Krista

I also think we need to keep in mind - within this topic - we're not all coming from the same place. Some people are new to feedback, I wasn't the best at taking criticism when I was first starting out. "Public," or not, I don't think we should be off-handedly telling people to toughen up about their writing. It is easy for seasoned authors who have been here, to know how the system works and how to take critical feedback. That is why there is a perfectly fine thought of doing critical assessments and reviews in a more private setting. Especially since it is just easier to be more relaxed when you're not afraid of any sort of backlash from other readers that may not share the critical views being posted. To each their own, but I wouldn't want to dismiss anyone's concerns about feedback here, like I said, we're not all seasoned and used to critical feedback/reviews/star ratings. It is a growing pain that we all must go through and if you say that you have always been okay with critical feedback - then I would think you've told a wee little fib. It wasn't terribly poor manners if done respectfully, for an author to ask that a reader 'not' review something, specifically. It is also okay for the reviewer to walk away from that story on the basis of feeling pushed aside as well. Like I said in my earlier post, it is a good thing to be engaged with the audience that you have. I hope all authors who feel similarly learns how to take criticism better, or at least not be overwhelmed by critical assessments. If you're worried about a less than 5-Star rating, don't be, it is guaranteed to happen. It isn't a perfect system, and it never will be.

I have never been a fan of the 5-star review system in general. Especially here where most authors are considered amateur hobbyist authors. I'm of the mind that most people don't consider the system to be that deep of a critique, but an off-hand/off-shoot of the actual review. I have received some honest low-star reviews for my earlier works, I know they are rough and awkward. (I state that in the story description) So that doesn't truly bother me, I expect people to be critical of them, even with the disclaimer-type description that I provide. What I mean when I say, I feel the Star-Review system is an off-handed tool when leaving a review is, I don't think a lot of people use it in-line with the review they have written. I think it is more of a momentary 'feeling' sort of response to the story. The biggest example being 'glowing' reviews that does not say anything critical of the writing receiving anything less than Five Stars are confusing to authors, especially ones that may just be getting into writing. I'm not going to lie and say that a positive/glowing review of my writing that doesn't receive Five Stars won't bother me, it has in the past. I would much rather my writing be critically assessed and have that match the star rating. People tend to be visual as well, so keep that in mind. When you're shopping for something, or looking for something to read - in a place that has a lot of choice - what do you tend to gravitate towards? It is the stories, products, or whatever with the most five-star or best reviews, if they have that system implemented. If people are of that mind, then I can see where a less than 5-star review would hinder a person who may be writing here. I hope people actually read the body of the review instead of just look at a star rating, but there is no way of knowing if people are or not. I will also advocate that you read and review as you see fit. You are here to read, and I am here to write. It isn't really my place to tell you how to conduct yourself as a reviewer/reader. As long as you're not actively encouraging people to 'not' read something within your tone/review. I do feel that is a disservice to the author who is looking for an audience. To Add as an aside: If you're an author out there that is solely relying on Review ratings to promote your writing, then you're doing yourself an injustice. Actively promote your writing, engage with the community around you, create a story discussion, actually respond to people who leave comments on your chapters, etc. If you're visible and your writing is visible you will find an audience.

The day has come! I'll make sure you get the nurses with the cold hands, Steven.

Luke didn’t seem to fully relax until we were well out of town and already passed through a few more. We were headed away from the setting sun, the orange glow blinding me whenever a curve caused it to reflect perfectly in the rearview mirror. I half wanted to talk or listen to music to fill the silence with something, but I didn’t know what to say. All of this told me that we were too close to the end, something was going to break. We hadn’t been careful enough with what we were doing and I won

I think we all know - or have known.. a person like Cindy once upon at time, unfortunately. I also write stories that I hope are 'real enough' that we can look at it as a whole and think that it could be someone's true story out there somewhere. At least when I am writing within this romance genre anyway. Luke and poor Henry may disagree.

Hi! Welcome back, even if it may just be a short visit. I am glad to hear that you found and kept the love of your life all these years as well. It wasn't too long ago @wildone and I were reminiscing, because he had just had a GA-nniversary himself and we talked about old members. You were one of those people - hope your ears weren't burned in the process. So whatever capacity you return to, I'm glad to see you here.

Thank you for enjoying the story so far, I appreciate every reader/comment I get.

Thank you, I do like answering questions.. or if I feel like maybe the writing isn't clear or something, I feel like I need to. I want everyone who reads my stories to know at least my intention behind some things. I hope I don't press the intention too much though, it is nice reading different points of view as well. I'll never want to be like, "No you're wrong, this is how such and such feels.." or, "No you're wrong, that wasn't what took place.." either. So me talking with y'all over something I've written will never get old for me, if it does I will need to hang it up.

Lol. I don't know, I can name three near me. So maybe it is more prominent in differen regions. And yeah, it was Grace's lie to Henry in the first place, so she went with what their generation would know as safe and fun. They did grow up together and probably went bowling together, I'm sure. Neither Luke or Jackson was any help. Yeah, I don't think Cindy would be in their minds if they're miles away. We'll see how far her reach is. There were some time jumping in the last chapter to get us here. I have some ideas of what they can do on their night out as well. So hopefully it won't come back to bite them in the ass. Times are changing, but @wildone answered a question that I asked once, with - I feel the the world is more in the middle between complete acceptance and the Cindy's of the world. So with this story, she is the general conflict that moves the story. The fear of her finding out, keeps Luke in a constant state of unease. Compound that she is his mother and someone he grew up loving - despite that fear. A lie and secrets is all the arsonal they have. Right now they're stuck in a world where people are finding out - slowly, but surely. So it isn't a lie they make because they're being compliant with the demands of their parents. They are liars because in Luke's mind, that is the only way he can have a loving relationship with his parents. That is their trade off at the moment. I don't want to sound like I'm defending Cindy, lol. But we're only really seeing Cindy painted in Jackson's light.. and the off-hand accounts of her overreaching and overreacting. She may be a lot better at home in her element and she may have a really great relationship with Luke. If they didn't, I doubt Luke would care as much as he does about that fear of being unaccepted. Also, opposites attract? Lol.. maybe happy-go-lucky Henry fell head over heels for Cindy's uptight-controllingness. Or maybe Cindy wasn't like that all the time... or maybe she isn't like that much at home. Lol. Well dogs are more forgiving, if it was a cat then I'd fear for your safety. Arcades and Rollerskating rinks are a thing here too. Roller Disco was never really big here though, so there's that. None of which would hold the attentions of the kids I know, so yeah, Grace might get a crash course on how to keep the next two entertained in the coming years. This is probably the best example of their dynamics. Jackson is optimistic and Luke can't be, for his reasons. So maybe one day Jackson will pull Luke along for that and Luke will let him. Either way Jackson only plans on leaving... Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far. I like the conflicting mindsets of the two guys. It will be a leap for Luke to take, but he has his own dreams, I just haven't really gotten into those of any sort of length yet. We know what Jackson wants, but not Luke. I don't see Cindy forcing a marriage onto Luke. She might force a girlfriend on him or at least prospects in front of him.. I mean, my mother placed boys in front of me some when I was a teenager. They could have been Ryan Reynolds clones and I would have said no though. I have always loved and enjoyed the way you comment on characters and this story in general. I think you have described Cindy's mind pretty thoroughly. She doesn't know what damage she is causing, that much is painfully obvious to us. Her character has been fun to write, maybe in an obvious stereotypical way. I at least hope she is still a little fresh though. --- @wildone Yes, you caught me. I added your suggestions for a date night for that very reason alone. I was happy to do it and I will do it again. Bowling... Roller skating... movies.. come on now. Sometimes a girl has to do everything all by herself.

After the dick pic sent me scrambling up the stairs, I ended up groaning with the lack of response from Luke after he sent it. So I rolled off the bed and pulled my pants back on, thinking that it was better to save all I had for that, later. I also didn’t know exactly when I was supposed to meet him. Despite my best efforts in the locker room earlier, I still thought I smelled like the school’s cafeteria and the cleaning spray from my first day of detention. So I walked down the hall to th

Lol. I personally have never been pregnant, so I can't imagine what those cravings and such would be like. Thank you for reading and enjoying the story so far. Lol. Yes, I think Cindy overstepping her boundaries should have earned her a detention. I couldn't imagine seeing the two of them in the same classroom together though. Good thing she teaches freshman English and not senior. Luke didn't participate in the food fight either, he was 'nowhere to be seen,' so even though Cindy placed full blame onto Jackson - she couldn't blame her son. So him showing her that, may have prompted her to release him? Also, it was going his 4th week of being grounded. So maybe she just thought it was getting a bit overdone? Henry's influence could have played a part as well. Or like you said, she might have wanted to unground him, because she had a new cause to keep her busy. Well it was about to start Luke's 4th week. So far Luke hadn't been into much trouble at all, he was probably getting tired of being grounded. He also probably cooperated fully with her, knowing he really did scare her half to death. He didn't act up in almost four weeks, so I guess I just figured with that in mind - enough time had passed. Ella and Derek were about to be handed down punishments as well. Jackson is also a repeat offender, he's been in Welker's office numerous times over the years. So I guess I just thought, with a bit of a track record, a week's worth of detention was rather soft for Welker to give. I don't know, I can see where a food fight would have caused a lot more trouble. People could have slipped and fell, gotten hurt/hit in the eye, etc - which would have been a larger issue for a school to handle. It also delayed an entire lunch period and disrupted the flow of the school's system as a whole. I mean, that was my take on it. Another day of Jackson acting on impulse and it backfiring spectacularly. Grace is used to him getting into trouble as well and Welker probably told her that he took the blame and accepted the punishment. So her rushing down there to cause a fuss about no one else being punished, would have just embarassed him. So at least she didn't do that. Lol. Yes, I think him taking the blame definitely saved him with this one. Welker was ready to make it very hard for him with swimming.. and then I think Grace an Craig would get involved. Thank you for the sweet comment about Grace just easily affirming the relationship he has with Luke. It is heart warming when a parent says they like a partner, when Mom told me that she liked my 'future husband at the time' it really made me know I found the right person. So in that sort of situation when she was also asking him about his sexuality in all this - she decided to just accept it, praise Luke and the relationship, then leave Jackson to his business. And yes, I have given it some thought about him getting caught, but I think I recall Jackson and Luke talking about making sure to delete conversations? Maybe I dreamed it.. lol. Sorry for the delays, it is difficult at times to write a story of this size and capacity. Thank you for staying with the story regardless. Lol. Thank you for reading. Jackson getting into trouble and being an issue at school is something he does. He's done it from page 1 and we'll see if that continues. It is part of his entire character arc, he has shown growth outside of that. But being impulsive and willing to toe the line is just who he is, he's done it outside of school as well to varying consequence. I think I've only used him getting detention twice? They were called to the councellor's office once as a group, but they weren't in any sort of trouble. Then I think after the prank they were in detention for a couple of hours, but I didn't really focus much on that as a whole. If anything, my editor tells me I overuse, Bailey 'Fucking' Ashton. @wildone Cindy may not see that she is doing anything wrong. Henry might, but we don't really know that. Other than her blowing up and Luke finding out what she said to Jackson that night aside - she may be warm in other ways. Luke also scared her, so her being restrictive this one time, probably made a lot of sense. It was out of character for Luke to drink, it is far worse that he came home nearly passed out drunk. So for her sake, she might need to calm down, but to her knowlege she may not see the damage she is doing. --- Again, sorry for the delays.

Thank you for reading and liking the chapters and such as you've read through it. I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far.

Not saying your torment might be waiting for you by the end of it. *whistles*

‘He’s still grounded, nice try,’ I read the response from a text from Luke’s phone from a couple of days ago. It was a risk for me to be texting, but it had been three weeks. What sucked worse is that I was sitting on the other side of the cafeteria from him right now, staring at him. I didn’t know why I just didn’t stand up and cross the space between us and sit down at his table. It was full of the Church school castaways now, only Olivia stayed and reminded me, daily, that Cindy was winning,

You'll need that discount, dealing with the likes of that riffraff.

Woops! Totally missed this, I'm not used to my comment section going on to multiple pages. Lol. Thank you for your kind words. I'm not sure my patients would agree. Lol. They don't call us Physical Terrorists for nothing. (Physical Therapy) I'm typically the one that has to get them up and moving after painful surgeries and the like. Making old bones and worn out muscles keep working, and that sort of thing. I do try to be gentle and understanding though.

I read it at a glance and thought you posted Nudenik.. and I wondered just how old I've gotten that I missed another meme that turned into a slang term. That had been around just long enough for official dictionaries to assign definitions to..

It is a mindset that might help people get rid of nagging writer's block. Soldiering on and putting words to paper, even if it ends up as something that will never be seen. You can always pull from those ideas 'laying on the editing room floor.." later on. I already have 3 DNFs for The Best Year, one I posted as a deleted scene. One I scrapped and deleted, but now I'm thinking it would have been interesting to post as a deleted scene as well. I have half a chapter entitled Chapter 40 - DNF.. lol. I've already pulled from it twice to complete chapter 40 the one you will see and I used a portion of it for Chapter 41. It isn't bad to be of that mindset if you take it for what it is, an experiment to see if you find something that works for you and the story. I still like the story, Jackson has been really fun to write. I just find it difficult to wind down stories to a close, it is a challenge I've had since I started writing. I know I can't write Jackson forever, I want to move on eventually.. lol. There's only so much of, 'A year..' to put into The Best Year. I already know 'what' I am going to cover as far as major plot points. I already know how I want to end the story as well. Just the physical labor and the minor filling and fleshing out is the unknown - as those become a lot of the bulk of a story. Those can make or break the scenes that are necessary, if they don't build right, they don't support the major plot points. They're just as important, otherwise readers just feel like they're being jerked around like they're on a carnival ride, only seeing glympses of what should make up an entire picture as they're zoomed around in a cirle. Those scenes I am struggling with now are mostly my own doing, so getting past those will be lovely, for that I will have to soldier on. I just hope I do it in a way that keeps you all engaged. So it isn't a bad mindset really, it is a mindset that could be necessary for a bit. You shouldn't force feed your writing though. If it isn't there and you force it, readers can see it plain as day.

Yeah, for a sequel to work there has to be a sort of conflict that moves it. If it is medical, I could probably do a lot of that off-hand, since I am in that field. I wouldn't need a lot of research material. Something that directly happens to Ridley would also need to take place though, most of you wouldn't read a story about the direct interaction between Ridley and his father. Maybe you would, but I feel there has to be something more to not have that bog things down. Yeah, me and Steve do get into weird sort of discussions and such. The coin flipping was just one of those random moments where I was tired of waffling back and forth on continuing the story or doing a sequel or just tucking my head and soldiering on with TBY. I am finding it a bit of a challenge to fall back into Jackson's character after writing Ridley, I keep thinking I've made Jackson too subdued.. they're not the same type of character at all. Thank you for reading the story and enjoying it! You can hope, hoping for things can be good at times.. optimism is good as well. At least if something did grow from this story, there's only 33k words and 5 parts to reread and become reacclimated in his world.

Thank you again for reading. I have nothing on the table after, "The Best Year," ends. I don't know when that story will end, it is 40 chapters in and close to 260,000.. words?!? I can't remember.. lol. But I also can't promise things, as we've learned from this story, they carry a lot of weight.

Thank you! I am glad you liked this part and the story. Thank you for taking the time to read and leave a comment, they are all appreciated. Ridley Cameo in TBY? Hmmm.. I could be like Disney and slip easter eggs into every little thing that I put out.. lol. I've done it before. Honestly, I don't know where Ridley lives. I pictured him more Mid-West for some reason, maybe Kansas? Indiana.. somewhere like that. This was brought up by Mattyboi, about it being like an old skin and a metaphore about growth in spite of everything. So I am glad you commented on that specifically. I also told him it was a happy accident, which it was. I am glad when readers read stuff into things and amaze me, because sometimes I am pretty surface level - you get what you see - sort of a writer and that was me just trying to be comedic, but if there are side perks to that scene, I'll take them. I'm nothing if not greedy. I wish it could have been his father. But I also think that would have involved a lot more writing. Ridley's Mother seems like a sort of back-seat parent, she lets them do their own things, because that is what she did when she was in high school. So she isn't judgmental or surprised by what they get up to. I mean, if she was 'really' worried about Cara being at that party, she would have marched herself right over and retrieved her. Instead she just went to bed. Is it good parenting... I don't know, it is just different. lol. So her taking the time in the morning to really try to open Ridley up was a big step for her, from what we saw anyway. We don't know what all happened right after the bombing. Ridley and Gabe's relationship is moving really fast, but I liked that. I also agree, that the very thought of true and sexual intimacy with Ridley right now would send him running. So Gabe might need a few cold showers. Thank you for enjoying this story and for leaving a comment! The journey was also getting there, yes. I don't know what his continuation of that would look like. I would think it would be rather unaltered from what they were doing towards the end. Just taking all they're comfortable with in the small moments of freetime they get. Thank you for reading it! I am glad you enjoyed the story. Thank you! I'm glad you read the story and left a comment. Thank you for reading! I did leave a lot out on the table about their future and how Ridley would continue after the last part. Aww! Sorry. I am glad you read and enjoyed the story for what it is. I think the tux being two growth spurts in the past, probably did save Ridley from a lot of stress of actually being at the dance. I honestly don't think he would have had a good time. The only person he feels remotely connected to on a substantial level would be his sister. Cara has her own friends, probably a lot of them... and Ridley's comfort zone probably wouldn't include the rowdiness I would think that group would have gotten up to. Then Gabe was half-working and would have obligations. I didn't want Ridley to look like a lost puppy following Gabe around, I never would have wanted that.. so instead, he wallowed in a too-small tux and ate popcorn feeling half-sorry for himself and probably half-relieved.. lol. And yes, Calories are ruthless little boogers. Thank you! I hope he does, he's still on a fence and I think he's just now starting to see how bad he was, so that could go either way. He'll either see the light at the end of the tunnel or blame himself for the last two and so many years. Either way I wanted to leave the story on a more optimistic approach and him taking it. 😮 is it begging for a sequel? Lol. Thank you for reading and enjoying this story. I had to discuss the ending, to make sure it felt like a bit of an end, a natural end anyway. Awww. We left them settling into the couch, hopefully talking. Probably awaiting Cara's immenent return to spoil the mood a bit, but that's what little sisters do. Then an on-the-road update from Mom. Other than that, they'll have to just live it out and see. My other story has a character that is reeling from living the life of a gay high school kid. So I didn't want to mirror that in this story, so on that note it was a breath of fresh air for me to write. So I am glad you liked that aspect of the story as well. Ridley knows who he is, Gabe seemed to see that enough to write that in the paper. He just didn't know that he had shut everyone out, he thought it was just the people at school, but when he found out that his mother and sister also felt the weight of Ridley's isolation, I think that surprised him. Also, I have been in a hot chocolate sort of mood of late, but I typically don't like it. so.. hmm. lol I am glad you liked this story! *Hides* Thank you for reading and leaving a comment. I am glad you enjoyed the story as a whole. --- Okay! I do want to address some things, @wildone and I flipped a coin. Well he did, but he's rather trustworthy for a Canadian, I think. Heads = Sequel. Tails = No Sequel. It flipped Tails. So, there's that.. the fates have answered. So I'll be wiping my lingering thoughts about where I would have gone if I were to approach the sequel. Don't blame him, blame the coin, a Twoonie of all things... if those aren't trustworthy coins, let me know. But, on a serious note. Sequels are hard work. There are some loose ends with this story, it is short and to the point. If I had some more time and when I decided it needed to be broken down into parts, I probably should have fleshed those parts out more. But I resigned myself for it to be what it was. I can't really and truly dive into the loose ends on the off chance that I would continue this. It is at a size of a story, that if I did - it wouldn't be 'too huge' of an investment for a reread for me and the people still interested, if that day was to come. So I think I know what 'most' of you wanted... or would want for a sequel. I also fear that weight would cause what ever sequel born of that knowlege would be a struggle. Authors who attempt to write what the readers want, tend to shelve the projects, just from the pressure and the loss of their own sort of free will within the story. (I'm not saying I feel pressured or pressed, I am nothing if not set in my ways) Sequels also need something to happen that is big enough to carry a story past the original. Otherwise, I would just be continuing Ridley from where I left off and it not really be a sequel. So I would worry about.. what exactly needs to happen for there to be enough weight for a sequel in the first place. There either has to be a resolution from the prior end, and the development of a new conflict... or like I said, something unseen that sends the story into something that needs its own growth and resolution. So with that in mind, I will for now say goodbye to Ridley - who I am so glad to know that you all love. Also I do have, 'The Best Year,' waiting for me, so to be fair to the people still waiting for that story to end, I will need to get my fingers moving on that story.

Thank you for reading the story! I'm glad you're enjoying it. Ridley is giving Gabe whiplash too, but Gabe doesn't seem to mind. I think his father getting better might soften Ridley a little bit, I don't know if his father could handle seeing the damage he did to his son, even if it was completely out of his control. So maybe Ridley will heal and be a little more like the Ridley he left behind. Yeah, I would put that down to Ridley just battling with what he wants, but also what all of that would mean for what he has felt for two years. Yeah, Gabe has to be rather persistent and faithful to think that Ridley is worth it and will come around. But after the second kiss, there has to be hope, if the kiss was a one-off, even after ending on a bad sort of turn, he could leave with a little bit of that. Ridley on the other hand, at this point is probably ready to leave the situation completely. We'll see if he has a change of mind and how that happens. Ridley was hurt, to be honest. Yeah, I don't know what I would do, knowing someone I loved was out of my reach, both physically and socially. Especially someone that was a big part of his life and someone he looked up to and for guidance. He listened to his father's advice and enjoyed the moments he got to spend with him over the years, to have that ripped away in an instant, then not knowing - at least for a bit - that his father may not survive. Then to have him survive, but be taken away from him... no. I wouldn't know how to react.. Ridley chose to put people out of his life. I wasn't thinking about how sad and haunting the ending scene could be, with them meeting in a dark street knowing who the other person was. Sorry! Lol. This one was a bit of a sad story for me to write, but there was just enough good to keep me thinking it wouldn't drag people completely down. Thank you for reading! Yeah, Ridley is reeling, but keeps getting drawn back towards Gabe. Like a Moth seeking light, really. Lol, I loved you calling Gabe the betrayer. Also really loved the basketball metaphore. I haven't read Laura's Good Guys Don't Date Bad Boys, I remember the title catching my eye, but I never have time to read for fun anymore. I stare at a screen all day and I prefer physical books than online reading after all that. I will give it a look though, for sure. I had a good cry at that part of the newsletter. I think I cried three times writing this story, I thought I might be a softy... but I don't word getting out, I have a reputation to protect after all. I am glad you liked that passage, the paper was something I struggled for days over, wondering how I want to write it.. and how I want it to be read. Then how it should sound coming from a character and not me. If the paper had too much "tone" of Ridley in it, instead of Gabe, I would have failed. lol Aww, I'm sorry. Me too, me too. Very beautifully written comment, I must say. So thank you for that. I can't say much else about it as you've covered everything that I could respond with, in your own words and I don't want to muddy them with mine. I am glad you like this story and are enjoying it this far into it. Yeah, Gabe's intention was never to hurt Ridley with his paper, but to maybe wake him up.. maybe for Ridley to see who he is or 'could' be to people. If Gabe can see it after knowing him for minutes, then it wouldn't take long for others to see it too. Ridley just has to let them and forget about Matt's thorough distancing/leaving him behind when Ridley was no longer cool. That was indeed intentional. People actually listened to the Newsletter and caught themselves. Although, realistically people tend to forget about such things... or keep the habit intentionally. So them listening is just something that I forced onto everyone, despite it might not being exactly realistic either out of forgetfullness or stubbornness/disrespect. I hadn't thought about the paper being a weapon as far as you have explained. I wanted it to be a weapon thrown at Ridley's walls. To be honest, if a team did attempt that, then that would suck. But Ridley is also robotic on the court with laser-like focus, so I don't know if he'd even pay enough attention to notice. Being about him, I doubt it. Being about his father - probably, but it could work against them too. It could piss him off and maybe a pissed off Ridley would drop 50 on them. That is how I would write it anyway. It that were to happen. Matt's relationship with Ridley was superficial, Matt needed a friend when he too was young and uncool. When they hit puberty and Matt shot up first and Ridley didn't, he no longer fit into Matt's idea of what a friend for him should look like. Then when Ridley's father's experienced what he did, Matt stayed where he was and let Ridley fall to pieces, even if Ridley wanted distance. Matt's involvement could have been a precursor to how Ridley responded. Thank you for reading and writing a comment so far! --- Also, the basket-ball metaphores were very enjoyable to read, so I am glad you all went back and forth with that. GA and ball talk.. hmm, can't say I'm surprised.

When I pulled into the driveway I sat staring at the aged brick and concrete pillars that framed a small front porch. I could only make out the other houses in the hazy blue of the early sunrise when I looked out the window. Some people were already up and stirring, heading into work on a weekend shift somewhere. Yawning, I killed the engine and slid out of the car, closing the door gently behind me. The curtain moving in the window caught my attention and told me Mom was already awake. She woul

Hi! I'm glad you muddled through the story to the ending. My first couple of stories are very roughly written. I was Sixteen and didn't know what I was doing. So they're a bit of a grind and a test of perseverence to get through. I haven't read them in over a decade myself and I honestly don't plan to. So I'm a little bit rusty on what all this story even has in it, I vaguely remember a beach trip? But that's about as far as I go.. lol. The two endings, I do remember, because the first one didn't go over well with anyone. It seemed too abrupt and cruel that there was a bit of a backlash from it, so I wrote the secondary ending shortly after. If the stories weren't so old and what, 'got me started' on here as a GA author, I would probably remove them. This one and Something Unexpected, but even Roommates had issues, grammar, pacing, etc. They were written between 2003 - 2006ish? I want to say.. I don't know. I know I was still in high school at the time. Then GA upgraded their archives and story system, so the stories appear younger than what they are and I think that surprises new readers/members who choose to read, Something Unexpected or Good Guys before they read my newer stories. The difference in quality and overall appeal is just overwhelming. So I do a little cringe when I get a comment or see someone reading these stories. lol. Maybe I can write a do-over series on all three.. Or at least the ideas within them, just to see if I can do it better, with an improved skillset at my disposal. (I won't, but you never know what boredom will turn into) Thank you for leaving a comment and to be honest, finishing the story itself.

For some reason I struggled to say this word outloud.. lol.