Krista

I did not read or remember the little agreement/wager you had going on with @Okiegrad, but it wouldn't have changed my mind. I also can assure you no money changed hands, my part I played in this was completely free. And it would have been if I had known I actually had a part to play, regardless. Well you know, they liked how they looked in wet underwear before, why not do it again? Although they didn't keep the underwear on long into the shower for the full effect of anything, but having wet underwear really. Oh god.. Pizza doesn't need to be treated all filthy like that... no. 😮 But yeah, it was an ice breaker. Yeah, I lead with personality and character first, even in those scenes. I know I'm not good at writing sex scenes, so to overcompensate I add dialog, humor, seriousness, plot points, etc to round it all out. This chapter would've been about 3k words shorter if I focused primarily on getting them laid, which some of my chapters are too long so it would have evened things out. First time awkwardness is fun to write. Not knowing what they want, how to go truly about it. I mean, Davin was the bravest first timer I've ever wrote, there are very experienced gay guys out there that will never, ever come close to sticking their tongue where he did... and he did it his first time. I wanted Davin to be the confident one. It didn't make sense for Joel to be. I almost switched it, but decided not to. Joel has a tough time letting go of control and sex is something you have to be willing to release some of it... unless you're into control/kinks. Unfortunately for him, he's not. lol. Are we as a group sold on Joel being the bottom. And you'll find that I never listen to direct demands. Bribery is far more efficient and has better outcomes.

Yes, poor Lacey. That makes twice she's been turned down for movie/family night by Joel. You would think so. I get the house is fancy and expensive, and they seem anal... but they're not there. Lol. Well, we all know what the Twin's priorities are. He was thinking about food whilst on his way to get filthy, or the hopes of it anyway. Poor Joel, he'll learn that at least for Davin is is belly first, sex later. Which is rather typical, I'm thinking? Well really it would be sex, food, then more sex.. but let's be real here. Yes, he sure did. Pizza at that, something Joel doesn't even really like, mostly. Bedrooms and Bathrooms would be the only places I'd feel comfortable after knowing about their insistence of cameras and knowing why their own sons would be stopping in. But, the boy was distracted. He is a beautiful man. Aww. Shower scene... it was almost a hot tub scene.. decided against it, for reasons. Then I was thinking... I honestly don't know if Davin would feel comfortable having sex in that bed... I mean, realistically, I don't think it would have stopped them. In fact, Davin probably would have tried to destroy that bed in the process. --- Food for thought? Maybe? So the shower ended up being 'the' spot. Oh goodness me... 😮 Oh goodness me x2 Do we know who the bottom is going to be? I mean sure, Davin talked a finger into the equation, but Joel outright "cock blocked" Davin by focusing on something else instead. Joel did like the attention when he got it there though, so who knows.

Thank you for not judging harshly, much appreciated. And if they are mistaken and there has been cameras placed around the house, then their mother got an eye full of a bouncy orange ass and bulge at least to and from the kitchen and bathroom. Maybe it is safe to say they don't have them inside the house, because I would imagine her calling Davin back if she saw the makings of that going on. Also to be fair, if they're going through that much trouble to watch the house, at least in the living room and such, it would make sense for them to have them.

Oh goodness... opening act. I don't know if I have it in me to do this again. And I don't even want to know about the rest. lol

Lol. hmm. I don't think my doggos would like me having a third pet. You spoiling yourself in the comments is rather on brand for you, I'm thinking. tsk. tsk. tsk.

I guess so! Lol. I knew it all was going to fall right during the Holiday weekend and @wildone got his edits in, actually last night. I didn't post until today, mostly because I went to bed whilst he was editing and didn't think he'd finish. Shouldn't have doubted the man. You're welcome for the surprise. Scenes like this is very... off putting for me to write. I don't see myself as someone who writes sex well... these two have had two encounters so far. This one a lot more full-on. I think it was like 70% of the chapter... glad I was able to sneak a little plot in there, otherwise I'd have to call this smut. 😮 With that, Merry Christmas to you as well.

It did, it took ages. I would be too afraid to focus on someone that's ace, non-binary, trans, or something of that nature. I wouldn't do it correctly. Joel and Davin finally took getting some privacy into their own hands, so to speak. Even then, it was sort of an awkward mess, but they got there in the end and that's all that matters. It was good for 'them.'

I have a feeling this is the chapter where I'll mostly reply with: and move along to the next comment...

Tis Tuesday. Also, don't judge me too harshly with what you're going to read this chapter... I tried my best.

Like Davin predicted, not long after Colt finished with his shower, he and Gavin left. That meant Davin and I were stranded at the house unless we borrowed one of the vehicles here. Seeing them leaving the house I felt my heart pick up in my chest. Davin was snacking on one of the last no-bake cookies. Despite loving sugar and chocolate, it fought me all the way down. Downing my glass of ice water I stared at the front door. “Do you wanna have a movie night, Joel?” Lacey asked and I blinked

I'm actually surprised Fabulous isn't already there... but a lot of oddly common moods aren't listed. Glad to hear that my long cultivated reputation has persisted, whether you know what's best for you or not. I don't swear a lot in real life at all. I find it very... off putting to be in a conversation with someone and every other word out of their mouth is a swear. Yet I seem to have chosen swearing as the go to vocabulary of choice. I wouldn't call myself a cuddly teddy bear. I do like cuddles though... so maybe. I do have good aim and a long reach when it comes to kicking too, just so you're aware. I was angry enough at a guy that I kicked him there so hard it lifted him off the ground, but he shouldn't have lost his sense of being a gentleman in my presence.

AI can't get them entirely perfect. My Colt is less built, more tan, and less smiley. But, the color of his hair, eyes, the sort of softness to his face when he does smile I thought was captured. At least with how I imagine him in my head. The twins in my head have more of an italian influence, but since I don't think I name it in the story, it's a bit lost. To be fair, one of them does look like he has some italian features. Joel was the closest to how I imagined him to be. Over all though it was impressively close. Horse riding is more fun actually doing it than writing about it. I'll give you that. Especially if you have a horse that's full of spunk and energy, not a dead headed one along for the ride. Colt did teach Joel how to relax and open his hips though. So there's that, lessons learned that could be applied to other things, I'm thinking. Yeah, Colt already has plans outside of Ranching and cattle for the rest of his life. Joel offers a second opportunity for him not to feel guilty about leaving all this on his little sister's shoulders. Although, Celia and Trace aren't old or nowhere near retirement age so they all have plenty of time to change their whole family dynamics. But he did include Joel in them. Celia is a saint, not a psycho. I'll not hear anything different. The rare time I came home drunk Mom just said, "you'll pay for that in the morning..." told me to drink some water, and sent me to bed. She didn't yell or anything. Mind you I got a lecture the next morning when I felt like a total idiot... a sick idiot. The story is winding down, that's for sure. But, it was also already supposed to be over, three now four chapters ago. I'm a bit behind the buffer again. Wildthing has most of the chapter edited, we have some things to discuss with it... but it is 95% edited, I'd say. Then after that, there's the final chapter that's been the final chapter for ages. It may end up being the final chapter, we'll see. I might have one more in me before the true ending. I'm glad you took the time to try this story, I know first person isn't your usual thing.

Yeah, I was curious how the way I described Lorianne would come through, I really liked her as well. Wish I could get Roy to land for me, but I think AI kind of makes them all... confident and broad shouldered/stocky no matter how you wish them to look. Roy is kind of a softer looking guy in my head. Leaner, more of a runner build/volleyball lean since those are the sports he's going out for, etc. I also wanted to try Lissa, Jeremiah, and Lance, since those are the three characters that I've written that aren't anything like the rest of them. In my head Jeremiah is a secret hottie.

I do like the overall new design. If it optimizes the site, then that's for the better. I'm mostly looking forward to a full site dark mode. I enjoy the hell out of dark mode, that's usually the first thing I look for when viewing something I know will take a lot of eye strain to get through. Like reading, scrolling, etc. So, giving us a full-site dark mode is a top tier improvement for me at least.

Oh my goodness.. lol. It's over. Game over. It was a good run.

I think he's kind of walked back that idea a little bit... if he's looking at anything similar to that every day... especially working cattle... who needs college? Overrated.

I saw it, I'm impressed really. I'll have to try my hand at it, but I highly doubt I'd top this. Even the twins are the only ones that look like twins, usually when you tell AI to form a group.. they all look the same, but I can tell which ones are supposed to be who.

The new layout looks nice. I didn't know that most of the traffic was mobile, I'm one in the minority that rarely accesses the site via mobile devices. Having been through a couple of changes with how things look and are done, I'm sure I'll adjust to this one too with minimal complaining, for which I think @wildone will hear the most of anyway, so I guess the only suggestion I have is to pay that man for putting up with me. (joking) Honestly though, I can't think of any feedback. Being mostly an author here that rambles as long as I can still post, read, write, and ramble I'll do okay.

Well well well Friends who love one another catching stray feelings, bouts of jealousy, uneasy glances, and making liars of themselves when people press for too much information. Who didn't see that coming? Bethany is also attempting to self-sabotage a relationship that she wanted to have at one point. So, either she has been burned in the past by some guy she was all in on, or Five's early honesty is weighing heavier than she's let on. So, she wanted to test his nerve. Five once said that he doesn't lie, that he couldn't, it doesn't ever sound right coming out of his mouth so he doesn't bother with lies. But, he sure is a bit of a liar when it comes to himself. He's also closing himself off from Bethany who wants progress reports and updates on both their manipulation and his self-seeking of answers. She's not going to like his answers when he decides to choose honesty... but since she's sort of preparing for the inevitable closure to her relationship with Five, she might be able to prepare herself for the hard truths. Percy and Five are falling for one another. Five might be in love with Bethany, but everything he's thinking and omitting should tell him where he's headed if he listens. And yeah... cleanliness afterwards is always best. My goodness me... no.

Alright... okay. I really enjoyed how you added a lot of suspense into the sports/football aspect in this chapter. Slowing it down, breaking it down into parts. Not quite a bogged down play by play, just enough to let us know what was happening and why. Gabriel is still a bundle of confusion for me. If he's playing for a long game, he's certainly playing a long game. I guess he's betting on Ryan being similar to him, possibly? Maybe he had a bad first experience with a guy he found himself liking. Maybe, he's banking on Ryan being too much of a mess and chase Skylar off him for good? Or maybe I'm truly paranoid and he has a heart of gold and Skylar is off-limits to him until Skylar says so. This patience game in the background doesn't feel like it is going anywhere yet. I'm sure whenever it does it will make a big impact... like a stealth bomber. Sloane is the bad bitch confirmed. Masterfully accomplishing her goal in bringing Madison down. Madison doesn't stand a chance. I don't know if Sloane would even want the crown, she'd just rather see Madison crumble when she doesn't get it. If the rumors are to be believed, Ryan looking like a scolded puppy about to break, then I'd not be voting for her if I paid any attention. Although, I'd have my own plan to get the crown myself, so... This is a chapter that has so many smaller building blocks leading up to the next chapter. We saw plans begin to take shape. Hope was seeded into the mix. A collision course between Skylar and Ryan a possibility at the homecoming dance. Madison's plans for the evening. Then whatever Gabe will do... probably be a "supportive friend..." but maybe we'll see something coming from him that's not been hinted.

I still be hiding.

I don't have it in me to do massive rewrites of anything, definitely not a story of any significant length. That's why my very roughly written first three to four stories are still as they are. Were you surprised by anything about the story you wrote 25 years ago? Sometimes when I grit my teeth and read old works of my own writing I come across passages of dialog or something in a paragraph and I am surprised by how my mind apparently functioned at the time...

Oh good. I am inspiring because of my witty banter and such, he is the one that is inspiring because he's filthy. I wasn't worried about which of us landed where... not at all.

Colt be like: Yeah. You can’t unsee that now can ya? The whole scene in that film was so strange... their facial expressions were almost comical. But yeah, I can't unsee it now. Stop it.