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Really great piece. It was short but still had a nice story and really got you thinking about the fact that it probably will be like that someday. After we really do this Earth in and it is close to 'ending' b/c of us and not some prophesy. It was sweet. Thanks.

I have to be honest about this one....It was depressing to see the prince never have a chance to live. How could his parents not see that his life being limited to a garden and almost no human contact was the reason for his lack of development? Why never let him see outside of the castle. Why did the old man not try to introduce him to new things once the knight was king, afterall, the guy probably didn't really care where the boy was? I also wondered about the whole flower thing b/c he was never given a chance to bloom or develop. So, I didn't see that metaphor as applying to him at all. I'd really have liked if you gave him a chance to develop and grow at some point in the story even if it was as an adult. I don't mean this as an attack, but just my honest reaction to the story.

I really hope you're planning to write another chapter...but it seems like you aren't. I just think that after letting us get so invested in these characters that we deserved to see them make that final commitment to one another and take their relationship to the next level. I'm writing these comments as if I were beta reading. I just would have recommended taking us through that weekend. I think that it felt a bit rushed at the end. As I had said in a previous review (forgive me if you read that already since I am repeating some of what I wrote)...the fact that they took this trip to the lake really felt thrown in from left field. It didn't feel like a smooth and natural progression since they were so wary of Jer and Glen and suddenly they are taking a trip together. The trip played a major part in the plot too, with the whole blackmail thing. It also helped with the growth of these characters as friends and couples. So I think it was something that should have been further explored in the story. The two boys were really great characters! You do a great job of developing them. They grew so much from the beginning of the story, as did their relationship. so I just think that by stopping it here, it feels like it wasn't followed through to the natural ending. Hope you'll consider writing that part. I would have recommended doing it and ending it with the same last few sentences about him looking to the future. I loved this story. I really think you are a talented writer and look forward to more of your work. thanks for posting so quickly too!

I've already said in a previous chapter review that I love this story. I continue to love it. The one thing I'd point out though, is that I feel like the lake trip was too important to the plot to not have us be a witness to it or at least to the planning of it and then maybe a mention about how it went when they 'get back.' When you suddenly point out that this trip is what the pics are from and they went with Jer/Glen, I went back to see if I missed a chapter where they went. It kinda came out of left field that they had done this and now there were such great repercussions. Hell, I'm wondering if you're going to respond that I did miss the chapter I think the reason it also felt strange was the fact that they went with Jer/Glen. Here, they were so sure Glen was up to something b/c he was suddenly dating one guy consistently and he's suddenly changing from a top to bottom for him too. They were wary and then we are to think they went away together. I just picture it being a bit awkward. Hell, the loud sex alone would be a bit awkward for a couple who isn't sleeping together or doing more than heavy petting, ok and grinding too lol. Looking forward to the rest.

I was so happy to see these updates already...any more coming today? I can see it now...Cole just walked poor Dale into a corner he'll use later. Cole will definitely make a good politician. I hope he is gearing up to make the argument that Dale must like him or he wouldn't be pretending to be his boyfriend..or whatever argument he has, soon. I think they'd be good together. I just think he's letting Dale get too far into the bitterness that comes from thinking he likes Cole and might even have deeper feelings for him, but they aren't returned. Dale is going to push him farther away if he doesn't let him know how he feels soon. He's pretty good at reading people and getting what he wants so I don't know why he hasn't gotten Dale aside at all costs to talk this out with him. I also think Dale has to stop saying the sentence about being his beard b/c eventually the wrong person is gonna be close enough to hear and the shit will hit the fan. Well, I'm dying for these two to try it out for real. I'd really like to see them together and I hope once they are that you follow along with them as they try to get a relationship off the ground. Lookin forward to more.

I know a story is good when I don't take the time to comment on chapters. I just caught this tonight and had to read it all! I really love the story. This chapter was pretty big and made things more complicated than they already were. Cole better use his confidence and insight into people and figure out if he wants something with Dale or he could lose him. I like both of the guys, so I can't say that I favor one over the other. I'm only surprised Cole would pull back for a week when he is usually the one to push forward and talk it out and such. Dale made it clear, with his comment about not know if you don't try, that he would have been interested in Cole if he were bi or gay. So, the ball is in his court. I actually kinda feel badly b/c one of the guys is gonna be left hurt. Unless Cole has me fooled and doesn't really have feelings, beyond lust, for Dale. I have to say that one of the best features of your writing is that you add in real details which are actually pretty interesting. I've learned a few things. The details on the campaign process, talks about the issues and the medical even, all make this seem much better. It takes it up a level and makes it even better. So keep that up. I can't wait to read more.

I like this one alot. You created a really interesting world with intriguing characters in a short chapter. I like it b/c it's close enough to our time to kinda make you wonder what it would be like if that suddenly happened My question is why was he left in the cryo tank and why was the building abandoned? Clearly the war wasn't going on at the end of the 2 yrs he promised to be in it. It was thirty yrs before the vamps/weres made themselves known. So, what happened?? I hope you tell us soon. I think the craziest part for the character would be to find this out and have to wonder if you'd live the rest of your life on the run from these vampires. Was he doomed to live in a place like this building just to hide and keep from being killed by the sect? Also, you'll have to explain how the humans could be pretty easily defeated during a time when we have so much technology (and they had thirty yrs to make further progress) and have troops to defend ourselves, etc. These vamps must be numerous, though I guess their abilities would help them take on more of us. Well, I look forward to this and hope you continue it b/c it seems like a really promising story.

Really beautiful story. I loved it.

I love how you write a story for a prompt ...something so short which can clearly be turned into 3 books! I'd love to see you build on this someday. But, your mind keeps turning, so who knows what you'll write about. I'd like to see you turn to this again. Maybe if you do another prompt you could use it to add to this. hmm?

I like the story so far...I have to ask if you're continuing it b/c it says "complete" in the status category. I'm sure that was a mistake b/c their story was just starting and we don't even know what happened that sent Riley looking for Kyle in hospitals. Look forward to more.

I really like the idea of the lion being a separate being. I love the lion too...it's so sweet how he likes the boy. I read your comments about Tek above and I look forward to learning more of his past. I can't seem to reconcile the man who rescued him and cares for him well with the gruff and short tempered man. I don't know if he resents having to care for the boy? Why be caring and yet not show understanding when it comes to his fears and behaviors fostered by the uncle. I look forward to more. I also wanna know what an orphic is and how tek knew his father. How an he teach the boy about what he is. Well, keep it coming, Cia. Brilliant work as always.

So good...but so short...I wish I were disciplined enough to let the story get several chapters posted so I could read them together later on....but I can't...so I am left wanting more desperately all week such sweet torture but really... i'm confused by the end. Does he separate from his lion during the transformation and his lion greeted him? I assume that is what happened, but then why would the part that is man have to separate the boy from the lion? I like Tek alot. He seems so gruff yet caring. I really hope he avenges this poor boy's treatment at some point. I have a feeling the boy will be a weepy mess oftentimes b/c kindness after such awful treatment will probably do that to him. I'm intrigued to learn more about his family history and I don't mean that awful uncle. I really want to know more about his dad and mom and his family's repuation that the wemic refers to. thanks cia!

Great start...mean cliffhanger! You really did a great job of making these characters real. They both have such stubborn personalities, so this is gonna be good. The beginning was precious and funny wibth them as little boys. It is so sad to see Cory think he's dying. I can't imagine getting that news (and how pissed I'd be when I realized it was wrong!) I think Skylar is a bit ahead of Daniel on the uptake and maybe gets that they both have feelings? Well, I can't wait for more! soon please!!!

I'm enjoying this story. Just wish the chapter had been longer....please more soon! You've done an outstanding job of making the reader feel the connection between them. I hate to see it break. I am surprised Heath left Alec in that shape for 2 reasons: 1) Leaving somebody hurting like that is tough if you are beginning to love him and lets be honest, if he's saying he understands his mom's talk of soulmates, it is love and 2) He's already have to overcome the fact that he's lied to Heath the entire time he's known him, that he was gonna kill him and that his job was killing people for years. How many were like Alec afterall, who died b/c some rich guy was pissed at him? Now he left him feeling like they'd never see each other again. And sometimes when love is in play you get hurt more over the latter than the former. I also have to question how Alec, who is at minimum, a millionaire, can possibly disappear when he has all the stuff he does. He'd have to liquidate assets, etc. Even if he disappeared, it'd be tough to do what he had to without being found, unless he abondaned everything completely. And I'd not recommend leaving it all to Kaila since they already have a man on the inside with her and can use her... I just can't wait to see how you work this all through...again--please, more soon!!!!

Wow! Great job with this. You are continuing to keep me on the edge of my seat and unsure where you're going. Rarely can authors accomplish that! I have so many ideas of how it could go for Gabe once he's safe. I almost feel like Tristan and Orian would share him if they could do the co-guardian thing. BUt I doubt they'd mate Then another theory popped in my mind when you spoke about Neil. What if he was to be with him? Neil is part wolf afterall, so maybe he could be his guardian. Maybe something about him being part Jarkla also could help them change the view/job etc of the jarkla and start a new legacy for future ones. But the whole aging thing would prevent that. I can't believe you're adding in the hunters now! That makes this whole thing even more complicated. I'd think a war with hunters would have to be a second book! You would have to let the jarkla mate, establish his relationship with his guardian and help him learn how to use his powers. The plan how to use his gifts and if he wants to change the 'being a tool' part of the jarklas is a whole other thing. Do the hunters know about the jarkla? Wouldn't they be happy he is there and causing peace amongst the werewolves? I'd like to see you involve Tristan more in discussions like the one that just took place, even if it's b/c he listened at the door. I think that he needs to be in on all the knowlege and factors affecting them. I like that he has acted so maturely and taken his dad's lessons to heart. I think he'll be a great alpha. I think he'd be a good mate for gabe b/c he has such faith in him and like Orion, wants to change the fate of the jarklas. But, I keep feeling like you're pushing him on the back burner or taking him off the stove completely *wierd analogy, I know * Keep writing so we see another chapter soon. I can't wait for more!

WOW...this story is so good. I've been reading it steadily since last nite when I have time. I'll be up all nite probably now..it's almost 4 am...but I will keep reading. I really like the imaginative story. I do have some questions...why has Tristan not reached out for him? Amaya said he could reach him in the meadow. I'd have liked him to begin to be reminded of his friendship with Tristan's wolf. And maybe get to know the man a bit. I also wish Tristan had contacted him to warn him about Scott coming, but then the story would have gone in another direction. I really love how Gareth's words are coming true and people are changing. Orion definitely has changed b/c of Gabriel. It seems he will also have a big effect on the pack members of Scott. I'd like to see them build up some strength within b/c of the kindness of the Jarkla and begin feeling something but fear, though not let Scott know they are changing. I love that Jake stayed to protect Gabe. His dad should be so proud. And to stand the beatings in order to help him and not feel anger and resentment that he's now in this hell b/c of Gabe is something else. I wonder what will happen with Orion and Tristan. You've created this strange situation where Gabe now feels romantic feelings as well as a sense of safety and companionship with Orion. I feel like he's close to offering himself to him. Yet, I believe that Orion is recognizing his error in thinking. I think he is beginning to realize that Gabe is young for him. I think he is desiring less, the power that drew him to the Jarkla. At the same time, Gabe is slowly forgetting Tristan who was his lifeline the last 2 yrs. So, it's a strange situation and I kinda wonder where you'll take it. I'd like to know one or two things...like why Orion had kids with Tasha and then left them and didn't stay there as alpha. Afterall, he'd have his kids, the lady he cares for and a larger pack. So, why did he move away from them? I also wonder what made him have kids with her. Was it just that they were conceived when he had sex with her or was it intended. I'd like to learn more about what the Jarkla is supposed to do. Maybe see Gabe have more instincts of his job. We only really have gotten this idea that he is to protect animals, but what else does he do? How does he protect all animals if he is part of one pack? Another question I have is timing. You say during the flashback that Neil/Amaya dying/Gabe's birth happened 17 yrs ago. yet it was only a few months at most after he came to Orion days after his 16th birthday. A year hasn't passed. Maybe that is just a small error. Well, I'll keep reading and can't wait to see where you take it. I can honestly see it going several ways. I'm sure it'll be good whichever way you went.

hi, new fan here. I caught the new chapter description so decided to read the story. I really am enjoying it. The Simon thing didn't surprise me, but even still I'm glad he found out this way and didn't go to Simon with the news he'd fallen for Alec. That would probably proven deadly for Alec alot more quickly...possibly deadly for Heath too. I'm wondering if Simon has greater feelings for Heath than he is letting on. The way he talks about him and to him seems like it's a little more than fond feelings for a long time friend. You have done a good job of developing these characters despite not giving us too much info about them. Yet, their personalities come through and their relationship/feelings seem natural and real. I look forwad to seeing what happens b/c I can't imagine how this could go well for them. I just can't see Simon giving them the go-ahead to be together or for Heath to leave his business. My one question would be..and I guess I need to wait to see how involved Simon and he were, though it had to be deeply enough to lead to such strong feelings...how would Heath have not known about him being serious with someone? He doesn't seem like he hides stuff from Heath as he might with his other 'workers.' I can't wait to see what could possibly been done to him to cause him to want him not only bereft of everything, but dead! I also am not sure if Alec can accept all that Heath is going to have to admit to. They haven't been together so long that finding out what this guy does, what he came to you to do, etc. would be something you'd want to work through. Especially if his experience with Simon went so badly. Please give us a new chapter soon...

I love this story so far...God I hate Wed Briefs!!! This is a WB story right? They drive me crazy being so short. The only thing that makes it easier is that it must be worse for writers like you who put so much into their stories! One thing I feel when I read your short chapters is that you keep the pace up at the same pace. I realized it when I re-read it here from the start. It's interesting to me how you do it. I like these two b/c the passion always feels like it's going to explode right under the surface. I, too, wanna know who Pete is. If it is his brother I will scream at you though lol. But, I don't think you'd make that a mystery. cannd

I really like the characters in this (except for Nina and Bo is...eh...the jury is still out on him). I think you need to develop these characters a bit more. I'd like to know more about who Alec is. What does he do for a living? How did he become so wealthy? How did he and Kaila meet and how long ago? Is there anything he's involved in that could have brought this down on him? What's his romantic history? Whoever hired Heath obviously has very strong feelings which you can tell from the way they are asking for it to be so personal. What is Heath's romantic background? Has he let anyone get close before? It seems like it will be tough for him to opt out and keep them safe b/c obviously if there are mob connections involved, they'd be in danger.