soundtechmc

Another great chapter I hope we will see some more real quick. I like how you snuck in the reference to BLUE BLOODS.

It would seem that Jessica became Chole between chapters.

Great story, Xander and Xavier's names were interchanged several times. It was a bit confusing. Mike

This is a terrific story. The number of characters so far would beg for a list with name, age, chapter introduced, and short snippet about each person.

I just found this story today, I really am enjoying it. Just a comment about the Blackhawk, I spent many years in the Army working as helicopter mechanic. Most aircraft system do not have fuses. Most all aircraft systems have pop up circuit breakers that can be reset as necessary.

You have said that you can only post two chapters a day. I doubt there is a limit on chapter length, so why not combine chapters into much longer length. If the story is already completed that should not be a problem. We are all hungry for more story as quickly as possible.

Will we see an update to this story in the future.

Has this story been published before. It is very familiar.

I wonder is Tony wearing "the Ring". Does anyone else in the family, in Italy, know the history of the ring and the family in the US.

Are the chapters going to get longer again.

How big is this ship, length, width and displacement.

In ref. to Butcher's comment above, the last few paragraphs of the chapter you have Hunter and Fraser names reversed.

You are 100% correct. I spent most of 4 years working in a CNC machine shop in central Texas. All of my friends and family didn't have clue what I had to live with. Being single is definitely a plus when you don't have to worry about others in the house disturbing you or you them.

Ch16 is still in the wrong place. It has no connection to Ch 17. It should be after Ch 40.

It is obvious that CH 16 should follow this Ch.40. This Ch addresses the future pool and ask Sal to be his body guard. In 16 the pool is already being dug and Sal is building the security fencing and has apparently taken the job as body guard. In looking at Ch's 17, 18 and cont., it would appear that the correct Ch 16 is not to be found. It would appear that Harry was probably first mentioned in the missing correct Ch 16.

I some times find it difficult to follow your writing style. Quite often a conversation between characters can cover several paragraphs with no identifying who said what. It appears that you are thinking who is speaking but it does not make it to the written page. This is very apparent in the "Peter Charles" when several boys are speaking and there is no indication who said what especially when a third or fourth person enters the conversation. Need name of who is speaking more often.

What is Jacob's situation with the Army now.

I noticed that in this story, Will's dad was addressed as Dr. Hammond, he was Col. in the Army in the previous story. Chris's dad was addressed as Mr Harding instead of Dr. Harding or Reverend Harding. Was this an over-cite or intentional change in professions.

Why do I have a feeling that this is the real "COMA" that TJ is experiencing now and imagining that this is what he hoped would be happening. Which would mean that the other story is what is real. Especially considering that it ended with TJ being in a coma from the drugs he was given. Hm!!!!

What you have written is very one sided. If the black community wont's to get head they need to cleanup their own house. Chicago is a prime example, ninety-five percent of all black crime is committed by other blacks. Many black homes have an absent father, statistics show that most of the kids will not finish high school. They will end up in street gangs and then jail. There are many issues that need to be addressed in the black community. It would take book to list the problems. The hope of Biden being elected, will be the greatest disaster to ever hit this country. If this happens the socialist/Marxist will destroy this country. This country will look like Venezuela in few years. People need to research the truth about the things he's done/or not and things he has said in the past. The other truth people need to know is that while All Lives Matter, the organization Black Lives Matter is a Marxist organization. Go to their web site and read their manifesto. The leaders have admitted in the news that are all Marxist trained. Many people will blast me for this comment , but the Liberal/Socialist Media and Democrazies are feeding the people of this country a bunch of lies and will lead this country to hell.

Sounds like Mom is going to work for the Agency.

I have been thinking Dylan's and Sebastian's drug dealer may be involved. Unless a parent is responsible for access to the drugs.

Where in ch 1 did North Rona Island come in to the story. The only other island mentioned, besides Stour Island was Fair Island.

If its been four months since Levi was hurt, why is it taking so long to find out who hurt him. The police and the family security should have already found who did it and buried them under the jail.