mastershakeme

@MrM I just screamed my head off. THAT WAS SO ADORABLE!!!!!! I used to have a huge boner for dogs, but the switch completely flipped when my bf brought one home. He did all the easy stuff like cuddling her and feeding her treats, but I got stuck with 3 times a day walking her and the disciplining her bad habits. The hassle just wasn't worth it for me. We found her a new home (a home with a lot of land for her to run in; we had her cooped up in an 1 bedroom apartment) and she's happy... I much prefer my two kitties. They're easy to manage, they aren't loud, and they can be left by themselves for 24 hours and everything is perfectly fine. Dogs are so needy and well, pathetic. They need way too much attention and maintenance. I've got a lot on my plate, I love have self-sufficient animals.

LOVE the description of Ishtar! He's a scary guy lol and I like that Ashnar and Evan kinda team up . The first part is complete! Yay! That was a wild night lol and I'm definitely sure Jenson had no idea what he was getting into when he invited the transporters home... You kept the action and the descriptions really tense and tight and it worked so perfectly with the rising action as the night goes on and the battle with the white king is brought to and end... For now! I can't wait to start on the next part! I sense some pairing coming to fruition and the something big happening for the dragons and the wizards... This was a fun, fast read and I'll be back for more! Thank you @Israfil

Do you have more written? I'd be interested to read more, we can talk privately of course. lol. BUT... Very well done @Israfil on the 6 chapters you do have completed. From the first chapter to this one, I've seen some changes. I didn't like how many scene cuts you had in the first chapter, but liked the two or three different scenes in the other five chapters that you ended up going with. Your use of description and scenery throughout was great and you always did a great job of sucking me right into the story despite your short chapters. The characters were fun and their interactions were amusing to watch. I'm a romantic though... I'm always looking for more romance The magic in the last two chapters was awesome and you had a couple different, fantastical creatures peppered throughout the story that were a pleasure to meet. Hopefully, we can see the end of this sometime soon

So Jenson is explosively strong and he's also good at intricate and complex magic? Lol he's definitely the hero of this story. But then again, the ensuing battle between Evan and the intruder dragon lurking around outside the building is simply awesome! Very well done, the action was fast-paced and full of adrenaline. This was a quick read and a fun one too. We also finally got to see what the dragons look like! The description of the big lizard-like creature was truly a joy I mean, I love the how vibe the characters give off, like all this crazy stuff is completely normal! And it is, to them. The comic relief in the beginning was cute. Don't mess with dragons, for you taste crunchy and good with ketchup! Another great chapter, but you missed a little bit of formatting as you uploaded this one... No biggie, just a single line of Evan's thoughts aren't italicized and i think you had them marked correctly, it was just the uploading programy thing that screwed up. OK! I'll read the next chapter really quick.

I like Mithras character! I liked watching him verbally spar with everyone in the room who was against him. He definitely has a way with speech and I was smiling a lot while I read this chapter. I liked how the 3 roomies got together to resist the charm and temptation of Mithras lol. This was my favorite chapter so far and that's because of the dialog! This was a nice, flowing scene with a little horror thrown in when the room goes cold and the lights go out! Fun read and you left us with another cliffhanger! Lol your a jerk!

Please tell me it's ok that I'm still confused who the Void queen is (besides being Anshar's sister)! But besides that, I enjoyed this chapter too. I agree, you are slowly rounding your characters out and there was a little more to chew on in this chapter. I'm definitely wanting to know who Mithras is in relation to his prisoner status and his dog form... I do think it was a little difficult to keep track of who's head we're seeing things from and we bounce around a lot. Take this with a grain of salt, but I don't think it would detract from your story if you just picked one or maybe two of the characters you want to follow closely and get in their heads! I liked the description and the setting a lot! I kinda imagined being in my rundown apartment and then Holy shit! The alarms are triggered! The apartment's about to become a war zone and the little doggy prisoner, who said they'd be sorry, finally has his day. I loved the past snippet in the beginning, because it confused me at first and I didn't know where or when that scene took place, but right at the end, we realize that the conversation we overhead is very important because now it seems like everybody is screwed and we're the only ones who know it! Yay! The perspective is a little off, but you are doing excellently with building the tension and I'm now anticipating the action to come! Good work!

Ok! I'm loving the dialogue! It's sharp and energetic and funny, too! The little banter between the friends is endearing, and even the prisoner (he's a Jack Terrier? How?) was interesting. I'm wondering if his threat in the beginning is going to be anything to worry about later. You introduced 5 important characters + the prisoner in less than 2000 words and I liked them all! I really enjoyed this beginning, it cut right to he action and the descriptions of the grolls was excellent! I looked grolls up on google and yikes! Jenson was crazy for trying to handle that on his own! He was so outnumbered! The switching between locations and characters reminded me of a movie. I could see this all playing out in my head. The dialogue kept me present and in the scene and you had some good and relevant setting details and character actions that drew me further into the plot. More description is never a bad thing imo though. For example, I'm still wondering what the boys look like. Ann was beautifully described. The imagery of her scales was interesting and i could vividly see her face... Maybe in the next chapter you will flesh out the boys some more. I will read more when I have a minute, you are talented! Happy to be working with you! I'd better get back to writing too, lol

That was a good start! Are you planning on adding more? I thought the brothers were chasing him because he drank from an animal though, I was wrong, lol. I'm trying to read a lot of short pieces lately so I can get the hang of it. I'm not very good at conveying a lot of emotion into a short story and I think this was a good example for me to read I liked the blood as lube too, lol. But stop drinking off cats! Poor cats are at least a little bit friendly...

Yes! That would be fun I'm so excited it's almost summer! I want to celebrate with fresh, vibrant food!

Honestly, I really want to eat healthier. It would take more effort, but getting some carrots from grandma shouldn't be such a luxury. There will be all kinds of different farmer markets in my area this summer. I just have to make a point to add more greens to the diet. The chemicals they put in our foods nowadays aren't things human beings should ever ingest. It's insane that it's allowable to mass produce crappy foods that over time, kill you, but it's my own fault... I'll stop complaining and make plans to change

I feel bad for your Mike! I'm definitely not a baker, but both I and my bf have sweet tooths. So, I've been through all kinds of different pies you get at the store if he's really got a craving, tell him to try the Sara Lee frozen pies, they're pretty good and no assembly required! Anyways, I don't have the funds to eat super healthy. I eat a lot of frozen junk and stuff out of boxes because it IS cheap. And if you don't have the time to cook, it's just easier. I swear they're trying to kill us poor people... My lovely grandmother sent some carrots, potatoes and Vandalia onions over last night! Yay! I have some meat thawing now, I'm going to make a roast! Grandma used to have a wonderful garden when I was growing up. She grew the tastiest cherry tomatoes and I'd run through her garden stuffing my face with the squishy little buggers. My face and shirt always had tomato juice smeared on it lol. I hope one day I can have a garden like hers...

Excellent start! I want friends like Ava! Hopefully we'll get another chapter soon

Thank you! That explains everything

I've NEVER written a prompt! How do I do this? What's the max number of words and do I send it to Renee Stevens? When is the deadline? I'm sorry, I'm not sure if all these answers are elsewhere and I'm just being an idiot. Please slap me on the wrist if I'm wrong posting these questions...

Colt has a violent past. He was expelled for beating up another classmate, and he and his family are moving to another town because of it. New house, new town, new start. Only Colt foresees a lot more violence in his future once he realizes his new friend, Noah, is in trouble.