Jason Rimbaud

I'v been dying to answer this question. Christmas In Glacier Bay is the second story in my new series Glacier Bay Stories. Different stories set in the same town of Glacier Bay. Some of them will overlap with characters from this and other stories. So we will be getting an update on the lives of someone from this story in the future. The new story is with a different set of friends but who knows who makes appearances. Thank you for your comment.

So I just read all posted chapters and this is by far the most absurd story I've ever read. Some dude in a bunny stume rimming the self deluded Jaime on camera. That's just the most bizarre bit of writing ever. And yet I'd watch that in a heartbeat. How the hell did you think up that scenario? You finally get a bit more insight into what Cottontail is hunting for, and his one person vendetta against Jaime, who is not a sympathetic protagonist, but I can't help but root for him. And what happened to Cottontail to make him that angry at Jaime yet desperate for his touch? I'm sure you have a plan and as long as you keep giving me weird scenes that make me cock my head to the side and shake it in a confused manner, I'll keep going on this ride. Rusty and Mattie, I'm sure are fine, and I think are characters from an earlier story, I do not like. I never identify with sickeningly sweet couples that finish each other's thoughts. I'll probably skip over them in future installments because, meh. And Rusty just makes me think of my hometown and the homophobes that let me do things under the bleachers but wouldn't talk to me in public. Thank you for making me jealous that I did not write that bunny rimming scene. Please keep with the weird and absurd. Thank you! J

I've never read any of the previous stories, but I loved the title Liar Liar so I dipped my toe. At first I felt indifferent about this narrative. I thought maybe I had to read the previous work to get it. Then you wrote this sentence and I was all in. When he turned, however, he was dumbfounded to find a guy dressed in what looked like a Sherlock Holmes costume. “Um, how can I help you, detective?” he asked, offering a pleasant smile. It was dark enough that he was unable to see the guy’s facial features clearly, but that deerstalker hat was a dead giveaway. “Inspector, to be precise,” an annoying voice with a lilt corrected him. “No shit, I thought Sherlock Holmes was a detective.” “I’m not Sherlock Holmes.” The trouble-seeker sounded quite indignant over the confusion. This just might be weird enough for me to enjoy. So I'm on to the next chapter happily. J

This is an interesting article. Because for movies/shows the characters don't have to be like me at all. Gay, straight, or any other letter in the alphabet, if the writing is good, the plot compelling, I'm all in. But for fiction, I have a hard time reading any story with a female protagonist. There are exceptions, Nora Roberts writing as J.D. Robb and her amazing "In Death" series featuring one of the baddest female detective's in all of fiction, Eve. But more often than not, if I open a book and see the main protagonist is a female, I stop reading and move on to something else. And it's not that I don't think women can be good authors, some of my favorite authors, especially on this site, are female. I have some kind of mental block that just refuses to read about female protagonists. Yet some of my favorite movies feature female protagonists. Ripley in Aliens, Alice in Resident Evil, Samantha in A Long Kiss Goodnight, Morgan in Cutthroat Island, Thelma and Louise, maybe I have a thing for Geena Davis, every movie with Katherine Hepburn, she was always the star no matter where she was billed. I don't know, I don't think it's the fault of the authors either, there is something preventing me in relating to female characters in fiction/books. It is something I have brought up with my therapist because I fear that unconsciously I have some kind of bias towards woman and I don't want to have that. I guess I'm a work in progress. J

Oh balls, we have to read another story. 😜😜😜 what a great mistake to make! Fourteen days of starting with a smile j

I'd like to add my thanks to all the SA's that gave us an amazing thirteen days of fun and great stories. J

When I read this title, my head went someplace else. I thought it was a euphemism for something else. In my early twenties, I went to a BBQ, we were drinking, having fun, and after about six hours, I decided to eat a chicken sandwich I had bought earlier from McDonalds that I had left out in the 90 degree weather. It tasted so delicious in my drunk state, but an hour or so later things were coming out of my body from all my ends for the rest of the night. Did you know mayonnaise can go bad? I do now. Nice piece of prose.

Here in California, is an abandoned ghost town in what was Bodie California, a mining town that in its hey day, 1877 to 1880, grew in upwards of ten thousand people searching for their fortune. There are over 100 original buildings still standing one can peruse at their leisure. There was a saying back then, Bad Men From Bodie, testifying to the harsh, violent times during this time period. Simply by saying this phrase, conjured up images of the lawlessness in Bodie at this time. I have outlined and drafted a story set in this timeframe, a sci-fi western, that I hope to write one day. I love westerns, and agree there aren't enough good ones written any more.

Jason Barmore was late. And he didn’t really have a good reason. He had a reason, but it wasn’t a good reason. He hated being late. And judging how slow the plow truck in front of him was currently going, he wasn’t going to be getting there anytime soon. Whoever was driving the plow must be getting paid by the hour. What plow truck goes 15 miles per hour? He glanced at the clock on the dashboard: 5:05 pm. He would not be helping Timothy set up for the party. And the guests were scheduled to

Jason Barmore loved his friends and even more importantly loved Timothy’s annual Christmas party. He had picked out the perfect ugly Christmas sweater, but he wasn’t prepared for the gift he received from his secret Santa. Unbeknownst to him, someone had their own plans that just might alter the course of Jason’s life forever.

I think I might have to disagree about Heinlein's Starship Troopers. The book was written as a statement against the stoppage of nuclear testing. The book is very much pro-militaristic, fascist, and pro-state. In the book the entire world's population was programed to fight and defeat the Archies by any means necessary. The movie was very much satire and I thought it depicted that quite well. Heinlein was very much a product of the cold war and it reflected in his writings. I also think Starship Troopers to be one of my least favorites of his titles. I'd love to see When World's Collide. I think with today's modern technology, that could be an amazing movie. Plus that would get us to probably my favorite title of his, After World's Collide, that would truly be amaze balls. J

Thank you very much for that. And that gave me the what, now I would like to know the how. How do I achieve next level, I've been six for i think going on fifty or sixty years now. I'm a huge gamer and not being able to get to 100% completion has been driving me crazy. Is there a list of badges to earn? That being said, in all seriousness, do you only earn points during the stories section of the site? That would explain why I've been at 6 for a while now. Thank you both Myr and Northie for your insights. Plus I am a badge whore. J

I've tried to find a FAQ's about the ranking system and how things work but I couldn't find it. I'm sure it's somewhere but if anyone could point me in the direction would be helpful. Ranking system is what I'm calling when I go to my profile and it says I'm 6 out of 14, don't really know what it's called, reputation? or how to earn badges or why I earned them in the first place. Thanks! J

I have written my version of that very story so many times, imagine force fields during sex play. One of my favorites in the whole series, Beaumont was almost as good as Sterling in my opinion. By the way, never knew the man was gay. I do know that Playboy, once upon a time, was on the cutting edge of social issues long before he was a perverted old man wearing PJ's in a mansion smelling of dog poop. J

I wonder if that is the same man who wrote all those amazing Twilight Zone episodes? I'm too lazy to actually do the research though. J

Since this has been abandoned for almost ten years or so now, no reason to actually leave a review. For whatever reason, DomLuka decided not to finish the story. It could have been because the author was stuck with no way forward. Out of all the stories DomLuka wrote, In the FishBowl and With Trust are my two favorites. The other ones are okay, a bit angsty and dramatic, The Lo(n)g Way is almost unreadable in places. With Trust, I like to think that as Nelson and Milo are trying to get away on Milo's boat, an accident happens and Milo almost dies. This brings Thom to the realization that life is precious and he could lose his son at any moment like he lost his mother. Frankly, Thom is such a one dimensional character with zero redeeming qualities, I can't see another way to resolve this situation besides the father dying. J

Even though you obviously had a negative response to parts, most, or all of the narrative, you read it all the way through. The story must have resonated with you, in some way. I’d love to hear what kept you reading. Ugh, this is exactly what I meant when I said my comments are taken as negative. Which only goes to show you how bad of a writer I truly am. This time, I am taking my time to make sure I convey my thoughts in a manner that is honest, yet easier to understand. This is going on my fifth hour and third re-write. Because if anyone knows me at all, I tend to overwrite. Firstly, I really enjoyed this story for reasons I will explain. But first, when I actually take the time to comment on a story, it is because I really enjoyed it. I like the author's voice, the plot points, characters, and lately the sex scenes. And when I like a story enough that I want to comment, I tend to be bluntly honest in my comments. And since you took the time to graciously respond to me I will attempt to answer the questions you asked and hopefully explain myself better this time around. My Confusion Most of my confusion stemmed from the actual formatting of the words on the page. There were many times, based on formatting, I lost track of who was speaking as the usual "he said" or "she said" were missing. I kept having to go back and count the sentences to see who was speaking. There were also times, within a single paragraph where the action switched times as well as places. This was jarring and it took me out of the narrative. You want to avoid anything that would take the reader out of your narrative for any reason. Use of Time Jumps: There are two different time jumps that also confused me. The first type, when there was a time jump buried in the narrative itself. Time jumps are fine and necessary in any narrative, but they should be easy to spot. IE: "For the next few hours, Carey focused on his homework, but he couldn't get his mind off Apollo's smell. He gave up and went the store." Indicators such as this was missing. The other time jump could be fixed by shuffling the order of the chapters. I would have started the story with Chapter Two: The Lake and put Chapter One: Tybee Island as Chapter Four. I would have moved Apollo's time jump back to when it happened in real time in regards to Carey's journey. This ties back in my theory that Carey is actually the protagonist of this story. I will die on that hill. Two Stories In One This makes sense now in my tiny brain. But if you were to honestly ask any reader who the protagonist of this story, I would venture a guess the answer would be Carey, as he seems to be the emotional glue that holds the story together. With the exception of Toby, they only have one interaction, Toby is only connected to Bell, and Bell isn't the main character either. So for me, in regards to Carey's story, Toby is the odd man out. So when I wrote pointless characters. I now can read that back and see how arrogant and hurtful that comment could be taken. Because what I should have written, those characters and/or scenes that do not move Carey's story forward actually hurts the narrative. Remember, I did not know it was two stories mashed together, I went by what I saw on the page. Chapter 27, nice little chapter with some sex, but it doesn't affect the outcome of the story at all. Chapter 30, I don't remember reading about Liam, so if I did, his character didn't resonate with me so why should I have a whole chapter about him falling in love in Europe. I wanted to know what the *insert explicative* was happening with Apollo! I want to be very clear. This is only my opinion, this doesn't mean I'm right. But you asked so nicely I felt you deserved to know my convoluted thought process. You wrote, I guess I might have disappointed you by not fleshing out those parts, Would I have liked to know more about Apollo? Yes, and I'll tell you why. You made the decision to bring him back in the narrative. You could have chosen to keep him gone until he showed up on Carey's door in the last chapter. But you didn't, so I blame you for making me crave more of this fascinating character. You asked, What story did I want told? There is an old saying in the theater, if you show a gun in the first act, someone better be dead on the stage by the third. You introduced what I thought was great conflicts for our characters to overcome, the Shadowy Circle, Cary and/or Toby navigating the upper crust of society and the manipulations that could result in that, Harper being the scorned lover and seeking revenge on Carey, Bell using his charms to leave a path of destruction until it all comes crashing down and he realizes that Toby is actually the one he needed, but it was too late as Toby moved on. The professor, he groomed Carey to a point, went after Bell, and then Toby, but in the end even he got a happy ending with Micah. Apollo faced real adversity and had to overcome tremendously. But we are given but a taste of that conflict. And through it all, I didn't really see growth in Apollo in terms of character development. He was pretty much the same when he started as when he ended. Carey had nothing to overcome really except his acceptance that he was a sub. It was enjoyable to read about his sexscapades with hot guys, but what I was hoping for was conflict. I wanted him to grow as a character through facing adversity. And then there's Bell. That selfish, manipulative asshole that floats through the story without once getting called out on his self-entitled behavior. And the one time you could have broken him down a little, enough to cause him to run back to Toby, he came out on top again. I'm referring to the encounter with the husband and wife, they should've have used him in a way that would force him to change his behavior. But not only did he get away with all of that, he ended up with the second best character in the entire story. And boy did that make me mad, Toby deserved someone better than Bell. For me to feel so strongly is a credit to your strong characters. This is why I said I thought it was a great first draft. You have already told an entertaining story with great characters, and you have hinted at a deeper, richer story lurking underneath that could be brought out with further re-writes. But if you are finished, then I can respect that. Remember, you wrote the story you wanted to tell. And I really did enjoy it very much. So at the end of the day, it doesn't matter what story I want told. I hoped I answered your questions, I know that I tried to honestly convey my thought process. I also hoped it came across how much I enjoyed your story very much. And if you go on to write other stories, I would volunteer to be a Beta Reader for you anytime. Though I could only assume how much I'd suck at that job as well. So to clarify my rating for you, and hopefully I explained my thought process, I broke it down into categories. Compelling characters: 4 out of 5 Books Compelling sex scenes: 4 out of 5 Books Overall Narrative: 2.5 out of 5 Books Story Structure & Formatting: 1 out of 5 Books Overall Enjoyment: 4.5 out of 5 Books

So I read this story in its entirety over the last two days. And I held off with leaving any comments for two distinct reasons. Reason One: I tend to be too direct and honest with my critiques and this is not really encouraged. Reason Two: Every single comment would have been seen as negative. I think everyone can be honest and admit the first few chapters are in desperate need of re-writes and editing. As one person commented, this story is very confusing. Though the prose gets markedly better as the chapters progressed. I would say this is a really good first draft. But to see it fully realized, it should be gone over again. But I saw in a comment above, the author says these characters are retired. So I must see this for what it is. This story seems to be two different yet similar stories that were mashed together. I would be curious to see if the author wrote each chapter and posted it immediately. I wonder this as numerous plot points were introduced in early chapters only to be dropped by the wayside to focus on sex scenes, which there are a plethora. The standout character by far, is Apollo. It would have been amazing if instead of all the other characters that really did not add anything to the story except gratuitous sex scenes, were dropped to focus on what I felt was the A story, Carey and Apollo. Instead of Tobey's pointless story arc, (my second favorite character), we got to see Apollo's journey as he tried to make his way through the seedy gay underground. As Carey get's more entangled with the Shadowy Circle, Apollo helps a young boy get out before he is fully corrupted. My mind grew wild with the possibilities. I grew increasingly frustrated until I remembered. I was mad that the author didn't write the story I wanted and instead selfishly wrote the story the author wanted to tell instead. How dare that author. (this is said with my tongue firmly placed against my cheek) So I adjusted my thinking and thought about the story I was freely given. Should you read this? The chapters are short, it's a quick read with some interesting characters and plot devices. There are some filler chapters that could be cut without hurting the narrative, but you do get one really hot sex scene and a happy ending. There are a lot of stories on this site that I wouldn't even take the time to rate much less finish. So I'd give this 2.5 out of 5 books. J

I tend to agree with this comment. I started this story because I wanted a story about vampires. I was warned they wouldn’t show up for a while. But we are now nine chapters in on a twelve chapter story and not a mention of the supernatural save for a few intriguing sentences that could be interpreted as such. we are given an utopian narrative where two meet, fall in love immediately and declare it openly in front of friends and parents alike. They get suddenly wealthy and seem to be experts in business and are trusted by all the adults, matter of fact are treated as equals. They have group jerk off sessions with straight boys who are so accepting it borderlines on comedy. They are encouraged to sleep at night together because the parents are so accepting or have decided not to interfere with their decisions because they are good boys . Tia story has no conflict, everything they do they do perfectly. good luck in your continuing success, and all the hard work you put in. This is not for me. But who am I, just someone who like hotdogs and not tuna. j

Hmm, I’ll keep my comments inside at the moment, is that a flipperless tuna salad? j

I will agree to your disagree happily. 😊 the only thing I’ll say, a burgundy is not a full bodied red, on with the story!!! J (French Wine is the best)

I would have to disagree with you. In my stupid opinion, there are no rules for enjoying wine with your dinner. The only real universal rule about enjoying wine with dinner, it must be French! They are the only ones that do it right, besides a few California wine makers like Joseph Phelps, who has amazing Burgundy. But nothing beats a Bordeaux. I'm surprised that no one brought up that the author casually mentioned Albert-Bichot has been in their family for generations. Now I want to do naked wrestling and have some hands on time with Scott. I don't really like blonde's, especially those that may or may not be a vampire, but to get access to that very famous winery, I'd swallow my "pride". J

I'm not a crazy person Mister Author person, of course flipper safe tuna!! J

I'm just gonna bow at the author and declare, yes your excellency, I'll patiently allow you to reveal all those secrets as you deem proper. Jake is the doomed soul, I can feel it. J

I know the story takes place in the first person, so the scene where Scotty's parents give him a deadline to tell the truth only works if Greg is present. But logically, they would never have that conversation in front of an outsider. They talk about the fates deciding, what is done can be undone, foreshadowing to the eighth degree, it just doesn't work for my tiny little brain. So I hate you for making me care about this story. Secret gay friend, his entire team knows but he's left out of the dark. One of them has a crush on him, a fellow wrestler, and he never made a move, not even by accident? They just casually drop it into the conversation, by the way, I like hotdogs instead of tuna salad. I hate you for making me care about this story. Dad dropped so many hints he suspects his son is gay that the person sitting next to me on the bus figured it out. Greg seems to be the most clueless boy on the planet. So I hate you even more for making me care about this story. Amongst those tropes that drive me around the twist, I love your interplay between the characters. You have some great zingers sprinkled about. So yes, I am off to the next chapter, less hesitant than I was in chapter two. And now I have an intellectual crush on this author, so thanks for that as well. J (urges everyone to join in reading chapter 4) *my guess, Scotty is the old man that gave Greg the car, he was somehow rebirth-ed because he fell in love with Greg all those years earlier. How does that work into vampires? Greg is from a family of vampires that are human until they come of age and then are turned by eating hotdogs instead of tuna salad*