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Loved this review! I think you on a couple really strong things. Corb did just realize for the first time what Mike's been saying- he will break his heart one day. Is this the set up for that? We'll see. And we'll see what price Corbin makes Dom pay for his involvement. Thanks for the review and so glad you're hooked on the story! More to come soon.

Hey Jaro! Thanks for the review. I always look forward to your reactions. Glad it was worth the wait. I love writing Corbin mostly because he is complex character, and I'm glad you can connect with that. I wouldn't say he was trying to manipulate Pete with his admission, but I can totally buy that it could be seen as a calculated move. Expect Corbin to realize that he's overplayed with both Pete and the house.

Hey! Thanks for the review. I'm glad you were able to connect with Corbin's backstory. It's the first time I've ever done something like that to explain a character, but I think the fact is Pete and Corbin were long overdue for that kind of convo. More to come

Thanks for the review, Tim! I always look forward to what you have to think. I hope that Corbin's next move towards Dom is surprising and satisfying. There's still so much story to unfold between these guys. Glad you're enjoying it.

Hey all! Another supersized chapter is up and ready! I hope you enjoy. As always, your comments, reviews, and questions are greatly appreciated. Please feel free to leave a review, and then check back here and see where the conversation has headed. Enjoy!

The next ten to fifteen minute of my life were more like an out of body experience than anything I’d been through before. The split second after Mike knocked Pete across the face, I jumped between them, forming a barrier between the two guys that I had been orbiting like a dysfunctional moon. My forearm caught Mike’s stomach as I watched Pete fall to the ground, pushing a bikini clad Chi-O sister back as he fell. He was down for a second, his eyes wide, wondering what had just h

Sorry I missed this. More coming soon, I promise.

I won't rip you a knew one, I promise. My motto this year has been better late than never. And you know I love your reviews! Thanks for the etymology link to Corbie... that's really really interesting. I know that Corbin can be hard to like sometimes- my Beta reminds me every two chapters or so- but I've always been fascinated by the balance of good traits and bad traits in my characters. As long as he remains possible to root for... more to come soon, including the aftermath of the hit heard round campus... don't wait so long this time.

Very perceptive reading of Corbin... interesting that you see him as forcing himself to settle for Mike, and what that means moving forward. I guess that's the big question. Thanks so much for the compliment on the chapter! I'm glad you enjoyed it. The aftershock of Mike's fuck up is coming soon.

Thanks for the review! I love that line you used... it just grew some muscle. It looks like it did! More to come soon

I've heard a few really interesting things in this conversation so far. I hope y'all won't mind if I chime in I'd have to say that I'm interested in what Irritable had to say re: I'm never quite sure whether Corbin is in fact working for his house or just deluding himself that he is. (sorry, Not sure how to share quotes on here anymore.) I think it's interesting that Corbin justifies everything with either self-preservation or house-preservation as his motive. I think he truly believes he's doing the right thing, as any hero or villian will tell you that they are. Walter White in Breaking Bad comes to mind (not saying that Corbin is going to go selling meth to save his house anytime soon) but the idea of a flawed hero is one that I've always been interested in, and I think for their actions to make sense, and to remain just under the brink of unjustifiable, they have to believe that their mission is noble. With that said, I think apart from him being cruel to Lee, Corbin's biggest mistake in most of his interaction is that he's unyeilding. He thinks he's completely right all of the time, and takes very little advice from his brothers about what actually IS best for the house. I don't want to spoil anything here (And I'm not sure how to manage that spoiler window thing), but as he grows up within this world, expect him to learn that he can lean on others before it's too late and he's having a nervous breakdown. Loving the conversation, and I'm glad we've got this forum up and going again. Back to writing now...

Thanks for the awesome review. Glad the chapter was worth the wait. Thanks for the compliment on taking us through Corbin's mind. When he's at his worst, he's the most fun to write. I'm just hoping we're still rooting for him in the end. More to come, and can't wait to see what you think. Thanks again.

Wow! Thanks so much for the review. Glad you enjoyed the chapter... more to come soon!

Wow, lots of thought provoking questions. I love it! Remember, when it comes to Pete and Corbin, these boys are in their very early twenties... I think we can all remember how volatile we were then, so I wouldn't assume this punch has signaled the end. I remember hearing a song that said "love has to hurt for it to turn out right..." You've brought up some scenarios I hadn't thought of yet, and I'm loving how many possibilities there are for this story! Thanks for the review, Louis. As always, I look forward to reading your responses.

Don't worry, Carrie! I'm marking my calendar for two actual weeks this time around. I'm sure Lisa is going to rip me a new one about my definition of two weeks as well!... uh oh I always love your reviews, love, and you nailed it in describing how Corbin is going to feel about that hit... proud, but hitting is bad. That's the only tease I'm putting out there... thanks again for an amazing response! see you in two weeks...ish.

Thanks for the review! I'm so glad that you're hooked on our little story. Definitely more to come. I don't disagree with you on Corbin's treatment of Lee... definitely verging on the cruel side. I think Corbin thinks he's doing the right thing at the time, but if you notice he does offer up some remorse when thinking back on the event in the present. Still, expect more fireworks between those two. Thanks again!

Uh oh... another member of Team Mike! He's garnering quite a following. Glad you liked the chapter! More to come soon.

pfox, thanks for the review! I always enjoy reading your reactions to the chapter. There's definitely more on Lee's story in the next chapter, so he stays in the spotlight for a little while. As for Mike and Pete... well, I won't tease what's to come. Hope you enjoy!

Timothy! Thanks for the awesome review. Very interesting observations on Corbin's reaction to the hit. I don't want to give anything away, but I hope you enjoy the beginning of the next chapter. I'll try not to take too terribly long to post it. And how exactly do you propose Corbin show his appreciation to Mike? Just curious

Glad Mike has some fans in his corner... I don't disagree with you on Corbin's threat to Lee... a lot still to tell from that plot within the story. More in a couple weeks, and thanks again for the review!

Charlie, thanks again for the compliment! Glad you enjoyed the chapter. Can't wait to put out the next few installments.

Thanks for the review, Rosicky! Glad you liked the chapter. I'm glad Mike has some people on his corner. Very interesting what you said about Mike and Corbin accomplishing the same thing, one with force and one with words. Look for that to come up in the next chapter...!

Hey folks! The next chapter is up. I hope you enjoy. I wanted to apologize for the tardiness of this chapter. I know following an in-progress story can be challenging, and hopefully I can get back to a regular writing schedule so that I can serve you all better. Again, thanks for your support! I look forward to reading everyone's feedback. Find the chapter here.

Chapter 23 They say that pride comes before the fall. What they don’t say, what the proverbial they so conveniently leave out, is how hard that fall actually is. And it’s only when you’ve hit rock bottom that you take a look around, and realize that it’s your fault you’re sitting there in the first place. I woke up that Monday morning still feeling sick to my stomach over my confrontation with Amanda, but holding down any excess bile with my sheer resolve, and b

Hey all. The next chapter is out to my Beta and Editor. I just wanted to come here and give an update that it is on it's way. I'll be out of the country for a week, so look for it to post late next week. In the meantime, here's a small snippet of what to expect: "They say that pride comes before the fall. What they don’t say, what the proverbial they so conveniently leave out, is how hard that fall actually is. And it’s only when you’ve hit rock bottom that you take a look around, and realize that it’s your fault you’re sitting there in the first place... ...“What the fuck did you do?” I asked in a moment of stillness before the chaos began and all hell broke loose."