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  1. Fae Briona
    You describe the lunch in Boston as strange and bizarre saying, "For one thing.." and mentioning Vinnie's silence; but that's the only thing mentioned, not one of several. His silence by itself seems rather normal and expected given the circumstance, not odd. Other than that, I enjoyed the chapter.
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    I was wondering how they explained the cryptic clues to Sally, but I think you managed to answer that as the chapter went along.
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    Given that your story is in this (or something indistinguishable from this) world, and the time frame it takes place, I don't think you could have not incorporated those horrible events into it somehow.
  4. Fae Briona
    In the paragraph halfway-down that starts, "However, that situation quickly changed" , after four sentences it starts over with the first words of the chapter. It then continues on through the entire chapter again. So all of it gets repeated.
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    Note on Brent should say "Chapter 44" (minor nit-pick, I know; I have been enjoying the story so far)
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    Was surprised to have not read any about how Pat dealt w. being around large groups of people in their last trip, or how others reacted to him and his scarring; or how his vision affected his enjoyment of the sights.
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    Description says one of the kids, "has a unique gift, which turns out to be a precursor to the family’s first major setback" I'd assumed the problem w. Patrick was the "major setback" but there has been no "unique gift" yet, unless I've missed it. Of course, I'm only 2/3rs the way through this Book so perhaps the items referenced in the description have yet to arise.
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    Sad chapter, but good.
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    No, I was referring to the school counselor who talked to his parents. Getting his parents to relinquish custody in the aftermath was definitely necessary.
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    I hope Sally's friend had a chat w. the counselor too. That was a flagrant ethics violation. I have a friend who is a psychologist, If she knew of someone who had done that IRL she'd have filed a licensing complaint - if not verbally shred the person as well.
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    Wonderful thing for him to do.
  12. Fae Briona
    Love this chapter.
  13. Fae Briona
    Nick is going to be a problem. Good end to the chapter though.
  14. Fae Briona
    Loving someone who doesn't love you back as much as you love them can be rough.
  15. Fae Briona
    Sounds like he'll have to correct the view the kids have of the possibility of their being "thrown out" Enjoying the story.
  16. Fae Briona
    That's going to be a tough one for the boys to deal with.
  17. Fae Briona
    Rough chapter. Hope he gets better.
  18. Fae Briona
    The fun (?) of youth and trying to figure out your sexuality when you're less than completely straight.
  19. Fae Briona
    I had an Aunt who, back when I was in Junior High School, was a foster parent. What some of the kids she fostered had been through was horrifying. Most people wouldn't treat their dogs the way some of those kids were abused.
  20. Fae Briona
    I'm surprised he hasn't told his older kids about their new "siblings" yet.
  21. Fae Briona
    Love the description of wonder at the openness of the plains; and of the sky, moon, and stars that had only been seen in glimpses (reminded of the fable of the blind men and the elephant). Their arguing w. the wizard even after knowing they had lost the argument helps reinforce that these are still young guys, not adults.
  22. Fae Briona

    Big Day Today

    Fae Briona commented on Sasha Distan's story chapter in Big Day Today

    Great story.
  23. Fae Briona
    Loved this chapter - and would love a ring that looked like that .
  24. Fae Briona
    I liked this, but it felt like the start of a completely different story than the chapters before it. Less of a Prologue, and more like an unconnected parallel tale.
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    Chapter 2

    Fae Briona commented on Palantir's story chapter in Chapter 2

    Points to Peter for pointing something out that could have cost him time w. a friend - and points to Joel for not caring.
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