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Chapter 7: Secrets Lies And Alibis
Lisa commented on x Trevor x's story chapter in Chapter 7: Secrets Lies And Alibis
Wow, so I am totally confused now. I re-read the prologue so I could re-familiarize myself with Jaemin. When you brought him up again after so long it was kind of random. I thought Miracle loved Sterling. And what's going on with human trafficking? What does that have to do with Jaemin? And where has Jaemin been this whole time and who is he exactly? And was it Hunter who killed Brad? Oi, so many questions! Great job, Trevor! -
Don't do it, Miracle! You're already messed up, this will mess you up more. Brian is such a dick. And wth was that with Kyler in the janitor's closet? I thought Miracle knew Sterling loved him, why is he constantly looking for love where he will never find it? Oh, I wanted to point out two things I noticed in this chapter and some previous chapters. In this chapter you wrote 'principle' when it should be 'principal'. The other 'principle' means something completely different. And...you've written the word 'would' a few times and it should not have been in the sentences. For example, in this chapter you wrote, 'Sterling would kneel down...' You've just changed that part of the story to the future. Forget the word 'would'. Just say, 'Sterling knelt down ...' See what I mean? Do you understand the principle of it? Sorry, couldn't resist! I just noticed you posted a new chapter! So onwards I go...
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Ok, I'm ready to release that disc of Brad and Miracle. The only bad thing is, that Miracle is in it. lol What a shit Brad is! I can't believe the line of crap he fed Miracle and then he turned around and he and his buddies beat him up and what else? Thank God Miracle has Sterling. He should neve let him go. Ok, on to the next installment.
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Trevor - I am so glad you didn't abandon this story! I reread up to chapter five and tried to review after chapter four, but I see I already did that back in 2011. lol So I'm reviewing chapter four again, here. Now I know why Miracle has such a problem with being loved. He feels that his birth parents didn't love him enough to keep him (at least his mom, b/c she physically had him when his father left), why should anyone else love him? His problem is, he's equating love with sex. You have sex with someone and therefore that person must love you. Of course we know that's ridiculous thinking and it just sets you up for disappointment. I think he has sex more for the connection than anything. (besides love) He needs to feel connected to someone physically, at least for a little while. I think I've cried ever chapter so far and I'm sure I'll continue to cry. I just want to hug Miracle and give him the love he so desperately craves. Ok, on to chapte five.
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Wow, Dmitri can't keep it in his pants, can he? lol He even TELLS Gunni he's gonna get with Siggi or whoever b/c he can't live w/o fucking. What an awesome boyfriend, right? hahah He just cracks me up though. He has no shame, whatsoever. =) He just asked Gunni, sweet and innocent Gunni, to be his boyfriend, while at the same exact time, he's thinking about where his next fuck will come from. Or who his next fuck will be. lol Too funny.
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Funny how Zu didn't consider meeting Zander a date, but Zander sure did. lol I like the way Zander sort of makes Zupan all flustered and out of his element. Great job, Sasha!
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Definitely worth the wait, Renee. Jake's, "He bought the wrong bubbles, Daddy." (don't quote me on the exact wording, lol), was precious. He is just so cute. Wanting to come home just to take a bath with the right bubbles, too cute. And Paul's bubbles were the right bubbles last week. haha Typical little kid. Brad does have to get over the whole teacher thing with Tony. Soon enough he won't be Jake's teacher, but in the meantime it would be nice if they can get to know each other better. Of course you left it off while they were trying to get to know each other better. lol
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This is gonna be terrific! I loved X/Zander and Billy from Bay's story and now we get to see the whole crowd again! I can't wait to find out what happened that would have X/Zander kissing Zu! lol
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I agree w/Quiet man - this wonderful story was too short. Fantastic story, Sui. I can't say enough wonderful things about it. I could just read about Liron and Milo forever and be happy. Maybe they'll be a sequel in their future? (hint, hint)
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Well, I finally was able to finish the second chapter. lol I ditto what Cannd said: I think Liron is afraid of his feelings for Milo and he's using Tara as an excuse and looking for a job as an excuse to stay and not confront his feelings. I'm sure Tara would be happy for him if he decided to go. Sure, she might think it's a bit impulsive and not really thought out, but if it's just for a few months, what's the big deal? As for looking for a job, who cares? He can look in September. What's his rush? He has this job anyway, right? He's just looking for excuses why he has to stay. He's afraid to commit and at the same time afraid of his feelings for Milo b/c they are so strong. I also think Kardis and Rob were really sweet to Liron. They were hoping he'd say yes. I can't imagine how upset Milo will be and he might take that out on his bandmates, and as Cannd pointed out, it very well might affect his performances. Ok, on to chapter four.
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This is such a fantastic story for a groupie like me. There was this band when I was in college, the lead singer was my Geology teacher. lol He was only twenty-four, it was his first teaching job, but for fun he had a band. They even put out a couple of albums and toured all over the Boston area. One of my friends, who was ALMOST as big of a groupie as I was, came with me to practically every single concert. By then end of my senior year, Jamie, the lead singer (they all knew Jeannie and I by that point. lol), called me up on stage and thanked me for being his number one fan, as he told the audience I would be going back to Jersey and wouldn't see them perform anymore. Let me tell you, that was a thrill that I have never forgotten. I can almost imagine how excited Liron was to have Milo all over him. This doesn't seem like it's a case of finding a boy to hang with for the four days he's in the town. It seems like Milo is really falling for Liron and wants to spend every moment with him. I think it's terrific. I know he's leaving the next day, but if it's meant to be, then they will figure out a way to make it work. Ok, on to chapter three!
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Liron, you idiot! lol I love this new story of yours Sui! Ok, on to chapter two...
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The Smell of Hay and Horse
Lisa commented on Sasha Distan's story chapter in The Smell of Hay and Horse
Love the new nickname: Rhyder! And so appropriate. lol I think he's so cute, crushing on Sam like that. I know he'd be mortified if he realized that Sam knew. lol I can see that as something Caleb would tease Sam about. -
Chapter 23 - Epilogue
Lisa commented on meanderingsNmusings's story chapter in Chapter 23 - Epilogue
I'm thinking, "Who the f is Clinton? I thought I missed a chapter! Then my brain kicked in and I remembered! What a terrific story, meanderings! I loved the ending! I'm thrilled everything worked out and Kent still got his degree from Stanford and the whole long distance thing worked. Great job! I'm looking forward to reading more from you. -
Still disappointed with Dillon. Poor Andy. He'll be devastated if he finds out what Dillon was about to do to Matt. And Matt, feeling guilty b/c he thinks he's betraying Andy for liking what Dllon's doing, even though he doesn't really want it. Dillon's the one who's betraying Andy.
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Crushed Dreams and Broken Hearts
Lisa commented on sacredlove's story chapter in Crushed Dreams and Broken Hearts
Heya Sacred! Ok, so I'm almost two months late in reviewing this and for that I'm sorry. But....what an emotion-packed chapter! Omg, I totally feel for Kev. His anger and disappointment is definitely justified. Zune did a bad thing...on one hand, but on the other hand, I feel badly for Zune b/c he does know that he loves Kev and the tryst with Edward shouldn't have happened, but sometimes shit happens and sometimes that shit makes you realize just how much you love someone. I find Kev's friends rallying around him honorable, but then I'm sad for Zune b/c now he has no friends. Especially Carol. I must say though, I really do like Edward's nice personality. lol He's being really nice to Zune and he does like him so you know, I'm sorta up in the air about who's better for Zune. Since Ed and Kev are now fighting in the cafeteria (that must be one llloooonnngggg fight, considering it started at the beginning of May! lol), we know that Kev is not out of the picture. I'm looking forward to the next installment, Sacred! Oh, and thank you for the thank you at the end of the chapter - it's so cute! -
Hi KC! Hope you're feeling better! Asher was so cute when he found out worker's comp would pick up all his bills. It's been awhile since I worked in HR, but I don't remember worker's comp covering being shot at work. LOL But glad that it is, for Asher's sake. But either way, wouldn't his insurance have picked up most of it? It's good that Asher is so insistent that they wait to get physical. But Michael is such as tease, I gotta say. Oh, when he was giving Asher a bath, he made sure he didn't wash the stitches. But were those stitches allowed to get wet? I thought all stitches weren't allowed to get wet. As usual KC, you always leave me wanting more.
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That Carter is such a slime. It's kinda depressing when you pine for someone for so long, only to find out they're utter shit. lol Glad Jon didn't do anything with him. Terrific ending meanderings! Had me in tears. lol See, Jon doesn't need to have a long monologue on his reasons for loving Kent, what he said was just perfect and honest and to the point. Oh, I did have a comment on the part where Trevor brings Pat to Portland to see Jon. One minute they're all in Jon's apartment and the next minute he's hugging Cara in the hall. I thought it was in the hall outside of his apartment. Then there was Kent sleeping in his bed and I was like WTF just happened? I think you could have transitioned from Jon's apartment to Lydia and Pat's house a bit better by having a line going across the screen to separate the different parts of the chapter, to like letters, for example: ooooooooo and then skip a line or two. Do you know what I mean? You start with Jon at Kent's folks' house after the separating line. I think it'll read better too, imo. If you don't want to have the line or the letters, you can just hit enter three or four times so the reader knows it's a different point in time in the chapter. Anyway...can't wait for the epilogue and I look forward to reading more from you, meanderings!
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I am sure Kent was none to pleased when he saw Carter dragging Jon to Jon's place. Carter did speak with Kent, right? I think I remember Kent saying something like that to Jon. Ok, on to the next chapter - I can't wait to find out what else happened. lol
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The Boy with the Lavender Eyes
Lisa commented on Thorn Wilde's story chapter in The Boy with the Lavender Eyes
I loved it from the first sentence. Mark was so confident, and cocky at that party. I can't believe he really crashed it. lol He acted so different when Ben came over. Must have felt intimidated by him. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, Thorn! Hope you're having a good vacation! -
Chapter 20 – Loose ends
Lisa commented on meanderingsNmusings's story chapter in Chapter 20 – Loose ends
I was cringing when Jon was telling Kent why he loves him. I knew that's not what Kent was looking for. Kent's monologue on why he loves Jon was beautiful though. So..the train guy is named Carter, AND HE WAS IN THE GAY BAR!! lol It didn't hit me until I started reading this chapter. I cannot wait to hear what happened at the bar and how Jon happened to get Carter's digits in his phone. Jon needs to do a lot of thinking. I bet Trevor can help him. I bet he has some good advice up his sleeve. Now I'm all caught up and I need more!!!!! lol -
Chapter 19 – The Hole
Lisa commented on meanderingsNmusings's story chapter in Chapter 19 – The Hole
I agree with all your other reviewers; if Jon fucks this up with Kent, I will never forgive him. LEAVE THE TRAIN GUY ALONE!!!!! lol Oh wait! I have the next chapter to read! lol -
Chapter 18 – 'The' Thanksgiving
Lisa commented on meanderingsNmusings's story chapter in Chapter 18 – 'The' Thanksgiving
I wanted to shoot Jon's "mother", I can't imagine how he felt. What a BITCH. Omg, why would she want to embarrass her son like that? What could she possibly gain from that except his hate and his b/f's family's embarrassment? Is she that angry and lonely that she would sabotage her own relationship with her son, which was already on thin ice? No wonder he doesn't want to see her. Kent's parents were very sweet and understanding. If I were Jon, I wouldn't have left with the mother; I would have sent her in a taxi on her way. I wouldn't leave Kent and his family, no matter how embarrassed I was. Ok, on to the next chapter. -
Chapter 17 - It kicks in
Lisa commented on meanderingsNmusings's story chapter in Chapter 17 - It kicks in
Trevor's so cute. And Jon is such a good friend. His advice in the elevator was terrific. You know, I never thought about what guys go through when they think they found 'the one' and they want to ask her to marry them. I can definitely feel Trevor's anxiety. I'm sure Cara will say yes. Ok, on to the next chapter I seemed to have missed. lol -
Boy, that was really scary! When they climbed the tree I'm thinking, "What, are you boys crazy??" lol But I guess Xavier knew best. He was smart to get the bear away from the tree. But at least it did give them the opportunity to talk more and wow, what a talk! Hmmm, does Axel feel the same way about X? Can't wait to find out on his b-day. lol Great chapter Joe! Oh, did they really use the slang term 'coz' back in '41? Just curious...
