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Tell me, please, this isn't going to be another Acedias/A New Life.....lol.
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A truly triumphant ending....conquered by love.
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Chapter 8 Playing to Win
charlieocho commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 8 Playing to Win
I am completely in awe of how you are writing this story. In spite of the violence on the ice, the unsavory characters of Lanny and Candy, and the dilemma the two men face in coming to terms with their feelings for each other, you manage to imbue this story with a wonderful sense of gentle delicacy. It is unlike anything else I have read, and I am finding it very comforting and quite addictive. Thank you. -
Chapter 5 Ace in the Hole
charlieocho commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 5 Ace in the Hole
Up until this point I have resisted the temptation to review this fine story. From my perspective, the other reviewers were covering all the bases, and I never felt like I had anything extra to add. Although I still feel pretty much that way, I find myself enjoying this story so much that I simply have to add my two cents worth, also. I am amazed at how deftly you are weaving this together. You portray such powerful, intense emotions so gently, but so thoroughly. A fine job of writing. Completely enthralling. Thanks. -
We Take Care of Our Own
charlieocho commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in We Take Care of Our Own
The playful banter between practically everybody stands in such contrast to the venom spewed by the egg donor and her consort. Definitely creates a comfort zone. Another enjoyable chapter, thanks. PS: I never had any luck with steel cut oats until I stumbled on a recipe using a slow cooker, and cooking it on low, overnight. Deelish! -
Chapter 2 Know when to fold 'em
charlieocho commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 2 Know when to fold 'em
The level of emotion in this story, so far, is exhausting. In spite of that, I have been drawn right in and am anxiously (!) waiting for more. Good job. -
This sucks.
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Oh good....another little gem. I feel a strong, steady beat, here, the way the story is unfolding. A comfortable pulse of action and detail. Please, sir, I want some more.
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The Gayest Man in the Whole World
charlieocho commented on Cole Matthews's story chapter in The Gayest Man in the Whole World
Incredible....I kind of feel a little bad at how fast I rushed through this story. I just got so hooked by it. I understand all the time that went into creating it....it is almost disrespectful to gorge on it so quickly. But it is so fine. I am truly amazed at what a great job you did, creating all these different threads and then pulling them together, so well, at the end. Bravo. Am trying hard to be forgiving to Peterson....the jury is till out on that, however. -
And I thought this story was winding down! More excitement. Wes and Angus are a great couple. The circuit party did not sound like fun. I love loud music and light shows but I need my personal space most of the time. Hope Wes recovers quickly.
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Gotta love it when it suddenly feels much hotter.... A big sigh of relief at Angus and Wes getting together....ahhhh! And I would just like to echo Carlos's remark...you've managed to turn a fluffy little piece into a very engaging, enthralling tale!
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And I have been feeling sorry for poor Peterson...hah, no more....the rat bastard. Wes deserves much better treatment. Make it happen, Cole! Great group dynamics. Sounds like another fun party, with the exception of Peterson, of course. Fine writing.
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You have definitely outdone yourself with this chapter. Major ups and downs... on tenterhooks at every turn....but you pulled it all off brilliantly! I mean really...whodathunk a little pussy would bring two gay guys together? :worship:
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My "spidey sense" (thanks RR) hinted that the letter was from Silas.....and the plot thickens. Was laughing out loud, again....."I blame myself for giving you that Dorothy Parker biography when you were in high school all those years ago." and all the other zingers. Too funny.
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Wow....you made that family (and Roy) scene so inviting, I wanted to come right over! So laid back and comfortable, didn't want it to end. Am enjoying the direction this seems to be heading in.
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Got my days mixed up and wasn't expecting to see this 'til tomorrow--a nice surprise. The speeded up pace of the trip from Key West back to Dallas made for good atmosphere. Having Barry's sons appear was an unexpected twist.......could be a major complication, sure hope not. It will be hard enough to keep Barry protected without adding in two more vulnerable individuals. And then, to top things off.....the boys' bet! Trey's astuteness got him twenty bucks. More, more, more (how I like it).
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Joe's Birthday Surprise--and the "Football" is in Play
charlieocho commented on Robert Rex's story chapter in Joe's Birthday Surprise--and the "Football" is in Play
Just what the doctor ordered.......am not going to read any more, just yet. Gonna let this settle and perc a bit.....am really liking how this is pulling together, close to the end. A fine job. (Now, if only the industrial Velcro would arrive in my mailbox........). -
How "Joe the Welder' Got His Name
charlieocho commented on Robert Rex's story chapter in How "Joe the Welder' Got His Name
What a great "feel-good" chapter. Simply superb!! -
Just like Kendra says...."Married, huh? Figures."!!
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Some Assembly Required
charlieocho commented on Cole Matthews's story chapter in Some Assembly Required
Kendra's repartee had me in stitches...laughing out loud every other sentence. In spite of the serious themes this story addresses, your many humorous touches give it a very rich texture. Bravo. And then the development at the end with Peterson......oh boy! -
Just like Carlos and Bryce, "Sofonda Dix" cracked me right up. I will save that for future use, somehow. This chapter made me realize I have never seen a drag show.....will have to fix that this summer...P'Town isn't too far!! I'm trying not to read too much of this at once, but, I am quite hooked. Thanks.
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"Rat bastard...?" hahaha, I haven't heard that in years. So descriptive! I want to reinforce Bryce Lee's comment about enjoying your use of dialogue. It always flows smoothly and definitely is a major component to the overall storytelling. Am enjoying this tremendously.
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You portray the kitchen scene between Kendra and Roy so well The image of potential dates lined up in church cracked me up. I am glad I picked this back up and am starting anew. You got me hooked!
