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Something Wicked This Way Comes
astone2292 commented on Grumpy Bear's story chapter in Something Wicked This Way Comes
I always love a good "watch out for that truck" moment. That's what should happen every time a baddie showboats. Brilliant, just brilliant! This chapter really opens up the story plot and I can't wait to see what happens next. Excellent job, Grumpy! -
Chapter 13: Careless Clash
astone2292 commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 13: Careless Clash
As mentioned in my response to your last comment back in LitS, the animal side of the shifters aren't capable of full and complex sentences. Prepositions will be scarce in their dialogue, as this is how the characters are designed. Thanks for commenting! -
I'm giggling at Vera. She had an inkling about Gunnar and Mike, then a sleuth rolls in and gives her the biggest "Yupp! I called it!" I was wondering when Axel was going to get some action... cold shower time...
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Chapter 31: Feral Fight
astone2292 commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 31: Feral Fight
Thank you for commenting! I totally understand the "5-year-old" speaking issue. When I created this concept of these shapeshifters possessing an animalistic mindset, I wanted to differentiate their dialogue from their human-side. They are, in a sense, still animals and understanding the complexities of the English language was not something I deemed capable of them doing. Yes, it makes their dialogue seem childish, but I aimed for a gritty, more caveman-esque tone. A small quote from Chapter 22: In regards to shared memories, I designed a shapeshifter's animal as being born. When Vincent's wolf came to mind in the clinic, that was the wolf becoming an entity. All of Vincent's memories were not accessible, but all memories created from then on out were shared. This mechanic isn't inscribed in the story, but meant for the reader to depict in their own manner. This story is in the early stages of a heavy edit. Once all the chapters have been edited, I will be implementing the rewritten chapters. When I reach around Chapter 22, I'll be focusing on restatement of the animals' tones. I really appreciate this feedback, and I'm thrilled you are enjoying the story! I hope this explanation helps dull the baby speak. Now I need a drink. All I can think about is Mace and Vincent having sex, and every skin-slap is replaced with a squeaker toy noise... -
It's also a cocktail made with gin, vermouth, chartreuse, and orange bitters.
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The Stuff of Nightmares
astone2292 commented on Grumpy Bear's story chapter in The Stuff of Nightmares
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Strange Things Roam the Mountains
astone2292 commented on Grumpy Bear's story chapter in Strange Things Roam the Mountains
I'm recalling a previous chapter comment of mine. Jesus H. Christ. Our new adventure is starting off hellish! Between Thomas, Sam, Mike, and Gunnar, our heroic group have their hands full. -
A worthy binge for those who enjoy anything involving the supernatural. We are greeted by a pair of characters with particular talents and a string of murders. The author's ability to drop subtle hints that will leave the most experienced reader guessing is magnificent. One does not simply know where this story goes. The characters and plot are beautifully crafted. Throughout my read-through, I spotted zero critical issues, so wonderful job to both the author and editor. This was my first adventure with this author and I'm disappointed I didn't start this story sooner. My best wishes for a sequel.
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An interesting way to start the conversation. Despite his nerves, Essell is handling very well here, especially explaining Bouncer's tame behavior. Garjah is acting like such a mother. Urging his mate to sit and bringing him food. Another wonderful installment, Cia!
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I think we're all proud of our little buck. Oh boy, I can't wait to finish the next chapter...
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Thanks, JR! I know, he's such a dink.
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Thanks for commenting, Patch! Glad you liked the chapter! I wonder when he'll start growling... Thanks for commenting, dughlas!
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I love foreshadowing like I love cliffhangers. Intensely! Thank for the comment, drsawzall!
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I've been watching Bo Burnham's Inside on repeat. It's riveting to see a comedian turning his year-long quarantine into a special.
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This was just so stinkin' adorkable! Papa Bear's Diner better be real, because I'll travel for some food! Oh, man. I would have killed to have seen a continuance of Mike's conversation with Sam. Finding out your long-lost friend was really alive and in front of you... wait, what? Bear? What are you talking about? Are you calling me fat? Nevertheless, I'm a fan of Gunnar! Take in the slow days as you can, because when Doctor Linguini and his Trampolining Sheep go to the Ceiling Fan convention (I'll let y'all connect the dots), you'll regret wishing for excitement!
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Jesus H. Christ! I thought book one was something... What a start! And so soon! I'm excited to follow along with this one!
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Thanks Cincy! Someone's been reading Myr's word of the day... I couldn't let Kieran be the only Criminal Minds-related object in this story! How can we not hate a guy named Kaminsky? It was mentioned very early on, but we've seen the Turbins' smart commentary. I find comedians very interesting people. They have a switch in their heads, of when to joke and when to be serious. For Kara and Jaime, it's either joke or shoot. Speaking of punch lines. here's a joke: A guy walks into a bar and asks the bartender, "Hey! Can I get some fruit punch?" Bartender goes, "Sure, but you have to wait in line." Guy looks behind him and sees no one in the building. He asks, "Where's the punch line?"
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They did all they could. The Sheboygan team evaluated and re-evaluated the crime scenes thrice, only to come up with the same information as the first time. With the SFBI setting up headquarters in both the Green Bay police station and Sheboygan's, Ken decided to let the group go home. “I can’t thank y’all enough for the help you’ve provided! Especially you, Cyn. Your nose is one in a million!” The deer smiled and pocketed his hands nervously, “Thank you, Ken. I just hope I did enough.”
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An interesting were-creature story, but not for the faint of heart. The story is built with strong bones, figuratively and literally. Horrific scenes start this adventure, but the trail to happiness brightens with every step of the way. In terms of the perspective of the were-creature genre, the author does his work to set his universe apart from others. Placing a stress of importance on kindred humans is both refreshing and welcome. The story is very well written and edited, minus the occasional typo every few chapters. For those readers that love to cling to a sliver of hope, this is a story to add to your reading list.
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I had to withhold my scream since the husband's sleeping next to me. Holy crap doesn't even cut it. Is Thomas going to be a Papa?! How big of a brick will Sam create when he finds out Mike is still alive and in front of his face? At this rate, Sturgeon Bay will become another were-bear clan in a couple of years. Of course Gunnar is a fuddy-duddy. He better be glad he was outvoted by Mike and Thomas. This was a brilliant epilogue and a wonderful set-up for the next book in the series. I'll be leaving a review shortly... Edit: For the readers of this story, don't forget to leave a recommendation and a review!
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With this being my first reading of a Mann Ramblings story, I can't express my true love for this adventure. It's an absolute binge-worthy trip, whether the reader is a fan of were-creature stories or not. I'm certain Phases of Moon has soiled any future were-creature reading for me. Included in the recommendation given to me for this story was a warning. I was told to refrain from speed-reading, as there are many hidden details. Needless to say, I chucked the instruction. The author has the reader gripped by the collar and refuses to let you down, both physically and emotionally. Every word seems to have been placed with the grace of a true artist. The cast was flawlessly designed, as was the plot. Nearing the final ten chapters had me gripping my laptop. With the concluding five, my neighbors became concerned with my wild exclamations of either "I knew it!" or "No F%^&ing way!" As a fan of were-creature stories, this work has cemented itself in my personal favorites. While perfectly pleased with the outcome of the story, one can only hope for more.
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A fitting end (epilogue incoming, I know). I'm very pleased with the outcome of this story. A wonderful job, Grumpy!
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In Which Many Things are Resolved on the Battlefield
astone2292 commented on Grumpy Bear's story chapter in In Which Many Things are Resolved on the Battlefield
What a great way to wrap up a chapter! Kane's dead, Nick's captured, the Lycan Council is fixing damage, Susie's a Colonel, and Mike wants to spend time with Papa. I imagine the story won't last much longer, so I'm expecting a high note... and about four more books in the series, please and thank you. -
Chapter 20: Introductory Interview
astone2292 commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 20: Introductory Interview
You almost made me wake up Noah with that line... make sure that fecal oscillator is oiled up and ready to go. That being said, I can't have cliffhangers and action around every turn. I'd rather not cause angst-induced heart attacks, or else I'll need to put in a warning at the beginning of the book... and I'm lazy. Now, now. Let's give Stuerm and McCabe a chance. We don't know what they'll be bringing to the table. -
Chapter 20: Introductory Interview
astone2292 commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 20: Introductory Interview
Philippe, your comments are going in the legendary category. "shadow magic has mass and can be used to knock you to your ass... " My God. I died. Am I still typing? That was really, really funny. I think I'm a wee bit lost with the paragraph mentioning Cyrus. Can I get a translation, pretty please with a cherry on top? I haven't had my coffee yet... Mr. Hanger likes to show up and random times to distract the author from finishing the book.
