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So we had the first moment when Julie was actually not trying to out maneuver someone, and that lovely surf at dawn moment. Right when you think things are being fixed Charlie comes in with a wrecking ball and somehow manages to still walk out of it in a relationship. @Krista I’m about to crown you queen of tropes because right when stuff calms down the fuzz shows up with some made up law, and awful police procedure and everyone ends up in the clink for something that a summons to appear would have solved. Seriously did young people think that the cops took money right then and there and if you couldn’t pay up you went downtown? 😂 ”I’m sorry but all I’ve got is $400. In travelers checks.” Ive got ideas now though.
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I was so worried about the dog but you fixed that by killing it too. Because obviously Charlie doesn’t have enough death in his life but hey now he doesn’t have loose strings!
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I think her name is Cindy because you chose the C name as a theme and ran with it. And yeah punching bag seems to be what happens most of the time but honestly half of it is his own doing because he can’t keep his damn mouth shut.
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Trust me he said it better than I could. @Krista you were really pumping the tropes in this one better than I have in the satire piece lol. And boy is he reading Derek the right way lmao.
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“Sorry kid your moms dead -Beeeeeeeeeep-“ I laughed before I shed a tear I’m sorry, but it happened. But we knew it was going to happen. As for dad younger me would have yelled too, older me knows the situation and would have cried while pumping his sympathy for all the money I could get my hands on lol.
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It’s still early. Besides back in the 2000s the classy authors who wrote great stories made you cry a bunch first before they got naked. i swear it was in the gay story bible somewhere. If you saw action before chapter 3, it went on nifty. If it came later you posted on one of the more connoisseur sites. I didn’t write the rules it’s just how it was lol.
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This is the one that gave me the fire shadowing that something bad was going to happen. It was also my first indication that Julie is going to be difficult to swallow later lol
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It is trust me. At least I figured out where she gets this shower stuff from. (Well not quite but close)
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See can’t always call on the puck wacking penguin to do your dirty work. Gonna have to pick up a stick and do it yourself ❤️
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Yeah I’m kinda entertained by that whole not remembering thing too lol.
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That was the first bit of nostalgia that hit me. I was like “oh this guys working at a blockbuster that’s somehow got a qeek squad desk.” Then we get to the mopey teenager part as written by a mopey teenager. I will say since I am old this really did have the 2000s vibe to it which actually made me a little nostalgic. We had simpler problems back then. And because it’s the 2000s let’s just have that newly met stranger move in. I’m sure mom wouldn’t mind.
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The first part is then you get to chapter 11 and suddenly it’s fun for some reason.
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YES THEY DID AND WHAT A TRAIN WRECK IT WAS. You’ve got half the tropes I’m using in that one story buried in this one I squeal like a pig every time I run across one.
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You seriously lucked out, this just finished today so you get to binge uninterrupted. When you get to the end you’ll probably realize why it was so biblical
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That’s exactly it Josh was literally born when Caleb’s life pretty much ended. Imagine being a ghost that still has a body like holy crap. Can Josh actually identify with the memories of another persons life? What about the emotions? How about the fact that according to Walter Josh’s body was designed to heal faster? And why hasn’t it? I actually did consider making Walter the bad guy but it was a hard thing to believe.
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Oh forgot to warn you… nah you’ll run into it eventually.
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Christ and I thought my beach chapter was good. This took that angst and dialed it up to holy crap. i seriously can’t count the number of times my hand went over my mouth with “oh no he/she didnt”. Julie is you know… but turns out she was right Brian bats for the other team and had the hots for Charlie. And because it’s a teen romance story from the 2000s of course Derek walked in at the most improper moment and now everyone has to sleep alone. i do adore Matt though. Straight friend cuddles are the absolute best.
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Oh I’m not giving that one away nope!
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Oh Derek is for sure Tropey and I’m totally not saying that because I’ve read a good chunk of this already. Julie seems a little bitchy though totally not foreshadowing anything 🙄 As for sports balls? Thank god this is after graduation so you won’t have to suffer through boys doing silly boy things lmao
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No need to be technical Mr smarty pants! I spent most of 2000 in a perpetual hangover so I didn’t notice they where a thing till 2002 lol
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This chapter right out of the gate already packs a punch, dudes barely got the diploma and his life is already got issues.
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I almost choked on the sports ball comment. But keep in mind this was probably written before linkin park was a thing so be nice. 😂
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Wry Ramblings From A Hot Wing
Jeff Burton replied to Jason Rimbaud's topic in Random Thoughts and Statuses
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If you guys keep stroking my ego I’m going to need a new pair of underwear lmao
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