Andrew Q Gordon

Thanks for the catch, I will go fix that, and no that is not being a bitch, that would be a sucky way to end things. Thanks for reading - glad you enjoyed it.

Wrapping a towel around his waist, Jason was still edgy. The grueling run he and Darryl just finished helped, but it hadn't burned off his excess energy. Given how winded they both were, and the fact Darryl let him shower first without an argument, he knew they'd really pushed themselves. Otherwise the run was a blur. Knowing Darryl was waiting, he didn't linger under the spray like he would have preferred. Just washed, rinsed and dried. Looking at his face, he noticed something he'd ra

48 isn't the end - 49 is Ethan and Jason are an interesting pair. I can't say they wouldn't be able to make a go of it, but I also wouldn't say they are perfect for each other. Peter never stopped loving Jason, he just lost his way. Next chapter will let us know if they made it or not. And with that, I will end the response and go post the last chapter. Andy

47 was part of the end I wrote a while ago. I revised it a bit, but this was the beginning of the ending I had always seen for the story. Sorry you found it heartbreaking, but that was how I felt this part of the story needed to trend. Thanks for letting me know - and for your comments. I worried what I was trying to convey - Peter's attempts to control - would be missed but you got my point exactly. So at least I got that right Andy

Okay, I guess I am the rotten bastard who is going to say bad things. Sorry, but did you want me to lie? First, I was rather confused by all the names and titles and everything you crammed in. It was very hard to follow at first - sorry, but to this day I have no idea who the other queen and the kid Tozet killed were, where they were from etc. My opinion - which is worth squat is this was too short [Yeah imagine that from you.] Apart from that I found it rather compelling - once I decided I didn't really care about who everyone was. It was really well done in how you make us care about your main characters. I agree with Dark you are a bastard for leaving us like that. No you aren't required to wrap up all loose ends but then My Mystic Knight ended with so much unfinished and that isn't being worked on now is it? So yes you are a bastard I also agree with Cia, you do have a ton of tension in this story - there were times I had to put it down and come back after I calmed a bit - not days but a bit of time in between. So that was pretty great in itself. Not giving you a grade or a rating, not my thing but how's this?

You would not be alone, but life is sometimes sad, how many of us went through life without a heartbreak or two? Not saying that will or will not happen, but it is how things are

There is no good way to answer this review. LOL No matter what I say it would possibly give away the ending, so I won't But thanks for reading. The end will be in a few days. Promise.

Thanks Steve, however, I hope - stress hope - I have written this that I could end it either way - they agree to split up or they agree to stick with each other - so don't give up the ship - isn't that the USNA Slogan? I think I saw that when I was visiting Annapolis last weekend Just a couple more days til the last chapter is up. Thanks for reading and for taking the time to comment. Andy

For me, I like getting to know and feel characters - authors who engage in character building while getting their plot across always have my attention. Sex is okay if done well, but once I really get a feel for the character, I think I prefer the - they went into the room and got very little sleep kinda thing so I get to image who did what to whom. Plot is also important. Having the two lead characters get up, get showered get dressed, go out, come home, eat, have sex, go to sleep repeatedly is boring. There has to be something of substance to grab me - Stuart's Seeing Double has the back drop of an intergalactic war with super powered beings, Nephy's hostage had the paranormal skills of the ruling houses - (In)visible has the whole invisible boy, who longs to be normal, Adamagick has a war between Wizards and Technology - so there are strong plots that give the author a vehicle to develop their characters. Thanks about it. Sequels are not preferred, companions stories are good, so are series - the difference between series and sequel being the sequel follows a story that resolved all plot lines, but series is a stand alone book that has many parts before the conflict is resolved. Andy

I think you are spot on, especially for someone as 'proud' as Peter. Yeah, I don't think Ethan and Jason are good for each other, see the response I made to Skon's review below. As for the outcome, I've been good about NOT revealing it so far, but I hope that I've written this so that either outcome is possible now. Just a few more days and i'll find out if readers are mad.

I am not sure Ethan and Jason have what it takes to be boy friends, sure there is a ton of sexual tension, but Ethan and Peter are so different. Jason thrived under the discipline Peter has in his life, it helped him grow up. Ethan is less mature - he is the classic kid brother - like Dean - always has someone there to pick up the pieces and to shoulder the responsibility that he can be immature and carefree. I am not sure if Jason would do well with him, or if Ethan would do well with Jason being the big brother type. But that is just my take. Glad you liked it, and yeah it is a bit sad to retire this and these characters. Soon to see the final chapter - later this week. Andy

Yup, never saw that coming - nope. Very nice twist to keep it like that. The the parties Paul had only when Eric was 'away', the reason his room was still neat, the reason Jordy couldn't reach Eric. Very nice

That story actually hurts to read - My God you captured the depth of pain Love can cause. You also are spot on where you say sometimes people settle, compromise and call it whatever because it isn't that same rush of emotional that first love is. About the only word I can use is WOW. Thanks for sharing, I mean wow. Andy

That sound SO familiar. We do this all the time - Jerry sounds easy - is he cute. Some how I expected the 'challenge' would last longer - on and Chris is a bit of a putz - did he REALLY have to say - I was making what you asked anyway? Thanks

Haha, I'll warn D to be on the look out . As for Graydon winning next year - hmm maybe I . . . Nah, never mind.

WCD, sorry to hear you are sick and glad I could help make you feel a tiny bit better. No this chapter was no PG, sorry, but it felt like this was the time to add this element to the story. It added something more than just gratuitous sex. One more to go Hope everyone likes how I end it.

That sounds like the struggle I had when writing the ending. Hence I wrote in a possible replacement IF things don't work out.

Monty, ask me those questions after the last chapter, if I haven't explained them well enough yet. I will be happy to explain what was going on, though I hope I do it well enough in 49 that there are no questions Andy

What Dark said?? ??

Jason, Peter's family, others have tried, but as you noted, he is shutting down inside and losing who he was/is. Everyone can see his needs, except him. That is usually how it is unfortunately. Jason's desperate attempt to shake him may not work, but then again, nothing else has so far either.

Ethan's the one outside observer who can not only tell Jason what he needs to hear but also have some authority behind it. Ethan - more than D or Wendy is the best suited for Jason to confide in, because he has lived what Jason is dealing with. Peter's lie wasn't smart in the least. Trust is the most important thing in a relationship, and once lost it is hard to recover.

Another manifestation of Peter's need for control. Jason's placating Peter isn't helping, but he doesn't realize it yet. He still hopes if he just gives Peter time, things will go back to normal. He might be right, but if he isn't he is in for heart ache.

Nephy, you power reviewed me today LOL. I am about half way through your post. Peter's issue with money is a symptom not the problem. This just puts the exclamation point on it before the real problem rears its ugly head. You faith might be tested as Jason is already having his doubts by now.

In some small part this was a chapter to show that which made Jason, Jason. For all her faults, Barbara did a pretty good job raising a good kid. He loves his family, and the cousins all love him. Unlike the others, he has time for KJ who, while in that in between place, between the older cousins and the younger ones, still isn't shoved aside by Jason. Of course, every family has it's resident Prick, Uncle Ray to the front please?? Since I wrote the summer chapters, I've had a vision of the Henry Mansion, that was itching to come out. Thank Benji for making me do more with the grandparents, else these chapters might not get written.

HMM typo? really? I thought that was the expression LOL. Guess I was wrong. The goal here was to begin to show the cracks in Peter's psyche. Show that although he thinks he is fine, he is not. Christmas with the family is important to Jason because he is close to most of his family, including his younger cousins.