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  1. Derry and Caleb - Cally, for short - are two pretty normal 15 year olds who live on adjacent properties and have become best friends...well, better than best friends! During a summertime frolic playing a boisterous game of hide and seek in the high grass of Derry's grandfather's field, they discover a mysterious place that holds a powerful secret. Apparently, intentionally covered up and hidden, the place hold what the boys discover to be passageways or "doors" that lead to far-distant places. One of those places is a nexus point that holds many of such passageways - thousands or may
  2. DaveinLA

    Chapter 13

    Another terrific installment to the "Doorways" adventures. I have many comments - but I am going to put them in a review. I do have two questions, though...First - did the 'translator' implants that Difris installed allow them to read the labels on the cans in the mound? Secondly, when are they going to bring Nyf home with them so that he and Difris can learn what life is like for Cally and Derry? Geron, great job! Thank you for all your hard work! Davey
  3. DaveinLA

    Chapter 1

    Geron - You did it, again! What a concept! And now, little Robot AI's that are prohibited from traversing through the 'doors' are creating their own 'kids' to traverse in their stead! Wow! Wonderful! Davey
  4. DaveinLA

    Chapter 1

    Hi, Geron - Obviously I am late to this party - but the idea for "The Odd, Onward Door" is absolutely awesome. The way you presented a hidden doorway to be found by two exploring teens as a gateway to a "doorway terminal" is just ingenious. Difris - the lonely, intelligent caretaker - is a spark of genius. As with your other works, it is skillfully crafted with few of those grammatical and typographical errors that make reading a chore at times. You are a true wordsmith of the highest order. And, man! Did you provide a framework for myriad tales of the adventures through
  5. I have to confess - I love teenaged angst. But with that confession I will also confess that authors who fill their stories with poetry and song lyrics make me crazy because I am not a big fan of either. But you managed to fill this story with a great portrayal of teenaged angst as well as use poetry and lyrics to a great advantage as you so masterfully penned the tides of emotions discovered by Jesse and Maxie. All of the truly great stories are made so by the portrayal of their characters and you have made your readers know your characters in this story. I was angry when Maxie wa
  6. DaveinLA

    Chapter 28

    Wow, Mr. Delport - just Wow! I enjoyed this story on several different levels. I loved your characters and you made them so real - even Rascal and the little ones. You just simply allowed me as a reader to seem to know your characters as if I could pick up my Cell Phone and call one and say, "Hi! It's me....." Secondly - although I have been to Kenya, I know little of South Africa and you exposed us to so much Geography, many local customs and the Food - OMG - I opened a notepad file and started making notes to look up and try recipes. Thirdly I am madly in love with ya
  7. DaveinLA

    Ford Ch 1

    This is a good story. But....I wish Robert were my uncle! Davey
  8. DaveinLA

    Chapter 86

    CL - you always produce such brilliant characters and describe their life in such a way that we - your readers - can share your characters' lives. This was an enjoyable story and I rejoiced in the lives that Brad helped to save and improve. Thank you for all the hard work you put into this for us. A zillion thanks to you. Dave
  9. DaveinLA

    Rant and Rave

    This was a great, fun as it can be, read! Thank you Lugh for your hard work! Davey
  10. DaveinLA

    Chapter 18

    Again, I am years behind this. But why doesn't someone have Dr. Cole's Cell Number? Why doesn't someone demand that Dr. Cole authorize what is happening? Why doesn't someone challenge Nurse All In Charge? What is wrong with these people?
  11. DaveinLA

    Chapter 17

    I have said before - I realize I am years late in this....but why doesn't Angel have his OWN security guards at his door?
  12. DaveinLA

    Chapter 5

    Well. Finally.
  13. DaveinLA

    Chapter 4

    I realize my comment is about six years too late - but I don't understand. At that level of our stratified society - why doesn't Angel already have about 100 of his own lawyers (solicitors) crawling all over his non-related guardian's affairs and making sure his parents will is being adhered to by the absolute most strict standards it could be? Why doesn't he have his own bodyguards living with him and watching so carefully that Charles, Henry and Annabelle are almost scared to walk down a corridor of the hallowed family manor?
  14. A Review of Crosscurrants, by Adam Phillips DaveinLA Let me start this review by saying that this story is so far out of the genre of stories that I normally read that the difference is the distance between US Coastlines. Crosscurrants is the story of Andy and Matt who met when they were eight years old. Andy's home has his College Professor Father, His working mother and a younger brother and sister - all who have an almost idyllic family life. Matt lives with his mother and Andy realizes that there are pictures of an older boy and a man in Matt's house. Soon into their litt
  15. DaveinLA

    Aqu Chapter 8

    Do you think Trent should offer to pay Mitchell back for covering his travel from Rio to Perth?🤑
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