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Bindi, Irma, Belle & Ari
Canuk commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Bindi, Irma, Belle & Ari
You have this thing about diesengaged (unengaged?) parents. Interesting. It does rely on having bright children. Or is that chicken/egg? Zeno seems to have it together. Jarek seems like your average 18-25 year old male that does not do anything about awful circumstances until he reaches breaking point. And the women are either bat shit crazy (nimffo, irma, and the ex) or loveable blousy flirts. What a wonderful world you have created!😆 Nb like the australianisms...😍😀 -
Interesting beginning....
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Brilliant! I find it quite was there people that try and sell me their religion. They are so vacuous; not an original thought and if you have done even the smallest amount of religious or philosophical study you can run rings around them. I usually feel quite sad for them; to have a human beings intellectual capacity but ignoring it all for a mystical "faith".
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A rather gory end, but i can imagine very satisfying. I do hope they keep some of the money. I understand issue around "blood money", but being practical...... Great story. Thanks.
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I mentioned above that certain people should be shot, let me add to that so far small group, people who know the end, hint at it but won't tell.....😆
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I am glad he has found a friend that is willing to accept him for what he is... I am sure there are more, but finding the first helps no end. I have read all four chapters and this has concerned me from the beginning; what parent would inflict on identical twins the names Kevin and Devin? some parents should be shot, really. while at least they weren't Fifi Trixibell, K/D-evin...argh! Thanks for the story; enjoying it!
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And in a vew years their translator will be in the cloud and run through wifi! This couple seem to have the balanced relationship that so many search for. The big c hanging over Tony could have made things difficult, but somehow they are taking it, at least externally, in their stride.
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Karma works so much better with a little planning😆 "Wait until i tell them about this in the staffroom"...that would certainly be reputation building!
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Winding Up - Winding Down
Canuk commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Winding Up - Winding Down
well that was a dramatic start to the chapter! talk about give no quarter! I am generally not one to condone taking justice into ones own hands, but confronted with that scenario.... even mild mannered, good natured me, would have gone a little wild... what happens to his appalling mother? I had worked out something nefarious was going on at the "hospital" but organ transplants...forcible ones at that, was not what I considered. Great read. Thanks. Dare I ask for more ? -
Performance, Stake-Out, Abduction
Canuk commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Performance, Stake-Out, Abduction
Bugger! Given I have become quite attached to these two, I'd be grateful if they could be rescued pronto, ideally without too much pain and or suffering? 😆 -
Yes, not so much "a bit too real", as "real". Amazing what happens when people communicate!
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Exactly! I think my "respond first thing in the a.m. pre coffee" doesn't exactly convey my meaning well. It also produces bloody awful typos.... My experience in Australia and Canada over the last 40 years would tell me that coming out like that would have resulted in me being accused of attention seeking! Obviously, as @centexhairysub says this is the polar opposite to the situation in Texas. I am astounded that your readership dropped off that much. Even while the story now has two focusses (foci?) It is still well told and well written. And while this is not the place for a discussion on US social policies, in comparison to the RotW, i am regularly amazed at how far behind the US is compared to other developed countries.
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Fee Approaches the Problem Rationally
Canuk commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Fee Approaches the Problem Rationally
At last a sane woman! Something no gay man can do without! And after the utter insanity of the last female characters, i was hoping that Fee would be slightly more with it! I feel that we are now heading towards the light... i ralise that you will not let us get away with out some black spots, black ice ( probably rare in qld!) and platonic shadows, but still at least we now feel there is a light...😆😍 -
While i understand as a story witer the sceen at the office was done for dramatic effect, i honestly could not work in a place where theentire scene was necessary. Individually yes there are arseholes out there, but collectively in non fundamentalist work places I cannot imagine this happening. All the work places i have had (three provinces, three states, two countries) nothing even vaguely like this has occured. Assuming that this is written with a hint of real life in Texas, and its not set in 1940... very sad.
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There must be a very precise circle of hell for mothers that abuse their children. She is truly evil and i dont care what drug habit she's trying to support, what leverage she is working under or any other reason, she is one hell of a nasty piece of work. You have created a veritable she-devil that karma is going to have one hell of a time rebalancing! Great writing to produce such passionate responses in your readers.
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Gregory, sorry Greg, literally has no idea how he comes across. I can imagine why he's like this, but his lack of self knowledge makes for a difficult "relationship"!
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Constantine & Guapo, Rex & Fee, Desolé & herself
Canuk commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Constantine & Guapo, Rex & Fee, Desolé & herself
Not sure what to say, we seem to be teetering on the edge of at least three precipaces! You have inventive way of keeping us intrigued😆 -
From the Frying Pan into the Honey Pot
Canuk commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in From the Frying Pan into the Honey Pot
This chapter is a revelation! Discovering fathers, spy cameras, who are the good guys and who are the bad! My faith is restored.... seb has a father and a lover. Sweetness and light, so what will you do to our heros now? Please do not be too rough..... I so love the metaphor of grabbing balls. .. i think there may be a lot of balls in vices before the end! -
Initially i used ascii codes. However my completely technologically illiterate but bi lingual partner showed me on samsung devices if you "hold" the letter down you get a range of acutes, cedillas, graves, circumflexes and all sorts of things that foreigners feel they need to enhance their language! As to being in your mind....i had a peak and left in a hurry....😨⚘
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Doesnt Farzdbuk just reek of trusworthy, sincere humanity? Somehow the Desolé/Farzdbuk axis seems pure evil. I do fear for Seb; while i am sure he'll get out alive, i just know you have designed some dramatic physical and emotional testing for him.....
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I did have this feeling that it was all too good to last. You are a master at writing such sensual characters/stories where the eroticism is not merely hinted at, but is pervasive. The down side is this "about to be expelled from paradise" hint of doom.... I look forward to future installments....😆
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Yes as mothers go, Desolé (my mans home, so accents appear!), is one of the more interesting in the range of maternal carers! I am still a little concerned about Sebastian's naivety. I hope he finds someone to look after him, as on his own he will get into trouble...
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Messrs. Noall & Achilles
Canuk commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Messrs. Noall & Achilles
An amazingly physical story. Raw naked masculinity without sex. There is also an honesty that almost disconcerting. While i am happy without clothes indoors or outside, its only with one other; my man. Public nudity just doesnt work for me. I suppose its because i never thought i had the body for it.... -
“You’d do in a rush,” LOL! great writing , enjoying this - tho' it's going to be a bumpy ride!
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so much! Desole (sorry, no accents! partner not home to give me the ascii codes!) is one hell of a mother....cameras, tapes? the new young person... Sebs seeming naivete. a large meal to be digested slowly..... Great start.
