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A lighthearted funny and silly moment 😁 He stands as Warden of the Sheet of Time. Just because humans and those similar have immediacy as a key element to understanding timelines, doesn't mean he does. 💛

🙂 He may simply not know. If you house an aquarium, you don't know what's going to happen to all the fish in there. Just because you created a living environment, doesn't mean you have more than just a macro view of it. They didn't expect Theodore to be able to traverse between realms and siphon power. Hopefully! 💚

And that's the one aspect of your world building, you avoid going into specifics 😜 I can't just info dump it! Where would be the anticipation, the wonder? "Sebastian, could you please repeat the insult one more time, this time breaking the fourth wall, speaking directly into Grey's camera? Great! And could you step one step back, so that half of your face is in the shadows? Stop, stay this way. Perfect! And action!" I didn't break the fourth wall, but Clara did once say, "I believe this narrative requires a clarifying Clara to move things along. Dave, Grey is wolf. Werewolf? I don’t know how that works. Grey, Dave is a… something. He makes things happen. It happened before. And it happened last night. I think this is all tied to this place. You were meant to come here, both of you. And today is a good day." Grey kinda is already talking to the reader anyway. Benefits of 1st person POV I can confirm that the next story is not from Mark's POV.

Is Grey a professional DOP, is he just an iPhone filming hobbyist, or more like the GoPro adventure documentary kind of guy? Last chapter for example… I have this picturesque scene where everyone is. The confrontation. Luna kneeling. Maybe it comes through better in the followup chapter the next few days. And everyone just has an iPhone 😛 Oh, I absolutely take no issue in that particular aspect—that's a great concept 👍 I come with these things as I go along, and it feels fraudulent at times. The only part of the world that is planned out in full detail is the Seven Piers of Origination, but that might be because I did the world building on that without even having a story. Right now I am revising my outline to see if the pacing still matches my original goal. I had 50 chapters planned, then it was 54, then less again. I don't know where I'll end up with.

Yeah it does make sense. Over 50,000 words and what has really happened? XD I get it, it is valid criticism. I still am happy I chose it. Certain parts of the story are so much better because the wolf gives feedback. They are two entities as one. It also plays into the fact that the wolf is with someone from birth and why turning someone wolf is so frowned upon. Sure, this would be stronger if I had the POV of someone turned, like Mark or Dave, but I never said this would be the only story in the universe 😛 I always feel like I am losing plot and subplot, but that is hopefully just me being a very stern critic of myself. The main plot sometimes feels very weak to me "Big bad does curse, remove curse to solve" and Theodore has no layers to himself. There will be more layers later but I wasn't able to show them yet. I feel like the first person POV without head-hopping is limiting, but I fully embrace and have to find other ways around it. Yup. I think it worked well in Aaru. I'm not cutting between shots, but in my mind I have a camera on my characters—which often is a first person POV from my protagonist. I then use that to write.

I wrote and edited for 6 hours and forgot to eat. How is everyone else doing? Weekend!!! @Mikiesboy How is the snow?

Why, then, do you think, you get so may "laughing" reactions to your comments? 😉

Another author's comment: I thought my scene of Dave shifting slowly and failing miserably was so funny that everyone would just focus on that, but alas, no. Sad. I can write porn, but not comedy it seems XD

So, no retcons then? And I don't mean the Torchwood ones I hope so! If they happen, it's because I forgot something about my own story XD Well… thanks I guess?

lol. Nice article. I think many authors on this site relish on torturing their readers who in return relish in the pain. I'm just getting of a taste of it right now.

This was the day I learned I might be ok at writing pornography. Who knew...

Yeah, could you rewrite chapter 18 to only show Clara's perspective? 😜 So much more entertaining 😜 *playing with drown's insecurities off* No. There will be no head hopping. 🙃 I think even with my short hiatus, I wrote and edited many many words in three months. Do you want me to die? 🥲 Damn! Would have been too easy 😅 I think I would break character if things were easy to deduct!

They're also very pretty.

Unfortunately we were not able to bear witness to her trying her best, because Grey was off in the forest doing… things. Yeah, essentially this: 😜 Oh what the… You're so gay XD Grey, kinda explained that before: His brother and father are so furious, they don't seem to have come to the realization that comes with “Ugh. You’re mated to a guy. […]”, even though Luis should be aware of pack politics—if not he, who would? Your deduction is plausible, but you also don't know all of wolf law, @Zuri. You can challenge almost anything, even the Alpha status. Sebastian would never have done that before, he's weaker. Clearly weaker than his brother. And at some point in time (Ch 09), Grey asserted dominance over his father. They might not like it, but Grey and Dave are here now. If they were to challenge Grey and Dave (please stay tuned), knowing what we know, I doubt anyone in the pack would survive. If Luna has her marbles together, she might just be trying to defuse the situation before it gets to such a point. Or does she? Again, please also stay tuned. Apparently, she's finally freed from her husband, at least as her leader as pack politics make her to submit to Grey and Dave instead, whether Luis likes that or not, as must he. So many possibilities. As a reader I would wonder if she was truly happy with the way her other son and her husband treated her first-born son. She's a mother. Knowing what I know, it is hard to comment further XD Just know, all my women are powerful, in more ways than one. So, he has the same taste as Mark: You remembered Mark and Dave share similar tastes. And DNA. There's a whole other subplot I'm leading towards so much, and no one is seeing it yet!!! 💚

She sure did, but she also surprised Grey. He had only been gone from the pack for a few days, but he was imprisoned before for trying to run. Who knows when they last saw each other. You are very perceptive. I like it

💜 Will she? They might have done so in the past, but that was long ago and is not written in history. Why?

The rising sun painted a thin line on the horizon, long shadows stretching across the land. I woke, snuggled against Dave. His steady breaths and soft, sunlit fur lulled me from my sleep. I nestled my snout under his head, feeling his heartbeat quicken against my cheek—his cue that he was waking too. ‘Hey you. Good morning,’ I thought to him through our bond. ‘I could wake up like this forever. You’re so soft,’ Dave replied. ‘Me too.’ He pulled back, gazing at me. ‘Can I watc

No!

Oh I didn't make myself clear then. That's exactly what I would like to happen, too. As I've said before, his supernatural abilities and his duty to his job are two separate things. He should entrust Mike with the supernatural stuff, while keeping their official police business compartmentalization as a whole different topic. 💜

XD Ok then. I'll wait. I actually have quite amazing IOL's in my eyes because of early cataracts at the age of 38. I doubt I'll ever go blind. I see like a cyborg. AND STOP THAT SENTENCE! Have you ever had a partner who worked shifts? Don't tell me you stayed up! That wouldn't be healthy. Yup. I even stayed up until 2am to make him food. Healthy? No. Romantic? Yup. Incurable. I'm really glad when he just left, because I was clinging to a relationship that no longer was. And yes, it wasn't healthy for me either. I learned a lot. Not going to do that anymore. Have a great digital detox vacation!

BEN CALLED! I feel like the moment the Buffy/Angel crossover happened for the first time with a phone call 😂 I love Kage's reaction, haha. This chapter was really nice, and suddenly months went by. The question remains: Will by heart be broken? I also really hope Kage gets to know the other guys.

Pretty sure the corner is enchanted. Like in Harry Potter where Hermione fit everything including the kitchen sink in her little clutch. Maybe scientist Elijah can elaborate on how that works? I'm sure this comment will cement my place in the korner. I love this bit: I—Drown—enjoy having people shred their clothes when shifting. A lot! And this: SEAGULLS! STOP IT NOW!

All the lies will pile up and become inescapable. AHHHH. ‘Nobody must ever know.’ If I read this one more time, a capillary will burst in my eye. Oh no, Mike, why did you say that. He's going to use it as justification to remain secretive… Until Mike finally stumbles onto some supernatural goings-on and it becomes inevitable. Then Mike will say, "What the?" And Jamie will respond, "Well you said you didn't want to know!" 😂 Hurts This chapter is juxtaposing the mounting circumstances and lies with the mundane and very sweet date that Nam and Melanie shared. He has a good life. And I—drown—remain steadfast in my opinion that being truthful to Mike about everything would solve some issues 😛 Thank you, @lawfulneutralmage.

The grey helps me with writing, but yes, only in moderation. If it gets too much, it becomes depressing.