Jammi

congrats to all the winners

wow...guess there's nothing left to say lol. it was a great ride, but as i know everything must come to an end. thanks for a good story Jwolf.

Had a feeling this was going to be the final chapter! can't wait to see what happens in part two. Oh boy Cooper! I have a bad feeling about this...a bad feeling this isn't going to turn out the way he wants it to... I loved this chapter, so packed full of goodness and a nice dose of Kyle to boot. I'm definitely looking forward to what happens next. was checking every day for this chapter can't wait to see how you close it out j

great stuff billy i'm really loving this. the mystery gets deeper with every chapter very intriguing.

talk about a Jammed pack chapter! it was awesome though. I thoroughly enjoyed it. I'm glad Cooper always has spencer in his corner no matter what. IT's great to have a friend you can turn to at any moment. Love that Coop realized he isn't the only one with issues too. Spencer deserves someone who is proud to be with him. hope that happens! now back to coop, love that Devon did the right thing and that CJ will be staying with Cooper. had a feeling that might happen, glad that's how it turned out. And just as i figured Devon knew the deal from the door...glad she isn't mad at Cooper anymore, maybe they can do this. that sex scene at the end was hot. boy oh boy, i knew something was wrong, So morgan is missing. Uh oh...just when things start settling down for Coop, here comes a wrench to unscrew it all again. What's Chase going to do? Guess the next chapter will reveal that! I'm glad to hear that we'll get some Kyle soon. this chapter was awesome did i mention that already ?

I enjoyed this a lot. I concur completely about first person narrative. thats why i love to use it when i can great piece !

Ouch indeed. it certainly seems as if cooper is at the end of his rope here. can't waito to see what happens next.

and the plot thickens. i am concerned, the parents seemed really worried about something and they were very vague hmmmm that could spell trouble ahead. I like Andy he seems really well rounded and he's a good kid. Joey's great perfectly andy's golden sunshine. should be interesting with them going camping. i have a feeling J.T is going to cause some trouble... great chapter

those are great tips. I think sometimes new authors may overuse the tags which could also distract from the dialogue. Sometimes its okay to let the dialogue flow without too much explanation and unnecessary action. keeping it simple works best as long as the dialogue is conveying what you're trying to convey

My song is Looks Like We Made it By Barry manilow

wow i thought it was about time i commented here. that was a powerful chapter very intense. i know that had to be hard for cooper to do. poor cj, he took that really hard as i figured he would. and cooper is feeling some kind of way....great chapter glad you're back and rolling~ can we see more kyle maybe soon ?

and fiercely protective Andy surfaces again. I think this is being paced nicely, and i feel like we're getting to know the characters slowly which is nice. Looks like things are starting to get interesting here, with the case Judge collins was dealing with, and now andy's threat to JT, and JT's obvious use of slurs in front of the principal looks like father and son are cut from the same cloth. can't wait to see what happens next

I had a feeling they'd get caught by roger lol. seems to be their lot. this is going really well i like it. Andy and Joey are cute together.

firstly i love snow patrol and chasing cars secondly, glad things worked out for Joey and he has a new place to live. its good to see tolerant folks in within a society (biblebelt) that isn't always so. I feel like you're learning the ropes with each chapter here. there is a lot of depth to this story andy is a great guy and his dad is pretty awesome too

this was a good chapter. i felt in some places like it dragged, but overall it created great progression for the story. I like judge collins, guess we should be thankful he's a good guy lol. He wields a lot of power in his town i see. the bit with Joey and Andy admitting their feelings was nice. "you had me at hello" favorite line from jerry maguire lol...perfectly used here. Pastor adams is either stupid or just that deep in his hatred. He didn't even attempt to save face, not that i think he would have succeeded had he tried. I'm curious what happened to convince andy's parents to create the alpha system hmmmm nice read!

wow, i knew Joey was being abused but just wow that is insane. I don't even know who i am more upset with. Eddie for taking advantage of him, The dad for beating him profusely for no reason or the freakin mother for standing back and LETTING it happen. it is very sad that there really truly are people like this in the world still today, very sad and quite frightening. Poor Joey, i am glad he has Andy and Judge collins in his corner. uh oh looks like the pastor is on the warpath i hope the good judge will have a few choice words for pastor adams. that man needs to go sit down somewhere. I just want to hug joey

Yikes, like neph i think i can make a pretty good guess what happened to Joey. but then this story is just the right pace for good twists and such so i will continue my intent to catch up. I think Andy is developing nicely, i like his dad too, he seems like a great guy. can't wait to read more i'm enjoying this

Happy birthday Jack. hope your day has been good

I like the pace of this. it is quick and steady. I'm liking Andy, and i wonder what's up with Joey. I have a bad feeling about his home life it concerns me. the principal's reaction was really cool.

way to go andy! sticking up for Joey like that. i can only guess what the principal wants. looks like they could be in trouble. this is really good so far

I think i already like Andy. the narrative here is very nicely done, very fresh and realistic. the tone is great and i feel like i really am seeing things through Andy's eyes. can't wait to continue with the next chapter. i think this will be a great story good job!

Andy I finally got to finish reading this and i must say i enjoyed it. First off, i actually enjoyed the legalize lol. I figured it was appropriate since you were telling the story from the pov of the prosecution. I feel like i learned a lot from reading this as to how to do a trial. For example i didn't know victims were allowed to give a statement before sentencing i will have to keep that in mind back to you though, i am glad that Jordan got what he deserved, especially since he tried to lie his way out of it. Glad to see Pete and Jason are doing well too. My only complaint is that i wish there had been more Jase and pete. i definitely enjoyed them in second shot and its sad to see the story come to an end. Its rewarding though too and i think you should be proud. thanks for the great story

I really like this it's such a simplistic beautiful start. Josh seems like a really sweet guy. I hope Blake means what he says and won't hurt him. I can't wait to read more and happy birthday to you

I had a lot iof fun reading this chapter again. what an eye opener and very exciting. I can't help but be intrigued by this world you created and the plan the Nave have to take over and everything like that. Jacob is nothing if not impulsive isn't he ? can't wait to see what happens next. still loving Q and i adore this story.

I'm so very proud of you and what you have done with this story I love Chase and Kaleb. i love to think about them and they always make me smile. Kaleb made the right decision taking Chase to the nursery. I love what Chase said to him too about being special and that not necessarily being a bad thing. Chase is very good for Kaleb and Kaleb is good for chse. I get that song Looks Like We Made it in my head when i think about them, because it just seems like everyone thinks they shouldn't be together, but they know different. love it chica beautiful scenes at the hospital and loved the scenes at the hotel too. Kaleb may be a little slower then most folk but he definitely ain't stupid and he wants some of his hot sexy boyfriend hehe thats for sure jammi