. I'm worried about the reception they'll get when they enter the Ogrushkai Union.
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I'm not sure if you're still around LittleBuddha but this is truly a great piece of fiction. It was well done and I learned a few things about Buddhism I didn't know before. Thank you.
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Ellis is going to be trouble. I'm worried about those "favors" I'm also happy to see more of the ghost. We haven't learned much about that part of the story and I'm dying to find out more.
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Interesting start. Please continue.
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I can't believe he's dead. Poor Tanner. I have many inventive tortures in mind for Amanda and Ethan. Ethan is a terrible person for letting his best friend die and Amanda just lost any redeeming qualities. I'm heartened that Tanner will continue to be a part of the story but I'm sad that they won't be able to continue their relationship. Maybe Tanner should just haunt Ethan and Amanda forever. They'd deserve it.
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Wow. The scientists' deaths were horrible and I don't like the organization at all at the moment. I don't see how you can justify the brutal murder of eight human beings to protect an idea. I also think the prayer was bullshit. Fuck Brynn for trying to assuage his guilt by offering a prayer for a religion the victims have no idea exists and don't follow. They didn't choose their martyrdom. They were killed by a religious zealot in the name of "god". As you can tell, this chapter was written so well that it elicited a powerful emotional response from me. Your words are wonderful. Thank you for posting.
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While I'm still at the edge of my seat, Amanda is starting to seem a bit unbelievable. Her psychosis is a little too strong to go unnoticed so late into her development. What the hell is her deal? Also you don't have to worry about the death and dying unless there's an unhappy ending. Then I might kidnap you and force you to rewrite it under pain of torture. Another way out is to label this as a tragedy so I can stop reading. They're just not my thing. Thanks for posting!
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Really exciting chapter but I'm confused about what actually happened. Please post the next chapter soon! I can't wait to find out what happens next.
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Interesting take on a zombie themed story. I'm really enjoying it. Hopefully Shay is as smart as you've portrayed him and realized what the readers have already. A gene modification virus has gone out of control (weaponized?) and infected everyone. Somehow Shay can cure them. Perhaps it was his experiment that acted as a catalyst for the infection? I'm looking forward to the survivors' reactions when they find out that Mira was one of the fully infected and I hope Mira regains more of his humanity as time goes on. Thanks for sharing your story, it's very good.
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This was an evil cliffhanger, but I have a hunch about Josen
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Whoa. Big reveal here. I can't wait for them all to meet!
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An elf? Maybe a future love interest? I hope so. Brian deserves to be happy. Please let him join the family!
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Hm. Now Gibby has no faith at all in the principal. I would have lodged a full complaint with the school board myself. Amanda is such a bitch. I wonder why her father believed her?
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Poor Thomas (and Alex but that's a separate point). I was a bit shocked when you let us know what Thomas' grandfather did and I'm sure Thomas feels even worse. Thank you for posting the next chapter.
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Great chapter. I second the requests for character development with Amanda and a bit of a jump start to the romance. Unless you have a plan. In that case, ignore us all because the story is really great.
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Chapter 11: Gangs of Chicago, Part 1: Apollo
Rebelghost85 commented on David McLeod's story chapter in Chapter 11: Gangs of Chicago, Part 1: Apollo
I loved how you incorporated your other story into this one and I like the way the main storyline is supported by minor ones. Great chapter. -
Thank you for sharing this. It was really well written and I enjoyed every part of it.
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Hm. I love how you're not giving very many hints on where the story is going but giving us enough details to keep us interested. Tanner and the blond seem interesting. I'm hoping this is even better than Mean Girls. Thanks for updating!
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Missed the last update for some reason. Still confused but hoping the guys get to Anthony soon. I also trust that Brian will be fine. He's a good egg that one.
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What is it! *mutter*. Great chapter. I can't wait to read more. The history is fascinating.
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Wow. The revelations, the suspense, the romance of it all. I loved both chapters. Thank you so much for sharing.
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A bit of suspense huh? I wonder if any of the kids are going to be mean or overly curious about Gibby's accident. Hopefully things go well on his first day.
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I agree with Andy. Well done but I have no idea what's going on! Intrigue, drama, romance. All things I like. Thanks for posting.
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Wow. This chapter was heartbreaking. I really feel for Gibby. This chapter made a lot of things clear. I hope things start looking up for him.
