Cannd

I loved this story. It was a great combination of characters and surprisingly I loved the threesome of mates you created. I'm not usually into the multiple mates thing. But this threesome really was balanced and it seemed like the love was really spread evenly. I liked the other characters you added too. The only thing I felt was left hanging was the issue of hybrids. What would happen when an attempt to create one worked and didn't end in death? It could lead to some huge problems. I am loving all your stories I read.

This is Nephy and not an alien who took over her body, right? I mean, two very sweet chapters. I am very intrigued as to what could bring this on?. LOL I know it is too good to be true. But really, I do expect the shit to hit the fan eventually. I have enjoyed the sweet stuff. I love Luke so much. It is great how you show such an innate strength, but then also is a child. THose little moments of insecurity and fear and need for reassurance. I can't see how he could take Luke back to his planet. I still wonder about Dee's planet. I don't think we ever learned about it. Would he ever use the purple light thing to go back? I am kinda waiting to hear Sys is pregnant again. I wonder if they could create a baby. I know there was craziness as soon as they mated before they had to run, but they never talked about that. Can't wait for more of this story.

I agree...sadistic characters you have...and they sure do get joy over inflicting pain! At least they will have something to do over their long years together lol. I'm not usually one for gratuitous violence but somehow I'm enjoying this enough to overlook it or take it too seriously since it's about supernaturals. Anyway, I know you mentioned that you want advice so I just wanted to put down a few things I'd have noted if I beta read it.... -Has he ever met another 'person' like him? -I think saying he's an immortal human is silly. Obvously humans aren't immortal. -I found their interview to be severely lacking in terms of what they could have gotten from her, info that they would need to fight these people. Some things they should have asked, like who the senator that was threatened and who leads the agency was? What was her job? -what is the name of this agency? Why was she sent alone if this is a gov't agency with tons of resources? -How would the doctor force him to take a vamp he doesn't know home? I mean, even if he agreed to get him out of the hospital, what would force him to take him home? -Is the doctor part of this agency or was he just directed to the things he did? -Why was Victor chosen to be the revenant? Did they just grab any vamp? -I get how the plan was smart in terms of killing off that madame vamp, but sending Viktor to pay him was strange b/c he had been starved to the point where he would be a killing machine, so what would have stopped him from jumping onto Mark when he brought the payment to him? -Why would they think Mark would take this vamp home? As far as they know, he's a person who handed him a payment? They didn't know Mark was his mate and if it hadn't been his mate, he isn't the type to take a vamp home b/c he feels bad for the kid. -I was surprised they didn't ask what they planned to do with Viktor. Yes, the plan would cause Viktor to drain Mark and not remember he did it, but he'd have to be taken out of there before he woke up or he'd have seen a body, how could one woman take him out if he's unconscious? -Once he drained Mark, he'd have most of his strength back. Why would he not drain Emma, a human, and take off? She is alone clearly since she was supposed to check in with the agency, so she's no match for a vamp. He certainly would remember the part of his being starved to the point of madness, so what did she plan to do? Did she think she'd hold his hand and lead him back to the people who captured and starved him? I'm not trying to rip you apart...I like the story and look forward to more. I'm just trying to help if you ever decide to extend it or something. I do a lot of beta reading so I kind of think that way even when I read for enjoyment I am looking forward to more.

I'm intrigued by the story. I think I'm more intrigued by the fact that you seem to know so much about tea from the time it grows all the way to the cup we drink. I wouldn't have ever known that there was so much to it. The idea that there are special ways to serve it and such, is interesting. Do they serve food at the tea house also? Or is it all about the tea? I guess it makes sense that you could have a place where the type of tea and the way it is served is important. A cup of tea, even in our culture, is a very simple experience, but also can be comforting and calming and a way to relax alone or to share with friends. I know they claim some teas are invigorating, etc. Anyway, I can see how the Starbucks of the tea world could threaten this small shop. Though, I for one, would prefer to sit in a place like you describe, rather than the machine that these big chains are. Anyway, my original point was that I am intrigued as to why you know so much about tea I look forward to learning more about the main character. What is a phonetic pronunciation of his name? I also wonder if it is part of the culture that he is calling San by first and last name. I don't know if you said what country this was in. I think we have alot to learn about San as well. I am more interested in knowing what role his father plays in the business since it sounds like San is running it, yet he clearly is looking for his father's opinion. I wish you'd have given a hint as to what he is looking to do so we know why he is visiting tons of tea shops. It felt like that was missing. I think even a broad comment like 'he was looking for a place that would serve his rare tea leaves.' Just so we know why he comes with his own leaves and asks the guy to make tea out of it. What didn't make sense and made the owner seem to be terrible at business was that here this guy walks in with these rare (according to the chef) leaves and he doesn't ask where he got them and if these are all he had and he just wanted someone to make it who knew how or if there are more to be had. His place is close to shutting down and he asks no questions about it or the man who brings them in. I think he let a potential opportunity walk out of the shop when he should be looking into every possible wayto make the business pick up. I also look forward to finding out what the owner (notice I can't remember his name lol) thinks of San. Is he attracted to him? Actually, I guess we should wait and see if he is even gay first. keep writing!

It ended up being a great story. I enjoyed it alot. I only wish we'd had a steamy scene after he came home. I kinda thought that would happen! and pretty quickly after 4 years. I think you even made Sei's change of attitude and heart seem believable. The only other thing is I wish you had made it somewhat more clear as to what the brother was into and why. I really like how you allowed the characters to grow and you found a way to give those of us who aren't familiar with Japanese culture an understanding so that the reasons for their action weren't 'lost in translation.' Thanks!

I really liked it b/c it really was well-written, got the blood running, but let the reader fill in the blanks. I liked how it seemed to me that the person got their nervew up to agree to it, but then wasn't so sure when they were there, chained up and looking at the tools of the trade. I imagined the person walking through the room even before agreeing to it and thinking how different it probably looked from the different perspective! But what was very intriguing too was wondering if the eyes of the man looking at them had changed...were they normally that cold? Or had they changed as they entered the room to see the person hanging there, afraid and... excited?

I am enjoying this story. They are both emotionally damaged people who I think, stand to be a good thing for one another. The thing that confused me was at the beginning he says he knows Logan wants him to move upstairs with him. He is clearly seeing that Logan wants something with him. Then at the end he all of a sudden saying that he knows he's just the kid that lives downstairs and he has no right to ask questions. Obviously those are two totally conflicting evaluations of their situation. I kinda wish this chapter had been longer. I felt like it didn't really move the story forward except for their trp trip to the grocery store.

Wow, I had to read 5 also and I am glad I missed it b/c i'd have hated not knowing if sys was gone. And somehow I can never tell with you I kinda was annoyed that Dee seems to forget how young Luke is and treat him like an adult. He is clearly very very smart and competant. He saved them several times over that day. At the same time, he is a boy too. He deserved some hugs and consolation after watching his dads be out for 2 days and when Dee and he go to see Sys, Dee sends him off on his own instead of having a moment. It seems like Dee is sometimes too focussed on Sys to be a dad. You had me worried when Luke wasn't sure where they were, whether they were back on the planet with the prince somehow. But, it was nice for his brother to be there and for sys to learn they didn't turn their back on him. I am unsure why his brother would have wanted to bring him to a war torn home planet again, exile lifted or not. I do wonder if someday Luke could be a good option for his planet. He is the only royal relative left afterall. But, I agree it would be too dangerous now. I hope Sys gets to see his parents at least. I am wondering too if there could be another baby on the way after sys allowed that thing to happen the last time they mated. I hope Dee can be a bit more nurturing with Luke though. The kid has been through way too much and though it's hard when a kid is very mature or able-bodied, you have to remember they are still a kid. Can't wait for more!!!

Good one Stephen- Uzi's. ha! I really liked how it ended up being Uzzi who wanted to be the more 'gentile' of the two...afterall, it shows how they are bound so tightly and influence each other souls. I do have to wonder if the bad guys could have mates out there who could be as evil as Pasha and Uzi are good? And even if that is unlikely, doesn't it stand to reason that if Pasha could find his Angel side which I believe said it had been there the whole time inside of him, that Michael, Gabe and the others could find that part of them eventually too? Pasha left as a human too. Great story. I hope we get a bit of a view of them in their HEA for a short time at least

lmao...when nephy sounds like the romantic of the bunch and defends an easy love forming, I expect the real aliens to come. lol I'm glad it wasn't the end of the story. I think there seemed to be something a little more than just emotions that seemed to be happening for a while. it wasn't like they didn't know each other at all. It seemed there was a moment there where some physical thing happened. I'm wondering if they'll somehow manage to make a little hybrid baby...now that'd be cool! I loved the creative physiology you've created throughout the story. The baby sounds adorable. I am interested in hearing Dee's story of how he ended up on Earth, then in the lab and how he escaped. Are the people who help the other aliens human or are they like Dee and able to appear human? Why didn't Sys tell Dee he was pregnant when he knew he was? His ex really was a cold-hearted bastard wasn't he! Wow! To send off your lover and child into the unknown. Really cold huh! I really love this story. Look forward to more. ~cannd

I can't help but feel that Balthazar doesn't have Aaron's well-being in mind with his decisions. It's about what he wants to happen and manipulation of Aaron and the other boys...whether it be keeping him from people or pushing him into people. I thought Ryan was genuinely interested in helping him, but him putting Andrew up seems more like a ploy to give Aaron what he wishes he could have with Greg. The way he answered the question about the kid's grandmother was ridiculous and gave him no answers. Talk about a mind fuck, having the one person you've always depended on ripped away with no real explanation or goodbye? Then, he connects with Jon and Sam, only to be kept away from them at any costs. Greg is mighty down on Jon given the kid has saved Aaron's life. Ugg...it's frustrating right now seeing this kid's future be manipulated with no one really caring what is best for him. It's sad

Hey, So, is it possible for Jon to have a relationship with someone that isn't motivated by his talent? Is whatever bond he feels or draw to them, etc. always based on the talent? That would suck. I can't wait to know what the talent is that Aaron has. I was surprised that he didn't ask about his grandmother. In the store and such, when she was away he freaked a bit. So, it's strange he isn't wanting to know where she is. She's been his almost sole bond all this time. I hope it was Landon who was watching them after the whole Tom debacle. I can't help but still want to know about Landon. It sucks though that he must be a cannibal. Was it a random occurance that Tom had a Talent? Hal didn't have one right? Was he a blip also? I got the sense he wasn't. A question from the beginning...did Landon intend to give Aaron the cake he had given him, even if he didn't happen to come upstairs or was it his cake he gave him? Hal seemed to know what it was. I've just wondered about that. Thanks! Off to the next chapter.

I was so happy to see this chapter since your blog had a new story. Will you be finishing here instead of as a brief now? That way you could make it longer...hmmm? please! lol Anyway...wow, where did this development come from? I assume when he was 're-made.' I am also wondering how he was able to re-establish the bond? Hmm...do we not have to wait for Wednesdays anymore? lol very hopeful wishing going on

I really hope the story continues. I thought it said complete on the description, but hopefully I misread. I am wondering what he meant when he said he had failed before. And what kind of second chance did he think he has now? I hope it continues and we learn more about this character. I hope you can really get under his skin and make him a deep character, developing him past his story stated so generally so far. I want to know more about him. Look forward to meeting the boy he found when he wakes up

I am loving this one. I guess I am dense b/c I really didn't see the signs another commenter said they saw that Dee wasn't human. I didn't see that coming. Wow! I was unsure who Dee was talking about when he mentioned his 'friends at the lab.' When he says the lab could find the leak..how many aliens have they rescued? that must be dangerous! Did anyone help Sys get out? It sounds like he got out on his own according to him. Poor Sys...how scary that labor must have been. How is he pregnant and by who? Why did Dee keep his secret from him? I just hope Dee doesn't push him away. Now could it be Dee's...maybe on his planet sharing a drink gets you knocked up! lol I can't wait to know Dee's story!! can't wait for more! Ahh I have so many questions!

I couldn't help but want to smack these guys upside the head during the whole chapter. It was stupid to go look for his family without trying to call them and see if they were safe. Instead, they go toward the problem, not trusting that his family is smart enough to get out. Then they stop while they have water up to their waist or chest to talk things out? I mean maybe if they were moving it wouldn't have bothered me, but they knew they were in a race against time and they were insane to stop. I can't blame Riley for trying to help the drowning man...yes a stupid thing you shouldn't do, but I can't say I would have let the guy go by to protect myself. But, then, he goes back out in it instead of staying safe and waiting for Kyle or notifiying police he was out there still. It was just insane behavior. I am glad we at least know what happened that had Riley running around the hospital to find Kyle. I'm only surprised b/c it's Riley who just got taken by the water so I would have expected it was him being looked for. I can't wait to know what happens, so please have mercy on us and update soon! It was terribly sad to hear Gabe's fate. I can't imagine the guilt that would be there if you knew that something you did to someone caused them a breakdown and eventually their death. While you could reason that you couldn't not tell him that you loved someone else, it would be another not to feel that you pushed the person to such a bad place. Lookin forward to more!

oohh, I never would have thought of Tom being in the coven. I thought him or the father might continue to search for the woman. More likely him, b/c the father probably doesn't want a woman who abandoned them back. But, how in the hell did he get involved with the Coven? It certainly can't be by chance. And the kid didn't sound intelligent enough to find the mother/Aaron on his own. So, I'd think the Coven knew what happened to Aaron. Why not get the kid sooner? Did they not know he had promise maybe? Why would Harris order the kid's extermination without letting someone attempt to train him (as Jon or Andrew pointed out)? Why not let them test it and if the kid is a low functioning talent, then kill him? I'd like to know his thoughts on this. This world is sooo brutal. There are so many people who are just removed from society and used for research/tortured/killed. These talents seem to not have consciences. Scary!

Hey J, thanks for the answer to my long questions in 9. I re-read this before I kept going forward. I wonder why the Balthazar family is given so much power? Talia has a big role going out on jobs like the one she did with those boys. Andrew may not have a job like that or be headmaster, but Balthazar clearly sees to it that he has some purpose by putting Aaron in his hands. I kinda hate the hypocracy in setting up the kid's life and deciding who he should be with romantically. Push/pull or not, common experience of having been in the coven's hands or not, it is messed up that they are planning his future just like the coven would have. Albeit, being a cannible is a worse future to be condemned to. I assume Landon has to be one? That's sad if so. It says how Andrew has changes happening in him...are they saying he will become a cannible no matter what? If so, why set poor Aaron up to maybe lose him to whatever the result of his being contaminated by the Coven is. How in the heck to you work on two complicated and long stories at one time? It blows me away. Ok, off to 10 c

Gosh, do I hate Xavier!! I just can't imagine what purpose it served for him to do what he did to Alex. I guess he doesn't care what betraying Alex will do to the control he thinks he has over Alex b/c he needs the anima. I guess he'll be sneaking it to him....well that could go anywhere since Alex is very unpredictable now. I see how it will lead to issues with Jason, but he seems okay with the outside relationships Philip has now. I will hate to see the strife between them again since they haven't had a chance yet. I will ask again, will they become more like themselves after all these changes or will they be these creatures that don't act like the men we knew? I would expect there to be changes in them, but for now they are just slaves to their desires, needs, wants, etc. Thanks for answering my long ass comment (i'm famous for those lol) Will this be the last book? Or will we get the consequences of Jason's actions that you refer to later in another book? cannd

First, I had two questions about where Thomas was...good old observer who Kristen doesn't know exists and I am also wanting to know if the barrier was created or if it just formed? Aww I'm really sad to see Darius lose his free will. I liked him alot. Though he must have been close to his 40th b/c he was older than Philip, right. I have to say that the changes in Philip and Jason into men controlled solely by lust is disappointing (we've not seen the protective part yet). I accepted their polyamorous natures as just they way they are brought up, but that was when they knew who they were and had more thoughts than how to get this one or that one alone to fuck them. And Varrus isn't thrown into the mix yet! I can't see this going well for some reason. It is fun looking into the future of the story and predicting stuff. You leave so much open for that...like thinking about Philip having to face poor Alex. But if Caleb or Varrus have control over Darius, then maybe he'll have Darius kill him. It's too bad Philip didn't spend more time with his brother and less time fucking so he could have helped the kid. He spoke of his faults, but didn't spend time with him trying to teach him how to be. Clearly, no one did. It is mainly why he needed what Xavier wanted. He has shown he is smart and he is so young, so with some more guidance, he may have made it. Now he's under that monster's control and we know he'll prob end up being a major opponent I'm also not sure how this handful of men is going to save anyone. what is their goal even? they aren't legatio or centurians anymore. I feel like the goals and hopes for Jason in books 1-2 aren't the same anymore. I thought his goal was to teach the legotios to love the centurians? It looks like there won't be many of either left to change. What is their goal anyhow? If they stop the Dominus from taking over Ares, but what will there be to take over? The armies are decimating it and destroying the beautiful green lands with fire. They are killing innocent people. And now those who were meant to bring a good future to it are changed into these creatures that aren't anything like the people they were. I still like the story I just am starting to wonder about all these things with the developments in this chapter especially.

This story is really kick ass. I have to say I believed from the beginning that Alex would be the one to betray them. I'm sure he may not do it totally of his own accord...But I forsee that he will see Jason's bonding to Philip as a betrayal and will go crazy. I'm glad Gideon didn't bond to him yet. My one question would be why the guys are still wanting to hold on to the Centurian laws and such? I didn't expect Xavier to break his leash to that wind bag Perils. But, maybe Jason can outdue his control b/c he's bonded to Alex? Well, probably not b/c he never gave his bond to him....who knows. I can't believe that bastard Perils was selling skulls of the centurians. How horrid. Agamemnon's must have been worth a pretty penny. I am so happy Philip and Jason finally bonded and you did a beautiful job showing what was different between them compared to the others he accepted bonds to. What is the result of the bonding that Philip has done with others before Jason? Has he bonded to any others by swapping anima? Who are the monsters that have Aiden and his lover? That can't be good given the Jadoorians could have been allies against the Dominus. I didn't see eric coming out bad. I worried who he was giving the blood to, but I thought he was good. I'm so glad Kristen is good! I wonder if Gideon can be healed by Jason or Philip? Will we find out why Philip became a demon? I know jason can control him, but haven't they always been evil? I would have liked to see you put the prophesy and some of the bonding facts on the cheat sheet you have in bk 1 in ch. 25 Well, I am glad I found this when it was written b/c I'd have died waiting for chap. by chap. I hope you can get this published at so point. It is incredibly good.

Hey, I'm still captivated by this story. One thing I'd like to help with is when you do quotes..when a new speaker begins to talk you start a new paragraph. You'll see it will make it clearer to read also. I can't wait to keep reading.

Wow! I loved this book! What a great story. Well-written. There were a few spots where I would have commented, but I couldn't get myself to stop reading long enough to do so. lol Those who know me would know that is big~I like to comment I really enjoyed this and will start right up on Book 2. It's super lucky when you find something that is complete so you don't have to be tortured waiting for more. I am shocked Alex and Gideon aren't in lots of trouble. I can't remember the rules about rules surrounding a legatio's bonding to centurians. I guess they can bond to more than one. How wrong it was for the boys to trick him into it. And they did. They prevented him from making the choice with full knowlege of the result. They used his love of centurians to do it. Book 2 should be really crazy with all the pot stirring that has been done and b/c Jason will not just be surrounded by family and other Centurians. I have a feeling he is not gonna go over well there. At least not without the other Legatio trying to bend him to their will. I'm glad he'll have the guys to help him. I wish they had taught him more so that he'd not be at risk b/c of ignorance. I am assuming Kristen and Erik are angels? That was interesting too. One thing that I didn't feel made sense was the space Philip allowed between them. He almost avoided Jason in the end. I know he doesn't want to force him into anything or hurt him b/c he has so few yrs left but for god's sake, he better up his game b/c others won't play fair--even own brother shjowed that. I was mainly surprised at the fact that Philip so openly slept/screwed around with the other Centurians. I know that nature wouldn't change in him. He isn't like Alex who is trying to change the make-up of a centurian or show that it can be changed/bent. But, I am surprised he did it in front of Jason like he did. It felt wrong that Jason didn't react negatively to it too. He seemed to show jealousy in the beginning and then suddenly he's all zen about what he sees. I thnk he should have shown jealousy and questioned Philip's ardor for him. I'm excited for the next book~ Off I go.

WOW! This story is excellent. I'm so glad I decided to check it out. It caught me up like a cyclone and I couldn't stop reading. I hope more is put up soon. I always admire authors like you, when they make such an involved plot with a large cast of great characters. It always makes me wonder how the ideas for it developed. Anyhow, I really like the characters who are really well developed and strong in their own rights. i was surprised when Gerick proved to be so sadistic, but as he said to Leopold, being a guild man changes him. Being a corrupt prelate really changed him, as we aren't led to believe those are his tastes with the other men he is with like Leopold, Thomas or Joshua. You really surprised me when we found out Falcon was alive! I love that. He was different than his sister in the beginning. He desired real love from Estelle rather than just blind obedience/adoration that he got from everyone else. I am wondering why so may protectors ended up in jail rather than killed when they weren't able to protect their charges? I am also anxious to know why Vard and Austin were thrust from the void. I am guessing that Joshua gets so hurt if he knows of that bond that he stops being the key to the void. He is still the key to the void for Vard and particularly for Austin. What happened to Austin though? I don't think he could have hurt him even if he was privy to the bond forming between them.

i love this story! I can't wait for more either. Where is Landon? Is he still in the grasp of the master? I thought he is in the school b/c unless it was a typo, Jon had said that Landon shouldn't have ever been let back in to Lakes. Who is Andrew? Is he really Landon? If not, I am wondering how he survived what happened at the coven and what happened after. You explained why Jom wants Aaron, but why does Andrew? I really can't wait to hear where Aaron came from before being kidnapped. Something I wanted to ask back in the beginning is what Landon planned to do on Cake Day in reference to Aaron. Was he just resigned to letting the boy be eaten? Was he going to get him the cake he had that he gave him? I can't imagine he was going to leave him to it with the other boys in his group. What did that cake do? Did it unblock his abilities or block them? Did it give him his Talent? Please answer these if you can lookin forward to more!