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charlie and Jeff you guys are thinking along the same lines I am. I also wonder if there is a connection, and i can't wait to see what happens next. i'm completely addicted to this story

I'm enjoying learning all about Q's history. so has it even hit Jacob that he was talking to a god (at the library that is lol wow) Q reminds me of Hercules in the way of the god coming down to sleep with the ail'ee of course thats where the similarity ends but i really find this all intriguing. and how crazy that when nyavek and skai were no longer fighting over the female god she got jealous ? and what a way to build suspense great cliffhanger i adore this story

I think this chapter worked just perfectly Loahisi is right, you have made us fall for Kaleb and we love Chase as well. I've always admired your writing and i love getting to read this as you create it I like how Chase sticks to his convictions and he knows how he feels about Kaleb. I love Kaleb's devotion to Chase too. it was so sweet him wanting to help when he could obviously tell that Chase was sad. can't wait to see what he does about that. lovely chapter chica as always

I am in awe of your imagination.

Happy Birthday Conner. Hope it's a great one enjoy

i loved everything about this chapter. I feel that here we start to get to the crux of what the story is truly about and i just know it only gets better from here. oh and i love Q

I agree that dialogue is the one place where grammar depends on the character and how the character speaks. to me dialogue has to sound natural and spontaneous, and at the same time it needs to make sense to convey what you are trying to convey. For example most people use contractions they say I can't or I don't instead of I cannot and I do not. But if your character is known for being proper and correct then there will be no contractions in their speech. Then there are the characters described as being california surfer types who use the word "dude" and "like" to a nauseating degree lol but it's them they stand out that way. To me dialogue is used to move the story along, but its also there to help us better understand the characters we're reading about. i know i try to be conscious of how each of my characters will say something depending on who they are. a doctor's speech is likely to be refined and schooled and will likely differ greatly from say a street merchant who could use a lot of slang. It also differs depending on whom the person is talking to. The way one may talk around their friends may not necessarily be the way they speak around their parents or their bosses or strangers. There is so much to think about when doing dialogue i could discuss it all day. So i will stop now

i still can't stop thinking there is a reason there are three characters named jacob in this story. and not even just in this story but involving the brotherhood that seems too...i don't even know the word but it can't be coincidence that would be to easy and i have quickly learned that you are unpredictable my friend lol. in any case love this but then you knew that reading everyone else's responses and ideas is fun

I have to say your imagination is definitely nothing short of amazing. I give fantasy writers a lot of props because they have to come up with these unique worlds and characters and names and make it all believable. I love the way this is playing out and i think the world you have crafted is quite breathtaking. So now we know Jacob's beginning as it is, and still there are questions to be answered. kudos to you

I don't even know what to say except i love this story. everything is unfolding very nicely. i am completely buckled in and ready for the ride its fantastic love play q and jacob and Anthony's story was very touching and i hope mayhaps he does get his allessandro that would be nice. whatever is in store i have no doubt t will be great

wow just when i think i understand where this is going you throw another curveball. great storytelling here that's for sure i am completely engrossed. This chapter answered a lot of questions but posed many more. I am quite intrigued and can't wait to see what happens next

Note to self lol don't read intense chapters before bedtime especially when they end like that *laughs* i loved this. this chapter was so just wow and i enjoyed every minute. I must share Mark's sentiments i love Q. and that being said the ending almost brought me to tears omg. so my question is did jacob save q's life before (ala the phone booth). because he certainly just may have saved Q's life now. There is so much going on here and my mind is buzzing with questions and i think i am just as confused in someways as Jacob which is great. i love fantasy sci fi stories with romance wrapped in there. this story completely has me hooked. can't wait to see what happens next

Nice setup here though i too agree with Cia's assessment. I like the set up here, poor James can't wait to see how he copes with this and can't wait to see where the story goes from here

wow what a ride that was. i'm confused now lol you must post more to help unconfuse me! or perhaps i am not as confused as it seems if i am following this right. what an exciting ride. I have a feeling there is purpose behind Q's behavior here after all he is who he is and jacob is a pledge there is a lot at stake if anyone were to think something more then big and little was up with them. much at stake. this whole chapter was bizarre and thrilling all at once and very intense. and the end whoa whats with this mystery guy? was the he he mentioned Q...not that i expect you to answer that mind you but wow so many questions. mike and jacob are going to come to serious blows at some point i just have this feeling. thanks for the thrilling story you have my mind twisted in knots with all this keep it coming please

Wow i am enjoying this so much and you end it there ! well the mark of a good story is knowing how to keep the readers coming back. i took so long with the last chapter cause i didn't want it to end. and i was always intrigued by Q and Jacob is my fave pledge and the two of them together *sigh* i can't wait to see what happens from here and what happened at the house. an incident uh oh. next chapter please!

okay i didn't know what to expect when i started this. how intriguing i can't wait to see where this goes very interesting start for sure i

welcome newbies. hope you enjoy your time here i know i am

still loving this so much. i must say i have been waiting for this second chapter it didn't disappoint i really like Spencer. its interesting to most he seems untouchable and godlike but Seth here has the inside track already and seth gets to learn that spencer just wants to be like everyone else sometimes. who doesn't feel that way? and i really like wesley too coaxing Seth out to admit what he already knew. he's a great friend. i am looking forward to the next chapter i am sure it will be worth waiting for. can't wait to see what else is afoot

this was a great beginning to what i am sure will be a great story. I really like the concept and the idea. Scott seems like the right amount of full of himself yet he has a right to be lol. and Chase, i really like him already. and then there is Kaleb. great foundation chapter letting us meet the characters and get a brief look into who they are. can't wait to see where this goes

I love court room drama so this is great. i found myself completely taken in by what was going on in the courtroom . knew what the defense was trying to do and loved how martin outsmarted the guy and the judge milton is great. this is like an episode of law and order can't wait to see the rest good job andy. i laughed when mr colmar said his son was innocent the defense is sharp though but not very bright. hopefully martin and daniel can stay one step ahead

This was an incredible story from beginning to end. it was very intense and i was immediately drawn into the world you created. I felt like i was right there with Rick as he tried to figure out this man who had captured his attention. You could feel Ben's anxiety and as the story started to unravel it became clear that these two needed each other. It wasn't one sided, they needed each other in different ways. I love How steadfast Rick was from the door. Even learning all he knew about Ben, and knowing that he was perceived as a basketcase didn't stop Rick from wanting to help him and falling in love. you captured this so beautifully i know i won't soon forget rick and ben

you had me at the title, and then the premise kept me hooked and i must say i really loved this first chapter. i have to agree with the other reviewer the way you introduced the characters is great giving us a backdrop and letting us see personalities and perceptions its lovely and I am excited to see how this story unfolds. I was just as intrigued as Seth to learn just who Spencer Heedway was and Logan is very interesting as well. I even like Wes and his unruly red hair. likable characters from the door i can tell this is going to be good

great story. lots of ups and downs, twists and turns. i was a bit indifferent about the ending but all in all it was great. I think Jason is my favorite part of the pairing i loved how his character evolved through all this. Peter was a good help to him and a support up until the accident. Glad Jase got what he wanted it in the end and that Peter didn't give up on him. and vice versa. all the characters felt so real it was a great read

this isn't the end is it? say it ain't so. helen escaped up oh craig with someone way older yikes obviously those two love each other oh dear there isn't a resolution yet. michael's death was definitely heartbreaking. i always enjoyed that john's parents were supportive and craig's dad too i like him. most of the characters are really nice and you create this story so vividly i can almost see it before my mind's eye. i've enjoyed watching this unfold. is there more

wow that chapter sent me through a whirlwind of emotions. i'm almost sad that i am at the last part because it means this wonderful story is going to come to an end. That helene really is a piece of work and Eddie is just as bad it seems. I'm glad John made friends and was able to tell them about his life back at the old school. its good that he reconnected with aaron and wow so they got Craig to come to the party and surprised him for his birthday ? awesome story off to read the last part i'm really enjoying this