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Great beginning. You pulled me right in.

Ok, until now I kind of dismissed this story as a fun read in the style of an airport bookstand purchase — marshmallow or cotton candy. Nice writing, steamy — fun storytelling but quickly gone. The ending scene totally upended my assumptions and taught me to not to be so cavalier in my judgments. Thank you! This is really good and I am so looking forward to what you do with it.

So glad your “family” and you are back. Looking forward to what is to come.

“and knew that everything was going to be alright” Oh no — that phrase — it’s the kiss of death! Pandora’s box! The dark cloud behind every silver lining. The footsteps in the dark. Fasten your seatbelts because it is about to get bumpy! Kinda tried to slip than in at the very end but we know what you are about. LOL! Can’t wait to see what happens next!

I think this story needs to end here. It would be much too facil to tie everything up in a neat package — “and they all lived happily ever after.” Carter and Jeremy need to ripen, to go through their inner journeys and, if it feels right, eventually come back different than who they are now. See what you can do with them, give them each a story and then see if you want to bring them back together or if they want to come back to each other.

This is a good start to the story. It draws the reader in. Acknowledging this is 100% your process, please consider that longer chapters provide continuity and help maintain [this] readers’ interest.

So am I the only one who thinks that this thing with Dillon is going to become a pretty big plot point with tears, slammed doors, broken hearts, and lots of really good make-up sex between Barrett and our hero?

Have I ever told you how much I hate cliffhangers😵‍💫😵‍💫😵‍💫! Intense chapter!

There is such a lovely sensitivity to your storytelling. It is the small touches such as the scene about the schnitzel and the office conversation. Your writing keeps pulling me in.

I know every good story has to have a foil but can we just hit DELETE on Dexter, please? I mean, who would know? 😜this is really well written. The scene and character come to life. Nice job!

This chapter brings tears to my eyes as I had the honor and good fortune of traveling with someone when I was in my teens who discovered missing members of her father’s family who survived the Holocaust and connected them with her own father.

Our little boy is growing up….or growing a pair! Great chapter.

This is well written and engaging. As one who has conducted a few such searches, your descriptions are spot on. I am looking forward to future installments.

A chilling recounting of a dark part of history. Beautifully written. I am looking forward to how this story unfolds.

Instead of lamenting, here is how to handle a rip: