Krista

Thank you! When I set out to do a sporting heavy story, I wanted to do it in a way that people could feel it. Otherwise, I feel the theme would fall a bit flat as a secondary backdrop sort of theme. I only hoped I could do it satisfactory at best, action writing is difficult at times, especially continuing to do it over and over again and making it feel fresh each time. ahhh Cindy. To be honest, this one seemed a bit tame by her standards. She's not storming campsites, making threats, and such. lol Maybe she's getting soft. 😮

No, I have zero swimming in my background. I spent a couple hours researching how it was set up at the high school elite level, how the races generally went. Then I imagined what all the character would have to be aware of when they were in the pool in the act of swimming competitively. I did make some obvious errors in earlier chapters (do warn him if he plans to read the entire thing, that I am aware of them). I miss-named one of Jackson's events for a bit, but I corrected it in later chapters. Then the pools, vary in length, so the distance and laps they would be taking should have been more unique depending on the facility. Not every facility is going to have the money or space for elite level swimming competitions, which is what I have been depicting in the writing. -- I mean I guess they could have, but in the small town setting that I chose, I highly doubt it, not when I had Jackson be a bit abnormal for picking swimming and it not being a school sanctioned sport and all that. lol. I'm thrilled to know that I got his approval. Cindy has balls, yeah. And very poor timing. But I imagine, so did Godzilla.

“Get your asses up,” growled Tony from the other side of my hotel room. Scaring the fuck out of me, I fell out of the bed taking the sheets with me. Charlie grumbled and I felt him tugging on the sheets and I regretted staying up late talking to him and Drae. I had qualifying and event finals today for my sprint distance swims, the one hundred meter freestyle and the four by one hundred meter medley. I already qualified for my event finals in my bigger race, the eight hundred free yesterday. The

Thank you for coming back after the long hiatus and leaving a comment. I may not deserve it, but it I am glad to see it. Thank you for coming back! I think they do, I feel that they are in the next few chapters too. Which is 'maybe' part of the reason I was struggling. I had the mindset that the only way this story can continue is if they aren't. Now I'm of the mindset that I don't care, I think the other themes are strong enough to carry it, even if the romance is a bit more settled. I still have things to cover on that front too, mind you. I'm just going to stop worrying about it. The theory of Henry just being a loveable pile of man and that he knows has been a long lived theory. It 'almost' makes me want to go out of my way to twist up that theory completely and be diabolical... but we'll see, won't we? Sometimes it is good 'not' to give us 'evil' authors ideas. lol. It would probably be humbling for him, if anything, to know the opinion of Henry when Henry thinks he isn't around to hear it. I don't know, I think Henry has always generally liked Jackson and accepted him for what he was. I don't recall him outwardly judging him for anything or making a point to tell him that he had to change, etc. As you can see, I love Henry. Henry spin-off in the works? 😮 I actually think a younger version of all of them pre-marriage would be interesting. Craig, Grace, Welker, Henry, Carrie, Troy, Troy's estranged ex-wifey, etc. I've never really developed outside parents like I have with these sets of parents before. Thank you! I love writing love stories. Thank you for coming back to the story and leaving a comment! Maybe 'should Luke come to Georgia,' would be the more pertinent question. *whistles* All that aside, the little brat Jackson actually has to get into Georgia himself. He's been known to screw stuff up in the past, like royally, he couldn't do a better job if he tried.. sort of thing. I love writing about both of his friend groups. I wish I could focus on both of them a lot more and well past where I have already... since I'm so much farther along than what's posted... I said this privately in a PM you sent me. I actually didn't feel ready to graduate when I was younger. I looked around and didn't want to see it all end. I had a great high school experience, overall... with really supportive friends - much like Jackson has. I also knew their plans and their plans didn't involve staying or going anywhere close to me and I feared that change so bad that maybe I didn't really enjoy a lot of the closing milestones that came with it. Thank you! This is the drawback of me being a bit ahead of y'all. Good for you rather, bad for me, as I like to talk and I don't want to over do it and spoil anything. I just read one of the chapters well into the future of when this one took place. I am actually trying to restrain myself from just speed posting it - errors and all. @wildone probably wouldn't appreciate me doing that though.. lol.. and I do still have two chapters to write so I better behave, buckle down, and get those done so I have a complete story to offer you when you get there. Lol! Everyone had cocky eyebrows this chapter. Shay, Tara, Luke, Jackson, the bouncer at the club entrance... I was in love with the eyebrow game, I guess. Cocky eyebrows can be effective in their own way. I was actually wondering if it was a bad habit I picked up, but thankfully so far, I've been in the clear for two chapters I've read past this one. The next chapter is 34ish pages long, I think. @wildonetold me not to post it until Thursday, but it is edited and ready to go. I think he needs a break, he edited 45 and 46 really fast and even I had forgotten how massive that chapter was. The following chapters aren't small either, they're rather large.. even Chapter 50 was 7777 words exactly, but I've since edited it some and shortened it from that perfection. 7755 lol

Firstly, I would like to thank everyone who returned to this story. Secondly, I would like to apologize for anyone who made it a drinking game to see how many times I wrote, "cocking an eyebrow.." or "my foot brushed against his/his foot found mine.." I'm sure by the end of the chapter you were severely sauced and had poor judgements running through your minds. I'll get to the comments individually tomorrow. I'm in the process of reading this chapter so I can flow into the next one better.

I'm as surprised as everyone else he hasn't been axed yet, the cheeky thing.

Tara ended up taking us well past the smaller towns that I was used to, every one of them probably having the same sad stories of people being stuck in them. Dominated by banks and factories and people who lived there for generations. Each one of them dead as ghost towns now that it was later in the evening. Now we were driving down a quiet street where every driveway ended with a closed gate that led up to large, newly built houses. Looking around, I couldn’t really imagine growing up her

I have finally finished Chapter 50, finally. Maybe Chapter 51 and the Epilogue or whatever we're going to loosely call the closing scenes.. won't be too long in the future from being done. I've hunted down @wildone and he's had to dust off his editing hat, but maybe we'll get some chapters out soon. I think we have 45, 46, 47, 48, 49, and 50 to edit and post. Chapter 45 may already be edited, I'll have to go back and check.

Good. I was sucked into the, I don't want to say craze, but the craze... lol, when the first film was due to be out. I like to read the book before I watch the films and since I was curious, I read the first book. Then curiosity took hold for the second book, then the train wreck of the third and fourth book smacked me in the face. I've tried to reread the series since, but I can't get past the first chapter. And good, sparkly vampires shouldn't exist... mock away.

I know, right? Rude behavior, terrible.

😮 Don't let the little cheeky thing attempt to swindle you. Git' him. Also, no you're more than welcome, I am nothing if not giving in my battles to keep our @wildonein line. I mean... there's only so much one person can do with him on any given day.

Hush you.

Yeah, I should have fleshed out the ending a bit better. I was tired and this was spur of the moment, since I kind of made the promise of a Prompt since I made that cheeky comment in the forums. Aro can read every thought a person has ever made, in their entire existence/life whatever, with just the touch of his hand. So he would know Joel's plan to destroy him and his hold on power/powerful vampires. Also he would know that Corin's mind control didn't work on him either, that Joel still had his own mind. Stephenie Meyer the original author went into a lot of trouble to create an evil kingdom that couldn't be touched. So I thought it would be interesting to write a story about a character that set out to do that. I also poked a lot of fun at her writing that I've always had an issue with, but only readers of the series would really appreciate. For starters: She created her Vampires to be marble-like, cold-skinned, and unchangeable. Which means they don't produce sperm, they can't cry or produce bodily fluids other than "venom" in their saliva to aid in their feeding on humans. That's it. At the middle of the 4th book though Bella becomes pregnant with a vampire/human hybrid baby. Her new husband Edward, with that logic - would have had to never ejaculate or have a sexual or masturbatory event... ever, for hundreds of years - otherwise his tank would be empty. Also with that logic, I would have thought the sperm would be a residual fluid from his human life - so in theory, their child should have been completely human and not a human-vampire hybrid at all. Which would give the Volturi/Aro no reason to start a vampire war. Also in Meyer's world, wolves imprint on their mates. They have no control over it, they could be in a committed relationship with someone else, married to someone else.. and run up on someone new and "imprint," and change their mind completely. Jacob, was in a love triangle with Bella and Edward, Bella couldn't make up her mind, because she loved both of them. The pregnancy broke the triangle and she had to become a Vampire. To clean up the fallout from the broken love triangle, Meyer had Jacob imprint on a baby, Bella's hybrid baby. Which also made no sense, because imprinting has a biological function in that the strongest female - male pairs would imprint on one another to keep the "werewolf gene," strong in their Tribe. So imprinting on a Vampire even a hybrid - their mortal enemies, the only reason they exist at all... was stupidity. So in other words, Meyer created an impossible baby to close the story, because she didn't have a better way to do so, that's it. I mean, she had to write an entire Codex explaining all this, so that she could get away with her plotholes in the original fiction, but I didn't buy it. The codex didn't make any sense either. --- So if you didn't know that specific history, and what Aro's power was specifically, then a lot of this prompt didn't make a lot of sense with the backstory that I just sprinkled in. I wanted to try a different sort of writing style with this story, using vocabulary and sentence structure that I normally wouldn't use in other writing.

Krista's Prompts Chapter 10 by Krista - Gay Authors Well.. I did it. Better late than never, I guess.

PT 113 - The Hunted It was inevitable, I should have known that going in. Looking around at the sunlit spot I chose overlooking a lake. I watched as campers shuffled out of their tents, none of them wise to my lurking. The disappearances started a month ago, two years after the impasse out on that frozen meadow. Curiosity, that is what I blame this on. News of a special child or immortal abomination swirled around Forks Washington and I had to see it for myself. It wasn’t everyday tha

These be dangerous prompts for people who have limited time on their hands... I think.

Then think yourself a lucky SnowBear that I didn't start the sequel and start posting it... LOL. It has been a very long time since I read this story, I don't know what the bulk of it is about anymore. I remember the characters and the gist of the theme. As far as Jonathan's father goes, that is one of those things I can't remember. I know he had a falling out with his church?? as well as his wife? But if there is something else?

Maybe I can hit the deadline if I start now in 2022, whilst it still lingers..

Sorry, not voting. I want to be completely out of the loop and surprised at the final theme.

I can sit back and continue to struggle or I can give up and let it be what it is. I hate to leave something unfinished, especially something as long as this. Towards the home stretch of it all as well, but here we are. Know that I tried and that I do have content for this story unpublished. I have read it and reread it over and over attempting to find the motivation that would allow me to continue, but I can't find it. I am so tired of struggling. It has weighed on my mind long enough. I have Chapter 50 open right now and I'm 5300 words in and I don't even know if I like the chapter at all. I'm sorry.

Look at @wildone trying to besmirch a good man's name. 😮 Shameful. And this Ask the Author makes me want to try my hand at a shifter story... almost. @astone2292 makes it sound like a fun sort of story to write.

I am the exact opposite, if I write the scenes I can't wait to write first I lose complete interest in the story. I have to write from A to End without jumping around. Hell... if I think too much on the scene itself 'before' I start writing it, I've cheated myself. It is like sneaking a look at a present before you're supposed to unwrap it. I am very motivation starved, so if I know an exciting scene is coming up, I use that to actually get there. If I already go there, I don't like working myself backwards. But, no one person who writes are the same and that's a damn good thing. --- As for the list - as a reader #2 is the very reason why I DNF a story. I cannot handle it, even in small doses or mixed bags. It just... is worse than a fork scraping a dinner plate.. or fingernails on a blackboard. Where I do see it most in though, is television dramas - especially ones that are "good vs. evil.." type plots. A little normalcy goes a long way, do not overlook or sleep on someone just living a life of peace and small pleasures. I feel that is one of the more simpler ways to make characters relatable. I do not research or live by any writing techniques. Putting words to paper is a hobby for me first, so I can only hope I'm not just showing my sinning face all over the place.

It is a rather non-romantic way to describe a late sort of sunset to be honest. So, before y'all get fancy.. don't do it. No one wants to read, "and he took my hand just as the day began to fade to crepuscular..." Just say no.

Thank you, we cannot let him get away with such things. Keeping the little shit honest is a full time job with zero benefits.

So, I see you woke up today and chose Cheeky. I have seen snow, I hate snow. If I'm not splattering myself all over the place when I go out to my car.. I'm begging dogs to go outside and potty in the stuff, and they're looking at me like.. "Woman.... you go out there and freeze your tootsies off..." I will forever be a Spring and Summer person. I do not enjoy Autumn and Winter and definitely not snow. and the only present you're going to get is a lump of coal, because if there was a picture beside the word Naughty it would be your Santa murdering face.