Jammi

The title of this caught my attention immediately, and then talking to Kim about it, i knew i just had to read. I'm definitely not disappointed. The beginning drew me in immediately, and i wanted to know more about this small town, not to mention Gibby and his dad. It's not easy starting over, and with such a tragic loss as these two have had, it's definitely going to be difficult. It was easy to feel the sadness and the pain they are feeling, and I love the small clues we get like Gibby wearing long sleeves, and the charred picture frame plus the fact that his things fit into a box. This chapter was just enough to wet my appetite and keep me hungry for mer. so i'm going to go read the next chapter. this was a great start!

I just thought of another won that is used fairly often. Whisper softly

There is so much to love about this chapter. Christian was very brave to take on both his sons even though he has no memory of them. I love how he never truly lets them know he doesn't remember them. Also love the looks Liam gave his daddy when he thought he was asking strange questions. Little details like that make the scene work perfectly The breakfast scene was funny too lol at least they want to eat oatmeal now, guess we can call it a win right haha. Christian did a good job over all with the Kids. and I'm glad he made some headway in his doctor appointment. I agree with Dr. Reeder. admitting you are attracted to your husband does not a soul bearing make Christian! i did like the conversation david and Chris had on the phone and the guys taggart and Jimmy are awesome. just a great chapter all around. can't wait to see what happens next chica!

This was so nicely done a great introduction to the characters and I love the tiny details. Immediately the narrative draws you in and on an added note Making Love Out Of Nothing At All is one of my fave songs. The lyric fit the chapter nicely

Ah so it was Joey who told him to stop. Very nice...Joey is like an angel, he's Andy's Angel and i have a feeling he really will be andy's light in the darkness. Can't wait to see how that plays out. I totally understand him forgiving JT too. he would understand where JT must be right now. Will that change JT's behavior now? I guess only time will tell. I see the story is starting to delve into very powerful messages and plots here Billy. Very intriguing and i can't wait to see what tribulations Andy and his friends will have to face. Also really liked the scene between Andy and his mom very intense. can't wait to see what happens next

Kevin and Jonas eh ? are you a jonas brother fan by any chance *laughs* Billy this was a good chapter. i am intrigued by Andy's dream since it really freaked him out. I'm glad the family was so supportive, though i am definitely not surprised. they seem like really good people and they love Andy Roger and Joey. I'm starting to feel for J.T a little bit. it seems like his father is the reason he acts the way he does . different environment may change his attitude perhaps? guess only time will tell. Oh dear the guys are going to get in trouble for fighting in school again! poor Joey always getting picked on, glad Andy and Roger were there to take down the bullies. was it the principal who stopped them? great chapter !

Kimkim you know how much i love this! still it's only right that i comment I loved this chapter. David was worried sick, i couldn't help but snicker as he tried to fix his phone but his nerves wouldn't stay calm enough for him to succeed. I love Tag already, and i'm glad he's a part of Christan's life still. It's nice that theres a link to the past that Chris can cling to as he tries to remember his present. I'm glad Christian came back and that he and david are going to be patient with each other as they both try to cope with this. Love that David kisses him every night too i know that's important! and the ending was very nice btw as was the scene where Chris watched David shower lol. beautiful stuff chica!

five minutes *sigh* just beautiful neph. loved it all of it. okay lets see; first, love the name Ryden; very unique and original. I was immediately hooked on the story just from the opening dialogue. I felt myself wanting to learn more about Mary and Helen, not to mention what happened to Ryden to put him in this position. and I also was wondering along with them about Luke though i admit i had a sinking suspicion about the answer. Still the dialogue and intermingling summaries kept me enthralled from beginning to end. i don't think there is a way to praise this effectively but i loved it. Luke's love for Ryden was clear and unstoppable. great story i'm sad it's over but it was lovely

this is so angsty its lovely. i like how you've crafted out this story, i can feel the emotions of the characters its very powerful.

girl i don't know if i want to kill you or hug you. that was so good. i'll give a complete review after third chapter as well, but man what a ride. can we just make robert go away, i hope he realizes he may have just sealed his son's fate the bastard

That was sweet and simple. Nice way to end the story. Very nice Renee.

Awww somebody's getting married! Nice very nice

Glad Jared realized running wasn'tthe answer. Also glad Kyle was determined to go after him. They both learned something there and that's good! The sooner they realize they can handle these things better together , the better off they will be

I'm curious about Matt's reaction to this. He was dating chel after all. You've definitely kept my interest piqued

I was right it was Chelsea. Goodness sounds like she really had some issues. I thought at first she was mad at Jared for hurting her brother. I like what you came up with though. Poor Kyle when he thought Jared was dead. And once again live that Matt was in protective mode the whole time

Not sure what to think of the suspense there honestly. It almost seemed too convenient to me and almost too easy. on the other hand though I like that Matt and Kyle are making up. Can't wait to unravel this mystery.

Plumping up lol I don't think I'll ever look at hotdogs without giggling. Never heard it put quite that way. Nice chapter Renee the tension was believable though Jared definitely overreacted. looking forward to what happens next

And theres the ptsd!! Poor Jared he recalls more then Kyle thought about the attack. I hope Kyle can help. I like the realism here. They are together and home but everything isn't all right yet. The attacker's words are chilling such an awful thing all that hatred. Grat chapter!

Nice make up scene :-) Kyle bought the building awww. I love how there is a slow unveiling as far as information goes. Its like peeling an onion layer by layer. I'm still thinking Chelsea has something to do with all this. She's very crafty and the least likely suspect. Glad Kyle realizes now it really wasn't Matt,and glad that despite that accusation Matt still wanted to help his friend

I think things are happening too quickly and that's why it feels somewhat contrived. That said I like the story being crafted here. I saw you said you might rewrite at some point...I think with tweaks and fleshing out this story will be even better. I like the idea of Matt trying to help so he confesses, but don't believe is as cut and dry as it is made to seem. And Kyle gave in too easily loke he resigned himself to fate and que sera sera. This story is so mysterious though. sofer smaller hands? Hmmmmm way to build intrigue :-) glad Jared is awake

Uh oh poor kyle. So Chelsea is his sister? Did we know that already? He's being framed and I wonder who set him up. I would like to think Chelsea wouldn't frame her brother. Nice mystery you have going here Renee.

Echoing Andy here, obviously we know it wasn't kyle. My immediate thought was Chelsea. I don't trust her. As for Matt what is he up to I wonder. The plot thickens!

I'm calling red herring with Matt its too easy and convenient for it to be him who did this. of course i have more chapters to read and can't wait to see what happens next. I also thought it was far too easy for Kyle to think his best friend would do something that that. Not that i blame kyle for being upset, but he jumped to that conclusion so fast, and it seems to be matt would be the last person he'd suspect since its his best friend. really intriguing stuff here though

this is shaping up to be a great mystery i see. poor Jared attacked twice in the span of weeks. Kyle needs to be honest about his feelings, that would be first and foremost. if Jared knew why he wanted him to move in (as apposed to what he thinks is the reason) then maybe his responses would be different. who knows. And signs point to Matt being Jared's attacker, but i guess that's jsut a red herring yes ? Unless...he'd want to find a way to force the issue of jared and kyle living together again. definitely something to think about

Ah pride thine worst enemy at times for sure. Though I do like that Jared wants to try to get back in Kyle's good graces on his own terms. Not sure what to think of Matt at the moment, though i guess he would do just about anything for his friend, even if he doesn't agree with him. That being said, i hope he doesn't do something underhanded like convince Jared to stay out of Kyle's life, and pay him to do it. oh dear complexites.