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  1. So the trap is set and the leading bears and others are now in the Emperor's palace. The Lions do not want peace. They want the heir of Odin or unimpressive looking Bernie. The Emperor hates them and will hold them hostage holding out for the heir of Odin who want to kill. He does not fear his new " hostages." He will kill them all after getting what he wants. He is overconfident. Outnumbered badly, the good guys will have to be smart and effective to stay alive. I can imagine if Bernie reveals himself, the creepy force will arise to counter him. Right now Bernie feels he is being watched by the LOTR all knowing, powerful Eye of Saron.
  2. Blowups avoided, no matter what friends did to add fuel to the fire. Matty believes in Rusty and trusts him over Xpress. They need some great sex to meld once again Rusty cannot see of define who Matty is to him. So now Matty is his muse. They both are keeping secret exciting identities which can only hurt them the longer they stay hidden. Xpress might unmask each at some point.
  3. So , Sebastian thinks his life is a tragedy with others in charge. Emile is his Ex who still cares just enough for him to help him out late at night. Miles was his almost Ex. Sebastian cannot read or understand males he has a sexual interest in. It seems Emile made the advances on him. It that the way he connects with men? Is he too shy or clueless? Will he learn his bar hopping or one night stands is likely to still be futile? He is not going to win the lottery with men and find a good one by chance. I hope someone helps him? I can see someone who shares his musical tastes as gaining his interest.
  4. Interesting--everyone's plans are in a state of flux. The Emperor rules by fear. As long as he wins, he is in charge. If he falters and his plan fails, his Kings may not support him. He can force one lion king to do his suicide bidding since he knows of his forbidden love for as male cheetah. The American contingent thinks it is going to negotiate only with the Lions and the Benefactors. They will find out soon if the African contingent is interested in negotiating or fighting first. The North American and African groups are not yet aware of a major African based force that will brings the gods into their fights, Bernie is the only one that senses a different, very powerful presence that is mad at the ones who are entering Africa. He is very uneasy. He has ...,“A bad feeling,” Bernie said. “A feeling that some… thing already knows that we’re here, and it’s… pissed.” This story is great fun and very intriguing. I love the twists and turns.
  5. scrubber6620

    Chapter 180

    The paintings are a great idea. Each child connects to their parents through the painting over their desk. They talk to them and are uplifted. David is especially touched by Armand's painting of his parents, GG once again helped Armand. Now David is even closer to Armand. GG continues to help unite and strengthen the bonds of the extended family.
  6. scrubber6620

    War or Peace

    A thoughtful restart showing your deep imagination and gift for conveying the tussles of the various being as they debate the way forward after the attack. Instead of outright violence , they agreed to negotiate with a backup of superior force to win a battle, if necessary. They hope to surprise their adversaries. I am very much looking forward to your future chapters. I am grateful for your dedication to this story. I hope you continue to get better.
  7. scrubber6620

    Chapter 13

    Beckett begins his journey to the city in his dreams. His goal has not been visited by Valrinda. He becomes tired and hot and bored. Valrinda is flying overhead leading the way and not staying in contact with Beckett who is fantasizing, dreaming about his parents and talking to himself. "He did have a great imagination, one teacher had once said. Too bad real life, and his dad, was trying to squash that out of him." The small bugs he sees could be deadly. He needs to stay alert.
  8. scrubber6620

    Chapter 1

    Nice introduction and the stage is set. Sam is the pet and Julius is the master. We will find out the implications soon. Julius is very self-centered and egocentric. He has some limits or blinders when he relates to others. He created Ludwig so many hundreds of years ago and did not teach him well. Ludwig does not know how he was created and thinks his preference for male sexual activities was the punishment for being made a vampire. Julius thinks he killed Ludwig, but he exits as a vampire. Sam has a sore neck. Is he a vampire now or still a food source for Julius?
  9. scrubber6620

    Chapter 13 S1

    These guys are well grounded with loving, connected families. They are very compatible and caring. The Santa -Elf Christmas enterprise is so kind and heartwarming. They are able to draw others into their plan and are going to make their plan a success. Christmas will be memorable for the kids in the hospital.
  10. scrubber6620

    Chapter 179

    Ritchie and Ann Marie can start their marriage out right with a familiar but new home. Armand and Colin are taking great care of their kids Even the newest member, David, is being fully integrated in the everyone's life, He is speaking French like the rest. This is a warm and welcoming family that grows and inspires. Love abounds.
  11. Sumi is learning lots more about her transport powers as Olona tests her carefully. She just found the princess from the destroyed palace. The princess is an orphan and needs help. Illya has returned from her flight away from Teshon City and cries out asking Olona for her help. Has she seen Ronging and his guide? What has disturbed her? So many loose ends!
  12. Troubles await--I hope Illya does not meet Ronging. His guide could be in disguise and surprise her. Or maybe, she might see them and leave quickly to warn others. A monster remains to kill anyone trying to reach Xin. Plus there are bad people there who captured and tormented Harakin and Sumi and who might have a negative view of the proposed Teshon to Xin tour operation.
  13. What a mess Sebastian is in after a bad night with Ezra who blew him off after they had sex. He is far from home with no ride. And it is only going to get worse. Will he be saved early in the morning by his ex? How can explain why he is walking near him? Will he be able to recover in time to see his dad?
  14. The monster wearing the crown--the king of them?-commanded Ronging to come with him. This individual can communicate and seems to reason, not just act on impulse. I assume they are going to Teshon City to get vengeance. The King? did not see the attack, but seemed to know where the attackers originated. Yet, no outward reason was given or expected by Ronging.
  15. I think the chapter allowed multiple interpretations. It could have been written with more finesse to draw out characters and scenes or to explain certain actions that raised eyebrows. But this is written and conveyed piecemeal. We have to wait often for future chapters to see how things evolve and what they mean. Will the winners express any remorse later? They have no apparent enemies to fight. Can they live in peace now? This battle followed very brutal fights in Teshon City. The group was taking on their most serious opponents yet. They could not expect to be given a chance to surrender if they lost. It seemed to me -kill or be killed now. Bad things happen in the heat of battle. I thought I was hearing described the Battle of Agincourt--brutual, herotic, nasty, unforgiving. Emotions are stretched to the breaking point. We read how Henry V urge his side on in the play. Each side in battle spurs themselves on. The French like the Grunge could not conceive that they could lose with their superior firepower and armored knights. It is hard to fine tune killing when the nastiness and viciousness of intense almost Medieval warfare fighting happens. If Ronging reaches Teshon City, I do not expect him to be gentle. He should be a guided killing machine
  16. "The Biological Shifts and Tisa, with Tchama and Olona, reigned fury down upon their remaining enemies.? All the present members of the Grunge were killed. No one will leave to kill others to feed their thirst. Each one had eaten too many photonova glands and killed others to become monsters. They were inherently evil. Until the battle, no one could stop their mindless killing sprees. Will the winners stop killing? Will they find or make up new enemies? Or, will the group fall apart and be subject to killing individually by a monster ? They will have a false sense of security. Ronging guided by an unknown force could be traveling to Teshon City for retribution.
  17. Two mysteries--Who killed everyone? Who speaks to Ronging with familiarity? Is it the Voice? Did the force behind the new being kill the others? Will the force take/guide him to Teshon City to kill the non-messiah's in supposed retribution?
  18. scrubber6620

    Chapter 6

    Seth is in serious trouble. Craig will use him and hurt him and out him when he suits him. He needs to think of options and ways to show Craig is pushing him to act sexuallly, I suggest. Blake is in need of real professional help. He cannot see a way to have a real bf--. He knows he will hurt Seth by being with him. I can see him killing himself. Craig could push him or the cliff literally and figuratively. Let is hope Seth learns from Blake's example and finds a way out besides likely suicide.
  19. scrubber6620

    Chapter 178

    Life moved on happily. David received two good tutors to be better prepared for his education. Everyone visited Santa and got Christas presents Armand painted David's parents with GG 's help. David was so pleased--he cried,. Grandmier moved back , taught more French to the kids and Ann Marie arrived early. Ritchie and she were married in early February and will honeymoon for two weeks. Their home should be ready when they returm All is well. No troubles--so far. Love abounds throughout.....
  20. --Rusty talked to the two most important women in his life Mrs May and August. He opened up and is being put on a better path. Rusty is going to aggressively continue his singing, Mrs. May loved his surprise performance and gave hm good advice. She is going to be very demanding. August pierced through his sole. She clearly read his secrets and found out Matty was his down low bf. Only she questioned where or not Matty was really fine with being a silent bf. The had a great heart to heart talk. Xpress as usual saw things wrongly about Rusty and August sharing an early breakfast--after having sex ?. Rusty is now viewed as having an affair with an older GF who was just unmasked. What will Matty say? Zoey read Xpress too. She has to work Matty up and make him concerned. They do not know the real facts yet. He needs to see Rusty soon or he will be very worried.
  21. The group faced very evil Messiahs and killed them in unexpected and gruesome ways. No one could stand up to them. The description of the killing was scary and without remorse.Tisa was seen to be an effective fighter by the others. She wants to kill more. I wonder where they will set their boundaries.
  22. Tchama visited Olona and was tested physically and mentally and emotionally. She is very strong buy saddened by the loss of her arm. She had to work out in her mind her own problems and uncertainties. At the end, she began to feel hope. Good. She will have a better future with a positive outlook. She has many good friends to encourage and support her.
  23. It seems Auntie Peg is full of compassion for those dying of the blood corruption. It is usually fatal, but not contagious. She runs a clinic that provides needed hospice care for those at the end of their life. Ninyani helps her. They are a good team. But, Tchama is missing, She is distraught after saving a young child. No one knows why. She has left is not to be found by her friends.
  24. The volunteers helped repair the damage. Tchama's strength was very helpful. Tchama luckily saved a child from being hurt when a chunk of a building fell down. Tchama became disoriented. She ended up in a familiar place. We will find out exactly where she is now.
  25. This was a wonderful time of fellowship and conversation and eating good food. They met and became better acquainted. Olona inquisitive mind was on display. She made others interested and Tchama feel better about herself. I wonder if the Voice was a Messiah. Xin had some shifts and therefore might have had some powerful Messiahs.
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