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Love and youthful reactions! Grayson still blames himself even though he's been told more than once that what happened is not his fault but the result of the choices Animal made. Raffa is in shock but will receive lots of therapy, both physical and psychological. He will work through the process of accepting whatever is to happen with the love and support of family and friends - and especially Grayson!
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John Renkin is a very sad human! I do hope he can find the strength to change his ways! I once had hope for him at the start of Liberty Academy, but that was soon extinguished. Great start to another story!
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Sorry, @drsawzall, but I'd rather be a passenger than a fly on that catamaran! I just gained another pound or two vicariously tasting all that food! Again, a wonderful chapter!
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I certainly empathized with Gordon: It was most difficult for me as a single father of a teenager to figure out what to do for his birthday, and I will admit that I fell short of anything exciting as his birthday fell during school days. We did play hooky one year and spent a day at Disneyworld, thanks to a friend who got us in on a pass. Both men are doing a wonderful job as partners! I can't quite figure if Liz is somewhat judgmental of Brian and Gordon and Toby and Noah, but she still likes the possibility of allowing Justin to stay at their office with Toby after school. Is that because it might save some money?
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This chapter had several emoji responses in my mind: funny with the scenes with Chase and Bryan; wow with the final sentence, anger with Animal still present, fingers-crossed for hope for Raffa, but overall, love for the composite! I'm enjoying this story!
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What a way to get to know one's brother! Now they can deal with the naked truth!
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This is one of the finest stories to grace these pages! It is not for the faint of heart! It will bring tears, smiles, anger, and awareness to every reader. It deals with a very sensitive subject (child trafficking and abuse), but also hope, There is no shortage of compelling characters, heroic actions, and powerful emotions. If you have ever read the Jack Ryan stories written by Tom Clancy, you will find a similar format in the writing: seemingly disparate threads suddenly coalesce into a dramatic and powerful whole that is greater than the sum of the individual parts.
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I can only say "ditto" to the kudos mentioned above! This story needs to be published for others to read and learn from! Ytour writing is inspired, your story gripping, and the awareness it raises is most necessary. I do look forward to and hope for sequels!
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It would be very nice if serious musicians would notice Jamie's videos. The number of likes do not guarantee success in realizing his dream - but notice of serious people will! Cottontail and his brother are headed for a split, I do believe!
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Yes, I caught that too...Gray is trying to cover for Mike, but it may well come to bite him in the end!
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A very powerful time for Grayson: his time with Raffa was needed and cathartic, and his meeting with the police was equally cathartic. His mother is amazingily supportive! I hope the police can find Mike and get him to cooperate.
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I can remember those days in Jr High and High school! And then dealing with students for my entire educational career, Damien is very real to me! It's a sad fact that there are teachers out there who occupy space but do not teach their subjects (but do teach others what incompetence looks like as adults),
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Gray is having to grow up quickly and face the "what ifs" squarely. He is finding the depth of support in both families, which is wonderful.
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Not quite a date & rather a ruckus
pvtguy commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Not quite a date & rather a ruckus
I, too, like the pace of this story. The encounter with Vince certainly shows the upbringing of both Vince and Graham - they were set up to be rivals by their father. I do hope they can work through this obstacle and become true friends and family. -
In fine Clancy-esque (ala the Jack Ryan series), you have pulled the disparate parts together nicely at the end, @empath. And, you've brilliantly created a desire in your readers for more! Now, I do hope we are not disappointed! This was a superb writing of a difficult subject that is as prevalent today as it was in the "1992" you created in this story! As noted above, this story could have taken place just as easily in the present. H!owever, I loved the setting and time period. I do hope to see more of your brilliant talent!
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Raffa is definitely surrounded by lots of love! And that love is extended to Gray as well. Mike has truly had their back, but a lot of explaining is going to have to happen.
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A Weekend: Luxury Hotel
pvtguy commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in A Weekend: Luxury Hotel
This relationship works well for all of them! Best of all, it is based on honesty, trust, and openness. A nice break for all three, yet Toby does make an brief appearance by phone! -
So Mike has reappeared! I'm interested to see how the case proceeds against Animal. Grayson needs to get hold of Raffa's parents and his own. The tension has really built up now!
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Happiness and healing comes in the smallest of seemingly unimportant events like a single blueberry.. Beautiful writing!
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And the tension ramps up! The halcyon days of recent days has come to an abrupt end! Animal's return doesn't instill positive hope - only hope he meets up with some just consequences for his behavior. I'm still wondering where Mike has disappeared to...
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Damien's fears are well-founded: his experience of private (Catholic) school is very accurate! I went from 8 years of public school to 4 years of Catholic High School....and can remember encountering exactly what he describes! Great start to a story!
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A new friend & more brotherly love
pvtguy commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in A new friend & more brotherly love
Breakfasts of banana and jam sandwiches! Brings back memories of my own youth! The relationship between Matt and Gray is slowly building on a mutual respect of the other's interests while maintaining their own disparate interests. Vince is making a strong effort at getting to know his brother and Gray seems to be open to getting to know his brother too. The foundation to the story is being built solidly. -
Now that a level of comfort and confidence has been set with the family, it's time for a challenge. I do hope Raffa is not seriously hurt. And who put up the chain/rope and was it blocking another potential crime scene?
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What a get-away! Russ certainly got his "fill"...This was a much needed break they all needed!
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Wow! So many things were able to be resolved at the same time, but I feel it is only the head of the centipede that has been removed in each area. There are more "legs" to be found and cut off!!. Such a powerful story and superb story telling!
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