Jeff Burton

When a beautiful 24-year-old is strangled and dumped on the pristine tenth fairway of Wilshire Country Club, Detective Daniel Vega’s first day back from exile becomes the fastest murder solve in West Bureau history. One espresso martini selfie, one navy Hermès tie, one panicked rich lawyer, and eight hours are all Danny needs to turn a country-club morning into a career-ending afternoon. Some people think money and a perfect handicap can buy silence. Detective Vega is about to prove them wrong, one handcuffed swing at a time.

Too late. It’s already part of the plot.

I had to jump on this comment first because he knows exactly what he’s doing. It’ll be a couple of chapters before those motivations start to shine but I’m happy someone noticed lol.

I already wanna strangle the both of them. And seriously Percy could you be anymore reckless on the snowmobiles? These boys both need a lesson in humility but Percy would enjoy it too much.

So I’m almost done with chapter 8. Someone in the group finally grew some wisdom and figured out what the problem is and maybe how to fix it. Then Ryan almost fumbled an entire football game. So you won’t have to wait long for chapter 8 “Spirit Week: The Lies, The Sweat and the Jock-Boy-Crush” When I get home in the morning I’m going to see if I feel froggy enough to get Chapter 9: “The Crash, The Crush, and The Homecoming Disaster” done as well. I really would like too so I can pound out Encrypted before Christmas, and give The Lost Key to Avalon its second chapter 😂

Apparently the both of us are gifted at making our characters suffer in one way or another. I need to read some of yours as well. 😂

Hate to break it to you yes, there is a Gavin in this story. But that's okay, I've done it a few times myself because I like the names lmao. I'm glad Cia chose this story for a highlight, it was an enjoyable read and one of the few I hadn't read from you yet. (theres more I'm still working my way down the list.)

Welcome to the mad house. May the writing God's bless you on the dissertation and your story!

Both of those were my favorite as well. Along with the titanic sinking part. Sloane doesn’t show up much but I’m glad when she does because I like writing her bitchy ass.

It really was an interesting twist, and a welcome one. The other thing I really liked was the open way it ended, it left room for speculation and thought. It didn’t out right tell you how things between Asher and Rhett proceeded but gave enough context clues for you to be able to figure it out on your own. And I totally agree that this needs nothing more it’s great as it is.

I’m starting to notice a trend. 😂

Okay that’s fair. LOL I still have a lot of compassion and empathy. But I also have that momentary lapse when it comes to making my characters suffer in some way. Like if I do something to make them (or the audience) cry, I feel bad sorta, just not bad enough to feel guilty for it. 😂 But usually in the end they get something out of the suffering. To touch on this one theme I’m plotting out a 3 story series that may or may not ever happen, where that character gets nothing but suffering, for damn hear the whole run. It’s not evil, there’s really no deep dark villains, causing this pain but it’s there, and it’s not really as dark as Black Sun but kinda shares a theme from it. It could have a happy ending or it may not. I’m leaning towards could because I don’t wanna piss people off but I think it would be one hell of a story to tell. Ive got a lot of issues still inside me im trying to work through and therapy is expensive lol, doing this at least lets me vent some of it.

Becoming? Dude you’ve read my stuff lmfao. We are way past becoming. 😂

Dude I'm have tempted to write a Christmas story involving me and all of my characters from everything I've written so far. So yes lmao.

It feels unfair because it is. This is another classic communication breakdown. I think it'll take more than a hit for Ryan to get a clue but I'll see what I come up with in the next 2 chapters

Be kind? nah you gave me ideas. BURN BABY BURN!

You know I didn’t even think about that. I’m going to have to have a conversation with Ryan then myself lmao. That actually does fit, Ryan was literally there off in the distance, by himself. He probably saw all of it including Gabe and Sky talking before hand. Then that next Monday he did show up but probably not for tutoring, only to have Deborah tell him it’s not going to happen, and I can’t imagine that went well. ”I’m sorry Skyler isn’t here yet and he has an appointment with his priest. He had his hands down another boys pants!” Yeah that probably destroyed him on another level because he may not have seen that due to darkness and angles. Poor Ryan.

I am truly blessed to not be a part of that Monday morning game of survival.

That's kinda true too. I mean think back to the beach party itself. Ryan asked Sky if he was going to be there in chapter 4, then didn't even say hi to him, and practically ignored him the whole day. No maybe no body is actually at fault for doing anything wrong, and it's just blowing up because pure teen stubbornness exists all around. Ryan could have said something at the beach party, Sky could have said something to Ryan at the beach party, but no one did and Sky was like fine I'll just enjoy myself and grab someone elses ass lmao. Sky probably has a better chance of bouncing back then Ryan does who definitely has issues he needs to figure out quick.

I guess I shouldn't have just flippantly given away a huge means to manipulate me eh? 😂

That's pretty spot on. And Gabriel is really the ray of sunshine that just won't die. I'll admit I'm using Gabriel pretty heavily and his motivations are actually mine. Plus I'm leaving Sky a very convenient out should he ever need it, lmao one I most certainly never had available.

I do love this word. I've actually used it as a chapter title and overall theme for a particular plot movement. It just fit it so well.

I should note, that's the fastest I've ever been able to pull a complete chapter out of my ass. DING.

Yes, it is. 😂

HAHAHA. Or Jaxton. Maybe they can beat each other into submission. One repressed bi-sexual football jock against a supposedly straight one that I get 'repressed gay' vibes from. Winner gets to be the top.