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Congrats K.C.---I've been looking for something new from you for a while now So now the pressure is on with your promotion! Hope the family is well. And congrats again!

great chapter. I am so glad he got back to the pack and it seems that Brian may end up being the true person he should trust and fall for. If I had beta read this I would have just pointed out 2 things. One is, you had him call Brian 'the Alpha' and I don't remember if he was told that John was dead, so if he isn't, he'd still be alpha right? So, if you said he was dead then you were right to call him Alpha If not, say next in line or something? The other thing is that he said he had heard the wolves close to him right before he was grabbed by Alex. My question would be how Brian was able to walk away (or run) without havng to fight his way out...which so outumbered, would have probably have been a death sentence. So, where were the other wolves? I can't wait to see more. Did Brian come after Adrian himself or was there another reason he was near this clearing? Did Jas have to be a smile about something I wonder if he has wanted Alex all this time? Will they find another wolf or person who the feel is their mate? Do your wolves have mates or can they just fall in love with anyone? Like as in one person destined to be with?

I really like this beginning. I like the way you created this standoff with emotions riding over it in waves, changing from person to person and thought to thought. I think these characters will be very interesting and look forward to the story you write for them. I'd be happy to beta read for you. I also highlight the stuff that needs to be proofread if I notice it, but I mainly like to beta read and help you shape up the story by noting if I see a problem with continuity or have a question or any other number of comments I might make about stuff. I help a number of people on this site and on Lit, so if that would be a help let me know.

I liked this one b/c it gave alot of what I wrote that I wanted in the comment on ch. 6. It had the added fun of Jem kicking some big asses!!!! LOL. I loved it! I love how strong he is. Good for him! I loved how he went to wait for Kia to get home. I was hoping he actually would. Afterall, he didn't come back too soon after the last time he left! I was afraid he'd stay up top to take away the temptation. He may have planned to and then decided to return when he couldn't fuck someone else. That leads me to one of my next questions about mates for the demons. Forgive me if this was touched on in the other stories, but I haven't re-read them in a while. Is a demon only given one mate? Can they choose anyone? Or is it something that happens naturally but then can't be taken back? I really would have liked to have heard Kiorl's talk. It would have been interesting. I loved hearing how naughty those demons are going up there and killing people to be...I assumed tortured....down there. I know Kia's issues are somewhat about Nass and Kiorl, so I was surprised they didn't try to deal with any of that with Kiorl there, by having Kia let out how he feels. I hope they all get to deal with what is between them soon. I am beginning to feel that Nass is overreacting. Ok, so Kia being back reminded him of a terrible thing Kia did and how he fell for it, but he's been raging for weeks now, hasn't he? Time to be a big boy. It s very possible that he is more angry not just for him being back but for the fact that he has found what Nass lost. I feel badly for Jem b/c Nass could take it out on him by making him stay human. They said Sathriel went up top...did they mean up to our plane or somewhere in the castle? I am happy we get these chapters so close together, so thanks Sasha. I look forward to these two getting more on board with one another. I want to here them work through the stuff Kia is dealing with. Who built their new room? I hope things go a bit smoother for them. You know Kia said he couldn't do what he was always good at, but he can...he just has to do it with Jem! Can't wait for more! I agree the demons are goin a little soft with all these cute humans and such who are coming down there.

I hope we can get some more info about Kia from the others maybe. We really know so little about both of them. I'd like to know more about Jem too. What makes him tick? Why did he have no one he would miss in his old life? Is there anyone wondering about him? Is there any reason why Jem saw the demons, aside from having been with Kia? Is there anything about him different from normal humans? I feel like we need more than this push and pull with them. I think that it would be great if Jem sought out Nassau for info. The others are probably not saying much given the knowlege that Kia's in the house listening. So it would make sense for Jem to go look for info somewhere else. Maybe ask Kiorl to take him out of the house since he's kinda been stuck there. Show him around...Kia could get jealous or some other demon could try to claim Jem or he could talk to someone and learn more about the little snake demon. What makes him tick? Why is he convinced he can't have this close friendship with Nassau and Kiorl again if Jem is in the picture? Is it that the sexual part will be over, because that appears to be over either way. I hope he gets deeper into himself about why he's afraid to give in b/c it doesn't seem to be about the others really. It's not about the others in the house and I don't think it's this old relationship between he and Nass and Kiorl. Maybe Kia needs to talk to Nassau. They need to resolve things and he may also be able to help him realize what he has and what he is risking losing/taking for granted. And a nice fight or maybe just a good Nassau tantrum would be very entertaining. A fight might not go well b/c of Kia's size, but can he hold his own against Nass in his current mood. I'd like to see first hand!

Great chapter. Those demons are getting soft if you ask me. They all recognize love and want to see Kai admit what he has and not throw it away. I love that Jem. He's got a kick ass attitude! And it is pretty damn brave to come to hell knowing you could end up being a treat for any kind of demon if Kai wasn't there or didn't want him. Why does he have powers as a human? Why was he able to see Kai when they had sex? I Was a little unsure why Shax would help him so easily though. Demons aren't supposed to want to be helpful. And if he couldn't use/want the kid for himself, why help at all? That is just a thing I would have asked if beta reading. I feel badly though that Kai feels like he has to choose between his two friends and Jem when he's gotta stop pissing friends off first lol. For a demon that has been around so long, he seems a bit emotionally immature. The sticky part is going to be how Nassau reacts to him finding love when he did something that disrespected Nassau's feelings for his dead mate so badly. He may not give up one of those feathers so easily this time! I can't remember if a human can live in hell with a demon while staying human? Nass should get over his anger at Kai though, shouldn't he? It happened a long time ago and it sounds like they were so close. Kiorl will certainly be jealous too. Here, he wants love and Kai has a human come to hell for him! Do you plan to do a story for Nass someday? I just can't see him loving someone other than Mattias, but it seems like his story can't be finished as is. I hope you will. And in the meantime I can't wait for more of these two!

Still waiting for the point where it picks up where you left off on lit. I waited for so long to see the rest of this one. it was one of my favs when it came out. I started reading again a few chapters ago and am enjoying them as much as I did the first time. This point is a great one, as Kurt starts changing and developing his 'human side.' That has an impact on Tay and his relationship and also allows Kurt to interact with others in the pack more effectively. It's nice to see.

I love the honesty and strong emotions pulled out of Kiorl (can't wait till you give us his story! Dying for Nassau's story too...guess it makes sense they are closer than we thought as we get closer to the story of these three). The slippery little snake is so like the creature he resembles in so many ways. Will we get to see him and Nas square off? I hope they can make-up a bit. Nas needs to heal parts of him if he ever is going to find some peace again. I don't get the feeling that Kia did it out of malicious intent. It seems he just didn't understand how badly he was hurting Nas. Like he admitted, he couldn't see past his own need for pleasure. I know the guys have been through alot, but their friendships with one another should matter too. I don't remember if we were aware of what Kia had done to Nas. It may have been mentioned at some point. Either way, it was interesting to see him regret what he did to Nas and then do the similar thing to Kiorl. At least he thought it was the same b/c of the feeling he believed Kiorl to have. He is right about being controlled by his need for satisfacion and pleasure. But, isn't that the fun of being a demon? I hope you will have him pulled into being better kicking and screaming! I like the part of him that seems to lack control. I do hope he can make up for lost time and be welcomed a bit better by his old friends and maybe some new like Vru. They have all done things that were wrong and shouldn't hold his sins against him when underneath it were friendships that a century shouldn't have shaken so badly. All of them are in glass houses. I feel badly for him, arriving home to a sense of nobody being glad to see him or wanting him around or even having a place in his own home. I can't wait to see to what degree Jem (lol...hoping you'll still pick that nickname up--) is different and to what degree it was that Kia backed his powers off to not harm him. He did seem to break through some of Kia's powers which would be very intoxicating to the demon. He seemed totally unfazed by the crazy sight he saw too!! Keep writing! Want more! we're so demanding at times.

I think it's funny that you almost transform from one story to the next. It's like reading a different author when you write these stories versus when you're writing about your bears or wolves. The rich imagery and the colorful and crazy characters in this series make it even more addictive.

I like that nickname too..it should stick... Kai has been around and it's nice to get his story! I love these demons. I was intrigued with (ah hell, i'll just go with Timothy's nickname lol) Jem's ability to throw off his powers and weave his own magic around the demon. Looking forward to more.

Reagan IS annoying, but I can't help but feel badly for him. We all know how it is to be young and inexperienced in a relationships which leaves you being the only one who doesn't see how it really is. He just doesn't get what a manipulative dog Derek is. Oh wait, I don't want to insult dogs! Sadly, he won't see it till he catches it in person and has his heart torn out like Noah did. Though, I do feel a little less badly for him since he's a real douche. lol 'I'll pound you into the dirt and not in a way you'll like.' lmao...that has to be a future classic line! So, I can't wait to see what the culmination is. What will happen now? Will Reagan come after Noah with a gun b/c of his misled ideas about Noah and Derek being together? Somehow I can see him being pushed to that point. (Ok, that's why I leave the writing to you guys. ;P) And when will Eli introduce some of the lifestyle at the Buckle with him.

What an asshole Derek is! lol I wonder why he had to mention Noah at all. I'd think he doesn't care if he makes him jealous b/c he seems to pick men he can push around and who are just happy he comes home to them. Noah knows that's how he was when he was with him. he's stronger now. Reagan seems a bit unstable. I can understand Noah not even trying to tell the truth about what happened between him and Derek. I hope Reagan doesn't do something to hurt Noah if Derek decides to lie again and make it sound like Noah is still after him.

What a touching chapter. You did a great job of making the reader feel the emotions of Benny and Yuri. I can't imagine how Benny must have felt hearing his mate mention him. Then just as his heart sped up with exitement, it must have plummeted when he thought that he had scared Yuri and would have to continue to stay away. His heart would have broken again as he got so close to Yuri and was willing to rip himself away from Yuri again if it was what Yuri needed. It showed how strong his love was for Yuri. Then, suddenly he had Yuri in his arms! Wow, what an emotional roller coaster! I could imagine how it felt for Benny to hold Yuri again after the pain of watching him day after day, fearing he'd never hold him again. How his heart must have soared as he felt Yuri embrace him and how sweet was it when he comforted Benny. I feel so badly for Yuri. I think they need to navigate this carefully. They need to tell him why he can't remember. He isn't stupid. He needs to be treated like an adult, yet he does things that are more childlike at times. I felt badly for him when he tried to think about why his mate left him in the first place. I think that Yuri will be angry if things are kept by him and he'll see it as a lie by ommision if he isn't told. He deserves to know. I am so glad for Benny. It was so sad seeing how he felt seeing other mated couples all around like his boss and Ellis and his brother and his mate. To see others able to embrace Yuri and make him laugh and share his life while he had to be looking in from the outside. He was slowly becoming a shell of a person. I hope that they can enjoy one another soon and reconnect and enjoy some intimacy, but I have a feeling that there will be some friction when Benny feels like he's taking advantage of Yuri, while Yuri will have very adult emotions and needs he will want met. You could tell by the way they both reacted to Yuri's desire to kiss Benny. It will be interesting to see how it plays out. It's also nice to see some old favs like Cavel and Bashi (do I have that right?) I wonder what they will be able to do to help. The story is getting more exciting by the chapter. I can't wait for more.

I really like these two characters. Your ability to develop them throughout the story is a strength. at the same time there is this ironic component in both of them when it comes to admitting to their feelings. you have Mikeal who thinks things through too much who wasn't afraid to admit he loved Adam, even with less experience in relationships. Then you have Adam who lives his life in a more carefree way. He works hard, but likes to play and he has more experience in relationships and yet it took his so long to admit to his feelings. It really was nice to hear him say it, though are we sure Mikael heard him if he seemed to just wake up? Great chapter.

I feel badly for Guy. Seems like Takashi and him have some serious chemistry too. Now he'll be living not too far from him...I think he's gonna give Guy a run for his money. What is Takashi? Vampire? Fae? I really wanna know He seems older too. Why does he seem to have this effect on Joel that others don't by letting his mind be peace and letting him feel his own reactions and not just his partner's echoing back at him. You are surprising me with this turn. I feel badly for Guy b/c I think he has feelings for him already. He's a bit of a player Look forward to more...soon. Wanna see Guy again, but I would like to know what Takashi is.

I tend to comment from the same perspective as I do when beta reading. That said, I'm really enjoying the story. I Like these characters. At the same time, I feel like some plot points are underdeveloped. I know that this 'war' of sorts is going to take place and John is going to help. I have to question why John would participate when he doesn't even know what the conflict is? What is this fight over? What threat does this group of rebels present? Are they human or paranormals too? Are there other vampires who will be involved or is it just Stephen and Bill? These would be basic questions that I cannot see John not asking and seems like a hole in the plot to me. Another large point that is closely tied to the issue above is that John has asked nothing about Bill since he found out he was a vampire, aside from whether his bite would change him. I think that if you find out there is this whole other world you thought impossible and the man you feel very strong feelings towards since the moment you met tells you he's a vampire, you'd have some basic questions about vamps in general and more personal ones like how old he is and how he became a vamp and when he did, etc. Though the sex scenes are very good...particularly the one in this chapter, it feels wrong that they took no time to deal with any of this. Even if you had John mention that he needed answers and had questions and Bill said they would have time after to deal with that, the basic answers about what this fight was over would have to be answered before he's in the thick of it healing injured and possibly dying fighters. I hope you can take this in the spirit it's meant. Like I said, these are things I'd have said if I beta read for you. I hope it helps some. I do look forward to more of the story!

great chapter. That was cool that Eli wouldn't jump to conclusions and think Noah was messing with Derek. He is a good and hot guy. I'm glad they got that worked out and kneeing Derek was the cherry on top. I'm even more glad that Noah told Eli he loved him finally. Eli was patient and let him come to it in his own time, which was worth it for him finally. I have to say, I find derek to be entertaining. That sounds wierd, but he cracks me up with his actions. I love how deluded he is that he can suddenly just have Noah back and how he thinks he has him so under his control that Noah will dump Eli. He has a rep to maintain yet he is the one that left and was prob seen by someone with his boy toy. He's amusing to me, even while being a total ass, or maybe because of that. Looking forward to more of these two.

...I am enjoying this story...I do have to mention though, that wouldn't he have major questions for him about the whole vamp thing/werewolf thing? Wouldn't he cringe at the word 'attack.' I mean, the guy is good in bed with many many yrs of experience, but is that worth getting into the middle of a paranormal war? They don't know much about each other. What about Bill using the word 'love' Are they mates or something? Look forward to more.

Great chapter....always nice to see old characters. When you said that Yuri is 'childike' how regressed is he? Is he mentally much younger? Just wondering. That could be one more hurdle. Wow, I didn't realize such a short time had passed since that all happened. Can't wait for more!!

Thanks for the treat!!! That was awesome to see another update. It was great to see something of the couple before the accident, though it was sad having it ruined when it became the moment they were found. Until that time, it was interesting to see how they were together since we've had no prior view into their lives together initially. How long were they together before this? Was Yuri automatically going to take over for his father like Velaku did after his dad passed? Wouldn't that mean his mate would be an Alpha also? Benny clearly didn't believe he was. Have the nightmares Benny has picked up lately? Or has he been tortured like this every night since the event? Did it increase with all the matings around him? It's a wonder he's been able to function this long. That is really interesting about the Alpha of a clan offer. I love Velaku and Natham. They seem to know more than they are letting on. I was only surprised he didn't ask about Yuri while there. Thanks again!

Gosh, it has been so long since I read Hypnotic! I will have to go back and re-read it. I enjoyed that one alot. I can't wait to see how you are going to move Benny and his mate's story forward. What can he do to help him and what can he do with the fact that he is in a childlike state? Even if he can get Benny past being terrified of him, what kind of relationship can it be? It would be so hard to see your mate affected so badly that so little of them is left. It is so sad to see the toll the loss of his mate bond and his mate is having on Benny. Does Dav see it too because he'd know how distractions get you killed in their line of business? Just wondering, I know that he can't show his Tiger to his mate, but does his human form scare him too? I know you had to tie it in, but man I wanted to see something focussed on Benny and his mate...starting the long wait for next Wed.

Scary what a guy like Lester, with a badge, could do and get away with. Poor Guy just cares too much. He has been good about trying to understand what it is to be an empath. He did cross a boundary attempting to get him to go to the hospital with the intention of getting him psych help. That is a touchy subject, but he couldn't have thought it through enough to think how it would affect him. He isn't an asshole about it. Here he meant well. I wish Mick wouldn't push the first person to care about him, who he felt comfortable telling things about him to, away. Now, coming by so much is a bit clingy, but with how cute and sweet and hot he is, I'd put a doggy door in and tell him he is welcome anytime lol!! Great story so far. I just kinda hope Mick lets his rough edges and the armour he's put on over the years to weaken a bit so he can be with Guy. I am wondering if werewolves have 'mates' per say or if they are just attracted to someone and can choose to mate with them? Do they ever mate with humans or just other wolves or 'paranormals'? I have to say that the whole website for paranormals' reviews was hilarious.

I have alot of the same sentiments as those above. It was a brave story to write. I love how you get to the heart of your characters and that your stories help us get there too. You're particularly talented when it comes to showing who your characters are, as well as why. Don't know if it's the psych major in me and/or just the lover of a good story, but I enjoy yours alot. This one was bittersweet... It's a sad commentary on how well-intended but misguided parenting can really affect so many lives. Though, Craig should have had a better sense of right and wrong that could override his feelings of homophobia, but I guess the combination of his life experiences led him down a bad road. I am amazed when an author can make the reader feel badly for (or at least be less angry at) a character whose actions you found detestable. You've left me confused as to why I feel badly for a guy who could do what he did. Shouldn't he have suffered enough regret after he caused Tania to kill herself, not to do it again? There is something so tragically wrong with Craig. Sadly, I don't think jail will go well for him and I hope he's not more of a danger when he gets out. Maybe we can see a story later on about him? Could these two horrible events lead to him finding a way to stop hating himself....and those who make him feel things he doesn't think he should? Tania was such a sad character. That was the hardest part. That innocense and big heart. The scene where Anthony says goodbye was so sad. But, there was such heart in Tania and love from a parent that embaced their child as is. I wish her end had been different and that Craig had been different b/c maybe it could have been different. It made me sad to think of others who may choose to die b/c of how they are treated for being 'different.' If only people could be more tolerant. great work.. it will definitely make people think!

You cracked me up with their mom peeing herself....serves the bitch right!! I'm glad if anything I said helped you out...don't ever apologize for a mistake...even published authors have beta readers to catch the occasional inconsistency. I think you're doing an amazing job on the story, esp for a first-time author! You did something harder by adding in the component of historical event and time and have managed to make it seem authentic. I was definitely happy to see them address the future. I hope that Jake comes around. Sadly, I've been there...where a younger sibling only knows what they learn from their parents about certain things and that can affect how they view you when a parent is displeased and going against you for some reason. It is further complicated b/c Jake had to take on way more than a 13 y/o should have to and it is easier to blame Axel for causing that and his mom's breakdown than hating the person he has left in his family, esp when they were so close. But, I wouldn't think it fair to keep Axel in a place where he is treated poorly. We shall see how it goes. Thanks for your kind words. Great chapter! Looking forward to the next.

Just like the others, I'm excited about getting Benny's story. The Carthera tales are still among some of my fav stories from any author. I'm happier yet that there might be some hope of his helping his mate to heal. I can't imagine how bad what his father did to them had to be...that little snippet from his nightmare was horrible. i'm sure it must be so hard for him just having his brother become mated and watching him happy with his mate. But, I can understand that along with the joy, it is like a hot poker in his wound, always reminding him that he can't have that when they are around. Must be tough. I'm looking foward to this b/c I have no idea where you will take it. I thought in 'Inside of you' that Jerret mentioned his mate was childlike after what he'd been through. Or am i remembering wrong? Back to wanting weeks to speed by so we get a new chapter lol.