Andrew Q Gordon

WOO HOO!!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY JOHN!!! 21 at last! Go have some fun - just make sure you post all the embarrassing pictures.

I have to give you this, you sure thing big in your story - you toss millions around like they was Benjamins. I'm not sure how to say this but you are certainly not shy about pushing the envelope are you? Not my favorite parts to be honest. But to each his own, I was able to skim those fairly easily. Be interested to see what happens, everything can be perfect forever.

Jim, This is a tough review to write, because on the one hand I like the story a lot but on the other there are somethings that could make it better. I think I will leave the latter comment for private IF you want them Just email me and I'll give them to you. One thing I can say, is this should have been 3 or 4 chapters SO much happened LOL. The two have very distinct characters - you can tell Adam is still 18 despite his maturity. He is the impulsive one, the one who wants to do now, worry later. Jim [Jim Carter?? Who Dat?? Sounds familiar. ] on the other hand is more measure though he doesn't let that stop him from showing affection. Like I said you can see they are not the same people and that is good since we expect to see them both a bit going forward

Bucking for King of Cliffs I see are you? The three word that best describe you right now are So Damn Cruel. That was one of the more enlightening chapters - despite the amazing high cliff you left us all on. It's not me? who's 'Me' How is Kynan, Karadur's grandson? Does that make him the Queens Father? or is he really not the Queens son like you led us to believe? Oh you wascally wabbit you. So **drums fingers on the kitchen table loudly** when can we expect Chapter 24???

George's problem is that he seems to love too many people. Everyone has a crush on him and he seems to have it back on more than a few. I was wondering when Calvert was going to make a new appearance, and here it is. Now what? Pete seems to be angling to keep George around for a bit, but how will Calvert react? I mean let's face it, George has Frederick and Calvert as his 'Loves' though Calver likely has a new one or two back in London. And he and Calvert see each other so litte, However, my dirty might was thinking - fatal four way when they saw each other. Is that the next step to make up for me giving you 2 thumbs down for a three way in the last book??

Interesting little twist. Make sure you make them good daddies, as I'll be watching to see what it is me and my 'mate' need to do

Sadly it is that 2% you speak of that is the difference between good and great, I will work on finding my 2% - I think I understood what you said and I thank you for that. As for Trevor - it was a toss up - It could be a complicating factor later on, it could be of no matter - but in the there and then, it was something Nick wanted and whether it helps or hurts, it was kinda what I 'felt' at the time. Maybe that makes me a ho cause a part of me feels that is what i would have done given the chance. also when the 'full' story is written, it doesn't necessary have to use this one as a prologue, I feel free to change things a long the way as this is not going to be part of it or maybe won't be. IDK. -- Thanks for the critique - I WILL keep what you said in mind as write the rest. -- Andy

This was so not what I expected when I started. It wasn't better or worse, just different. I really expected this to be so much more about John's failures and the like but most of it focused on his relationship with Wylie, the good times. I'm not sure how to explain this, but even though this was really Wylie and John's story, it felt so much more about Gordy and John. Yeah Gordy was in it for 1 chapter, and talked about in 3 or 4 total, but at the end, I felt an enormous disconnect with Wylie. I mean for the first few dozen chapters, I was loving him, he was sweet and wonderful and he was so fresh in his outlook and way of seeing things. Then the couple chapters where he goes off to be a husband and it's like I lost him. He was still a good decent man, but he seemed fake because he wasn't being true to himself. As I said, despite the title, it wasn't really about Gordy or even John and Gordy, but yet that is who left me with the strongest emotions. It's really quite amazing the effect your writing had on me. I don't feel that much. I think the writing needs a bit of polish but the story was so spot on. Really, this was a brilliant story. I'm a big fan Andy

I said this last chapter so I'll repeat it again I think this chapter could have 2 or 3. But that didn't detract from the story. Okay this was just so raw, I felt the pain of Gordy's death even though we barely knew him. It was a bit muddled how long they knew each other, dated etc before he went off to the Marines or even how long he was a marine. That might have helped, but it didn't hurt. It's weird how much I cared about Gordy and he was only in the story for such a short time and we knew so little about him. "Seeing" the casket seen was SO sad. I have to say although I knew from the flashback Gordy was dead, I didn't understand until this chapter what happened. What I mean is I thought it was something he did. Something his failed relationship with Wylie wouldn't let him over come and he hurt Gordy which in turn pushed him away. Turns out he didn't do anything, Gordy still loved him and he didn't run away from John nor did John push him away. That made it so much worse. John never got his real wish, to live his life with Gordy. Funny, I don't feel glad for Wylie. In fact I feel like he got what he didn't deserve because Gordy died. That made it even sadder still. I hate sad endings and despite them being together, I still felt an enormous wave or sad when this was over - that is not a criticism, it's actually quite brilliant. Thanks for reposting, I really enjoyed it. Andy

First a tiny complaint - you should have broke that up into 3 or possibly 4 chapters. That was 4 times as long as your normal ones just a thought. Okay so normally I am NOT a fan of the flash back - and though I liked it here - very much so - It left me with the feeling of when is the shoe gonna drop, what is he going to do to Gordy that drives him off? That said, this was a brilliant example of when flashback works SO well. God this chapter was gripping BECAUSE of the flash back. You did a really good making me care about John and Gordy - I could feel his personality even as it gripped John. It just kinda hurt knowing what was coming - which is why I said it was so well done.

Zannen - Your introduction was spot on - hello is all it takes nur_jahan - All 'great' authors started somewhere - perhaps you're next??? A_Akira - Reading for a year is good, Posting is also good, don't wait too long, just take the plunge and post Welcome and enjoy.

Thanks Michael, Glad you enjoyed it. As for 'pushed,' I just needed a bit of motivation to do what I wanted to do anyway but was being lazy.

Too bad, I'll be in Vancouver the last week in July, bad timing I guess. Have fun.

Well that really was unexpected. I wasn't sure Wylie would marry Mary Anne, or that things would go the way they did, but I suppose I should have - what threw me I guess is that Wylie is working for John at the start so I assumed they were close - proximity and friends wise - the whole time. The Linda thing is interesting - no wonder dad is worried, GOLD DIGGER. Two thoughts - 1) Wylie is about the worst person to talk him out of it. For him there is and will always be his love for John. He has a wife, a son and if he had a side thing with John, his life would be perfect. For him at least. 2) Dad knows about him and Wylie and had he said something here and now, it would might have saved everyone a bit of heartache I can see a-comin. Okay, off to work and read on the train the last three chapters. I second Saintsfan - great story.

That chapter started out so nice and so happy and then it ends and totally explains what happened to John. I'd don't know how much I believe Wylie didn't know what he was doing - not what or how you wrote, just wondering if down the road we find out he really wasn't mistaking John for Mary Anne and was using John to work out his frustration but didn't care at the moment. That all the 'no talking sex' the 'wow was I drunk' act needed to have sex finally sent him over the edge and he was going to do it how he wanted and didn't have the sense to worry about how John felt under his 'assault' One wonders what they would have been like had there been no Mary Anne, no pregnancy etc. For an internalizing person like John, this will/was traumatic for sure. Now if only we see where Gordy fits in to all this, it is after all 'his' story right ?? [JK, I just had to toss that in ]

Big John and John Jr. certainly don't have any shortage of love do they? It is SO hard to see the current John with the John in the flash back. Whatever happens to John/Wylie must be huge to cause that change. Yeah their still friends, but something this show of affection is so opposite the John of the first chapter. Beyond that musing, this was a nice chapter. The mood and interaction felt real and you could feel the emotions from both.

Thanks Renee, funny this is I never set out to throw people, it wasn't meant to be a huge mysterious plot, but I guess in trying to let people know the boys - yeah, I all alex and his 3500 year old self a boy for now - I sorta had the story go for a bit that sorta made folks forget what I was doing. Alex and Nick together are an omen - which I sorta hinted at toward the end. So let's see when I find the time to do the longer one -- Thanks -- Andy

My sense is - but what do I know right - that Trevor and Nick are not going to be strangers - though I suspect it might be hard on both of them to be around each other. But then again, one doesn't know Alex's views on monogamy -- no promises on when, but I do intend to write the longer story some day. Thanks for reading adn for the review. --Andy

Thanks Sam, glad you enjoyed it.

Meh - it was alright I guess - Actually just kidding - I thought that was much better than It Was a Holy Day and I liked that quite a lot. Err I thought Puck was dead at the end of Holy Day - needs to go back and read it - no is sure of it, cause the King was sending Rix to the Monastery because no one could survive his bound being killed, and yet Rix didn't seem affected sooooo maybe Puck isn't so dead after all. Hehe. You twicky wittle wabbit you. I do like Kis and Tal - now image if Puck is alive, he'll be bound to Prince Rix dag the hanover boys are just sexing their way up the Galactic social order aren't they? Yes they must be sexy devils like you said

Thanks CF - yeah there are a few things left to work out. Alex has found his 'one' there was a twist I originally wanted to add to the story, but left out - according to the mythos - Uriel was a prophet of sorts - Alex/Uriel has the ability to see probable futures - that will be fleshed out - so yeah, he will worry a bit about Nick. -- the other Angels - no they are no more gay than humans, Michael Raphael and Gabriel will each have children, many children but speficially for the story Michael and Raphael's daughters and Gabriels son, will play a major roll. At least that is the thought for now. SO much can and will change. Thanks for the lengthy review - much appreciated. -- Andy

I did say that I wished I could write like you. Shifting from 'long' story to 'short' story isn't always easy for me - hence the epic nature of this 'short' story. The 'longer' story will answer some of the questions raised here, but it will raise far far more. How well I answer any of them will determine who well received it is Thank you for the review and for reading --

No fair, one review to a customer LOL. And are you telling me there has to be a reason WHY for sex? Never known someone you thought if I could just sleep with them once? Because even though you knew it wouldn't work out, you so wanted to get naked and go wild with them? Never had a Walk on The Wild Side and done something just because you wanted to? Sigh, I failed.

Thanks Lugh, I think - lol I don't understand your comment about Trevor, had to let him down like he did at the end? I don't think the part about Nick and Alex being soul mates could be clearer without being repetitive, and beyond Nick and Trevor not being together, which Trevor acknowledged couldn't happen because Alex was Nick's soul mate, I don't know what he did to let Trevor down. Sorry, not trying to be defensive, but I didn't get the comment.

One of the problems with head hoping - and I preach this all the time so I am going to end up the most hated man on GA at this rate - is that you give away too much. Image the suspense and tension you'd give us if you only gave us one side of the equation. Does he or doesn't he like Wylie/John the way Wylie/John like him? But by head hoping - from Wylie to John and back and forth, we know too much. It doesn't hurt the over all story but imagine if we didn't know what Wylie planned? or how much John cared. Just a thought for future works. That said, you do a really good job of letting us know 'your boys' to me the best parts of a novel are not so much the action but how much we are let into their lives. for that you get an "A"