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‘I need to talk to you.’ J’rud stopped D’gar as he left the dining hall. Eleventh month had brought an early cold spell with a biting wind whirling around the Bowl. ‘What?’ D’gar just wanted to get back to his cosy weyr. ’Can I come up?’ He’d been putting this off for long enough. D’gar didn’t want to deliberately hurt J’rud, but he needed him to realise the relationship they’d had was over. ‘All right.’ Herebeth seemed happy to have Zurinth with him again. They snuggled toge
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Hmm. Like Jason, I wonder if Mr Brown is telling the truth. He's a manipulative man and has probably figured out this is the best way to give Jason doubts. The pace has really picked up in the last few chapters. It’s a pity Aiden is going to Australia, but sometimes, moving away helps you to sort out your life when someone has died. He has a lot to work through.
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To be stranded in another country, with no idea of the language or customs must be terrifying. It seems Karl has been rescued by good people. I'm hoping it's not too good to be true.
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Mitch, be sensible for once. Will is going to grieve whatever happens. Better he should have some good memories to look back on rather than all those years of separation and regret.
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Great start, with a lot of character building and information included without any 'dull and long descriptions'.
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Very original short story, almost like a fairytale. I suppose he is trapped in there now, until he can find another to take his place.
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In some cases it's because they don’t like him much - he was never that popular with the crazy greens - but they've also become hardened to death, unless it happens to someone close. Plus, I think there's the attitude that a person is never alone while they have their dragon. D'gar was always concerned about J'rud in GAGA, although at the beginning there's some friction when he's talking to H'rek in the dining hall and J'rud realises Herebeth is going to chase Rioth.
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He'll have some help soon, plus the speculation surrounding Lessa's arrival (although for most Fort Weyrfolk it will be Ramoth who draws their attention once she's recovered sufficiently to fly around.
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Once Thread is finished and he can't just throw himself into work any more, then he'll have time to face it and reflect. It's not too long after the last Threadfall that Lessa arrives from the future (she used the depiction of Ruatha Hold on the tapestry made to commemorate the last Fall) which will start off the rollercoaster leading to the Weyrs going forward.
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D’gar stared at the Moreta tapestry, without really seeing it. It was strange to just be sitting and not thinking. He felt as if he’d left some crucial part of himself between, along with S’brin. Herebeth had returned a long while ago. D’gar knew he should check the fighting straps and hang them up, but he couldn’t be bothered. It must still be early evening. Almost dinner time. He should go down and face everyone. He didn’t want to. Beyond the drawn curtain, Herebeth stirred at the un
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You fit a lot of plot into a short story! It was well written and I thought the ending fitted the story well. I didn’t mind the sex scene. If this was, say, an eight chapter story of 30,000 words, it would seem abrupt, but as it's the sexual encounter which leads to Leo's dilemma and all of the subsequent revelations it had to be there. Paul's revelation that he had cancer came as a real shock for me, the reader, as it must have done to Leo. I loved the way Paul took down Jeffery in a few words. I left with the feeling Leo is one of those people who lurches through life from one catastrophe to the next.
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I can really see the dilemma Mitch has. He doesn't want Will to worry about him and sit watching him die. Trouble is, Will won't give in without a fight and as we can see from that kiss, Mitch's resolutions are wavering too.
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This is the sort of praise every author loves. Personally, I always think there’s room for improvement! I have a couple of published books available on Amazon, but they are novels set in the cinema business rather than dragons.
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Even though my stories have focused on D'gar, there must be so many others in the Weyr who have suffered the same experience. I've touched on Zalna's emotional state when K'torl dies, or M'rell after Rina's untimely death. There is a certain degree of sympathy and tradition when a rider dies in Threadfall, but I get the feeling that after a few sevendays, the person left behind is supposed to 'pull yourself together and get on with it'. It's tough, but otherwise the Weyr wouldn't function. There's probably also a feeling that 'he/she still has their dragon' and that the bond between rider and dragon should help them to get over the loss of a weyrmate.
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My dad died suddenly of an aortic aneurysm. I’ll never forget the shock and disbelief of the Saturday morning when my mum phoned to tell me. I worked away from home and it was only as the distance decreased that it began to feel real. My last memories were of him a few days previously, when I’d visited home, perfectly healthy and talking about all sorts of projects he was planning. in the same way as you describe, there are often occasions when something happens that would have made him laugh and I wish I could tell him about it.
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It was a hard chapter to write for all sorts of reasons, but it's what makes D'gar the man he is at the start of 'Gone Away, Gone Ahead'.
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A light breeze stirred the Gather flags above Fort Hold. Brightly coloured tents spread across the fields below the Hold itself. Dragons perched on a rocky outcrop close by, as riders walked down to sample the wares. D’gar, J’rud and S’brin flew in formation, dressed to impress. Their dragons found a place to land fairly easily. The majority of those who had arrived so far, D’gar recognised as being from Fort. It was their local Gather, after all. But as the last of the season and one of th
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Maybe the kids who were targeted did something the shooter disapproved of, such as putting their rubbish in the wrong bin, or even throwing it on the ground. Hence the recycle message.
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There is definitely a sinister element to the attacks. Maybe the perpetrator dislikes college kids for some reason?
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Very intriguing.
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An intriguing chapter. If Ethen is in witness protection, I just hope he hasn’t compromised his safety.
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Some people like to be comforted in their grief, while others push everyone away.
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The foreboding has been building up over the past few chapters. We're almost at the end of the Pass, bringing the dread day closer.
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There are always those who like to blame, but at this time, with not enough Wingseconds to go round, there's no real alternative. I would prefer D'gar's birthday, too.
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D’gar handed around the cups of fiery spirit to all the riders on his side of the table. It was the third time he’d done this now; the first being after the Fall when they’d lost N’rir. This time, it was for Is’ish and Panruth. All of the ‘crazy greens’ seemed unusually sombre, having lost one of their group. Once they’d had a few drinks inside of them, that would change. Is’ish would have a good send off. R’feem stood to speak. He looked serious, as you’d expect, but there was something el
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