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You can find it here: https://www.gayauthors.org/eficiton/viewsto...7&chapter=6 I think I cheated enough to get the job done. I hope you like it. I'd very much appreciate your opinions. Take care!

LOL obviously you haven't seen the rubbish I've sent my poor editors. You'll be getting it first hand soon. I do not want nor merit a thank you. I'm a visitor here and grateful for a place to land. Thank you for the sediment none the less. I feel almost brow beat between my editor and the comments from the 'sneek peak' I posted from chapter 5 of 'The Druid'. I think... I've finally found a compromise I can live with and that tells the story the best. All in all... yes... I cheated. It will be out within the next few hours. I know I haven't been writing long. 3 1/2 months now? But this chapter felt like giving birth to a bus. Next time... I'm going to insist on lube, an epideral, and the removal of the side mirrors. I hope you like the end product. Take care of you!

I've read your suggestion probably 20 times now and I'm just not sure. Here's what I'm going to go with. I watched as my father was surrounded by the growing crystal. It enveloped him quickly capturing the expression of rage on his face. His features were distorted by the facets of the octagonal surface as it encased him completely. 'The worlds are now truly forgotten' is her observation as much as it is fact. You'll get more on that in Chapter One as well. You get to find out what Slegna are in the first chapter With any luck, it'll be out soon! I like prologues, though I know many people do not. In my opinion it's the first scene. I can do anything with it I want. Make it as long or as short as I like, and pull the scene from anywhere in the story. It's an opportunity to grab the reader, shake their brains, and then (with luck) they'll want to read through the story to figure out what it means. That you ask 'What are Slenga' tells me that it has done it's job. Thanks for reading and I hope you like what comes next! Take care!

Did you do that thing I suggested? There was work to be done there. I can't wait to swallow the next chapter! Get to work goat!

Merry Meet, Merry Part, and I hope. Merry Meet Again!

I hate to leave thanks not given. As I said.. it's the reason I came here. Lots of people pointed the way here. I'm glad I listened. I hope future writers will stop by and get at least half as much as what I have in the last couple of months. You're good people. Take care of you Graeme!

LOL! I knew I should have sent it to you first... DAMN!... I'll fix that. I hope you're ready for some work. I'm not going to sleep tonight until chapter 1 is ready for your review. The funny thing though.... was that this story, came from one of my nightmares. Well... the prologue anyway... the rest... heh well... we'll WING IT! --- Fixed!

Here is where you can find the Prologue. https://www.gayauthors.org/eficiton/viewstory.php?sid=215 The first chapter will be out shortly (with any luck). Please place comments, criticisms, and suggestions here! Thanks! Shannon --- Edit... Many of my stories (lol many... well there haven't been but a couple) but anyway, I have made it a habit of posting them @ Nifty as well. This one will not be. It will only be available here. (I guess I'm limiting the scope of suffering hehehe) If you happen to go blind, start bleeding from the eyes and ears, or drop dead... well... uhh... post that you were reading from someone else!

LOL I think you've graduated from 'lurker' to 'Forum Troll' about 1000 posts ago lol! It's a good thing I tell you! (and you get better shades!) Heheheh let me get you a nice troll avatar heheh then I won't be alone!

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Well, Chapter 5 of 'The Druid' has definately been a learning experience and I want to thank you all for it. I came here to learn, and even though I thrive at fighting the current, it's happening. Some of your words are sinking in to my thick skull and I think my stories are better for it. So, before I chap too many butts, and have to break out a new tin of Carmax to medicate my over worked lips, Thank you!

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Welcome Tiffani!!!! Woo hoo!! More stuff to read. It's a wonderful bunch of people here. You've made a great selection for your new home!

Nice try Goat! LOL I've trolled enough now and read enough of your words I know a deception when I see one.

When I write, (especially being new) I have a tendancy to want to keep my stories linear. All in a nice straight tidy line. For now, I think that is best because I don't have the skill set yet to move from past to present and then back again without destroying the readers mind. I'm going to have to think about this and see what happens. I have been plagued by 'why!' with this story. To remove this portion would remove a lot of the 'how why and when' and I don't know if I could squeeze it back into dialogue in such a way that would make sense and still be able to answer the questions. I could just scrap it and only work forward from where Khore wakes up. This may have to be a scene that hits the cutting room floor. The delete button works much faster than re-writing heheh! (though the third person conversion has already been done) I've looked at it, and it could work just as well without the 'interlude'. I'm going to take a little time, and give this some thought, and see which I think reads the best and if it is truly necessary to have the alternate narrative. We'll see what happens!

Do you think it'll take that long? LOL!

Congrats Goat! You little blabber mouth! I'm always happy to read every word. I hope the next 2000 are as great as the last! Take care!

If I had my way... the arguement would be what harms others and what does not. If you have ever driven a car, you are guilty of harm. Harm to the planet and those around you. If you have ridden a bus, you are guilty of harm. Harm to the planet and those around you. The lesser of two evils does not make one right. We are all guilty in our way. It should not be a battle as to what plant we can or cannot have in our possession. It is natural. It grows here. Irregardless of what we do with it, or how we use it. It should only be taken into account when harm is done. My point is that we should not have to 'battle' for idiology. We shouldn't have to fight for our freedoms. 'Fighting' for a thing is for those that just like to bitch. We should not have to engage in this idle banter that serves no purpose, on a non topic, and gains us nothing. It should NOT be an issue.

Arguing for or against a drug is ridiculous. There are side affects to nearly every drug. What is measured here, is the amount of profit, and the potential loss of profit from the side affects. The US government has attached so much stigma and BLATANT misinformation regarding Marijuana that it is absolutely absurd. Watch the idiocy and rhetoric of 'Reefer Madness' We should not have to 'prove' the less than significant 'negative externalities' of marijuana. The obligation should be on those that enforce their idiology on the masses. Prove to me that Marijuana is more dangerous than Alcohol, or any other plethora of commonly used drugs. Preconception and misconception shouldn't dictate what is law. --- Edit.... I often say to people... I'm a smoker... I'll puff on this cigarette, you suck on the tail pipe of your car. We'll see who dies first. Hypocracy at it's finest.

WOW I must admit this thread has grown it something much larger than I ever anticipated. Thank you all for expressing and explaining why things are the way they are and that nothing is set in stone. I would say more, but that's really all there is to say. I've got lots to learn, and it is simply going to take time I suppose. (damn!) lol it's not that I didn't already know this though. Heh, if I ever quit learning, I'd better be dead. So... again, thank you all very much for you input! I appreciate it!

I have to admit I agree. Politics, religion, drugs... they're all inflamatory topics which most of us feel very strong about. It's generally a topic I try to avoid, but have a terrible time doing.

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