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I liked this chapter a lot. It was great to see them get more intimate. I don't mean just physically. This relationship didn't have as much of a chance before bc they hadn't really talked. idn't get to the deeper issues or really talk about feelings. It was sweet and spontaneous. I really enjoyed it and can't wait for more.

Hey, I love this story. I loved how he set up the surprise. I expected him to just sing happy b'day in german and not the beautiful scene. And how long did it take you to set up that Axel drawn in characters?! I have to be honest though, the end didn't fit for me. I read your comment above, but my feeling is that, taboo or not, Axel made it clear he was interested in Xavier. He was pretty forward. I agree that Xavier would probably hold his feelings in and maybe didn't make it obvious he felt the same. I think he is more likely to be affected by the contemporary attitudes, but he still was open to it. He put himself out there. The part of the scene that didn't feel like the character acted the way you would expect as you've built the character is Axel. It seemed like too much of a shift in the charzacter's actions and emotions. The boy in the tree would have made a play when Xavier showed such a romantic side. Axel said he wanted Xavier for his B'day. He wouldn't get to a barn where Xav arranged for private time and made a beautiful and romantic show of his caring for him, only to share a hug and to say d'we're good friends.' Afterall, that's not something Jake or another 'good friend' would do. You did leave us hanging at a point where you could go either way. I'd like to see one of them kiss the other even if you don't want to take it farther right away b/c of the reasons you stated in your response above . I look forward to the next chapter to see how you move their relationship forward. I hope yo

I just wanted to say that your profile pic with the dog is so adorable. The kind of pic that reminds us why animals are such a great part of life.

I was happy to see the new chapter. I missed it when it came out I think. Anyway, I was so glad to learn something about Michael's past. I don't know if I am just tired, but I am having trouble figuring out how his terribly painful past is affecting his fear of coming out. The one way that his painful childhood does affet this relationship is that he had to take care of everyone is his family when his dad died. I think that it was the first time that someone took care of him, when Asher did. Another is to think how scared he must have been when Ash was shot and how much fear he must have felt, thinking Ash might 'leave' him I'm glad that Michael is willing to be vulnerable with Ash and I think that bodes well for their relationship. Ash is taking a big chance for love. He has to know that at any time Michael could decide he can't handle the public scrutiny that would come if he came out. I enjoyed Lana as a character. She did such a great job of defusing Michael, who can really get wound up fast! I liked how she stood up to his violent reaction to the implication he was gay. She could probably help quite a bit with him learning to accept himself. Her comments fit into the discussion of the recent ruling of the Supreme Court perfectly. I don't get how denying others the rights to love one another officially and from having the rights that a (straight) mate/partner are entitled to, make one feel safer It would be nice to see her again. Lookin' forward to more, KC!

I wouldn't have guessed you struggled with the ending. I think that all in all, it was well done. I'm sure all of us would have liked the story to go on, of course. But, I think you If you ever decide to work on it and maybe post it elsewhere or something, then the only thing I would point out is that he told Liron that he would show him it wasn't a mistake to come and he'd prove it, but we didn't see that. Maybe an announcement or a dedication on stage. Something that was a big enough to fill his promise. Enjoyed it a lot and look forward to your next work.

I'm hooked on this story!! I am really glad I read Precious TH. I have to say it is a refreshing thing, b/c it's not as common as I'd like, to see such a versatile author. These two pieces are both great, but so different. As with PTH you created great characters with strong emotions. It's not the same 'formula' which many authors use for all their stories. I like that the characters all have big hang-ups, yet take advantage of chances in life...but the part I like most is it's not automatic. It's a process that is different for all of them. I hate predictable I look forward to checking others stories out eventually. As for the story specifically, I know that they burned bright and hot and hope if/when they meet again, they get to know more about one another. I'd love to know more about who Milo is. I love how possessive he is and I think he's been really open with Liron. I like that he cut the chase and got to the emotions involved. I think Liron is really deciding from a place of fear. I think his sister would have wanted him to do this. He is using her as an excuse, as I don't think she'd be worried about rent. It seems that his living there is more for his benefit since money is tight. Hell, Milo is gonna pay for his room and board, so he could still give her money towards rent. I think he knows Milo and he have something. It is clear in how the people around them reacted and the fact that Milo has his escape if he wants it, that this is something different for Milo. I liked that he took him outside with the paparazzi too. he wasn't hiding him like a piece of ass on the side. Well, I hope next chapter sees them reuniting. I think Liron is gonna be destroyed and Milo probably will be affected enough to affect the concerts. I'd not be surprised if the other band-mates call him and ask him to come again. I think it was sweet that the guys care and paid attention enough to see there was more than meets the eye between him and Liron. More soon please! I am glad I don't know exactly how it will go. Oh and it made me laugh that lucas stayed back...I think he got to meet Milo a bit more intimately most likely! lol

Hey KC~ Hope you're feeling better. I still think that Michael will have a huge hurdle to cross even if he loves Asher on some level (which he hasn't really said-though we all would really like to say we think he does! Loving and lusting after him at home is a lot less intimidating than doing it in public and in front of his peers. I was shocked when Ash told him he'd be bottoming. I thought that would send Mike running for the hills!! I think his reasoning for wanting Mike to do so is more about seeing how invested he is in the relationship. Afterall, straight couples have anal sex without hurting anyone if they take the time to do it right. I think he could safely guide Michael to do it without hurting him. I agree with Ash that he should wait till he is better so it can be a mutually satisfying thing. They've been moving toward this point for so long, and I am sure Ash wants to be able to fully experience and participate without his injuries preventing that. I'm glad Michael has opened up to that without taking offense. He's really trying and I hope they make it. maybe they can start going out to get groceries or something and being seen out together, maybe some PDA's. See how Mike reacts. I'd kinda like to get to know Mike a bit more. We know very very little about him. I always think that it's hard to believe in a relationship when the interactions don't show that they are getting to know each other well. I'd like to know about how he feels about the guys at work, how about family, dreams and anything else that would be fun. It is kinda sad b/c he seems like such a loner before Ash. OK, look forward to more!! cannd

I think that Hill said it best. Your story really was elegant. I also love when a writer knows their subject. You clearly know a lot about tea and all the subjects around it. It makes the story a lot more real. I liked the slow build of their relationship too. The thing I kinda wish was that we got a bit more into their relationship. I would have liked to see the intimacy, physical and emotional, play out. It would have been nice to see them having the relationship on a different level. Aside from that, it was a great story. Look forward to another.

I enjoyed this story when I first came across it a while back. I had to re-read since the last update I had seen was 8 I think. Anyway, I like how you've picked up the pace in theses last two chapters. The earlier ones were entertaining, but introduced the characters and set the tone for story. I like how the events moved more quickly here. One thing I'd like to see is a more info about Koen's past. We know nothing of how long he was a warrior, what his standing was in his clan, was he single when he began the war/was captured? Marcus was obviously very well-known among the members of the legion, and I wonder if Koen knew of him before he was made a slave? I would like to see him developed a bit further and maybe knowing more about him would do the job. I appreciate the fact that they both are in love with one another, but the sense has been a love affair from a distance b/c though he is his body slave and now top dog in his household, we haven't been privy to any of their more intimate moments outside of the first encounter in the barn. We assume they have been intimate, but we haven't 'seen' it. I think you've done a good job developing the mutual respect and attraction. I know that you are limited by the restrictions placed on Koen and the rules he must follow as a slave. So, it is less likely to see them talking about much, but hopefully you can find a way to do this? I still have my suspicions as to Gracchus' possible involvement in the slingshot attack. I am kinda less clear on why Gracchus' hate is so strong for Koen. He isn't gay, so he isn't jealous of the physical relationship or even the possible romantic one between Marcus and Koen. Koen isn't a threat to Gracchus' position, unless he continues his questionable behavior. The story has been well-written and I look forward to more. I can't wait to see them put that awful Lucius. I hope you can work on some of the above, but also show their relationship progressing. I hope the revenge is also very sweet and warns Lucius to step away.

I've never posted on here n the forums. Just wanted to mention that on OWN (Oprah Winfrey's channel) at 9 pm EST (now) is a show on transgendered people. After that is supposedly about a guy who ran 'Exodus' which was a 'gay to straight ministry'---the largest one in the country, I think they say. The head of it meets with people who were hurt by this ministry. He has admitted that he has hurt people. From there I don't know how far he goes. I can't tell if he has completely shut the ministry down or not. We shall see. The shows are Lisa Ling's 'Our America.'

Ohhhh mean cliffhanger. You have to update soon. I laughed at him asking for the word for his privates. lol. Axel is doing really well with his English for 2 months. It should become easier for them to talk. He should learn German in return, so they can talk around the family and not have to worry about what is said! Enjoying the story.

Hey KC, Glad you're home and feeling better. Kudos for keeping up with regular posts even while having surgery! Wow! This chapter, did show a slight change in the dynamics of their relationship. First, it is now Ash needing help, as opposed to when Ash was always taking care of Michael. BTW--Did we ever really find out why Michael was getting so drunk in the beginning, before he was doing it to block his feelings for Asher out? I really do love how possessive Michael is with Ash. lol I'm not usually up for jealous people, but it is cute on him for some reason. Maybe it's the sweet concern he shows for Ash's well-being. Obviously, he also is doing better accepting what is between them, though doing that in the privacy of Ash's house is way different than doing it in public. I feel so badly for Ash, dealing with being shot. At the same time he knows he's already in love with Michael and has no promise that even if Michael's feelings grow, that they will be enough to make it work. We haven't even gotten into the prognosis for his arm. How scary not to have the use of your arm, esp the dominant one. And what is going on with these faints and dizzy spells. Can't wait for more of the story! Be well!

I would just warn you about a few things. One is, be careful not to let playfulness or joy make your characters look like they are children. The imagine of him bouncing so many times, is more likely to conjure the picture of a child in my mind than an excited adult. The second would be letting your characters seem all over the place. It made no sense that Jarad would suddenly sleep with this ex who is a drug addict and probably gave him HIV or AIDS if he didn't use protection, when he says he's been stalking December b/c he wanted him. If he wanted him for so long, he'd be willing to wait till the next day and go on the date rather than having to have sex with his ex and pretend it's December. Those details are capable of pulling down a story that I am intrigued by. I will check out the next chapter and hope you can make the characters seem more well-adjusted. One other thing, why did he ask December what his name was? If he was 'stalking him' like he said, he'd surely know his name. Keep at it.

This chapter was good b/c it showed them actually sharing something and connecting. More of that please!

hi, I like the plot and the characters. A few things I'd bring attention to is that the chapters are a bit short. The problem is that this one came off as very similar to the others which made it not really move the story forward. The attempts to speak English were cute, but could have easily gone in ch. 2 at the end. Another thing is that he keeps saying that he can't fall for him b/c of his religion and the kid is a Nazi, too often. These are just things I'd point out if I were beta reading it. Looking forward to the next ch.

Hey KC, Praying for a safe surgery and a quick, easy recovery. I will pray that the doctors do the best job possible. It was really nice of you to see that we get a new chapter before you went! I liked this chapter, but I can't help but have a sense of fear that Ash is gonna get hurt by Michael. If Michael does that after was Ash has been through, I may not forgive him! Ash is so in love with him and Michael loves him too, but he just can't accept himself as bisexual or gay. His paling at the joke (that Ziggy joke was funny) shows how afraid he is I love how Michael is so impulsive and intense, but at the same time, it makes him do things that push Ash to think there is hope for them, when Michael sees it differently later. I hope he doesn't keep doing stuff that gives Ash hope and then freaking out. He has to be less ego-centric, esp. with poor Ash having been so hurt. I know what the girl was saying above about the remnants of his night with Tyler being at the apt. but I don't think it was about what he'd see. I think it was that he didn't want his mom finding toys and condoms, etc. And he didn't want to send Michael and remind him about his seeing a naked Tyler come out of Ash's bedroom. I do feel bad for Tyler! That would suck to have your night end that way. Poor Milo is gonna prob. catch some fall-out there! Well, I can't wait to see how you can make it feel like Michael starts to become comfortable in his own skin. That has to happen before they can form a relationship that isn't on a severely damaged foundation. He's seems to be pulled to Ash and clearly has feelings...but I think it will take time for him to acknowledge those feelings and act on them. When he does decide to go with it, will he be able to be out? Will he be able to accept himself and his feelings for Ash. I hope he can. Hugs KC

Well, first, I was glad you didn't leave us with him being shot in the chest...though that woulda been deliciously mean! lol The only little things I would have questioned is that if Ash had such a serious injury he'd not have been so aware the next day. With a chest tube and stuff, if he was aware at moments, I would have had Michael find out a few days later. It would have made sense if he hid away drinking for a few days. I think he'd have been a bit less coherent. I also wanted to smack Michael, to not just be saying that he cares and it hurts to see Ash hurt. To start bringing up his fucked up emotional hang-ups about his sexuality which is just as emotional for Ash, was kinda selfish. I was waiting for Ash to go into cardiac arrest everytime you described the machines going crazy (very effective!). I just wish Michael could have been there for him and just be glad he was alive. I mean, I'd think that if you don't say 'it doesn't matter, I love him' when you thought he could have bought it, then he may never be able to give in to his feelings. It was crazy to see him talking Michael through his feelings while he's in that shape and prob. wouldn't have been able to talk at that point.

I really enjoyed this one b/c I liked Matt throughout Nemesis. It was cool to see some of his past. Clearly he was very insightful and mature from a super-early age. His decision to not see Brian anymore so he could get over him was more mature than many who are older than him would make. I really think these two would be a great subject for a story of their own. I don't think they'd make it too far at this age. Afterall, Alan doesn't have the insight into himself that Matt does. He also seems like a self-sabotaging type. I would love to know if his accepting Matt's offer to be exclusive is a two-way street? The fact that Alan is closeted and doesn't seem to have plans to change that, would add a whole other problem for them to overcome. I do feel like there is a story for these two though. I would love to see you play off the way this story happened and maybe show us Alan's road to maturity and the self-confidence to be his true self for the world to see. I think it would be interesting to have them meet again after the passage of time and try to make a go of it. I would hate to see poor matt get hurt again, but I agree with you that the chances of 16 y/o's staying together isn't likely. Well, maybe these two will insist you write their story eventually. Till then, thanks for the look into Matt's history and giving them a clear direction for now.

I am glad you did this for us. We fans can be very greedy. When an author does a good job bringing those secondary characters to life, we come to want their stories. So, short or not, this was a nice add-on. I agree with Yettie. I can't say that Alan became a fav, but I totally felt a moment of 'awww' when he admitted to Nick he wanted him in the end. He was insecure as most bullies are, and had some difficulties at home that added to his need to bully, but it certainly never makes being a bully right. That said, you did manage to drum up some sympathy in me, for him. Matt on the other hand, I really, really liked the whole time. This story managed to show Alan in a more human light. I liked seeing him transform a bit (he's still a work in progress and I hope if someday you do his story, you don't let him go good too fast. He's still got stuff to work through that would come out in ugly ways at times). I thought the sex was very well done. The way Matt approached him was sweet and what they did was sweet and sexy at the same time. You managed to have that excitement of a 'first' despite these two not being completely inexperienced. The part when he confirms they aren't boyfriends was really funny. I think this was a nice way to give us some more on these characters you made us come to care about, but Alan really is an unwritten book, if ever there was one. I would love to find out how he wanted his story to go. There is still a lot of bad boy in him and I think what I love about him is the ample heaps of bad boy, bully along with caring and scared. Thanks! Maybe he'll get his whole story told someday. I think he'd be a challenge to pin down. Loving your stories.

Is the story over? I kinda hope not. I feel like you developed Dustin and Dexter so much and they were minor characters, so I was waiting for you to start developing Eliot as a character and them as a couple. So please keep writing!

Oh man, I wrote a nice review and then it got lost before I posted it...grrrr Here we go again... I didn't see M's reaction coming at all. Even as the scene played out, I totally thought that M was just being territorial when he reacted so violently to the guy checking Ash out. Clearly, M has to evaluate his actions and emotions where Ash is concerned b/c, as others said, he has been the one to initiate their contact. How will Michael deal with it? Will he apologize b/c he wants to stay friends with Ash? Will he drown his feelings in alcohol again and avoid Ash? How will Ash react? Will he stay angry with M? He seems like someone who could hold a bit of a grudge or be disappointed enough to stay angry, esp given M's awful behavior. He prob. sees through M's reaction and he'd be angry that M would react like that, esp after he helped him like he did. Either way, I don't expect that you will make it 'predictable'. I trust you will make it a bumpy path for them to get together, if they do. Well, can't wait for more. I feel really badly for Ash and am disappointed in Michael. Can't wait to see how you deal with it.

I really enjoyed this story and looked for updates every day, happy when I saw them. The characters were really well-developed. Even the minor characters were developed and that is why I am sure we all will be interested in seeing their stories. I'm interested in both Matt's story, b/c I want him to find someone of his own, but also Alan's b/c it will be really interesting to see how he goes from such self-denial to finding any sort of peace within before he comes to accept himself. The only thing I would note is that the chapter before the epilogue felt a bit rushed or less developed than the rest of the story. I felt that the way his father accepted the reality of his son coming out suddenly didn't feel right. Especially, given it was with Nick who there seemed to be such strong feelings against. A small part of me also would have liked to see some of their relationship after the coming out...even if it was just an overview of how it was when he came out, since his not doing so hung over them and stopped their relationship from progressing throughout the entire story. It was nice to have the epilogue, which showed Matt not going back to where he was from which was sweet. Also, seeing Nick come out of his shell during the time that passed was great, b/c he'd not have been in a band at the point the story ended. It was nice to see they weathered the storm. Looking forward to more

Loving the story still. I am wondering, does Ash take off for all the Saber's games? Does he still have contact with this Ryman? Or after 3 years, is it still too painful? You brought up the pic on the mantle and Ash says 'our friends went to the game,' so I am assuming that Paul was a childhood friend of Asher's? So I'm even more confused as to why he'd not go see him. But, Michael was smart not pushing him. I think it is time for Asher to use that ability to understand people and their actions and realize that a guy who just hangs at the bar you work in doesn't want to see you badly enough to come to your home when you're not there if it's just a platonic relationship. I really hope that Ash can let himself wonder if Michael really is straight. I am confused myself, only b/c he doesn't seem to have picked up on signals Ash let slip through. If they are friends, can't he be honest about himself with Michael? I'd really like to know more about Michael and his personal life. We really know nothing about him other than his being a shark in the board room. Also, is he still skirting the 'drinking too much' line? If so, is it to see Asher or b/c something is wrong. He has seemed to not get to that blackout drunk state since he was helped by Asher, but still seems to drink quite a bit. What was that due to? Was it work stress? Personal life stress? Is it because of Asher that he doesn't want to continue down that road? More, more, more!!! I'd like the next chapter to be a bit longer if possible!

I'm enjoying the story a lot. I was impressed with the song you wrote for Nick...and you're pretty talented adding singing and playing guitar to the writing! I love how introspective Dave is. He seems to have an insight into himself that is rare in a guy that young. I think it is one thing for him to continue the ruse of them being enemies still, but I don't think he'd get mean about it like he did in the locker room. It wouldn't be fitting to make homophobic comments given their new relationship. I think he'd have trouble being nasty toward him. I really think we need to know more about the feud between families. What happened that causes Dave's dad want to ensure the feud is carried on to the next generation? It must be big. Was it an affair between two members of the couples? What will they do about this? Will they keep their relationship a secret forever? Are they not saying they are not fighting anymore bc of his dad's opinion? Bc that would be a bad. I'm hoping the cousin isn't the same Mel Nick is talking to. I just think that'd be a huge coincidence...one that is too big of one that would make it unbelievable. Well, I can't wait for more. You've done an awesome job of building their relationship. Great job!

hey s- is this the end of the story? Does it continue into the next one? I remember reading it so long ago, but it was good to read it again. I still think the issue of the reason for the cruelty has to be addressed. It can't suddenly turn to love and have Tobias be able put aside the great cruelty he was exposed to when they met. Maybe Nassau could have addressed it, as he mentioned stuff about demons and their nature and could have explained how it could happen and why zai hurt him/ his experience of the pain and it's making his pleasure increased. Nassau could know all this, afterall. I think it would allow for Tobias to make a decision based on the reality of the nature of demons b/c it's not all sweetness and light. But, the caring that Is there is real too. Let me know the order to read the other stories in the series please and where to find them. Can't remember if they are all on lit. I don't know if you did Nassau's story and I really hope you did!! I like him. glad to be back online again regularly. c