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Oh god, he's so cute. Ma'am, I believe your son thinks highly inappropriately of him. But I'm sure you're going to find out soon. And there we go… poor Tilly.

I LOVE THEM SO MUCH! Tilly is not going to be pleased.

Kellar is so adorably slow. Tobyn, my sweet summer child, you have no idea. It's the best thing that could happen to you. AHHHH I LOVE THEM.

Can they be earth mates, please? Please?

Seems like Tobyn and pack need a healer and Kellar is our guy. One with well-sized endowment.

I'm carefully following the banter in here, it is hugely entertaining, yet my 2 brain cells aren't really following along 😂

What an amazing setup! You can totally believe Kellar's journey… 3 years later and we're here with a solitary wolf caring for other living beings. And I think I like Tobyn too, so let's go!

Kellar has decided enough is enough, spurred on by the inevitable transformation into a wolf. I'm wondering if he is going to truly leave his old life of torment and pain behind, or if his "parents" and "brother" reappear later on. But I guess I'll have to read more if I want to find out, right? 🙂

My god, what a find. This is very entertaining. VERY. You seem to have a particular fondness for Greek 20-something males. Thanks for sharing that fondness with us. 👍 Τι θέα!

The comedic value of this is hard to overstate. Looking forward to more.

Hahaha. My god… This is so entertaining. It rings true with who I am as a person, and tickles all those fetishes I don't like having. I'm crying. This sentence is way too long and yet so utterly perfect. "natural, obnoxious and undeniably hot play of straight dudes" 😅 As someone who has a few working brain cells in order, I enjoy these observations hugely. Especially ones about myself when acknowledging my… baser instincts. My kind of vacation, buddy. Ahahaha. I can't. Stop. Stop. 👍 Yup. Your words are art. Write more, please! Man, I really enjoyed myself this morning. Thank you. 😂

Sometimes I take months to continue a story, and I am glad I am right now. Let's see where this goes further. Impeccable voice!

I think we may enjoy the same kind of video games for their story-telling aspects. Their worlds were so captivating to me! And I also did not enjoy the Dragon Age installments released afterwards. I would recommend Baldur's Gate 3 to you. It received a lot of praise, and rightly so. The storytelling is superb, but the meaningful choices in there are almost unbelievable in the context of a video game.

Oh, that is very kind of you! Haha. I enjoy the thorough and thoughtful commentary though. Your tongue-in-cheek comments are very much welcome. On the one hand, I cringe when I read this chapter one, but then again, it's also my first writing I'm showing anyone other than myself. This world has many things, but it does not contain vampires. Some characters may sparkle. Be advised. Again, you are so kind! The title might not be about the season at all. It is something I thought a very long time about, and the true meaning isn't revealed in any of the 75,049 words currently published. 😅 You're supposed to feel at home in the Pacific Northwest when reading this, if not, I failed at conveying it. There are reasons for the spelling of his name with an e instead of an a. You're the first one to point it out! In its very original form—like, then years ago maybe?—this was a third-person limited story, and I had limited narrator commentary on Grey which I thought was always very funny. That died when I switched to first person. But his voice got incredibly strong (for a first time writer). He calls it a big city because he grew up in the woods. For him anything more than 500 people is basically NYC. There'll be other people to comment on his first impressions of this place, haha. Having said that, I think the story takes you down a rabbit hole for roughly 16 chapters, trying to figure out how long you're willing to tag along. It goes places. Clara would have your head for misspelling her name. 😂 I appreciate that! I also have little time to read, which bugs me. Many things are on my backlog, but at least I have one can refer back to it whenever I find some time. Thank you! 🙏 I find Chapter 3 to be the first glimpse of what this story will turn into, and I particularly like my writing there. The sharing of this story was the most enlightening aspect for me. This was bleeding edge content when I first published it, and had I waited for the story to conclude, further editing would've changed this dramatically. But if I hadn't done it this way, I never would have ever put it up I think. The interactions with people here made me want to continue day after day, and it was my fuel to write. I'm a very good line and copy editor I would think; developmental editor not so much, and this story would have benefited hugely from such help. But the work is the direct result of its journey. It lay there in my documents, protected from prying eyes for almost a decade. And then one day almost exactly one year ago, I dusted it off, and posted the story. It only broke free because of GA and the people who were kind enough to be along for the ride. People seem to like my writing for the most part, so I'm really looking forward to jump into something new to see how much I improved as a writer. It truly is my first writing and rough in so many places. Also, I'm not a native speaker (German), so I need to cross-check many idioms, phrases, and expressions. It's tedious at times. Thank you again for the thoughtful commentary! 💜

A harrowing exploration of what it means to be human. To desire. To feel. To fail. To feel guilt. And to grapple with one's own complexity. Shame. And that's either progress, defeat, or both. Very good poetry.

You are not necessarily limited to just one character's POV though. You can … head hop to another one. This is extremely dangerous territory. But without a lot of finesse, it often comes off heavy-handed. If a story constantly swaps POVs, I will stop reading. All suggestions above are good though. I like limited writing POVs, makes it more interesting to deal with such things. Focus on what your main character can see, smell, taste, hear, touch. Have them question their senses, for the reader to really get into the POV's head. Did he see that expression? It was there, wasn't it? I'm sure it was, oh god, this man was so hard to read! Exhausting. He wished Luke would just come out with it and say what's on his mind. But oh no, we had to sit here and ponder.

I love how much people are focusing on the fact that my world has dragons! I admit, it's not the usual werewolf story (at all). So who knows?

I have to admit, I missed it all myself! But now everything is in place and I'm no longer chasing the next imaginary publishing date I hadn't worked on the story in October and November at all it seems, and a short break and fresh eye on it helped tremendously. And all hell appears to be about to break out? Maybe, sir! Maybe… The guys need to get a grip on their abilities, and fast. Being omnipotent is not enough if the stakes are this high.

I guess we’ll find out, won’t we? 💜

Thanks :3 🫶🏻 Dave is known for having the most out of place commentary at all times.

There will be more wolf things soon! Thank you. 💛

That "Temporary Hold" hurt a lot, so I am back to posting the remaining 50% of the story 🤓

The old oak trees swayed in the breeze, their leaves whispering ancient secrets as we approached the gathering of druids in our home. As we got closer, the scent of earth and moss filled my nose, mixed with the faint aroma of burning sage and incense. It was both comforting and otherworldly. “Alpha,” Casey said stiffly as we reached the circle of robed figures. He bowed his head to me, the gesture still very unfamiliar. “And, er, Alpha’s Consort.” He stumbled over the words and quickly duck

This seems like a most wonderful tip. I put it on my list. Films like this give me hope. Thanks.

Couldn't have said it better! 💙 Happy being with loved ones everyone. 🫂