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Chapter 8 Stuck in the Same Corral
Mawgrim commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 8 Stuck in the Same Corral
Sooner or later they'll have to talk. I get the feeling Will is going to be persistent until Mitch just can't avoid talking any more. Love the way Coy and Boone's relationship is developing over time. -
I understand that both these characters have a variety of reasons not to confess their feelings (although Jason finally has at last) but Nathan has now had the best chance to explain and for them both to be honest with each other. I’m reading because I enjoy the quality of the writing but I have to say, it’s getting frustrating from a reader's point of view.
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The Last Turn of the Pass?
Mawgrim commented on Mawgrim's story chapter in The Last Turn of the Pass?
Absolutely. It’s the fact they will end up at loose ends which is one of the factors that makes them decide to go forward. That and their sense of duty to protect Pern, reinforced by the dragons. You are giving me ideas now. From the books, you can see how T'ron and Mardra tried to keep Lessa's arrival out of the pubic eye, but with a huge golden dragon hanging around the Weyr, gossip will inevitably follow. Plus, the dragons will talk to each other. I’m guessing Ramoth recovered far more quickly than Lessa from their jump through time. Then there'll be all the Fort bronzes wanting to get to know this new queen dragon. By the time T'ron calls that meeting to introduce Lessa, people will have figured out most of it and made up what they don't know. -
The Last Turn of the Pass?
Mawgrim commented on Mawgrim's story chapter in The Last Turn of the Pass?
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The Last Turn of the Pass?
Mawgrim commented on Mawgrim's story chapter in The Last Turn of the Pass?
Y'min is Weyrlingmaster now, but the cutches he's raised from scratch are still too immature to be on deliveries, so this is another of M'nan's. In all fairness to any Weyrlingmaster, though, accidents can happen and it’s a dangerous environment. D'gar himself got his first score as a weyrling by not seeing Thread in time. -
Herebeth caught Zurinth the next time she rose. It was the tail end of a hot summer afternoon when three greens went off almost simultaneously, with a good few males chasing. There was a lot of jostling for position, with some of the dragons uncertain as to whom they wanted to pursue. Herebeth gained some ground from the confusion and as Zurinth hadn’t blooded beforehand, it turned out to be a short flight and a quick catch. The dragons soared over the Fort mountains, supported by an early eveni
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Powerful writing. The see-saw of teenage emotions is bad enough without the added trauma of knowing you are about to be taken off to a strange country and parted from someone who has been a best friend and might be about to become something more.
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Exactly. It's so near to the end, you get lulled into a false sense of security. I put in that part where Y'min mentions Herebeth would be good with weyrlings as a bit of foreshadowing. Well spotted.
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I always find it difficult to say exactly how many chapters there will be as sometimes they get too long and I have to split them. At the moment, according to my outline it should be around 5. I wrote Threadfall by popular request, so why not? I've also been asked by readers on another site to write about how D'gar and S'brin first got together so I have some ideas (and a few pages written) on that.
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Less traumatic for S'brin, certainly. D'gar mentioned the event a few times when he was at Benden Weyr and it was certainly traumatic for him.
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This is one I’m planning, including what happens to Jevikel and Kadin, the two boys who were rescued from Thread on their journey to Benden Weyr.
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Only a few more to go now, I'm afraid.
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Zurinth is looking well, Herebeth commented just a few sevendays after they’d celebrated a new Turn. D’gar did some rapid calculations. Yes, it was around three months since she’d last risen. It had been Herebeth’s first attempt at a mating flight since his injury and he’d kept his head sufficiently to try the technique of keeping away from the pack and flying high. Zurinth had wanted him to catch her and had kept trying to manoeuvre to the right position, but a nimble and crafty blue had s
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Great chapter. Corbin isn’t going to settle into his new life just like that. Everything has happened in such a short space of time he needs time to get used to the new reality. Zoe is a sensible girl and showed it. Corbin's mum has also been going through a lot of trauma and needs time to work it all out. She may not ever fully accept Corbin being gay but she’ll have to get used to it. I will miss reading this story over breakfast each morning.
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Talk about a heart stopping moment! And Corbin's mum thinking she knows what’s going on inside his head better than he does... oh dear. After being in denial of her dreadful husband for years, maybe it was just one shock too far. Leah is understandably upset, but she’s still trying to make him stay with her? What is wrong there?
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When all is Text and Done
Mawgrim commented on James Matthews's story chapter in When all is Text and Done
I can see why Corbin didn't want to have another confrontation after the day he's just had but Leah reading his texts has made it impossible not to. Maybe she is one of those people who only sees themselves as complete if they are in a relationship with someone and despite it not being a very good one for a while, she is frightened of breaking up. -
So, Don isn't Corbin's dad. Presumably that's the source of all the resentment. Possibly as Corbin grew older he started resembling Dave more. Corbin’s mother definitely needs help. She decided to divorce two years ago, but has just let herself be carried along? I really don’t think Zoe would be as devasted as her mum thinks if Don wasn’t around. He treats her well enough at the moment, but what if she chooses a boyfriend he doesn’t like? He might go off the rails at her, too.
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A very satisfying chapter. If Don doesn’t leave then he’s even more stupid than we all suppose. interesting comments about Corbin when thinking about his relationship with Leah; feeling on edge because of thinking she was much more attractive than he is and could have had anyone. He feels the same way about Troy, too. Clearly Corbin isn’t an unattractive person himself but his self esteem has been so knocked down he can’t recognise it.
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It would certainly make 'Gone Away, Gone Ahead' a very different story! I know what you mean, though. Having written the second story first, I hadn't really explored S'brin's character fully save as 'dead love interest' and having written so much about him since, I'm not looking forward to his demise. And Zemianth, of course.
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There’s no way he can go home and be safe with his dad there. Poor Corbin, no wonder he had a meltdown. And although I can see how Corbin's mum has been conditioned over the years to try and keep the family together at all costs, Leah doesn't seem to have much of a grasp of reality either and Zoe just lives in her own imaginary world. Good to see Corbin is now admitting his attraction to Troy.
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Well, Corbin's dad is a murderous bastard. I think Corbin was right about him working up his anger so that he could actually go through with it. If Troy hadn't been there, he'd have been dead for sure. And Corbin finally realises what Troy was trying to hint at. As Troy saw the incident, at least he can make a statement to the police when they return to land. I’m sure Corbin's dad will try to make it seem as if Troy attacked him, but the police are probably local too and will tend towards believing members of the community like Jerry and Troy rather than a man who hasn't exactly done much to endear himself to anyone in the village.
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The truth (and Jason) begins to come out! Finally, some progress. I hope his hand isn’t too badly damaged.
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There must have been many occasions when there were close calls. One might have hoped M'nan would have grown into the job, but sadly that didn't happen. He won't have an easy time of it now he's back in the Wings.
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It's like waiting for something to happen which you know is going to be unpleasant and having it rescheduled all the time.
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My new story and some thoughts as I experiment
Mawgrim commented on W_L's blog entry in Life is worth an entry
That sounds like a really interesting modern interpretation of the fairytale.
