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I agree with everyone else, it was a great way to develop the characters using their 'getting to know you' conversation. I thought it was an 'awwww' moment when he stopped Mick when he got there and told him it wasn't a booty call...not many guys could turn that down! I am interested in the fact that wolves can't be created. I'm surprised they'd want to mate with a human if they can't turn them. Would their wolf be disappointed not to be able to run with his mate. Do wolves in your story choose anyone they want to be their mate or is it some fated thing like in alot of Were stories? Great chapter...enjoying the story, esp Mick's insistence that he isn't dating Guy.

Intriguing...but what the hell...how do they just calmly lay down and giggle and make jokes after what just happened. The fact that Mikheal had the same dream should be enough to freak them out...then that eerie person, or whatever it was, levatates 16 floors up and does some crazy shit and then talks to them with glowing eyes...and they just lie down and make jokes? Not to menntion it attacked poor Quinn. Their reaction was really strange. Was it someone else who spoke to him and stopped whatever was hurting Quinn or was it still the thing outside his window speaking in his head? And doesn't it freak Alex out that his dad mentions this wierd 'spear of god' shit and then the thing outside his window tells him to ask his dad what he did 15 yrs ago? Seems like he could have been one of the killers, huh? Really interesting. I am wondering what will happen next!

Great chapter...It's sad that they have all experienced such loss, but hopefully they will all come out of it. I admire Xav's strength and ability to support those around him. He has experienced so much loss and still keeps going forward. He kept the others going, despite his own pain and moreso his concerns for the future. I kinda wish you had Axel and Xav doing a bit more communicating. Hopefully going forward you can have more of that again. I think their bond and conversations have been an important part of the story and the last two or so chapters have had them talking much less, with Xav telling most of the story himself. Things I would have liked to see them discuss would have been those possible plans they could make (even though those things could become immaterial if they go home and mom dies). I think that most importantly, they needed to discuss their relationship after the war. I think it is important for Xav to broach the subject with Axel. What will Axel want to do after the war? If he had to go home b/c the govn't sent him home, would he want Xav to go with him? Would they try to go somewhere so he isn't made to leave? Their hopes for the future would be the most important thing for them to discuss, given the fact that though it may not feel like it, the war would end at some point. Something Xav could have shared would have been his friendships with Nick and Jordan. Axel had spoken about his family earlier, but we know little about Xav and his bond with his friends. I think since they were so important to him, it would have been okay to have him discuss how they were a part of his life growing up, in a bit more detail. Overall, I hope you add some more dialog in between them. Going home will be a tough thing. I am sure the mom will go off the deep end if she finds they are living there. I am glad Jake was able to come get them. What a horrible thing for him to have to deal with all on his own at such a young age. It should get interesting!!

Let me add to the chants of the fans saying 'you go, Noah! You tell him!' great chapter. I hope Noah realizes he loves Eli back. I loved Nicholas saying he'd call Eli if he didn't come out soon! lol I love 'Noah's kids.'

I'm gonna write what I would have if I beta read this for you...I feel like you should slow down a bit. I'd like to see you show more of their interactions that lead to a bond forming. My impression of Gavin after his night with Tate was that he was a bit flighty or as a person with really quick-changing moods. His emotions were all over the place. He was mad once they got to the bar, then he was uptight until Tate eased him out of his mood. Then he got stuck in the past bc of the ex's appearance. Sadly, we didn't get to experience them on the dance floor to see them become more comfortable. You kinda sped right to 'hey, we're off to home' and we didn't see Tate help him relax and become more comfortable with him. We didn't see Gavin allow himself to experience the connection he felt. One thing that didn't fit was when he said 'oh that was typical tate'...hitting the horn to say goodbye as Gavin pulled into his driveway He doesn't know Tate at all yet, so how could he know if it's typical? I think you need to do more scenes where we hear them talk and get to know one another. Let us see what was said or felt as they danced. What made Gavin want to see him the next day when he seemed so hesitant b/c of his past? What did Tate do to push past the barriers that Gavin built when he didn't want to classify himself as gay and the ones he strengthened when the ex came over and raised ghosts from the past? We need to see them bond. I am intrigued by the whole bear shifter thing. It's not the typical Were animal. So, you can tell us more about them and how they live and what it means to find your mate. I liked the interesting detail about his not being able to see his mate clearly b/c he was near-sighted in bear form. How typical is it for a bear to find a human mate rather than another shifter? What was Tate thinking when he buys a home and finds that his mate lives next door? That would have to be crazy wierd! The real question will be why Gavin would dream about Tate changing from his bear form to human form? What in the heck would make a human dream such a random thing? He wasn't sleepwalking right? lol. I would recommend a beta reader if you don't have one, so they can ask for clarifications and point out if something should be developed further, etc. Overall, I'm looking forward to seeing a new 'shifter' world and seeing these two become mates. I hope some of this helps.

hmm...i hope those two don't miss their chance! I can't wait to know more about both characters. Very effective to keep us guessing...two very different characters. Why does mick smell so great? i'm kinda hoping it wasn't the 'he's my mate' thing b/c the younger guy was attracted to it too. Also, Guy wasn't totally interested right away. I like the sense of humor of Mick (or whatever his name really is!). I was glad to find they helped that little girl and would have preferred a death sentence from the werewolves...they usually have a better sense of justice!!! Keep writing. I like the story and the characters mainly bc it isn't fitting some mold for a were story. Looking forward to more of this!!

Really interesting...damn I wish I could contact this guy and unravel my head lol. Really intriguing. It is a tough topic to touch..rape and then factor in a child and molestation...a brave author to touch it. look forward to more! Man this guy would be rich beyond his wildest dreams if he could do this!!!

Thanks for the laugh Rob...that was classic when noah said he was glad he wasn't wearing the 'sorry ladies, i like dick and choking hazard' shirts. good stuff. i'm glad to see these two getting closer...though it's always a bit tough reading your fav authors wed briefs b/c you get left wanting more! I love these two. it's so hard to get that chemistry going in such short chapters..im still wanting noah to let himself go and let himself feel something...it was a sweet ending though when Eli realized he loves noah. noah definitely deserves him after that crummy ex. I can't remember...does noah know that he tried to pay eli off? i don't think his ex is done yet! he doesn't want him, but he doesn't want to give him up completely. I think he really thought Noah would fall apart when he was losing his last contact with him in the form of the condo. Eli naked with two guns aimed at that idiot is still my fav chapter lol.

Glad to see you back. The one thing I wonder is how they will take Otto back when they can't get to his mom's house to question her or send the boys off b/c it is a death sentence. I doubt the POW camp is closer than his home with his mom. Despite this detail, I was glad to see them get the better of Otto and it is ironic that they accused him of the crime they are guilty of (albeit it is consensual between them) and that Otto threatened revealing.

I look forward to them getting to know each other better. It makes it harder to bring in a conflict when they are not dealing with some past relationship (friends, acquaitances, lovers or whatever)...they only know what we know about them so far. i like how Erin is complex in that he does go from a bit assertive to shy. It leaves it open for him to surprise us. That was sweet that the junior looked up to them for being out. I look forward to where you take us next.

Intriguing idea. The duality of his owner was interesting. On the one hand, he treated him so well, saw him as a 'human' and fell for him. He clearly was treated so much better than his fellow para-hum's but at the same time he was the creator and controlling force for the enslavement of all the rest and was capable of the evil done to his brother. That was so sad and I was surprised that Poll didn't blame himself partly for betraying their secret connection. My only question is how the humans could win a war with the para-humans when they had abilities that could be used against them in some cases? Interesting piece and I kinda wish we'd get to see the rest play out.

I really like the sentiment that a person is who they are and that loving someone isn't about your gender or theirs. If it works for two people then who should judge. I usually would want a story to follow through on the outcome of the relationship...not feel like you're left hanging I guess. But, for this story it really works where you ended it. You know it's the beginning for these two and it would be a hard road. But, if Nathan truly believes that Sam is Sam, then it may weather the storm they would face together. The painting was a great visual, even if the idea came from some lyrics. I love the cast of characters you create in your stories. They are definitely unique. It was a brave (prob over-used description in comments here--but it is 1am and the best I can do subject to attack and what better thing to use writing for than to make people think and feel about something others do face.

Really phenomenal story! I really enjoyed it. You really have an extreme talent for writing. I know you said this was your first m/m story, but I wonder if you are new to writing overall or not? Either way, after reading Hidden Sun and following 'So Little Magic' I really love the fact that your characters are so DYNAMIC. You have such a variety of characters that you develop so fully. Even minor characters are developed. I love how you have more than one conflict to be overcome too. You don't follow the formula that many stories do. The stories also don't mirror one another at all. With erotic stories, some authors fall into making their characters similar, at times possibly fall into a rut creating a pair of characters that is erotic/attractive to them. The only disappointment I had was in not finding out how Ogre would deal with coming out to the team/friends, etc. I really wish you could put in a small story about that. Simce that was a huge hurdle in the relationship from the start. Though Steve decided to not break up with him despite thoughts put in his head by Eric, it still was a real issue. I felt that in the end they would still be in that awkward place they were at the mall outside of their home. I loved Heidi and hope Eric and her get together. They seem like they could be a good match with both being focussed on their studies. You could update us on that too. Well, I assume these comments so long after a story is written don't get looked up...but you wrote the story for us so I figured I'd put down my thoughts anyhow It was a great one so thanks.

I am assuming Noah hasn't moved yet b/c he was still packing last chapter, as far as I remember. I am going to cheer and laugh if it is his stupid ass ex who gets an eye full of what Noah has now! That must be quite the sight--naked, sweaty from sex, pumped muscles, tats, with a gun he clearly knows how to use--then there is the pistol lol. Good for Noah! Now, why does Eli have that gun? Didn't he say he was a security guard? I will enjoy it if that ass Derrick (is that his name?) Noah is crazy if he doesn't throw his list out with all those old pics and hold onto Eli! He is sweet, hot, attentive, great in bed...what more can he want? Bet the two kids that work for him are gonna be sharing looks and laughs when Noah is walking a bit funny! Great chapter, Rob!!

Good start. The glossary helped....having glanced over it and then using context, it was easy to work out...even for an American Look forward to more. Stuart is sweet in his shyness and I love John! That best friend with way too big a mouth! Cute start. Cam should have known he was interested given the fact he remembered when his break was and ends up in the area by chance. Just wondering why he isn't from the area if Cam's store is on the route? I'm wondering if Cam is gonna find the little statues of fat men in kilts at Stuart's house

Wow! Thanks for the glossary b/c I'd never have guessed what they referred to. I would say that it might be easier to read if you put each word/character on a seperate line. Listed one after the other made it a bit harder to read. Look forward to the story.

Great Story, Sasha! I enjoyed this one a lot and I really appreciated knowing I could look forward to a new chapter each night! I was hoping for an epilogue and it was nice to see one. To have them see Gregg again, knowing he has shifter family now. The only thing I would have added would be the black bears and him going into the river to catch some fish when the women left them to hang out and let their bears get reacquainted. He'd spoken of wanting to be back in the river with is family so many times so the image coming alive, even just mentioned in passing like that would have been good to include. Just a small note...but a great story all around. Thanks!! PS- Would you ever consider doing Gregg's story?

Sweet ending....but I am hoping there is an epilogue...I really was hoping to see Troy meet the fam and maybe they can pick Gregg up on the way. I loved the cell message from him. I think it'd be nice for them to take him for a bit, but I guess they'll prob need to settle in first. I really loved the story. Bears with opera masks! Bears on Skype--lol. funny stuff. I really loved Noah too! He was a huge help to them all around and helped them find that peace they have together now. A strength in your stories is putting real details in ...all the details about camping and building bows and camping and stuff makes it feel much more real. I like that authenticity some authors don't add in. I enjoyed it a lot, Sasha. Hope there is a last chapter, but if not, thanks for the great story!

oohhh what is up with that ex? Tate had a right to give Gavin attitude now after that comment, but I think he is not jumping to conclusions like Gavin did. What is this share thing? I thought he implied the ex was straight or bi? I'm intrigued by Tate. How old is he? What is his story? Where is he from? Lookin forward to learning more about him.

wow! Alexia is a FRUITCAKE! Her ridiculous rant made her sound pretty nutty and like a total bigoted bitch! Nic is horrible. How can anyone respect him after his reaction? How did he manage to sound like he felt badly that someone had reported them when he seems to agree with her now. She must be great in bed for him to defend her behavior. She sure has some spell over him! Well, the rest of the summer should be pretty entertaining.

If I made the rules for Wed. briefs, the wc would be so much higher! lol I got a kick out of this chapter...esp the 'choking hazard' shirt. I am really looking for Noah to relax and stop keeping Eli at a distance. maybe next week?

what a poignant chapter. You did a beautiful job explaining the thoughts of a person who is bullied by others/his other personal issues like with his parents. At the end, esp, my heart broke for this kid who was so alone and in so much pain. I esp liked the description of the teachers. That is something I have always remembered...the way the teachers wanted to be popular with the kids that were assholes/bullies and didn't come to the rescue of kids I knew who were bullied badly. Sometimes they even joined in. Great job. Looking forward to more.

I thought I saw this was complete already? I hope not! I want to know what Daniel did. How sad!

I caught this story for the first time with this chapter. I'm enjoying it. I can't even remember how long ago that show was on. Anyhow, it's clever to have brought the descendants of Salem into it. The one thing that is tough is the switches in POV. The telling from the different boys' POV wasn't bad. I think it made it too much when you went to third person for the fight. I would stick with doing it from the POV of the boys. The very beginning was a tiny bit more confusing than it had to be when you first id'd the boys by hair color. There are a lot of characters to meet and when you're first trying to say 'who was the blond?' it was too crazy. I'd id them right off that bat with names. Aside from those small issues, the story is good. I'm enjoying it and look forward to more.

I think I will be a bit mean to leave them hanging, only bc the kids might be affected if they leave, but I think they should go home if they are being harassed so much. This gay=child molester attitude is absolutely disgusting. I can't wait to see them meet the parents anyhow and get to see one another's homes. I'm sure Paddy would love to celebrate his birthday at home with his mate more than anything. Levi is such a jealous shit! I'd think it was him who complained. he got no where with Nic and went higher. How pathetic. I love how Troy is opening up and letting others see them together and showing affection. I think he feared it, but once he tried it, he enjoyed not hiding. I think it will strengthen their relationship so much. I got the note back from Kitt (thanks) about the women not being shifters. Somehow I missed that detail. I feel so badly for them. How jealous would you be to see the guys you love enjoying that ability and the bond it brings, and not be able to join in. That'd suck! Keep up the great writing! Lovin the story